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three stories of me.
(i)
Waiting for you
is like trying to catch time;
The remembrance of your lips,
one millisecond
an eon;
You are my heart's
own
black hole.
(ii)
When I awake
still foggy from jagged sleep,
Gone is your warmth,
yet
your musky scent permeates;
With the deepest breath
I capture you in my chest,
where you've always been.
(iii)
Finding you
amongst all the various
scattered thrown away pieces of souls,
With their hopes buried flat
yet screaming their
muffled screams—
I am the littlest
clover of four
nay, even more,
I'm the forgotten penny,
whose shine is now
dazzling brilliant in found.
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©Blu2020
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Re. three stories of me.
2nd Nov 2020 2:06pm
Re: Re. three stories of me.
2nd Nov 2020 2:11pm
(blushes)
Ty, AP
I'm extremely grateful for your visit
and RL add
Your comments mean a lot to me..
I'm very appreciative 🙏
🌹🌹🌹
xoxo
B
Ty, AP
I'm extremely grateful for your visit
and RL add
Your comments mean a lot to me..
I'm very appreciative 🙏
🌹🌹🌹
xoxo
B
Re. three stories of me.
2nd Nov 2020 2:26pm
Re: Re. three stories of me.
2nd Nov 2020 2:32pm
dawwwwww... giggling 🤭
I like lurking in the shadows....
.... haha
Ty for reading and your very generous
RL add 🙏
I'm so very glad you enjoyed it
🌹
xo
B
I like lurking in the shadows....
.... haha
Ty for reading and your very generous
RL add 🙏
I'm so very glad you enjoyed it
🌹
xo
B
Re. three stories of me.
2nd Nov 2020 3:12pm
This was hauntingly beautiful - the word choice was perfect and the ambiance created was that heartfelt longing - it really struck a chord with me and I could feel its emotional content. It is not very often a poem does that for me so thank you for sharing :-))))))
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Re: Re. three stories of me.
2nd Nov 2020 3:24pm
I'm seriously all smiles after reading such a very kind comment. In all honesty, I wasn't even going to post this because I thought it wasn't worth doing so. Damn, aren't we our own worst critics! The fact that it resonated with you like it did, set me back on my heels and left me figuratively pulling myself up by my freakin' bootstraps!
I'm extremely grateful for your visit,. the RL add, the beautiful comments and mostly the boost to my confidence.
Thank you so much.
🌹 💜 🌹
xoxo
B
I'm extremely grateful for your visit,. the RL add, the beautiful comments and mostly the boost to my confidence.
Thank you so much.
🌹 💜 🌹
xoxo
B
Re: Re. three stories of me.
2nd Nov 2020 4:03pm
We should always be our worst critic, this is the best way to be. The choice of poetic arrogance is for hacks. The best poets I have ever read were humble and self-deprecating by nature. One of the few insights I would offer is "Publish or be damned!"
I publish the raw and unseemly as well as poems I hope will work. It can be surprising the responses you get to the first category. When reading new poets on here I am constantly baffled by those that say "I am not really a poet" in their introduction. I have found some of the finest work coming from those people on DU.
your poetic talent and skills are unquestionable. This poem was proof, if needed, of that :-)
David :-)
I publish the raw and unseemly as well as poems I hope will work. It can be surprising the responses you get to the first category. When reading new poets on here I am constantly baffled by those that say "I am not really a poet" in their introduction. I have found some of the finest work coming from those people on DU.
your poetic talent and skills are unquestionable. This poem was proof, if needed, of that :-)
David :-)
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Re: Re. three stories of me.
2nd Nov 2020 5:00pm
Re. three stories of me.
Anonymous
- Edited 2nd Nov 2020 3:14pm
2nd Nov 2020 3:13pm
take me alla away, .. lay me in my grave, .. Your words are oh so beautiful, .. Baby Blue
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Re: Re. three stories of me.
2nd Nov 2020 3:28pm
*humbly bows..
🙇♀️
glad you enjoyed it
Ty so much for the RL add
I feel.
xo
B
🙇♀️
glad you enjoyed it
Ty so much for the RL add
I feel.
xo
B
Re. three stories of me.
