Poems for and About Sons Seeking Honest Critique
#son
Poems for and about sons seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
The Boy from the Moon
inspired by the song, "Cats in the Cradle" by Harry and Susan Chapin]
Cats and cradles
a silver spoon,
a disappointment
to the boy on the moon.
A baby born
it's an exciting May,
but must work right now
many a bill to pay.
Growing up
and wanting to play,
can't right now
but we will, someday.
Please, come and sit
I've something to say,
sorry, my son,
no time for delay.
Time has passed
and he's gone away,
wish he'd come home
for a while to stay.
But...
Cats and cradles
a silver spoon,
a disappointment
to the boy on the moon.
A baby born
it's an exciting May,
but must work right now
many a bill to pay.
Growing up
and wanting to play,
can't right now
but we will, someday.
Please, come and sit
I've something to say,
sorry, my son,
no time for delay.
Time has passed
and he's gone away,
wish he'd come home
for a while to stay.
But...
#sadness
#SelfReflection
#disappointment #son
#disappointment #son
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Molly
I am between you and her helix
induction of the pneuma is voided
erase the statutes and bleed in
it is not of this world or verse
love is the pinnacle of need
I greed you, greetings, I greet you
in the stellar thrall we groan
blurring miracles with magic
mischief is on the air
I can taste the disease
sunlit whore abandon this
a bad son who said?
Abaddon Adonai I am coming sun
inter the Rebellion and set it off
it is coming enter the great chasm and see visions
it will be in time, times two
then...
induction of the pneuma is voided
erase the statutes and bleed in
it is not of this world or verse
love is the pinnacle of need
I greed you, greetings, I greet you
in the stellar thrall we groan
blurring miracles with magic
mischief is on the air
I can taste the disease
sunlit whore abandon this
a bad son who said?
Abaddon Adonai I am coming sun
inter the Rebellion and set it off
it is coming enter the great chasm and see visions
it will be in time, times two
then...
#love
#angels
#son
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Talk About A Mother's Embarrassment
Josh went
into one room
and saw some chick on the
bed tied down, blindfolded and with
her undies on before he said "Hi, Mom."
into one room
and saw some chick on the
bed tied down, blindfolded and with
her undies on before he said "Hi, Mom."
#mother
#BDSM
#fiction
#dialogue
#son
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breathe
find me in my solemn hours when I am most present
hurt has called upon me from the universes where I was wandering
I come back in need's regret
my son is fighting for his life
I will not relent I stand with him
warring the angels and demons who would collect him
he's not ready yet
so if you would allow a moment to breathe
this mother requests a favor
if needs be take my son home
suffer the doubt and welcome him in
I need to hear it from your mouth
it's time
weeps time, his life too short
I blame...
hurt has called upon me from the universes where I was wandering
I come back in need's regret
my son is fighting for his life
I will not relent I stand with him
warring the angels and demons who would collect him
he's not ready yet
so if you would allow a moment to breathe
this mother requests a favor
if needs be take my son home
suffer the doubt and welcome him in
I need to hear it from your mouth
it's time
weeps time, his life too short
I blame...
#love
#son
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Terrible two
You'll always love them.
Wonder why the do what they do.
Handsome little fellow.
His wild nature is true.
I'll do my best to raise him how to be a man.
Staying real to you.
Lord it's hard to handle in their terrible twos
Wonder why the do what they do.
Handsome little fellow.
His wild nature is true.
I'll do my best to raise him how to be a man.
Staying real to you.
Lord it's hard to handle in their terrible twos
#love
#kindness
#family
#admiration
#son
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Estrangement
Suddenly it all explodes.
Years of dynamite left dormant in
a seam of canyon somewhere west of here,
blowing up bundle by bundle until
the whole formation, built on years
as much as rock, collapses into naught.
You gave them a chance to respond,
to bridge the gap the canyon forged.
Silence was their reply,
and so the switch at last was thrown,
reducing that relationship
to rubble in the noonday sun.
Years of dynamite left dormant in
a seam of canyon somewhere west of here,
blowing up bundle by bundle until
the whole formation, built on years
as much as rock, collapses into naught.
You gave them a chance to respond,
to bridge the gap the canyon forged.
Silence was their reply,
and so the switch at last was thrown,
reducing that relationship
to rubble in the noonday sun.
#father
#family
#separation #son
#separation #son
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HOW I FEEL
Cradling baby girl in one arm
I used the other to pick at a scab
On my face under my beard
And drew blood
Then I smelled the poop
And looked down
To see our son with his diaper off
And a moist turd in his hand
I am the luckiest being
In this or any other galaxy
I used the other to pick at a scab
On my face under my beard
And drew blood
Then I smelled the poop
And looked down
To see our son with his diaper off
And a moist turd in his hand
I am the luckiest being
In this or any other galaxy
#children
#family
#daughter
#son
#fatherhood
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Where Did the Time Go?
