At the bar.

Solid entry.  Captured a sad truth in some of those taunts.  I had hoped he would take you up on that offer.  But that would have took things in a very different direction.

Hello, lovely T!

Yes, that would have taken an entirely different direction, indeed.

However, .. stay tuned for Act 2, Scene 3.. there could be a plot twist on the horizon!

I digress..

Your sexy fellow Canadian,
LostGirl

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That could prove very interesting.  Also, a treat to have a fellow Canadian drop by.

LOL! Love it! I love love love bantering like this! Well done and best of luck in the comp!

In the spirit of honest critique:

*cough Irv cough* ;)

God love your spirit, woman!

Thanks a bunch, Wise One.

Your friend in the DEEP,
LostGirl

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We be Roll'n in tha Deep Girl! :D

Captivating spill

and i don't usually read the super long stuff here in the deep

Beautiful Tallen!

Any day I captivate your interest - is a very good day!

Yours,
LostGirl

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Um well its written well. Your a great writer

Thank you, handsome Liam.

I aspire to be great. (;

Yours,
LostGirl

Lol handsome im not liam will suit

Any plans to make a mini-series out of this for television? ;-)

What a marvel idea!

Care to pitch it with me, darling?

I need some of that Snagginess. (;

Yours,
LostGirl

I could pitch in with a pitcher as you're at the bar but that's probably about the limit to what I can offer. Incidentally, I wrote a script poem too, only mine is much shorter. It's called, "A Night Out With Billy Snagg." Someone joked that mine might be expanded into that elusive mini-series but they were taking the piss really.

But your story could run & run, like what becomes of the married guy? And what about the 3 dudes sitting at the table, lol, ya know? ;-)  

I'll share a pitcher with you at the bar any day, Snaggy. (;

Yours,
LostGirl

Let's burn brightly together, Ethan!

Glad you found my light in the DEEP.

Your partner in crime,
Losty

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Seeing me in the nude is always worth it, HF. (;

But since you do so very well at functioning without me, I may JUST have to throw the big guns down and actually be nice to you.

I'm sure you're worth it too, handsome.

Thanks for well wishes, I expect your vote! (;

Your darling girl,
Losty

Inside the four walls of our mind great stories spill out like an overturned wine vase. Very entertaining LG.


100 hugs,
buddhakitty.

Nothing is as bittersweet as spilled wine.

I hope to lick up more memories with you, Kitty.

Your friend,
Losty

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The back and forth is quite engaging, as all natural things move in cycles of oscillations. Chekhov asserts that, if you introduce a gun into a story, it has to be fired. A metaphor that nothing is accidental or unimportant in a story. I love in the movie The Libertine, Depp says, Drop a handkerchief and it will return to smother you. So that is one of a myriad things I keep in mind as I read and send my perception below deck, into the emanations of the write, what is the author's message here. True author intent is, of course, unknowable and a good deal of personal projection colors the lens, but I've digressed far too long. Point of all that was: The interplay, the mature expressions of want, the practicality of adult relationships, the desire for greater intimacy that thrums beneath our banter, is something that pulls at me through the write. What is said between the two is subtly revelatory and that, to me, is the most interesting thing about dialogues, what is not directly said.

I'd like to see some atmosphere interjections amidst the conversation. Something of the milieu, the body language, to give the scene fuller depth. How the characters perceive their environment speaks to their perspective.

I enjoyed reading this sugah. I love Canada though I've never been. It's like America's lovely neighbor with generally nicer people. Haha ;)

I wan to vacation for the day inside your tremendous mind, darling!

Although, it may take me weeks to navigate my way through it's vast corridors and reread all the files of knowledge tucked away..

I'm up to the challenge! (;

Thank you, dear Daniel, for your commentary - you make me pause and think about your words every single time.  

I'm open to buying you a drink once you've landed on Canadian soil.

You've definitely earned one. (;

Your sexy tour guide,
LostGirl

P.S. I'm a friendly asshole, EH? Lol

Been a long time since I took a train north but if I head that way I'll definitely take you up on that sugah. <3

As I sat down to read it a second time, the visual of the bar came, the banter between the two alive. Although I do not drink, smoke or do drugs but this was very relatable at times. So was it at the Bovine? Great write and good luck with the comp.

Cheers

Glenn      

It wasn't at the Bovine. Nice try. (;

I'm very honoured for the reread.

Thanks lovely Glenn!

Your friend,
LostGirl

Thank you for such high praise, gorgeous!

The roses are in full bloom today. (;

Your thorny friend in the garden,
LostGirl

Hot I fuckin' am! That was like a phone sex conversation with an existential twist over a jugful of double juiced Margarita.
Cool damn write LG.
Cheers...Harry

Double margarita's you say, Harry?

I'll take a big GULP of that existential plot twist.

You cool off yet, darling? (;

Kisses,
LostGirl

love your style beautiful lady
a woman who knows what she wants
and is bold enough to go get it...

love this back and forth between you two
absolutely love your confidence rawr!!!

sometimes dreams do come true ❤

love Brenda 🌹

Thank you Brenda!

He’s a real bore. (;

I’d much rather cruise the highways and byways with you, gorgeous!

Let’s roll.

Your partner in crime,
Losty

Woman we would have so much fun get our drink on then get our game on...such a beautiful and sexy thought you left with me tonight thank you beautiful one...

love Brenda 🌹❤🌹❤

You’re the Louise to my Thelma, girlfriend.

Ride or die.

Let’s break some hearts.

Yours,
Losty

💋

OMGOODNESS Your creativity has no limit! Amazing write, can't wait to read the next scene!!

Plz keep it up!!
Irv

Thank you darling.

I like to live with no limits.

And there shouldn’t be any here in the DEEP. (;

Yours,
Lost One.

Good stuff

But very long girl

I need  a cold drink

I hope you buying

I’m glad you worked up a thirst reading this, Trome! (;

First round is definitely on you.

Yours,
Losty

As your story goes then you die
Me myself small measured meters of foreplay
Quick heavy spills
Fresh thoughts dripping off my fingers
The prolonged desire the elision of so many strokes coming together in rhythm
Anticipation
Riddles mounting pleasure
Eyes wide line after line
thoughts unfolding bursting stanzas
A dirty martini and sushi
That’s only round one
You already won
INSPIRED by you
Your Awesomeness! LG. GOOD FORM

Sushi AND a dirty martini?

Lovely!

You’ve got me in your sights, deer.

Ready to pounce. (;

Yours,
Losty

I laughed so hard. This was great! I hope you win. Where do I vote?  my favorite

LostGirl: I scratch and I fight and I don't give up.. until my claws sink into my victims!                    
LostGirl: Respect me or fear me..                    
 
LostGirl: Shy and timid was never my style, baby!

you betta on it!!! Like minds my friend!

Thank you for the warm kudos, Jen! (:

*Cocks pistol* 🔫

It’s your shot, darling!

Your friend,
Losty

Hullo

Found the idea and format quite refreshing. length appeared a tad daunting at the start but found it easy enough to mosey through. on a constructive context only suggestion which springs to mind would be if you decide to do it again maybe give us a little more of your surroundings. all in though, nothing really lacking


good stuff *hat tip*

Thank you handsome man. (;

I appreciate your contributions to my art.

Always looking for great feedback.

Yours,
LostGirl

He must've gone home to the wife and thought about LostGirl...
Nice entry, good luck in the comp.

They always seem to go home to their wives, don’t they?

They always seem to have me in their minds later on.

Thank you, lovely Wally.

Your girl,
Losty

(: