Poems About the Sun Seeking Honest Critique
#sun
ThroughTheVeil
Poem Published
9th Oct 2021 5:43am
9th Oct 2021 5:43am
Among the Gods
He told him "No, don't fly to high
Stay safe in the middle, don't risk you life"
But Icarus
He saw the light
He chased the passion, even as it burned
and oh it burned, it scorched his skin
Daedalus watched in horror
afraid that he was right
Icarus he screamed up high
far from his father's gaze
as feathers drifted downwards
and fell unto the sea
The wax ran down his body
his wings they grew to weak
he plummeted towards earth
but his cry had been with glee
The world paints it as a warning: ...
Stay safe in the middle, don't risk you life"
But Icarus
He saw the light
He chased the passion, even as it burned
and oh it burned, it scorched his skin
Daedalus watched in horror
afraid that he was right
Icarus he screamed up high
far from his father's gaze
as feathers drifted downwards
and fell unto the sea
The wax ran down his body
his wings they grew to weak
he plummeted towards earth
but his cry had been with glee
The world paints it as a warning: ...
#dreams
#sun
#mythology
#tragedy
#escape
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asbr808
Anthony R
Anthony R
Poem Published
30th Sep 2021 6:44pm
30th Sep 2021 6:44pm
Things That Come Down Also Go Up
In the sense that I am a fabric wing
I move through the air,
By colliding with billions of tiny invisible units
And they press me away from themselves
Deny me the ground, for now
Icarus flew too close for the sun
Well, it was his fault for wearing wax wings
In reality the sun is lightly impatient
It hurries along the sky
Even on the longest days
Even on the summer solstice
The attention is on the pentacles’ rate of disappearance
‘And it is the longest day of the year’—and every other day so far shorter
And the sunrise is a...
I move through the air,
By colliding with billions of tiny invisible units
And they press me away from themselves
Deny me the ground, for now
Icarus flew too close for the sun
Well, it was his fault for wearing wax wings
In reality the sun is lightly impatient
It hurries along the sky
Even on the longest days
Even on the summer solstice
The attention is on the pentacles’ rate of disappearance
‘And it is the longest day of the year’—and every other day so far shorter
And the sunrise is a...
#sun
#sky
#SelfReflection
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DCLXVI_1989
Poem Published
29th Sep 2021 8:55pm
29th Sep 2021 8:55pm
The Eye in Sun
Shine-
Shine so bright
I need your light
While you bring blisters to my skin
Genetic anomaly-
Producing the magic,
Fire in my atonomy
Forging my own, within
Capable as human
To see the shadow
And downplay the sin
Self crucifixion
I'm on a mission
To take my light and watch it bend
Shine so bright
I need your light
While you bring blisters to my skin
Genetic anomaly-
Producing the magic,
Fire in my atonomy
Forging my own, within
Capable as human
To see the shadow
And downplay the sin
Self crucifixion
I'm on a mission
To take my light and watch it bend
#sun
#SelfReflection
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da_poetic-edifier
Damon
Damon
Poem Published
17th Sep 2021 11:38am
17th Sep 2021 11:38am
Breaking Bread
Peace be unto you
Unto you be peace
Gather more than two
Bread becomes a feast
Break it to release
The love that's inside
Face to the East
Watch the Sun rise
Eyes of the beholders
See beauty in all
Look over shoulders
Rob Peter, pay Paul
Unto you be peace
Gather more than two
Bread becomes a feast
Break it to release
The love that's inside
Face to the East
Watch the Sun rise
Eyes of the beholders
See beauty in all
Look over shoulders
Rob Peter, pay Paul
#love
#beauty
#sun #peace
#sun #peace
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Scarlett_Midwinter
Poem Published
14th Sep 2021 3:13pm
14th Sep 2021 3:13pm
Dreaming in Grasshopper Green
Kiwi sour tints of soggy leaves
Offered on an altar of rotting trees
Poison frog flesh of verdant release
Like plumes of a thousand parakeets
Reverie of jellied chartreuse and lime
Sun rays dripping upon me like slime
The day coiled around me
A serpentine mirage
Of jungles of neon
Lemongrass and topaz
Cellulose encased
In mossy illusions
Mildewed sun casting
Rainbows unseen
Lichens abound as
Emerald foliage surrounds
...
Offered on an altar of rotting trees
Poison frog flesh of verdant release
Like plumes of a thousand parakeets
Reverie of jellied chartreuse and lime
Sun rays dripping upon me like slime
The day coiled around me
A serpentine mirage
Of jungles of neon
Lemongrass and topaz
Cellulose encased
In mossy illusions
Mildewed sun casting
Rainbows unseen
Lichens abound as
Emerald foliage surrounds
...
#forest
#trees
#sun #travel
#sun #travel
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djmarciniak26
Poem Published
14th Sep 2021 11:34am
14th Sep 2021 11:34am
Stop
Stop living in the world
of good and evil, right or
wrong. Black & White.
It's not real, only an illusion-
Just breath, in and out,
look around you. See without
labels, see what a thing is-
right now in this moment.
The whole world wants
to show you something.
Stop. Look. Listen.
of good and evil, right or
wrong. Black & White.
It's not real, only an illusion-
Just breath, in and out,
look around you. See without
labels, see what a thing is-
right now in this moment.
The whole world wants
to show you something.
Stop. Look. Listen.
#sun
#universe
#stars
#astronomy
#aliens
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buddhakitty
Poem Published
3rd Sep 2021 11:49pm
3rd Sep 2021 11:49pm
a real love story
today,
I laid in a
field
and let
the sun
touch
me,
caress
me
everywhere,
make me
his
paramore.
holding
me in
his arms,
whispering
sweetly in
my ear until
I was breathless:
I love
you,
I love
you,
I
love
you.
then warm,
satisfied,
I slept,
my soul
couldn't
cum
anymore.