2nd Nov 2020 3:22pm
Absolutely lovely. Girl you truly are amazing. Loved it, loved it, loved it
Fantastic piece
Love and light
Ron xx
Fantastic piece
Love and light
Ron xx
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Re: Re. three stories of me.
2nd Nov 2020 3:30pm
Oh Ron, you're the loveliest man!
I am eternally grateful for your support and encouragement. Ty for the RL add and the generous comments.
🌹🌈🌹🌈🌹
xoxo
B
I am eternally grateful for your support and encouragement. Ty for the RL add and the generous comments.
🌹🌈🌹🌈🌹
xoxo
B
Re. three stories of me.
2nd Nov 2020 4:25pm
NO! You are the trillion, trillion among poets with amazing talent and communication skills. Another publishable poem. Hugs and peace. oral
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Re: Re. three stories of me.
I bask in your lovely comments,
humbled and warmly chuckling
as your supportive and kind words
envelope me with possibility.
Ty, my generous friend.
Receiving your visits, makes
my day.
🌹 💜 🌹 💜 🌹
🌈
xoxo
B
humbled and warmly chuckling
as your supportive and kind words
envelope me with possibility.
Ty, my generous friend.
Receiving your visits, makes
my day.
🌹 💜 🌹 💜 🌹
🌈
xoxo
B
Re: Re. three stories of me.
2nd Nov 2020 11:02pm
Re. three stories of me.
This is stunningly beautiful Blue, it is defiantly something others can have as a mantra so to speak :) reflection and wisdom are not afforded to everyone. Some people live blindly never learning life’s lessons .
Well done Poetess!
Jackie xx
Well done Poetess!
Jackie xx
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Re: Re. three stories of me.
2nd Nov 2020 7:14pm
Wow, Jackie
I'm utterly amazed and very humbled by your complimentary comments. It's the weird way of my life (or how the world works) that this was a poem that I almost never posted, thinking that it wasn't worth doing so.... I'm still baffled by such a heartwarming response. Yours really hit me over the head and I couldn't be more grateful and appreciative. Thank you very kindly for the RL add and your new friendship. I'm grateful for meeting you and what a stroke of alien 👾 invasion luck!!... hahaha... 😂🤣😂
(love how it's coming, hope you finish it!)
🌹 💜 🌹
xoxo
-Susan
I'm utterly amazed and very humbled by your complimentary comments. It's the weird way of my life (or how the world works) that this was a poem that I almost never posted, thinking that it wasn't worth doing so.... I'm still baffled by such a heartwarming response. Yours really hit me over the head and I couldn't be more grateful and appreciative. Thank you very kindly for the RL add and your new friendship. I'm grateful for meeting you and what a stroke of alien 👾 invasion luck!!... hahaha... 😂🤣😂
(love how it's coming, hope you finish it!)
🌹 💜 🌹
xoxo
-Susan
Re. three stories of me.
2nd Nov 2020 8:38pm
Re: Re. three stories of me.
2nd Nov 2020 8:40pm
Re. three stories of me.
3rd Nov 2020 9:00am
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3rd Nov 2020 9:02am
Re. three stories of me.
3rd Nov 2020 2:36pm
Can't ask for a better comment.
.... I'm a lucky Blue
Ty, my awesome friend
-means a lot.
🙇♀️
🌹 💜 🌹
x
B
.... I'm a lucky Blue
Ty, my awesome friend
-means a lot.
🙇♀️
🌹 💜 🌹
x
B
Re. three stories of me.
3rd Nov 2020 2:39pm
Re: Re. three stories of me.
3rd Nov 2020 2:53pm
Aww Thank you so much, B
I'm very glad you enjoyed it
and I appreciate your RL add, too.
You made my morning!
xoxo
🌹
-B
I'm very glad you enjoyed it
and I appreciate your RL add, too.
You made my morning!
xoxo
🌹
-B
Anonymous
- Edited 24th Dec 2020 7:45am
4th Nov 2020 00:00am
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Re: Re. three stories of me.
