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Sometimes I feel like my heart's about to explode
and I might die in his presence
and how embarrassing would that be..
and I might die in his presence
and how embarrassing would that be..
Published 25th Nov 2016
| Edited 2nd Dec 2016
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25th Nov 2016 8:26am
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25th Nov 2016 8:16pm
Umm, The vulnerability expressed in this piece is beautiful. I hope the emotion is love in your heart. Don't explode just calmly, little-by-little release. Brava!
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Anonymous
7th Dec 2016 1:11pm
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7th Dec 2016 7:33pm
8th Apr 2017 3:35pm
Ha! I love the surprising ending! Much like a haiku.
You're writing short poems too? Glad to meet a colleague
You're writing short poems too? Glad to meet a colleague
25th Apr 2017 1:42pm
doesn't need to be help, just cultivate it. It seems you're on the right track anyway. Keep writing
Anonymous
1st Sep 2017 6:51pm
expressed so well :)
2nd Sep 2017 5:46pm
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Anonymous
29th May 2018 10:58am
Very sweet and truthful, I like this kind of write :)
Ben
Ben
29th May 2018 1:35pm
Anonymous
2nd Aug 2018 8:05pm
cute poem.
2nd Aug 2018 8:24pm
4th Aug 2018 2:10pm
Lol, what a big statement. Is anyone worth being put on that high a pedestal?
4th Aug 2018 9:53pm
25th Aug 2018 10:54pm
it would be epic. he would be like 'dude like totally...that was rad.' as you're bleeding to death.
26th Aug 2018 8:54pm
13th Sep 2018 8:17pm
Creative and original,
You really got a laugh out me, Umm!
How are you going to be embarrassed if you're dead!
🤣
You're good, Umm.
Thanks for the needed treat … love it! ⁓ Richard
You really got a laugh out me, Umm!
How are you going to be embarrassed if you're dead!
🤣
You're good, Umm.
Thanks for the needed treat … love it! ⁓ Richard
1st Mar 2019 6:50am
10th Oct 2018 5:35am
This was comical but in a third oerson viewing a girl crushing hard on somebody and more nervous about nerves ruining the interaction. I love it. Giid write Umm.
5th Dec 2018 9:33pm
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5th Jan 2019 10:15pm
Simple, beautiful, and extremely expressive. What a wonderful poem! Thanks for sharing. Sometimes love is just that powerful :)
25th Jan 2019 2:42pm
Haha, indeed! it makes my heart race so fast (the.best.feeling.)
& thank you for the lovely comment <3
& thank you for the lovely comment <3
Anonymous
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25th Jan 2019 10:26am
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25th Jan 2019 2:39pm
11th Feb 2019 4:48pm
It is sometimes never embarrassing on when its time for us to go meet the creator. It's what happens after we are gone in which can be embarrassing.
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1st Jul 2019 5:10am
an exquisite humorous macabre love poem cookie i kinda choked laughed spit my coffee out reading
10th Apr 2020 10:48pm
Anonymous
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