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19th Aug 2016 7:59am
Umm, Ouch! Bloom anyway. Do it for yourself. You've conveyed a lot of emotion with an economy of words...I like that. Brava!
19th Aug 2016 8:27am
..thanks Mr.Worship for your kind words ^-^
And ouch is exactly what I was going for, shouldda said I was a cactus :P
And ouch is exactly what I was going for, shouldda said I was a cactus :P
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20th Aug 2016 10:55am
19th Aug 2016 10:19am
Straight to the point - like the bluntness and precision - now to twist the knife - yay!
20th Aug 2016 11:01am
..guess i could have been more poetic about it but I'm just saying how I feel. It's a bit blunt..true :P
And thanks ^-^
And thanks ^-^
19th Aug 2016 11:56am
impossible for the flower to hide herself,
she blossoms & beauty is but a short time...
she blossoms & beauty is but a short time...
20th Aug 2016 11:24am
Physical beauty: yes.. but "Beauty is truth, truth beauty..." (- Kates)..and truth may very well me immortal :P
(...I think :D)
(...I think :D)
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19th Mar 2017 10:01am
U - I know this fear and I love this piece. I wouldn't change a thing. But I will share a quote...
"And the day came when the risk it took to to remain inside the bud was more painful than the risk it took to blossom"
~Anais Nin
Bless you lovely,
Mel
"And the day came when the risk it took to to remain inside the bud was more painful than the risk it took to blossom"
~Anais Nin
Bless you lovely,
Mel
20th Mar 2017 9:43am
i remember the first time i read that quote, still as profound as ever. and thank you ^~^
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12th Sep 2018 11:25am
I (patiently and consistently) will keep on shining,
In the hope that you will surrender to the heat of my light , realising that I'm that ray of hope you need to survive and the brightness that makes your petals sparkle and shine from afar
So much said in brevity..
That's an interesting read
In the hope that you will surrender to the heat of my light , realising that I'm that ray of hope you need to survive and the brightness that makes your petals sparkle and shine from afar
So much said in brevity..
That's an interesting read
12th Sep 2018 4:12pm
Thank you for the reading list entry!
and what a truly beautiful sentiment, and I'm glad you found this little write interesting ^-^
and what a truly beautiful sentiment, and I'm glad you found this little write interesting ^-^
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2nd Nov 2018 00:19am
If I was a hungry great white shark, eating you would give me heartburn (LOL)
Nice direct poem - a few words say so much more - excellent ink :-)))))
Nice direct poem - a few words say so much more - excellent ink :-)))))
14th Dec 2018 8:25pm
29th Dec 2018 4:19pm
"Umm," the perfect pen-name for your charming beauty.
Even in the throes of being rebuffed, he had to admire your creatively poetic way of saying, "No!"
So very true ~ it is impossible for a lady flower to open her petals to be kissed by a light too dim.
Excellently done and very enjoyed … thank you, Dear Poetess! ⁓ Richard : )
Even in the throes of being rebuffed, he had to admire your creatively poetic way of saying, "No!"
So very true ~ it is impossible for a lady flower to open her petals to be kissed by a light too dim.
Excellently done and very enjoyed … thank you, Dear Poetess! ⁓ Richard : )
23rd Jan 2019 1:36pm
Senryu-ish. Fascinating on many levels , some metaphorically. Perhaps Like Chomsky you dislike "manufactured consent" . . . . Great piece.
25th Jan 2019 2:46pm
I believe you're read my profile Sir xD
Thank you for the great comment. I'm a very amateur writer so "Senryu-ish" feels like high praise
(& welcome to DU)
Thank you for the great comment. I'm a very amateur writer so "Senryu-ish" feels like high praise
(& welcome to DU)
3rd Feb 2019 11:14pm
I would hate to be the sun in this situation. Your words clearly express your emotion.
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11th Feb 2019 4:50pm
Sounds like a choice between preservation or death? But both have various meanings depending on the individuals situation.
