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Monsters (A collab with the electrifying calamitygin)
Doctor:
She's alive!
A beauty born of lightning
Her form molded by my hands
I, the new Prometheus, exult at her sight
That face of feral beauty
Eyes unblinking, drinking in a brave new world
Nostrils flaring, lips trembling
Her look one of immortal desire
I can feel my own growing as I gaze upon her
Every part supplied with care
My conception of the ideal female
Whose network of scars will fade with time
But the "monster" seems disgruntled
Somehow believing her to be his "bride"
Even as she hisses in his face
Then stumbles in my direction...
Bride:
He catches me..his hold cold yet revvving my parts on fire..my Gawd so bare..
My creater?..oh his hands hurt some on my tingly singed new skin..
Every touch jolts through....my creaters hands send shocks of living there ohh!
I see another..and of every stare I am aware..Aughh! Aaaugh!! All I know is scream..
I am alive!! But..
Who is this God and his eyes look on my laced flesh and who is the monster?
Scared i am so frightened!!
Doctor:
She trembles but I hold her tightly
My creation designed for love, devotion
But wired with naught but desire
Her breasts firm but reactive
The nipples sparking as I twist them
Then tasting the voltage as it courses
Steadying, strengthening the beat of her heart
I touch her mons tenderly
And caress the glowing pearl
She moans, her death forgotten
Beaten back to the grave as I enter her
Then deeper with my every thrust
Only the "monster" now observing
A look of wonder on my first triumph's face
Awestruck with the sound of her pleasure
The evidence of life in her shrill climax
Soon followed by my own.
Bride:
He? Creator..he made me?
Now he touches and this heat is aauggh!
Shutter gooood through my body.
So new..Mm this awwe!! His God hand takes my round flesh up top and squeeze I feeel it in beats of throbs..mmm jolts betweeen my leggs as he bites there! oOHm HIM. Now mouth suck. ..pulses down there YES! Need! I must touch creater my God I neeed to feeeel him I grab out!! Come creator...I feeel sooo alive in this new body...
He grabs me and holds tight..pulling me to floor..Lays down on me..he he, spreads these new legs..
...looking..TOUCH OH.. Brings my hand down to feeel..wet there inside me mmm his fingers too..rubbing augh!! He Is in his flesh now too brings hand to what? Long and hard, he closes my hand around it and as i move up and down he calls out! groans..sounds like me..he takes hands, spread these legs..please..he enters inside!!! Oh! Hurts some but alsooo oh! He in and out so fast and deeep in me Ooohh!!
My breathe...his breath..OH God!! He's making sounds like. ..gaugh!! and I haauuggh!!! I feel him rushh! wet inside...his body jerks and ME!! Oooh! MY NEW GOD!! Electric life swellll!!! Yes pulleeez!! I shake hard pussy pulses in jolz! We both shutter.... Oh! Oh! I!! My new God....
Doctor:
I lie here galvanized
Stunned to silence by her display
Pleasure violently supplanting reason
Usurping every trace of logic I possess
She continues to hunger
Sucking for the nourishment she craves
But I am spent for now,
No longer young, needing time to replenish
Yet she continues to twist and mewl
Not inclined to be denied
And my first creation will not be excluded
"You forget me, Master," he moans
"Allow me to join you
Share the joy of discovery
And we three will create our own lightning"
I note his superior strength
Her awe at the organ I provided him
And see no earthly reason to forbid her this
My arrogance be damned
We are all monsters after all.
She's alive!
A beauty born of lightning
Her form molded by my hands
I, the new Prometheus, exult at her sight
That face of feral beauty
Eyes unblinking, drinking in a brave new world
Nostrils flaring, lips trembling
Her look one of immortal desire
I can feel my own growing as I gaze upon her
Every part supplied with care
My conception of the ideal female
Whose network of scars will fade with time
But the "monster" seems disgruntled
Somehow believing her to be his "bride"
Even as she hisses in his face
Then stumbles in my direction...
Bride:
He catches me..his hold cold yet revvving my parts on fire..my Gawd so bare..
My creater?..oh his hands hurt some on my tingly singed new skin..
Every touch jolts through....my creaters hands send shocks of living there ohh!
