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Land of In~Betweens..
Lay me back ..and take me there
to the Land of In~Betweens..
..where time holds whispers of your face,
soul lashing my sacred space..
palms lifting my wet well high,
firm convictions pushed inside..
Twisting willful 'neath your grip,
spilling pride unchecked ..upon your chin..
never knowing.. you owned me then.
..when parting my palest pardons,
watching you move above my heart..
rising as a liquid archangel,
sinking demon strokes..[in] freefall..
..and I was wide open flame~
singed by silken tears ..exhaling your name..
Lay me back ..and take me..
some tears are worth remembering..
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Re. Land of In~Betweens..
10th Jan 2016 9:03pm
Re: Re. Land of In~Betweens..
12th Jan 2016 00:50am
Solidly adore you misters.. tyty for taking time on me!
sweet eve to you,
~d
sweet eve to you,
~d
Re. Land of In~Betweens..
10th Jan 2016 9:26pm
Oh my God babygirl!
This is so fucking beautiful..
I miss your words so much...
No one has the touch you do.
Lay me back ..and take me there
to the Land of In~Betweens..
Twisting willful 'neath your grip,
spilling pride unchecked ..upon your chin..
never knowing.. you owned me then
Lay me back ..and take me..
some tears are worth remembering..
Perfection beginning to end..how you manage the stroke of innocence in this heat...it was like a very adult lullaby lol
Lovin you today and always precious and furiously....
Jennifer
This is so fucking beautiful..
I miss your words so much...
No one has the touch you do.
Lay me back ..and take me there
to the Land of In~Betweens..
Twisting willful 'neath your grip,
spilling pride unchecked ..upon your chin..
never knowing.. you owned me then
Lay me back ..and take me..
some tears are worth remembering..
Perfection beginning to end..how you manage the stroke of innocence in this heat...it was like a very adult lullaby lol
Lovin you today and always precious and furiously....
Jennifer
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Re: Re. Land of In~Betweens..
12th Jan 2016 1:11am
'very adult lullaby' ..yesss ..darkly luv that idea, *mwahs..
missed you much here, Jenpen.. ty fer helpin nudge my muse along with ur sweet words ..
I feel thoroughly hugged & send fondles back!
oh!-- 'nn give rubbins to our snuggle rock plsss..;)
...pouring *endless heartluvz on you, Creampuff..
~T
missed you much here, Jenpen.. ty fer helpin nudge my muse along with ur sweet words ..
I feel thoroughly hugged & send fondles back!
oh!-- 'nn give rubbins to our snuggle rock plsss..;)
...pouring *endless heartluvz on you, Creampuff..
~T
Re. Land of In~Betweens..
10th Jan 2016 11:35pm
some tears are worth remembering..
Beautiful, darksighing one. Ties it up in one sentence. Glad to see you back.
Beautiful, darksighing one. Ties it up in one sentence. Glad to see you back.
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Re: Re. Land of In~Betweens..
12th Jan 2016 1:16am
warmest thankins, LadyA!.. always, I am honored to have you read..
hope to stay a bit-- muse burned my desk in a tantrum, took me some time to get back..;)
sweet eve to you!
~d
hope to stay a bit-- muse burned my desk in a tantrum, took me some time to get back..;)
sweet eve to you!
~d
Re. Land of In~Betweens..
Dark throes through a dream state.
It sounds like you have been away awhile. I'm only now being introduced to your artistry, and this is a wonderful ink for me to start.
Added to the list.
It sounds like you have been away awhile. I'm only now being introduced to your artistry, and this is a wonderful ink for me to start.
Added to the list.
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Re: Re. Land of In~Betweens..
12th Jan 2016 1:20am
A pleasure to have you LadyJade.. deeply appreciate your time and RL add!
I am fondly enjoying your work as well ;)
sweet eve wishes,
~d
I am fondly enjoying your work as well ;)
sweet eve wishes,
~d
Re. Land of In~Betweens..
damn do this ignite the senses!!!!
tried to formulate words
but i was stuck in-between thought
and speech...this is one of those
vibes i can read over and over..
lovely pen you have DS..
good to see you back..
tried to formulate words
but i was stuck in-between thought
and speech...this is one of those
vibes i can read over and over..
lovely pen you have DS..
good to see you back..
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Re: Re. Land of In~Betweens..
12th Jan 2016 1:30am
omg, sweet misters-- dark giggles right off.. and ty's!!
my pen, humble ;)
appreciate you, always, for your support, m'friend.. that part is priceless..
shiny evenin' wishes your way,
~d
my pen, humble ;)
appreciate you, always, for your support, m'friend.. that part is priceless..
shiny evenin' wishes your way,
~d
Re. Land of In~Betweens..
11th Jan 2016 00:42am
Such a treat to read you you again.
The wait has seemed so long and
yes as always well worth it. Passionate and tender. Such beautiful ink as only you can do.
