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Gogyoshi Poem, Nr.03 Undiscovered Roses
Star petals litter the ground
like exhausted angels and homeless people,
their avant-garde beauty reduced
to the boiled purity of an impassioned plea:
dont cut me with anything less than perfect.
like exhausted angels and homeless people,
their avant-garde beauty reduced
to the boiled purity of an impassioned plea:
dont cut me with anything less than perfect.
Published 23rd Jul 2020
| Edited 10th Mar 2024
Author's Note
Non-entry for "I know the Face of Falsehood and Her Tongue", classic corner comp hosted by Ahavati.
Poem written from reading Millay's poems and trying to express the 'feel' I get from the experience.
Gogyoshi Poem Nr.02 can be found here:
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/385242-gogyoshi-poem-nr-02----suffer-not/
Gogyoshi Poem Nr.04 can be found here:
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/391636-gogyoshi-poem-nr-04----cold-wind-blows/
(photo credit: Joshua Bond)
Poem written from reading Millay's poems and trying to express the 'feel' I get from the experience.
Gogyoshi Poem Nr.02 can be found here:
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/385242-gogyoshi-poem-nr-02----suffer-not/
Gogyoshi Poem Nr.04 can be found here:
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/391636-gogyoshi-poem-nr-04----cold-wind-blows/
(photo credit: Joshua Bond)
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23rd Jul 2020 10:37pm
You're off to a great start, Josh! I think you'll enjoy her style and form too.
28th Jul 2020 12:40pm
24th Jul 2020 11:51pm
I resonate with the subject matter of this very much and find your economic construction quite starkly beautiful.
28th Jul 2020 1:30pm
Thank you Daniel, and for the RL. I'm in a gogyoshi phase since the 'form' has a wabi-sabi feel of perfectly-imperfect to it. The 'form' requires it be 5 lines long but there are no other 'restrictions'. I find it always an interesting experience to choose to allow oneself to be 'forced' to say what one wants to say in just 5 lines, or any other stricter form like a sonnet, villanelle, etc
5th Aug 2020 11:48pm
7th Aug 2020 5:15pm
Thank you Harry, and for the RL. The last line came first, then I sort of worked backwards from there with various 'feels' for her writing. Glad you liked it.
