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Wantł
(i)
what i want
is your face
so known
in front of me
sweet warm breath
a captured sigh
briefly held
as your lips— come home
(ii)
what i want
to say
every moment i can spare,
is yes
a renege of all of my previous no's
a welcoming
from marred self imposed woes
yes
is all we need
a yes, freed
(iii)
what i want
is that day
when you are no longer
so far away
i would begin
skin to skin
then
nose to toes
(and all the places in between)
a kiss
for every minute
every mile
and every time
i closed my eyes
......and kissed
a wish
you were mine
Author's Note
simple little thoughts rolling around,
perhaps a tinge corny.... ;)
©Blu2021
perhaps a tinge corny.... ;)
©Blu2021
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Anonymous
- Edited 10th Feb 2022 2:45pm
23rd Jan 2022 2:20am
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Re: Re. Wantł
It's sometimes within those littlest dreams that I find my most impactful and meaningful desires. Ones that shape and mold my deepest happiness. They do say, it's the littlest things that really matter... In my opinion, it is. Within that "yes" is where lives can be made to feel fully whole...
Your comments are spot on and I deeply feel your heartfelt sentiments, dear Selina.
I'm so wonderfully appreciative, thank you for sharing with me and for all your loveliness....
Returned love and warmth... ✨
🌹-💙
B
xo
Your comments are spot on and I deeply feel your heartfelt sentiments, dear Selina.
I'm so wonderfully appreciative, thank you for sharing with me and for all your loveliness....
Returned love and warmth... ✨
🌹-💙
B
xo
Anonymous
- Edited 10th Feb 2022 2:45pm
23rd Jan 2022 3:26pm
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Re. Wantł
The simple is life is cool. Your kiss is worth more than gold. I 'm listening to I 'll Make Love to you by Boyz Ii Men. Keep on writing.
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Re: Re. Wantł
23rd Jan 2022 1:01pm
Thank you for sharing your thoughts and the extremely kind words, Francisco.
I'm very appreciative 🙏🏻
🌹 - B
I'm very appreciative 🙏🏻
🌹 - B
Anonymous
- Edited 6th Dec 2022 00:45am
23rd Jan 2022 3:18am
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Re: Re. Wantł
23rd Jan 2022 1:08pm
Hey there Tim,
I'm so glad you enjoyed reading and found a bit of sensual delight, how cool is that!?!... I've learned that responses aren't something I can speculate on... I'm notoriously hard on myself, so I'm overjoyed and beyond appreciative at each and every point of contact. I hope perceived corniness is indeed connection making! .... lmao...
Thank you for such kindness, my friend 🙏🏻
I am terrifically grateful
🌹 - 💙
B
I'm so glad you enjoyed reading and found a bit of sensual delight, how cool is that!?!... I've learned that responses aren't something I can speculate on... I'm notoriously hard on myself, so I'm overjoyed and beyond appreciative at each and every point of contact. I hope perceived corniness is indeed connection making! .... lmao...
Thank you for such kindness, my friend 🙏🏻
I am terrifically grateful
🌹 - 💙
B
Re. Wantł
23rd Jan 2022 3:19am
Our voices join in a perfect duet as we sing the same notes, take the same pauses, and move from toes to nose; our dream place. How amazing is the poem. I.....Hugs and kisse,,,(o)-(o)
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Re: Re. Wantł
23rd Jan 2022 3:34am
I did use your catch phrase..... it stuck in my craw!!
Thank you for reading and for your lovely, kind sentiments. You leave me beaming....
🌹 - 💙
B
Thank you for reading and for your lovely, kind sentiments. You leave me beaming....
🌹 - 💙
B
Re. Wantł
23rd Jan 2022 6:21am
Go, so many times in life I wished those exact thoughts.
We always here that there is that one special person out there for us, I'm not sure that's true.
There were several people out there whom I thought that was the right person.. But how can that be if they are already spoken for.
My befuddled mind is telling me to stop writing as I'm half asleep In bed..