Fav line "where time holds whispers of your face" loving reflection.
Thoroughly enjoyed this one, love.
Loving respects,
Keith
The wait has seemed so long and
yes as always well worth it. Passionate and tender. Such beautiful ink as only you can do.
Fav line "where time holds whispers of your face" loving reflection.
Thoroughly enjoyed this one, love.
Loving respects,
Keith
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Re: Re. Land of In~Betweens..
12th Jan 2016 1:44am
my witchy pen is eeking its way back.. and dearly thankin you fer spendin time here!
time & it's flying --seems to be a problem lately.. was a spell, maybe? ;)
[wud figure right.. lol]
always good to be bk amongst friends & you are cherished, Keith..
luvz n respect sweetie,
~d
time & it's flying --seems to be a problem lately.. was a spell, maybe? ;)
[wud figure right.. lol]
always good to be bk amongst friends & you are cherished, Keith..
luvz n respect sweetie,
~d
Re. Land of In~Betweens..
11th Jan 2016 1:13am
Re: Re. Land of In~Betweens..
12th Jan 2016 1:51am
Fancy having you here, dear poet.. Ty so much fer takin' time!
the stubbornly pen won this time..so we shall see how it goes..lol.
always lookin fwd to your posts, m'friend ;)
sweet eve,
~d
the stubbornly pen won this time..so we shall see how it goes..lol.
always lookin fwd to your posts, m'friend ;)
sweet eve,
~d
Re. Land of In~Betweens..
11th Jan 2016 2:02am
Clearly you haven't lost that magic touch with ur pen! A brilliant piece of passionate spillings!! Two thumbs way up my dear dark one :)
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Re: Re. Land of In~Betweens..
12th Jan 2016 2:00am
awwes.. my pen does darkly curtsy fer your time & sweet words.. ty sooo much!
everly enchanted & grateful fer your presence ;)
much luvz to your eve, dearest
~d
everly enchanted & grateful fer your presence ;)
much luvz to your eve, dearest
~d
Re. Land of In~Betweens..
11th Jan 2016 2:53am
Yes ma'am, My goodness!! Just lay me back and fan me. I could feel this all the way down in my bones😘
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Re: Re. Land of In~Betweens..
12th Jan 2016 2:11am
so damn sweet to see you, ladyluvs .. I'm in constant grin every time, tyty!
*fannin in dark giggle ;)
much luv n respect, sweetie,
~d
*fannin in dark giggle ;)
much luv n respect, sweetie,
~d
Re. Land of In~Betweens..
11th Jan 2016 4:41am
Absolutely heartbreaking lil sis as i know all to well these tears and agony you're facing these days... Some things are worth remembering, you've got that right... I hope things get better soon
I love you Tanya heart & Soul
Always❤️
Jackie xoxoxox
I love you Tanya heart & Soul
Always❤️
Jackie xoxoxox
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Re: Re. Land of In~Betweens..
12th Jan 2016 2:19am
eeks n squeaks of thanx.. I missed you here, Jackieluvs!
sharing hugs that maul you and your beautiful words, m'Sis..
~~>so needed and absorbed.. *mwahmwah
blessins all over ur shiny soul sweetheart.. I love you too!
~Tanya
sharing hugs that maul you and your beautiful words, m'Sis..
~~>so needed and absorbed.. *mwahmwah
blessins all over ur shiny soul sweetheart.. I love you too!
~Tanya
Re. Land of In~Betweens..
11th Jan 2016 8:26am
Re: Re. Land of In~Betweens..
12th Jan 2016 2:28am
Warmly honored by your presence, SirJ.. tyty!
Your verseful comments, ever poignant..
~~> yep, you get poetry sighs even here, m'friend! ;)
fond curtsies dear sir,
~d
Your verseful comments, ever poignant..
~~> yep, you get poetry sighs even here, m'friend! ;)
fond curtsies dear sir,
~d
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11th Jan 2016 3:00pm
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Re: Re. Land of In~Betweens..
12th Jan 2016 2:47am
fondly *nippin the finger in sway.. wif much taunting dark giggle ;)
seriously adore your wise faerie behind keepin' me in line..
*soul maulins commence!*
Missed you and ur pages badly, my precious Sissy ODFK!
you are too addicting n yessss I was always peekin..
~~> now to the catchin up of layin loves on them ;)
blowing you hot dark loves, m'witchy Sissy T.. where kisses & lap-space never end..
~T of the T-n-Tz
seriously adore your wise faerie behind keepin' me in line..
*soul maulins commence!*
Missed you and ur pages badly, my precious Sissy ODFK!
you are too addicting n yessss I was always peekin..
~~> now to the catchin up of layin loves on them ;)
blowing you hot dark loves, m'witchy Sissy T.. where kisses & lap-space never end..
~T of the T-n-Tz
Re. Land of In~Betweens..