21st Feb 2019 7:40pm
someone said, "there are others suns out there"
couldn't help myself- YOU are the sun, my dear
couldn't help myself- YOU are the sun, my dear
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23rd Feb 2019 12:08pm
perhaps you're right sir xD
(I'm happy to hear you enjoyed this btw, thank you for the read ^-^)
(I'm happy to hear you enjoyed this btw, thank you for the read ^-^)
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12th Apr 2019 11:32pm
I am confident if again was the sun
it would make a world of difference
just common sense of fragrance heat and burns
THINK how and why
or slash me like a sugar cane pile
in your own imitable style
RLDING IT GREAT
it would make a world of difference
just common sense of fragrance heat and burns
THINK how and why
or slash me like a sugar cane pile
in your own imitable style
RLDING IT GREAT
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28th Apr 2019 5:41pm
that, dear sir, is very kind of you to say -- thank you for finding brilliance in this, and sharing your thoughts
Muchly appreciated :)
(also agree about the tunnels xD)
Muchly appreciated :)
(also agree about the tunnels xD)
17th May 2019 8:46am
This poem says so much in so few words, it makes for a great poem. Fine job, Umm!
18th May 2019 5:43pm
hehe, yea, I'm very sparse when it come to words.
Happy that that's something which is appreciated though! thank you for stopping by and for the kind comment :)
Happy that that's something which is appreciated though! thank you for stopping by and for the kind comment :)
24th May 2019 7:46am
Today I read your poetry
For the first time
A very gifted writer
You catch a spark in the eye
Very raw to the point
I like that about you
For the first time
A very gifted writer
You catch a spark in the eye
Very raw to the point
I like that about you
24th May 2019 7:51am
29th May 2019 7:21pm
You captured the emotion so well in small words... almost like a haiku... great ink I hope all is well
5th Jun 2019 6:52am
yup, things are pretty good, and thank you for your kind comment
much appreciated ^-^
much appreciated ^-^
26th Jul 2019 00:39am
14 words and More Said Than a Long Story. That is Magic.
I am Joe from Whiting New Jersey and i just joined to get some practice in taking up writing again. In the past i have about 25 songs Copyrighted mostly about Personal Romantic Experiences. Do you rite from Personal Experience or Inspiration. I now am going to try to write This Way. Wish Me Luck'
I am Joe from Whiting New Jersey and i just joined to get some practice in taking up writing again. In the past i have about 25 songs Copyrighted mostly about Personal Romantic Experiences. Do you rite from Personal Experience or Inspiration. I now am going to try to write This Way. Wish Me Luck'
1st Aug 2019 11:27am
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4th Oct 2019 2:52pm
per my note for the contest entry: I liked this piece!
9th Oct 2019 3:33am
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23rd Oct 2019 7:22pm
Love sunflowers but the meaning is like an arrow hitting the mark, succinctly stated. Felt that. Made me think of roses, they have the thorns as well as the beauty.
9th Nov 2019 4:05pm
Awe..need to scroll down eons n eo s of spacetime to reach here;) bravo for this firstly...n such brevity in all the boldness ..of a title theme n write ... absolutely W O R D 'L E S S...will read more of you Umm , thanks shine on x:) '
11th Nov 2019 7:05pm
Thank you, Summultima <3
I admire your way with words, it is far more superior, so this means a lot coming from you :)
Hope you have a wonderful week btw <3
I admire your way with words, it is far more superior, so this means a lot coming from you :)
Hope you have a wonderful week btw <3
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4th Feb 2020 9:17pm
Thank you for the compliment sir c:
I don't have kids though. (Unless you know something I don't 🤷😅)
I don't have kids though. (Unless you know something I don't 🤷😅)
21st Mar 2020 6:25pm
27th Mar 2020 5:40am
A sun flower is born to bloom a little sun would do
so continue would u for your own satisfaction good sunny flower u r
so continue would u for your own satisfaction good sunny flower u r
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10th Apr 2020 3:30pm
I’m going to throw in a top note accord here.
I see soft spoken with a blend of passive aggressive
I see soft spoken with a blend of passive aggressive
10th Apr 2020 6:55pm
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14th Apr 2020 8:02pm
Those words cut deep if standing at the end of the fire
Unfortunately in nature sunflowers cannot refuse the presence of the sun
It is by design that the sun gives light and heat to all
Words and actions sometimes may soften even the most resistant of hearts
Unfortunately in nature sunflowers cannot refuse the presence of the sun
It is by design that the sun gives light and heat to all
Words and actions sometimes may soften even the most resistant of hearts
6th Jun 2021 7:22am
7th Apr 2022 7:56am
Would make a good put-down to someone who pesters you whose fancy you don't reciprocate.
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