Lovely poem dear Blue
Loce n peace
💜💜💜💜
We always here that there is that one special person out there for us, I'm not sure that's true.
There were several people out there whom I thought that was the right person.. But how can that be if they are already spoken for.
My befuddled mind is telling me to stop writing as I'm half asleep In bed..
Lovely poem dear Blue
Loce n peace
💜💜💜💜
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Re: Re. Wantł
Hey there, L!
You're a truly amazing brightness 🔆 that I continue to be so grateful and happy to connect and exchange ideas with. I can't thank you enough for your continued support in readership and for you taking the time to leave me your thoughts and insights. Like I've said previously, it truly helps me become a better writer and I believe a more intuitive human being. 🙏🏻
There's potential for 'perfect' in several different meanings or versions, that make happiness what is paramount, in my opinion. It's not based on one person (although I do still believe in that, I'm just not centered on it as the be all end all and only way to find true happiness) finding one other person in the spoonfed movie "happily ever after" scenario we've all been taught.... If that makes sense. Happiness has layers and varied motivations. My little poem is about those corny moments of unabashed joy that I tried to capture... an attempt to, anyway! ... lol..
Thanks so much for seeing the potential loveliness, here...
Very much obliged, my friend!
🌹-💙
B
You're a truly amazing brightness 🔆 that I continue to be so grateful and happy to connect and exchange ideas with. I can't thank you enough for your continued support in readership and for you taking the time to leave me your thoughts and insights. Like I've said previously, it truly helps me become a better writer and I believe a more intuitive human being. 🙏🏻
There's potential for 'perfect' in several different meanings or versions, that make happiness what is paramount, in my opinion. It's not based on one person (although I do still believe in that, I'm just not centered on it as the be all end all and only way to find true happiness) finding one other person in the spoonfed movie "happily ever after" scenario we've all been taught.... If that makes sense. Happiness has layers and varied motivations. My little poem is about those corny moments of unabashed joy that I tried to capture... an attempt to, anyway! ... lol..
Thanks so much for seeing the potential loveliness, here...
Very much obliged, my friend!
🌹-💙
B
Re. Wantł
23rd Jan 2022 6:32am
Re: Re. Wantł
23rd Jan 2022 1:11pm
Ahhhh, so succinctly put!! 👌🏻
Ohh Lawrence, didn't you just really sum it up perfectly while being totally endearing!! Easing my heart and mind that I'm not as dorky as I had pictured.... lol 😂...
All my warmest thanks, dear poet 🙏🏻
🌹 - 🌽
xo
B
Ohh Lawrence, didn't you just really sum it up perfectly while being totally endearing!! Easing my heart and mind that I'm not as dorky as I had pictured.... lol 😂...
All my warmest thanks, dear poet 🙏🏻
🌹 - 🌽
xo
B
Re. Wantł
23rd Jan 2022 7:02am
to
know your
heartbeat
each
pitter patter
next to mine
know your
language
of sighs
the warmth
of a
cuddle
know
yourtrue
heart
through
those little
whispers
love notes
pinned
to the fridge
remindees
that every
day is ours
know
your skin
in sleep
our heat
battling
the cold
discover
our new
favourite songs
while
cooking up
a storm
know
the
mundane
not just
heated
passions
know lips
that kias
love
at svery
oppertunity
a good morning
an off to work
a home coming
a good night
little kisses
that say it all
know your
heartbeat
each
pitter patter
next to mine
know your
language
of sighs
the warmth
of a
cuddle
know
yourtrue
heart
through
those little
whispers
love notes
pinned
to the fridge
remindees
that every
day is ours
know
your skin
in sleep
our heat
battling
the cold
discover
our new
favourite songs
while
cooking up
a storm
know
the
mundane
not just
heated
passions
know lips
that kias
love
at svery
oppertunity
a good morning
an off to work
a home coming
a good night
little kisses
that say it all
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Re: Re. Wantł
23rd Jan 2022 1:20pm
Your summations of "the littlest things" are truly beautiful in all it's absolute longed for truth of action. It's a gloriously dream that I do enjoy basking within.... I definitely think that it's easier to say than do... I know from experience that maintaining the joy, allowing it to transfer into a continuous happy reality, is hard shared work.... where commitment is paramount....
