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Sometimes I feel like my heart's about to explode
and I might die in his presence
and how embarrassing would that be..
and I might die in his presence
and how embarrassing would that be..
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Re. I can't...
25th Nov 2016 8:16pm
Umm, The vulnerability expressed in this piece is beautiful. I hope the emotion is love in your heart. Don't explode just calmly, little-by-little release. Brava!
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19th Feb 2019 7:31pm
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20th Feb 2019 00:41am
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Anonymous
7th Dec 2016 1:11pm
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8th Apr 2017 3:35pm
Ha! I love the surprising ending! Much like a haiku.
You're writing short poems too? Glad to meet a colleague
You're writing short poems too? Glad to meet a colleague
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25th Apr 2017 1:42pm
doesn't need to be help, just cultivate it. It seems you're on the right track anyway. Keep writing
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Anonymous
1st Sep 2017 6:51pm
expressed so well :)

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20th Apr 2018 8:31pm
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Anonymous
29th May 2018 10:58am
Very sweet and truthful, I like this kind of write :)
Ben
Ben

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Anonymous
2nd Aug 2018 8:05pm
cute poem.

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4th Aug 2018 2:10pm
Lol, what a big statement. Is anyone worth being put on that high a pedestal?
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4th Aug 2018 9:53pm
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25th Aug 2018 10:54pm
it would be epic. he would be like 'dude like totally...that was rad.' as you're bleeding to death.
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26th Aug 2018 8:54pm
Re. .. Brilliant comedy, Umm!
13th Sep 2018 8:17pm
Creative and original,
You really got a laugh out me, Umm!
How are you going to be embarrassed if you're dead!
🤣
You're good, Umm.
Thanks for the needed treat … love it! ⁓ Richard
You really got a laugh out me, Umm!
How are you going to be embarrassed if you're dead!
🤣
You're good, Umm.
Thanks for the needed treat … love it! ⁓ Richard
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Re: Re. .. Brilliant comedy, Umm!
1st Mar 2019 6:50am
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10th Oct 2018 5:35am
This was comical but in a third oerson viewing a girl crushing hard on somebody and more nervous about nerves ruining the interaction. I love it. Giid write Umm.
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5th Jan 2019 10:15pm
Simple, beautiful, and extremely expressive. What a wonderful poem! Thanks for sharing. Sometimes love is just that powerful :)
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25th Jan 2019 2:42pm
Haha, indeed! it makes my heart race so fast (the.best.feeling.)
& thank you for the lovely comment <3
& thank you for the lovely comment <3
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11th Feb 2019 4:48pm
It is sometimes never embarrassing on when its time for us to go meet the creator. It's what happens after we are gone in which can be embarrassing.
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27th Feb 2019 12:20pm
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Re. ..an exquisite lol macabre poem cookie
1st Jul 2019 5:10am
an exquisite humorous macabre love poem cookie i kinda choked laughed spit my coffee out reading
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10th Apr 2020 10:48pm
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