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tonight, this night
unremitting
as minutes stretch
into oceans
of unkempt time
silence
O' how heavy
that stillness weighs
clarity takes shape
in darkest quietude
tender breathing
in and out
is a metronome
of my wistful cadence
keeping time
with every lost heartbeat
this routine
a surrender in hushed nothings
where loneliness
dwells and skulks
a sort of comfort
in melancholic repetitions
mesmerized by my
inner choral
purging a treacherous hymn
a song
of incalculable
sorrow
trying to reconcile
to make
some sense
of my willing sacrifice of self
my poisonous plume
that rises and drifts
will dissolve under
songs of sunshine
and purest grace of truth
as this
is
my open heart
and it sings of
honesty—
always
Author's Note
you.
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18th Apr 2021 12:44pm
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Awww, C
You are positively radiant in that very very correct statement. I know that... I get it. I wish that everyone would, too.
My heart is always going to be aok with you in my corner... Ty for sharing your thoughts with me, I really needed to hear them. I thank you for the generous list add as well. 🙏🏻
Your support is.... well, it's everything!
Much love -
🌹 💜 🌹 💜 🌹
xoxo
-S
You are positively radiant in that very very correct statement. I know that... I get it. I wish that everyone would, too.
My heart is always going to be aok with you in my corner... Ty for sharing your thoughts with me, I really needed to hear them. I thank you for the generous list add as well. 🙏🏻
Your support is.... well, it's everything!
Much love -
🌹 💜 🌹 💜 🌹
xoxo
-S
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18th Apr 2021 1:48pm
Writing is good use of a lonely night.
"...where loneliness dwells and skulks, a sort of comfort in melancholic repetitions..."
You turn a beautiful phrase, B.
This is great.
"...where loneliness dwells and skulks, a sort of comfort in melancholic repetitions..."
You turn a beautiful phrase, B.
This is great.
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19th Apr 2021 00:57am
I agree with lonely night writing, Jav! 100%.
An extremely humble thank you for your very much appreciated compliment and thoughtful kindness.
I am so grateful and it's always such a pleasure to have you visit 🙏🏻
Much love and respect,
🌹
- B
x
An extremely humble thank you for your very much appreciated compliment and thoughtful kindness.
I am so grateful and it's always such a pleasure to have you visit 🙏🏻
Much love and respect,
🌹
- B
x
Anonymous
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18th Apr 2021 2:01pm
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19th Apr 2021 1:02am
I am on my way to find that peace you spoke of,PQ. I thank you for that particular sentiment and all your thoughtfulness. It's my pleasure to have you visit and leave your insights, truly.
Thank you again for your time, the list add and all your lovely support. I feel lucky to have had made your acquaintance.
Be well and don't be a stranger, my friend. :)
Warmest regards,
🌹
-B
Thank you again for your time, the list add and all your lovely support. I feel lucky to have had made your acquaintance.
Be well and don't be a stranger, my friend. :)
Warmest regards,
🌹
-B
Anonymous
- Edited 23rd Nov 2024 2:46am
19th Apr 2021 1:59am
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18th Apr 2021 2:21pm
I relate to this poem, The aloneness can be tremendous at times:) and that you are able to express this through words, thats talent. B.
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19th Apr 2021 1:07am
My friend! I Your opinion means so much to me, Grace, I thank you from the bottom of my heart for your kind remarks. My kindred ache swells with your understanding of aloneness
(hugs, hugs, hugs) I am so very lucky to be able to call you friend.
Much love and respect,
🌹
x
(hugs, hugs, hugs) I am so very lucky to be able to call you friend.
Much love and respect,
🌹
x
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18th Apr 2021 2:30pm
neatly, you so express
with such grace that your words possess
stanza after stanza
your message you deliver , always spot on
as always, it is about your read
your gift, a glistening charm
with such grace that your words possess
stanza after stanza
your message you deliver , always spot on
as always, it is about your read
your gift, a glistening charm
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19th Apr 2021 1:12am
My lovely MS... I have missed your beautifully stated thoughts upon my page. It's you and your motivational 'push' that I smile so wide at receiving. I cannot begin to correctly describe that worth, in my eyes. If I glisten, it's because it's a reflection of how you see me.
Oh how I thank you for that
Much love,
🌹
-B
x
Oh how I thank you for that
Much love,
🌹
-B
x
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18th Apr 2021 5:34pm
Your poetry never fails to amaze me, you truly are so talented. I love your work.
Awesome work beautiful
Love and light
Ron xx
Awesome work beautiful
Love and light
Ron xx
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Your support and encouragement never fail to amaze me, my bravest knight!!
It's one of the reasons that I continue to stay; having fought through several different times of thinking that I might leave— me knowing you're here and always on my side reminding me of my goodness, when I need it the very most.
You have my deepest gratitude. 🙏🏻
All my love and respect,
🌹
xoxo
-S
It's one of the reasons that I continue to stay; having fought through several different times of thinking that I might leave— me knowing you're here and always on my side reminding me of my goodness, when I need it the very most.
You have my deepest gratitude. 🙏🏻
All my love and respect,
🌹
xoxo
-S
Anonymous
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18th Apr 2021 8:03pm
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I'm not quite sure I'm to that extent.... but I certainly understand what you're saying. It's a difficult situation if you're not necessarily wanting to be alone ... It's definitely not the end of the world but I will continue onward and upward—with a wind of hope at my back...
I appreciate you and all your support, Tim
Much respect,
🌹
-B
(love the shark 🦈!)