11th Jan 2016 6:04pm
Nice piece I enjoyed the read...not too raw..but just enough steamy...and dreamy
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Re: Re. Land of In~Betweens..
12th Jan 2016 2:52am
Ty so much for your lovely comment, sweet poetess..
appreciate you on my page & shall be bk on yours again shortly..
missed your works & eekingly catching up ;)
sweet eve to you!
~d
appreciate you on my page & shall be bk on yours again shortly..
missed your works & eekingly catching up ;)
sweet eve to you!
~d
Re. Land of In~Betweens..
12th Jan 2016 2:01am
Oh, such a sensuous write is this one . . .
This one reads like it has been spent
into your heart. My, my . . .
"Lay me back ..and take me there
to the Land of In~Betweens..
..where time holds whispers of your face, "
Beautiful lines written and seemingly
written personally penned with passion.
This one reads like it has been spent
into your heart. My, my . . .
"Lay me back ..and take me there
to the Land of In~Betweens..
..where time holds whispers of your face, "
Beautiful lines written and seemingly
written personally penned with passion.
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Re: Re. Land of In~Betweens..
12th Jan 2016 3:29am
A very precious comment.. ty so much for visiting my page & seeing the passion
etched here..
lovely evenin' to you! ;)
~d
etched here..
lovely evenin' to you! ;)
~d
Re. Land of In~Betweens..
12th Jan 2016 4:25pm
I am sorry I am late to the party here. But obvious there is cause for celebration as you have written a heartfelt and wetly erotic piece, Dark. Some beautiful lines you have woken in this dream-like memory that, as you say, "are worth remembering". It has a strong, but soft and warm ambiance that is supporting the entire realm. Excellent!
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Re. Land of In~Betweens..
12th Jan 2016 9:31pm
A sexy read sexy lady! You embers are stoked and blazing hot in this one...
JJ
JJ
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Re. Land of In~Betweens..
13th Jan 2016 7:46am
Re. Land of In~Betweens..
16th Jan 2016 8:49pm
"some tears are worth remembering.. "
Yes, indeed, Dark, for this beauty of a piece of poetry.
You have shared with us you very heart and may I
suggest, your soul. Thank you for the honesty within
this beauty of a write.
Yes, indeed, Dark, for this beauty of a piece of poetry.
You have shared with us you very heart and may I
suggest, your soul. Thank you for the honesty within
this beauty of a write.
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Re. Land of In~Betweens..
17th Jan 2016 5:39pm
for the love of shiva, i've missed your poetry, sister mine of such sensual scribes
*sighs of velvet depth*
must needs remember to breathe as i traverse this sweet undulation of hip & thigh...
"Twisting willful 'neath your grip,
spilling pride unchecked ..upon your chin..
never knowing.. you owned me then."
^^^^^
mercy! am undone darling one, undone & blissfully so
[&]
"where time holds whispers of your face"
kairos, no?
.... oh but you are a joy to read, to unravel twixt these lines of yours
restless. wanton
indeed
xoxox
*sighs of velvet depth*
must needs remember to breathe as i traverse this sweet undulation of hip & thigh...
"Twisting willful 'neath your grip,
spilling pride unchecked ..upon your chin..
never knowing.. you owned me then."
^^^^^
mercy! am undone darling one, undone & blissfully so
[&]
"where time holds whispers of your face"
kairos, no?
.... oh but you are a joy to read, to unravel twixt these lines of yours
restless. wanton
indeed
xoxox
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Re. Land of In~Betweens..
19th Jan 2016 7:17pm
Re. Land of In~Betweens..
I am so with with dear Shadoe
for the love of Shiva!
My gods am I enthralled. . you're
in'tune my darling.. I think our
connected seeing and feely cores
are one on one my love..
You've laid many trills inside me
with this one and as always
beautiful.. Thank you for taking me
to the lands in'between.
-Howlings
for the love of Shiva!
My gods am I enthralled. . you're
in'tune my darling.. I think our
connected seeing and feely cores
are one on one my love..
You've laid many trills inside me
with this one and as always
beautiful.. Thank you for taking me
to the lands in'between.
-Howlings
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Re. Land of In~Betweens..
21st Jan 2016 11:54am
Ahhh, darksighs, luv ~ :-*
This passion, all of this, so radiant with love... :-*
I do not believe I drew breath during the reading of this exquisite art of yours, luv. Twas too much for me to do that.
I struggle now to find words to compass this that you have written and do not find enough nor the articulation I need. :-*
Tis marvelous, luv, truly, truly marvelous...
This passion, all of this, so radiant with love... :-*
I do not believe I drew breath during the reading of this exquisite art of yours, luv. Twas too much for me to do that.
I struggle now to find words to compass this that you have written and do not find enough nor the articulation I need. :-*
Tis marvelous, luv, truly, truly marvelous...
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