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Haunted Hibiscus
The hibiscus nearly died in winter's lack of empathy.
Yet the phantom peach petals persisted to be.
How can I know if love is immortal?
There must be a haunted portal.
To crawl through to defy fate.
To unlatch mortality's gate
Walking through shades and shadows never beamed by sun.
To the ghostly perfume of the hibiscus, my dim and weary thoughts run.
Never knowing if today is our very final bloom.
Yet the phantom peach petals persisted to be.
How can I know if love is immortal?
There must be a haunted portal.
To crawl through to defy fate.
To unlatch mortality's gate
Walking through shades and shadows never beamed by sun.
To the ghostly perfume of the hibiscus, my dim and weary thoughts run.
Never knowing if today is our very final bloom.
Published 28th Jul 2023
Author's Note
Feeling the shadows that haunt me.
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28th Jul 2023 1:24pm
Ooh, girl. this poem is hauntingly beautiful. hence, you have the perfect title. Of course, your rhyming is on point. I really enjoyed this poem.
28th Jul 2023 1:29pm
Thank you so much. My friend has this beautiful peach hibiscus that survived winter. Mixed that with my thoughts.
Again appreciate the love
Again appreciate the love
28th Jul 2023 1:25pm
28th Jul 2023 1:30pm
That makes me so happy you liked it and has meaning.
Thank you so much for your kind comments. 🖤
Thank you so much for your kind comments. 🖤
A very haunting write. Mortal thoughts posed in full bloom, in your own unique way. Creative. Impressive. Enjoyed! 😊
28th Jul 2023 1:55pm
28th Jul 2023 3:11pm
Intriguing title. It screamed read me first for me. You explore some of life's biggest questions in this lovely, lyrical piece. Great phrases throughout. I especially liked "un latch mortality's gate."
28th Jul 2023 3:40pm
Thank you as always for reading. You comments always give me a lovely boost. I liked that line too, my thoughts wanting to know what lays beyond.....
28th Jul 2023 3:36pm
hello beautiful Debbie I am with you on these thoughts I've been thinking similar thoughts beautiful ache and pondering here ❤️
28th Jul 2023 3:41pm
I love when I can really resonate with someone. I admire your depth. Thanks for checking out.
28th Jul 2023 4:05pm
28th Jul 2023 4:06pm
29th Jul 2023 3:28pm
Really loved this one... one of your very best that I have read so far...
29th Jul 2023 3:33pm
7th Aug 2023 3:53pm
This is hauntingly beautiful.
I love the imagery...
So often we feel like the hibiscus dying... the lack of empathy.
And yet we always persist to be.
Love is often fleeting. And immortal love is painful.
Always searching for that haunted portal...
because it's better to be haunted than alone.
Existing in shades and shadows...
Still smelling the perfume of pheromones and desire.
That eternal longing where thoughts always run.
While so many shadows of the past torment us.
And still looking forward to a future of passion.
Perhaps love is unnecessary but to live without passion...
That is the most haunting thing of all.
I love the imagery...
So often we feel like the hibiscus dying... the lack of empathy.
And yet we always persist to be.
Love is often fleeting. And immortal love is painful.
Always searching for that haunted portal...
because it's better to be haunted than alone.
Existing in shades and shadows...
Still smelling the perfume of pheromones and desire.
That eternal longing where thoughts always run.
While so many shadows of the past torment us.
And still looking forward to a future of passion.
Perhaps love is unnecessary but to live without passion...
That is the most haunting thing of all.
7th Aug 2023 4:45pm
Thank you so much, I loved your response.
A life without passion is a very haunting thought.
Thx for reading!
A life without passion is a very haunting thought.
Thx for reading!