I appreciate you and all your support, Tim
Much respect,
🌹
-B
(love the shark 🦈!)
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18th Apr 2021 8:39pm
Oh dear, Lady Blue, the silken, hushed flow of this piece is so captivating. After the first splendidly woven, brilliant stanza, I read what remained with great reverance...feeling deeply each word placed by your heart in divine order. A triumph of vulnerabolity and unvarnished honesty. Bravissima Goddess Susan🐻💞🐰
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19th Apr 2021 1:44am
You are positively eloquent in the extreme kindness you show me, BB. I was in a weirdly vulnerable place, writing this, so I'm not surprised you picked up on that feeling. Writing what I know, really for me, is writing what I feel. I am so grateful that you felt my intentions. My hopes are it wasn't to whiny.... lol... I wholeheartedly appreciate the list add, and the encouragement you show me, my friend. 🙏🏻
I am more than lucky, I'm blessed to have you as my friend....
Much love and endless amounts of respect... and then some....
Your BB, too!
🐻 🌹🐰
xoxo
-S
I am more than lucky, I'm blessed to have you as my friend....
Much love and endless amounts of respect... and then some....
Your BB, too!
🐻 🌹🐰
xoxo
-S
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18th Apr 2021 11:46pm
You gorgeous, gorgeous girl...Is that still allowed? Can I call you girl? Bot being sarcastic, I'm just old.
What a beautiful song to sing to the self. Sometimes harshly subjective, but necessary and honest always.
We have to be kind to those little people we still are in our hearts where all of those torments, slights, catastrophic traumas happened.
Love every poem you write, I swear. You are a gift to this community.
What a beautiful song to sing to the self. Sometimes harshly subjective, but necessary and honest always.
We have to be kind to those little people we still are in our hearts where all of those torments, slights, catastrophic traumas happened.
Love every poem you write, I swear. You are a gift to this community.
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Haha of course... at my age, I'm flattered as hell @ being called "girl".. Yes! You're always able to put such a big smile on my face, Margo! Thank you so much for that. I love your visits and my heart is full with all your thoughtfulness in the comments you've left. Thank you, Thank you!!
You too, make DUP a better and brighter place,
✨ 💫 ✨
All my warmest regards,
🌹
xo
-B
You too, make DUP a better and brighter place,
✨ 💫 ✨
All my warmest regards,
🌹
xo
-B
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19th Apr 2021 7:24am
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19th Apr 2021 7:28am
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20th Apr 2021 3:28am
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20th Apr 2021 3:31am
You're a lovely kind soul.
Ty for sharing your thoughts and the generous list add. All my humble appreciation.. 🙏🏻
🌹
xo
I hope you are doing well, my friend...or at least hanging in there. :)
Ty for sharing your thoughts and the generous list add. All my humble appreciation.. 🙏🏻
🌹
xo
I hope you are doing well, my friend...or at least hanging in there. :)
Anonymous
- Edited 9th Apr 2022 5:45am
20th Apr 2021 6:32am
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20th Apr 2021 6:34am
You're very kind... thanks for reading, James, I'm glad you stopped by and liked a little bit of my yammerings... lol
I'm appreciative 🙏🏻
🌹
x
I'm appreciative 🙏🏻
🌹
x
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20th Apr 2021 4:28pm
Wow ... another stirring write ... the first stanza is poetic platinum (ran out of poetic gold thanks to your poetry) ... "clarity takes shape/in the darkest quietude" ... excellent ... "wistful cadence" ... tickles the ear ... "a surrender in hushed nothings" ... made me pause ... linger ... reconsider ... "dwells and skulks" ... great sibilance ... "my poisonous plume" ... nice alliteration ... also double entendre ... excellent tantalizing spacing with the closing stanzas ... lets the rest of poem rest ... its meaning linger ... before the powerful authentic closing ...
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20th Apr 2021 6:28pm
My heart kinda fluttered at reading your feedback.... Oh my!!(I giggled at the platinum... 🤭)
My day was complete shite today at work and the weather... Ugggh!! I went walking /running this morning and I got poured on— like, soaked to the bone! Yeah, THAT t kind of day... So reading this really brightened my mood, exponentially, LilD. I appreciate your comments so very much, the list add and all the specific examples you laid out for me. It really is kind and a valuable learning tool for me. Sometimes I feel like I flounder about, so.
All my gratitude, my lovely friend 🙏🏻
🌹
xo
B
My day was complete shite today at work and the weather... Ugggh!! I went walking /running this morning and I got poured on— like, soaked to the bone! Yeah, THAT t kind of day... So reading this really brightened my mood, exponentially, LilD. I appreciate your comments so very much, the list add and all the specific examples you laid out for me. It really is kind and a valuable learning tool for me. Sometimes I feel like I flounder about, so.
All my gratitude, my lovely friend 🙏🏻
🌹
xo
B
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21st Apr 2021 4:02am
Your open heart tells of all that you are and aspire to be. But ultimately you are who you are for all to know through poetry or talk.. And I love who you are.
Xo
John
Xo
John
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31st May 2021 3:47am
"as minutes stretch
into oceans
of unkempt time" feels abysmal, I can only begin to imagine the infinite sadness.
It's a powerful and beautiful write.
into oceans
of unkempt time" feels abysmal, I can only begin to imagine the infinite sadness.
It's a powerful and beautiful write.
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31st May 2021 4:14am
I appreciate you reading and these thoughts you've left, Walter...
It means so much to me that you take the time you do....
🌹
xo
It means so much to me that you take the time you do....
🌹
xo