I see another..and of every stare I am aware..Aughh! Aaaugh!! All I know is scream..
I am alive!! But..
Who is this God and his eyes look on my laced flesh and who is the monster?
Scared i am so frightened!!
Doctor:
She trembles but I hold her tightly
My creation designed for love, devotion
But wired with naught but desire
Her breasts firm but reactive
The nipples sparking as I twist them
Then tasting the voltage as it courses
Steadying, strengthening the beat of her heart
I touch her mons tenderly
And caress the glowing pearl
She moans, her death forgotten
Beaten back to the grave as I enter her
Then deeper with my every thrust
Only the "monster" now observing
A look of wonder on my first triumph's face
Awestruck with the sound of her pleasure
The evidence of life in her shrill climax
Soon followed by my own.
Bride:
He? Creator..he made me?
Now he touches and this heat is aauggh!
Shutter gooood through my body.
So new..Mm this awwe!! His God hand takes my round flesh up top and squeeze I feeel it in beats of throbs..mmm jolts betweeen my leggs as he bites there! oOHm HIM. Now mouth suck. ..pulses down there YES! Need! I must touch creater my God I neeed to feeeel him I grab out!! Come creator...I feeel sooo alive in this new body...
He grabs me and holds tight..pulling me to floor..Lays down on me..he he, spreads these new legs..
...looking..TOUCH OH.. Brings my hand down to feeel..wet there inside me mmm his fingers too..rubbing augh!! He Is in his flesh now too brings hand to what? Long and hard, he closes my hand around it and as i move up and down he calls out! groans..sounds like me..he takes hands, spread these legs..please..he enters inside!!! Oh! Hurts some but alsooo oh! He in and out so fast and deeep in me Ooohh!!
My breathe...his breath..OH God!! He's making sounds like. ..gaugh!! and I haauuggh!!! I feel him rushh! wet inside...his body jerks and ME!! Oooh! MY NEW GOD!! Electric life swellll!!! Yes pulleeez!! I shake hard pussy pulses in jolz! We both shutter.... Oh! Oh! I!! My new God....
Doctor:
I lie here galvanized
Stunned to silence by her display
Pleasure violently supplanting reason
Usurping every trace of logic I possess
She continues to hunger
Sucking for the nourishment she craves
But I am spent for now,
No longer young, needing time to replenish
Yet she continues to twist and mewl
Not inclined to be denied
And my first creation will not be excluded
"You forget me, Master," he moans
"Allow me to join you
Share the joy of discovery
And we three will create our own lightning"
I note his superior strength
Her awe at the organ I provided him
And see no earthly reason to forbid her this
My arrogance be damned
We are all monsters after all.
Published 25th Oct 2015
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25th Oct 2015 11:18pm
This was a genuine pleasure to write with Jennifer. She's an amazing talent and helped me to loosen up a little, providing a shock to my system. She has my many thanks!
25th Oct 2015 11:33pm
T Crowfly i put this up with tears in my eyes. I respect you so much, this is one of if not the proudest moments since ive been writing.
Adore and. Love you!!
Love
Jennifer
Adore and. Love you!!
Love
Jennifer
Thank you Jen! The respect is mutual. It was a privilege to work with you! Love you too!
26th Oct 2015 00:21am
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26th Oct 2015 2:17am
Seems like DU has got "collab fever!";)
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27th Oct 2015 4:01am
That sends electric shocks through the skin to read and feel! Damn. Every sci fi Geek has had the Pygmalion fantasy, but to capture the essence of that moment involves reciprocity, and attention to every dimension, of the dynamic, of the consequence, of the metamorphosis the creator goes through.
"In the name of God, now I know how it feels to BE God!"
Victor Frankenstein's hubris spiked my ear, and the sense of human conceit, especially intellectual authority run amok remained a running theme in my mind since childhood.
Hence, getting to visualize the Mad Creator redeemed? As in...
And see no earthly reason to forbid her this
My arrogance be damned
We are all monsters after all.
Was a serendipitous way of completing that circle, bringing rest to the character in my mind. Lore re-told was always meant to clear the archetypes, re-imagine the common links, and you two delivered that one here. Awesome work!