I laid in a
field
and let
the sun
touch
me,
caress
me
everywhere,
make me
his
paramore.
holding
me in
his arms,
whispering
sweetly in
my ear until
I was breathless:
I love
you,
I love
you,
I
love
you.
then warm,
satisfied,
I slept,
my soul
couldn't
cum
anymore.
#love
#kindness
#sun
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xXPaRADoXx
Poem Published
25th Aug 2021 4:13am
25th Aug 2021 4:13am
Sun and Moon.
Remember when your youth beckoned you to explore uncharted waters,
When time had no meaning and the future was limitless,
You had it all, and you knew nothing really mattered…
Pleasure was paramount and the sun and moon were your masters,
The games we played the chances we took, never looking back…
The sun and moon had other plans for your destiny, they plotted to take their time and wait…
And you in all your glory sailing on the sea of recklessness, floating on the ocean of oblivion, you never knew…
The lovers of oblivion were the children of God,...
When time had no meaning and the future was limitless,
You had it all, and you knew nothing really mattered…
Pleasure was paramount and the sun and moon were your masters,
The games we played the chances we took, never looking back…
The sun and moon had other plans for your destiny, they plotted to take their time and wait…
And you in all your glory sailing on the sea of recklessness, floating on the ocean of oblivion, you never knew…
The lovers of oblivion were the children of God,...
#teens
#death
#sun
#moon
#LifeCycle
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Cipher_O
Poem Published
21st Aug 2021 12:17pm
21st Aug 2021 12:17pm
Shadows
Whispers of champaign -
pain is a sham.
Light is born in the background,
surfacing like ideas -
for masterpieces.
Scintillating stars
holding hands
in the mind
like the last day on Earth.
Let me dream once more
in the remembrance
of your face -
Held in the hollow
of my soul.
I have upheld myself -
against so many dawns,
falling in feathers -
into ink black velvet,
yearning for purity -
thus, I have become purely
Shadows.
pain is a sham.
Light is born in the background,
surfacing like ideas -
for masterpieces.
Scintillating stars
holding hands
in the mind
like the last day on Earth.
Let me dream once more
in the remembrance
of your face -
Held in the hollow
of my soul.
I have upheld myself -
against so many dawns,
falling in feathers -
into ink black velvet,
yearning for purity -
thus, I have become purely
Shadows.
#sun
#universe
#confessional #WritingPoetry
#confessional #WritingPoetry
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Taurek
Poem Published
12th Aug 2021 3:05am
12th Aug 2021 3:05am
8:06pm
Beasts tearing you apart after
years of abuse
I just had a three hour
lunch with a friend whose
buddy just wrapped a
film with Brad Pitt and
Margot Robbie
don’t ever look at the sun
rats on your lap
perhaps we’ll meet in
the afterlife
8:47pm
glitch in the matrix
Freddy at your door,
another obtuse angle
pudgy felons failing
the simulation was the
only thing that made
sense
this is art, you don’t
apologize for
shit, boyo ...
years of abuse
I just had a three hour
lunch with a friend whose
buddy just wrapped a
film with Brad Pitt and
Margot Robbie
don’t ever look at the sun
rats on your lap
perhaps we’ll meet in
the afterlife
8:47pm
glitch in the matrix
Freddy at your door,
another obtuse angle
pudgy felons failing
the simulation was the
only thing that made
sense
this is art, you don’t
apologize for
shit, boyo ...
#abuse
#death
#sun
#PopCulture
#art
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Beukez
Poem Published
5th Aug 2021 1:27pm
5th Aug 2021 1:27pm
Kill this pain
Doctor doctor, you've got to got to help me kill this pain
Cause the shadow of yesterday still keeps me in the dark today
Cant get these pill down my throat, chocking on these suicidal thoughts,
Tomorrow wont have a sunrise, cause I'm sick of the day, cause I try but I still cant find my way.
Can some one explain, can someone listen, can someone show me what I've been missing
Down and out for so long, no matter where I go I don't belong,
This world so big there must be some space where i can hang by myself
I been whispering but I...
Cause the shadow of yesterday still keeps me in the dark today
Cant get these pill down my throat, chocking on these suicidal thoughts,
Tomorrow wont have a sunrise, cause I'm sick of the day, cause I try but I still cant find my way.
Can some one explain, can someone listen, can someone show me what I've been missing
Down and out for so long, no matter where I go I don't belong,
This world so big there must be some space where i can hang by myself
I been whispering but I...
#dark
#death
#sun #frustration
#sun #frustration
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Cipher_O
Poem Published
4th Aug 2021 9:55am
4th Aug 2021 9:55am
Cyclical
One state pursues another state.
You are always yourself.
Delicate finger tips, tactile,
In caresses like the edges of butterfly wings.
Behind your eyes is beauty, always.
A spirit in formations of breezes
The color of bliss, a divine contrast
To all of this, world in grotesque.
From place to place – Your foot prints
Have grace, in every phase of every place,
As the world knows how to heal itself
In your essence, sprung forth in butterflies.
A marvel is a voice that inspires longing.
Soothsaying spells that...
You are always yourself.
Delicate finger tips, tactile,
In caresses like the edges of butterfly wings.
Behind your eyes is beauty, always.
A spirit in formations of breezes
The color of bliss, a divine contrast
To all of this, world in grotesque.
From place to place – Your foot prints
Have grace, in every phase of every place,
As the world knows how to heal itself
In your essence, sprung forth in butterflies.
A marvel is a voice that inspires longing.
Soothsaying spells that...
#sun
#moon
#stars
#shadows
#evolution
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