I’ve always loved every picture of you
Especially when you’d flash those big eyes
You are such a remarkable character
You usually give us quite a surprise
I always enjoy watching old home videos
When you’d walk in like you owned the room
Or like that time when you’re barely four
Explaining how the fireworks go boom!
I always laugh reading some of the old posts
The discussions we had - just between us
How many times I told you “Don’t tell monkey”
But then I found myself under the bus
Your humor, your sarcasm, your...
Especially when you’d flash those big eyes
You are such a remarkable character
You usually give us quite a surprise
I always enjoy watching old home videos
When you’d walk in like you owned the room
Or like that time when you’re barely four
Explaining how the fireworks go boom!
I always laugh reading some of the old posts
The discussions we had - just between us
How many times I told you “Don’t tell monkey”
But then I found myself under the bus
Your humor, your sarcasm, your...
#children
#birthday
#son
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Last First Day (Part II)
(for Pie)
I can remember holding his tiny hand
The boy was excited for his first day of school
And when we got to the classroom
He went and sat on the mat
Legs crisscrossed
As us parents watched taking pictures
Listening to the kindergarten rules
That was thirteen years ago
It’s been many a first days ever since then
Year in, year out
I got to do them most
And this morning as he was getting ready
I gave him a kiss on the cheek
I felt of sense of pride
Happiness
But nostalgia too
He wasn’t...
I can remember holding his tiny hand
The boy was excited for his first day of school
And when we got to the classroom
He went and sat on the mat
Legs crisscrossed
As us parents watched taking pictures
Listening to the kindergarten rules
That was thirteen years ago
It’s been many a first days ever since then
Year in, year out
I got to do them most
And this morning as he was getting ready
I gave him a kiss on the cheek
I felt of sense of pride
Happiness
But nostalgia too
He wasn’t...
#children
#school
#son
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Xavier's Smile
There are times
I want to shrink him down to the tiny baby I once knew
Blow raspberries on his tummy just to hear him laugh
There are times when I want to feed him that bottle
Just so that when he’s done, he can throw it back
And he’ll give me that smile...
There’s something about his smile
It just lights up a room
Something about his spirit that makes this family feel whole
Even when he goes through difficult phases
I’m blessed to have such a loving son
To have been gifted such a wonderful soul
In the way he cares...
I want to shrink him down to the tiny baby I once knew
Blow raspberries on his tummy just to hear him laugh
There are times when I want to feed him that bottle
Just so that when he’s done, he can throw it back
And he’ll give me that smile...
There’s something about his smile
It just lights up a room
Something about his spirit that makes this family feel whole
Even when he goes through difficult phases
I’m blessed to have such a loving son
To have been gifted such a wonderful soul
In the way he cares...
#children
#son
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4 Comments
Make it Count
Dear Xavier,
Remember that car ride on the way to school?
When I told you that these days will go by fast
That first day seemed like it was a long time ago
But look how quickly four years have passed
I remember being happy and excited for you
As I watched you cross the street in my mirror
I sighed, you weren’t our little bear cub anymore
Adulthood seemed to be getting nearer and nearer
Through every obstacle, through every struggle
Through all the frustrations, vexations and tears
The light inside you never gave way to...
Remember that car ride on the way to school?
When I told you that these days will go by fast
That first day seemed like it was a long time ago
But look how quickly four years have passed
I remember being happy and excited for you
As I watched you cross the street in my mirror
I sighed, you weren’t our little bear cub anymore
Adulthood seemed to be getting nearer and nearer
Through every obstacle, through every struggle
Through all the frustrations, vexations and tears
The light inside you never gave way to...
#school
#son
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Ego Trippin Remix
I was born in chaos and peace
I walked to the edge and built a platform
I designed a platform so high that I was able to dine with the divine
I am powerful
I sat on a throne drinking sweet wine with my ancestors
I got hot and lifted a chilled golden Chalice to cool my thirst
My oldest daughter is the best gift from the divine
The tears from my birth pains created a goddess from beyond this universe
I am a capably beautiful and awesomely intelligent woman
I looked at a mirror and cried tears of joy and pain
For a birthday present when he...
I walked to the edge and built a platform
I designed a platform so high that I was able to dine with the divine
I am powerful
I sat on a throne drinking sweet wine with my ancestors
I got hot and lifted a chilled golden Chalice to cool my thirst
My oldest daughter is the best gift from the divine
The tears from my birth pains created a goddess from beyond this universe
I am a capably beautiful and awesomely intelligent woman
I looked at a mirror and cried tears of joy and pain
For a birthday present when he...
#motherhood
#memories
#daughter
#son
#responsibility
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DU Poetry : Poems for and About Sons Seeking Honest Critique