I have read this repeatedly and love the hope it instills, dear C... thank you for the reminder and for all the extraordinary kindness and encouragements you bestow...
🌹 - 💙
B
I have read this repeatedly and love the hope it instills, dear C... thank you for the reminder and for all the extraordinary kindness and encouragements you bestow...
🌹 - 💙
B
Re. Wantł
23rd Jan 2022 8:19am
OMG girl this is so lovely,melted my old icy heart, absolutely lived this
Love and light
Ron x
Love and light
Ron x
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Re: Re. Wantł
23rd Jan 2022 1:38pm
I adore bringing you close to my hearth, melting hearts and thawing emotions.... 🔥
Thank you for sharing your thoughts, I'm delighted you enjoyed yourself reading.
🌹-💙 - ⚔️
xoxo
B
Thank you for sharing your thoughts, I'm delighted you enjoyed yourself reading.
🌹-💙 - ⚔️
xoxo
B
Re. Wantł
23rd Jan 2022 8:54am
When planting bulbs, bunches of 3 look more appealing. It's enough for a small crowd.
"I LOVE YOU," are 3 powerful words.
One plus one can be equal to 3.
As a freshman, you have just 3 years to go.
Most people have a first memory back when they were 3.
3 strikes and you're out.
Count yourself lucky, many importantly experienced events come in threes.
"I LOVE YOU," are 3 powerful words.
One plus one can be equal to 3.
As a freshman, you have just 3 years to go.
Most people have a first memory back when they were 3.
3 strikes and you're out.
Count yourself lucky, many importantly experienced events come in threes.
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Re: Re. Wantł
I treasure (and have missed) the way you cleverly allow me to see things that I might have been too oblivious to appreciate, in the moment.
My admiration for you and your words travel to places deep inside me; where it colors my perspectives, my thoughts in glowing lighted hues.... a kaleidoscopic consciousness.... It's a beautiful inadvertent education.... and I wholeheartedly thank you for sharing with me. I hope it to continue.... ✨
🌹 - 🌈
B
My admiration for you and your words travel to places deep inside me; where it colors my perspectives, my thoughts in glowing lighted hues.... a kaleidoscopic consciousness.... It's a beautiful inadvertent education.... and I wholeheartedly thank you for sharing with me. I hope it to continue.... ✨
🌹 - 🌈
B
Re. Wantł
23rd Jan 2022 9:22pm
Re: Re. Wantł
24th Jan 2022 3:36am
Re. Wantł
23rd Jan 2022 11:00pm
Dear, Lady Blue
Mmmmmm..."sweet warm breath" is such a sensual, romantic passage that I can feel. And "As your lips come home" just creates such a beautiful stir in my tummy 💞💞 So much beauty to mention in this piece. Bravissima bonita conejita❣🌹🐻💞🐰
Mmmmmm..."sweet warm breath" is such a sensual, romantic passage that I can feel. And "As your lips come home" just creates such a beautiful stir in my tummy 💞💞 So much beauty to mention in this piece. Bravissima bonita conejita❣🌹🐻💞🐰
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Re: Re. Wantł
I love seeing you, BB! 🐻💋🐰and I'm so glad you you could see beauty throughout this piece. I couldn't ask for more wonderful sentiments, I'm truly grateful...