"In the name of God, now I know how it feels to BE God!"
Victor Frankenstein's hubris spiked my ear, and the sense of human conceit, especially intellectual authority run amok remained a running theme in my mind since childhood.
Hence, getting to visualize the Mad Creator redeemed? As in...
And see no earthly reason to forbid her this
My arrogance be damned
We are all monsters after all.
Was a serendipitous way of completing that circle, bringing rest to the character in my mind. Lore re-told was always meant to clear the archetypes, re-imagine the common links, and you two delivered that one here. Awesome work!
28th Oct 2015 11:23am
holy gods! this was darn steller ya'll. one of the best collabs i've read today [& there's a number of 'em... must be somethin' in the air]
the two of you are electric
loved this!
the two of you are electric
loved this!
28th Oct 2015 7:16pm
Awesome timing for All Hallow's Eve you two-sies..
[pardon my tardies.. you know I wuvz ya both]
"That face of feral beauty" ...
"Her look one of immortal desire
I can feel my own growing as I gaze upon her"
~stunning portrayal of bride.. the desired, incarnate.
"She moans, her death forgotten
Beaten back to the grave as I enter her
~ and then you go and make me say-- dayum T2!.. these lovie lines sizzle! *swoon indeed..
"Who is this God and his eyes look on my laced flesh and who is the monster?"
&
"We both shutter.... Oh! Oh! I!! My new God.... " <~ love this exclamation!
~Creampuff captures the innocent new form and old spirit melding into her new body..
and then kicks up the heat on me again..eg ;) ty ladyluv..
"We are all monsters after all." .. love the surprise twist from voyeur monster to monster party.. o'yes!
*meows n mwahs you guys.. enjoyed the bk n forth pov, as you covered um..*everything.. well.
~T
[pardon my tardies.. you know I wuvz ya both]
"That face of feral beauty" ...
"Her look one of immortal desire
I can feel my own growing as I gaze upon her"
~stunning portrayal of bride.. the desired, incarnate.
"She moans, her death forgotten
Beaten back to the grave as I enter her
~ and then you go and make me say-- dayum T2!.. these lovie lines sizzle! *swoon indeed..
"Who is this God and his eyes look on my laced flesh and who is the monster?"
&
"We both shutter.... Oh! Oh! I!! My new God.... " <~ love this exclamation!
~Creampuff captures the innocent new form and old spirit melding into her new body..
and then kicks up the heat on me again..eg ;) ty ladyluv..
"We are all monsters after all." .. love the surprise twist from voyeur monster to monster party.. o'yes!
*meows n mwahs you guys.. enjoyed the bk n forth pov, as you covered um..*everything.. well.
~T
7th May 2016 8:28pm
Well, I am stunned. Speechless.
This is a new favorite. Jen, you know I adore you. Your words always penetrate deep, hitting just the right spot to make me perk up and listen. Always needy to read more from you so I'm thrilled to have found this little gem.
Crowfly, you are so gifted. I'll admit to being obsessed with your work for days. Your lines are superb. They jump out at me. Reaching deep to grab hold of my mind and drag me into the piece. I constantly find myself rereading one poem over and over for this reason. It's addicting. And this was so different! Such an odd little piece. It blew me away. Loved reading every second and I'll love reading it again.
I don't know if "monsters" have ever turned me on quite like this. Good work to both of you. Many thanks for the opportunity to enjoy this piece. I think if I find another crow/gin colab I might swoon.
Respect and Adoration,
R
This is a new favorite. Jen, you know I adore you. Your words always penetrate deep, hitting just the right spot to make me perk up and listen. Always needy to read more from you so I'm thrilled to have found this little gem.
Crowfly, you are so gifted. I'll admit to being obsessed with your work for days. Your lines are superb. They jump out at me. Reaching deep to grab hold of my mind and drag me into the piece. I constantly find myself rereading one poem over and over for this reason. It's addicting. And this was so different! Such an odd little piece. It blew me away. Loved reading every second and I'll love reading it again.
I don't know if "monsters" have ever turned me on quite like this. Good work to both of you. Many thanks for the opportunity to enjoy this piece. I think if I find another crow/gin colab I might swoon.
Respect and Adoration,
R