Well, if there ever was a time that I needed to feel better / special it's while I am currently white-knuckle watching the election returns, so thank you for your much needed distraction and your beautifully eloquent comments, Reggie.
I'm really at a loss... My generous friend.
You do make me smile.
🌹 💜 🌹
xoxo
-Velv
I'm really at a loss... My generous friend.
You do make me smile.
🌹 💜 🌹
xoxo
-Velv
Re. three stories of me.
4th Nov 2020 4:57pm
Gorgeously proportion, terrific depth to the economic detail. Masterfully struck.
Reminds me of a time of heartache.
I searched for her on streets without signs, down corridors of locked doors, I remember her in this room. I wake, but am still in the room where she is gone.
Reminds me of a time of heartache.
I searched for her on streets without signs, down corridors of locked doors, I remember her in this room. I wake, but am still in the room where she is gone.
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Re: Re. three stories of me.
4th Nov 2020 5:08pm
.... You're a Sensei, that's so apparent.
Beautiful Daniel, my heart instantly broke in just the way that I love.
... damn...
🙇♀️
Ty for reading and leaving me in a state of
wonder(ful) ache
I appreciate you, the RL add and the
motivation I derive from your lovely visits
🌹
xo B
Beautiful Daniel, my heart instantly broke in just the way that I love.
... damn...
🙇♀️
Ty for reading and leaving me in a state of
wonder(ful) ache
I appreciate you, the RL add and the
motivation I derive from your lovely visits
🌹
xo B
Re. three stories of me.
4th Nov 2020 10:19pm
Re: Re. three stories of me.
4th Nov 2020 10:31pm
Harry!!
Lovely to see you!
Thank you so very much 🙏
I wish I could be down under today instead of the stress filled endurance test of an American election we're experiencing... Uggh...
it's a nightmare, so your visit is most welcomed
and now I can dream about holding a koala an moments of Zen within the Aussie wild..
I'm grateful for your RL add
and you, as always.
🌹
xo
B
Lovely to see you!
Thank you so very much 🙏
I wish I could be down under today instead of the stress filled endurance test of an American election we're experiencing... Uggh...
it's a nightmare, so your visit is most welcomed
and now I can dream about holding a koala an moments of Zen within the Aussie wild..
I'm grateful for your RL add
and you, as always.
🌹
xo
B
Re: Re. three stories of me.
4th Nov 2020 10:38pm
Beware the "Drop Bear"...koala...they pee on you Blue LOL. Take care up there my friend.
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Re. three stories of me.
14th Feb 2021 3:20pm
You must think it's Valentine's day or something...hey wait! It is. Beautiful work.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
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Re: Re. three stories of me.
14th Feb 2021 3:31pm
Hee hee hee
Lmao!
Ty, bk
Happy Valentíne's s day to you ;)
💖🌹🍫
xo
B
*returned hugs
Lmao!
Ty, bk
Happy Valentíne's s day to you ;)
💖🌹🍫
xo
B
*returned hugs
Re. three stories of me.
7th Jun 2022 8:03am
This is one dazzling found brilliant piece.
With the deepest breath, I capture u in your chest. Awesomely, the wonderful beautiful of this poem also.
With the deepest breath, I capture u in your chest. Awesomely, the wonderful beautiful of this poem also.
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Re: Re. three stories of me.
7th Jun 2022 8:20am
You've found an oldie, S
Yes.. you sure have! I appreciate the reminding , the generousity of your kind words and the gracious RL add.
It really was an unexpected surprise to read this again, I'm delighted to see you how you've enjoyed it. After all this time, that's wonderful to know that it can still have some consequence.
Best regards and well wishes sent your way...
🌹 - B
Yes.. you sure have! I appreciate the reminding , the generousity of your kind words and the gracious RL add.
It really was an unexpected surprise to read this again, I'm delighted to see you how you've enjoyed it. After all this time, that's wonderful to know that it can still have some consequence.
Best regards and well wishes sent your way...
🌹 - B
Re: Re. three stories of me.
7th Jun 2022 4:16pm
U are most welcome and thank u. I'm glad to know u are in enjoyability of these kind words of mine u see. And, take care please!
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