It's always a pleasure my dear friend 🙏🏻
Much love,
🌹 - B
It's always a pleasure my dear friend 🙏🏻
Much love,
🌹 - B
Re. Wantł
24th Jan 2022 8:06pm
This is good in all the right places! How long did it take you to polish the words, I wonder, getting to that final version? The reason I enquire is that I've just been watching The Beatles 'Get Back' documentary on the Disney channel, which shows the group rehearsing & strumming through a lot of incomplete tracks. One of them was an embryonic version of 'Something' by George Harrision. Anyway, in this early version, he had the line, 'Attracts me like a moth to a flame'. I think Ringo then says how about, Attracts me like a Pomegranate?' Lol. Lennon said, 'Like a cauliflower?' As you know, luckily, Harrison eventually came up with, 'Attracts me like no other lover.' In your poem, if I'd written the opening lines, it may have started out like, 'What I want
is to sit on your face.' Lol. Lucky I didn't write it, I guess. 😉
is to sit on your face.' Lol. Lucky I didn't write it, I guess. 😉
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Re: Re. Wantł
lol.... Thanks for taking the time to read my work and for the deep dive into pondering the way you did. That's a meaningful response and I'm glad it took your mind to a joyous place. Leaving those thoughts you described with me is definitely something I value and appreciate.
Be well and be safe,
🌹 - B
Be well and be safe,
🌹 - B
Re. Wantł
25th Jan 2022 1:34pm
Very clever title. :)))
(Expanded into the structure.)
The repetition really worked well for the movement.
And within the movement, I like how you displayed your thought process.
Well placed innuendo. Aptly chosen for the general energy of the piece.
I just really like the last stanza into the closing.
Really explores the atmosphere of the heart.
That is difficult to do.
Nicely done B.
(Expanded into the structure.)
The repetition really worked well for the movement.
And within the movement, I like how you displayed your thought process.
Well placed innuendo. Aptly chosen for the general energy of the piece.
I just really like the last stanza into the closing.
Really explores the atmosphere of the heart.
That is difficult to do.
Nicely done B.
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Re: Re. Wantł
25th Jan 2022 8:31pm
Thanks for the peek into my inner workings, dear Cipher!
I deeply appreciate your warm and positive thoughts, the feedback you give me always motivates, which is such a wonderful feeling.
To see you upon my page is an nstant smile!
Much love, my friend 🙏🏻
🌹 - 💙
B
I deeply appreciate your warm and positive thoughts, the feedback you give me always motivates, which is such a wonderful feeling.
To see you upon my page is an nstant smile!
Much love, my friend 🙏🏻
🌹 - 💙
B
Re. Wantł
25th Jan 2022 3:02pm
Delightful blend of authenticity and innocence... not corny at all... love the flow... the disarming beauty of this... bravo B...
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Re: Re. Wantł
25th Jan 2022 8:14pm
Awww... Your kind words of encouraging support really mean so much to me, S. I'm sincerely grateful and so pleased you enjoyed reading.
Thank you - 💙
🌹 x
Thank you - 💙
🌹 x
Re. Wantł
25th Jan 2022 5:09pm
What a wish to come true! Simple and easy approach for life full of joy. I feel the same way that love comes quietly and wraps around and forget and forgive all the past. To give a fresh start.
Love,
KS
Love,
KS
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Re: Re. Wantł
25th Jan 2022 8:06pm
Hey there, KS, :)
Thanks so much for seeing a sense of renewal or just simple enjoyment within my writing. I greatly appreciate you visiting and taking the time to leave me your thoughtful insights.
It's a joy ✨
🌹 - 💙
B
Thanks so much for seeing a sense of renewal or just simple enjoyment within my writing. I greatly appreciate you visiting and taking the time to leave me your thoughtful insights.
It's a joy ✨
🌹 - 💙
B
Re. Wantł
26th Jan 2022 3:34am
This write of yours is definitely not corny! It's too maturely seductive, for one thing.
It isn't fluffy, thank god. It's pretty much what every person wants to hear (read) from someone that they're interested in, and such. It's an affirmation of adult feelings for someone, but crafted in a way that shows the value of what they are getting.
Excellent write and truly pleasurable to read.
Love it!
It isn't fluffy, thank god. It's pretty much what every person wants to hear (read) from someone that they're interested in, and such. It's an affirmation of adult feelings for someone, but crafted in a way that shows the value of what they are getting.
Excellent write and truly pleasurable to read.
Love it!
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Re: Re. Wantł
26th Jan 2022 5:45am
S,
For me, it's a bit difficult to express something deeply meaningful in a decisive and minimalistic manner, like I hoped I did here. I have come to really enjoy attempting different styles and formats, to keep myself constantly learning new things; hopefully improving and not rehashing the same sort of theme and structure, over and over.
