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Untitled XXIV
I didn’t think I’d post
thoughts on your chest
when my head found
the perfect groove.
Words expand
and compress,
floating haphazardly
through the vine
and thicket.
You capture radiance
as fireflies bound
in glass encasement.
Beauty describes every
syllable, breathing into
existence a force of love.
This is how we fall into parallels,
minds joining, hearts bleeding,
love, eternal.
thoughts on your chest
when my head found
the perfect groove.
Words expand
and compress,
floating haphazardly
through the vine
and thicket.
You capture radiance
as fireflies bound
in glass encasement.
Beauty describes every
syllable, breathing into
existence a force of love.
This is how we fall into parallels,
minds joining, hearts bleeding,
love, eternal.
Published 25th Apr 2023
Author's Note
24/30
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25th Apr 2023 6:06pm
25th Apr 2023 11:16pm
26th Apr 2023 10:01am
Dear E,
Exquisite. I really enjoyed the imagery in my mind. I was reciting this in my very uncomfortable 19th century fashion ensemble, as I traversed the wooded path behind my landed gentry estate. 👸🏻 Lovely write. H🌷
Exquisite. I really enjoyed the imagery in my mind. I was reciting this in my very uncomfortable 19th century fashion ensemble, as I traversed the wooded path behind my landed gentry estate. 👸🏻 Lovely write. H🌷
28th Apr 2023 00:40am
LOL gurrll...that's my era. I was born into the wrong time.
I'm glad you like this one. I don't write love poems often, but
I kinda like this one.
Thanks!
I'm glad you like this one. I don't write love poems often, but
I kinda like this one.
Thanks!
27th Apr 2023 1:08am
You rarely see eloquence counterpointed by a feeling of intimacy in such rare marriage as here. It's beautifully struck and proportional.
28th Apr 2023 00:43am
Thank you for this, Daniel. As I was telling Honoria, I don't write love poems all that often. Maybe I should practice more. Be an interesting change from my usual doom and gloom.
4th May 2023 5:32pm
Hoi hoi
Don’t know what 24/40 means.
Looks like a lot like old English cars to me.
Anyway. Love your write.
Kind regards, Gus
Don’t know what 24/40 means.
Looks like a lot like old English cars to me.
Anyway. Love your write.
Kind regards, Gus
5th May 2023 5:26pm
Thank you for coming by and leaving a lovely comment.
P.s. the 24/30 denotes the 24th poem written during NaPoWriMo in April. It’s 30 poems in 30 days :)
P.s. the 24/30 denotes the 24th poem written during NaPoWriMo in April. It’s 30 poems in 30 days :)
6th May 2023 7:50am
Hoi hoi
Now I see.
Wolsey used to have weird type names/numbers. Maybe that’s why Wolsey Titaniced and DUP is still around.
I have to give some attention to this Mo thing.
Thank you for drawing my attention to it.
Kind regards, Gus
Now I see.
Wolsey used to have weird type names/numbers. Maybe that’s why Wolsey Titaniced and DUP is still around.
I have to give some attention to this Mo thing.
Thank you for drawing my attention to it.
Kind regards, Gus
5th May 2023 3:54am
yk when you read something absolutely fucking brilliant and wish you'd written it first?
yeah, this is that moment for me.
the first stanza just grabbed me by the throat and reeled me right in.
absolutely gorgeously written
yeah, this is that moment for me.
the first stanza just grabbed me by the throat and reeled me right in.
absolutely gorgeously written
5th May 2023 5:30pm
I do in fact know all about that pesky “wish I’d thought of writing that”! Lol
Im glad you liked this. Lovey dovey is not my forte, but sometimes one sneaks out.
Thank for the RL as well! That’s a true honor.
P.s. I’m happy to see your beautiful face on site and I hope you are doing well 🩶
Im glad you liked this. Lovey dovey is not my forte, but sometimes one sneaks out.
Thank for the RL as well! That’s a true honor.
P.s. I’m happy to see your beautiful face on site and I hope you are doing well 🩶
6th May 2023 00:08am
Love is the the most unpredictable, most beautiful animal that will ever stalk our lives.
Super well done.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
Super well done.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
23rd Jun 2023 8:15pm
Those last two stanzas really capture something very powerful and ethereal.
Wonderful work.
Wonderful work.
28th Aug 2023 4:49pm
Absolutely beautiful.
Every word, every syllable
climbing perfectly along the vines of your verses
Every word, every syllable
climbing perfectly along the vines of your verses