To soak in all that I can and learn as much as possible 🙆🏻♀️....Which is why I change up my poetry as often as I do.
That all being said, you see how I still question myself, I'm getting better every day but I'm a work in progress. Where your comments, uplift, motivate and make me feel like all that trial and error of my personal 'learning curve' has actually made some difference.... Man, that feels incredible!
I sincerely thank you for finding pleasure within my writing.... you make a difference, my friend 🙏🏻
Much love, dear poet
🌹 B
x
For me, it's a bit difficult to express something deeply meaningful in a decisive and minimalistic manner, like I hoped I did here. I have come to really enjoy attempting different styles and formats, to keep myself constantly learning new things; hopefully improving and not rehashing the same sort of theme and structure, over and over.
To soak in all that I can and learn as much as possible 🙆🏻♀️....Which is why I change up my poetry as often as I do.
That all being said, you see how I still question myself, I'm getting better every day but I'm a work in progress. Where your comments, uplift, motivate and make me feel like all that trial and error of my personal 'learning curve' has actually made some difference.... Man, that feels incredible!
I sincerely thank you for finding pleasure within my writing.... you make a difference, my friend 🙏🏻
Much love, dear poet
🌹 B
x
Re: Re. Wantł
27th Jan 2022 4:31pm
Awww... that's a great compliment and I deeply appreciate that you think so. Thanks a ton.
🌹 - x
🌹 - x
Re. Wantł
Sweet, beautiful expression of desire.
This has an exciting yet soothing feel.
❣️🙏🏼
p.s. I love the mathmatical reference in the title. It reflects the multidimensionality of your writing.
🤠
This has an exciting yet soothing feel.
❣️🙏🏼
p.s. I love the mathmatical reference in the title. It reflects the multidimensionality of your writing.
🤠
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Re: Re. Wantł
27th Jan 2022 4:35pm
Between exciting and soothing is a tremendously lush and heady place to bask within.... thanks for reading and leaving your thoughts, KP....
I am grateful you enjoyed....
I utterly adore you visiting.
(sincerely)
🌹 - 💙
B
I am grateful you enjoyed....
I utterly adore you visiting.
(sincerely)
🌹 - 💙
B
Re. Wantł
29th Jan 2022 1:56pm
That simple goes a long way and says so much more at times. Beautiful write.
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Re: Re. Wantł
30th Jan 2022 6:59pm
Agreed, CS.
It warms my heart that found this beautiful.
All my heartfelt appreciation.
🌹 - 💙
xo
It warms my heart that found this beautiful.
All my heartfelt appreciation.
🌹 - 💙
xo
Re. Wantł
31st Jan 2022 10:55pm
A very warm and pleasant feeling. Your words evoke Love. And we all need that. When the world seems to be getting madder every day.
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Re: Re. Wantł
1st Feb 2022 5:36am
I appreciate your thoughtful and generous comments, James. Simple kindness across the board, is seemingly in short supply, too....So I cherish it when I find it (thank you) and I do my best to exude it....
Very much obliged, my friend
Be well and be safe out there-🌹
—B
Very much obliged, my friend
Be well and be safe out there-🌹
—B
Re. Wantł
2nd Mar 2022 4:03pm
Rich and soulful. The basic human want and need, love and lust, perfectly balanced looking forward toward that moment of coming together.
Wonderful spill Blue.
Wonderful spill Blue.
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Re: Re. Wantł
2nd Mar 2022 5:39pm
Much appreciated, Walter.
I'm glad you enjoyed this piece and found a bit of soulfulness here.. I had forgotten this one, so it's nice to have be reminded.
Thank you for sharing your thoughts with me!
I hope you are doing well :)
🌹 - B
I'm glad you enjoyed this piece and found a bit of soulfulness here.. I had forgotten this one, so it's nice to have be reminded.
Thank you for sharing your thoughts with me!
I hope you are doing well :)
🌹 - B