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to thine own self (and you) be true.
To find that secret place
'Tis once buried;
O' fathomless profound
thine own storied [mis]fortune
pondering the mere slight.
Perhaps thy burning thoughts
of divinely need?
As once, such burden form and fit
when hidden o'er dawn's dewy hilltops
of grassy blades
that cut
a deepest green
mixed
amongst crimson hue'd;
Hence so dense and heavy marked
here, in all acquired bold,
conjoined by sheer providence, now ours.
Keep chested locked in iron clasp
forever shared betwixt
us two,
we poor dire lovely souls.
To now a harmonious
This love,
ventured gained in gold
Written by
Bluevelvete
Published 23rd Feb 2021
Author's Note
©Blu2021
Missy's Ye Olde English comp
inspired by #21. Uhtceare
This means lying awake worrying before dawn. We all do this, we just didn’t know there was a word for it. Say it now, like this: oot-key-are-a.
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/11790/
Well it's a learning curve, for sure. That's why comps are fun because you can gain experience writing in a way you normally wouldn't, which helps to expand horizons. Imo
This is my early morning worrying and sharing my troubles with my best friend who always helps to shoulder any burdens and vice versa.
Missy's Ye Olde English comp
inspired by #21. Uhtceare
This means lying awake worrying before dawn. We all do this, we just didn’t know there was a word for it. Say it now, like this: oot-key-are-a.
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/11790/
Well it's a learning curve, for sure. That's why comps are fun because you can gain experience writing in a way you normally wouldn't, which helps to expand horizons. Imo
This is my early morning worrying and sharing my troubles with my best friend who always helps to shoulder any burdens and vice versa.
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Re. to thine own self (and you) be true.
23rd Feb 2021 3:20pm
You soar to new heights with each piece
I hang on to your coat tails and enjoy your journey into the stratosphere
Love and light
Ron x
I hang on to your coat tails and enjoy your journey into the stratosphere
Love and light
Ron x
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Re: Re. to thine own self (and you) be true.
23rd Feb 2021 5:28pm
Wow, that's some amazing feedback, Ron!
I'm so thankful for you and I am glad you think that I can soar... his wonderful! I'm so appreciative of the list add and all your kindness 🙏
This was incredibly difficult for me and might be forced a bit but I'm glad you enjoyed it and derived something from it.
Much love from across the pond :)
💜 💜 💜
🌹
xo
I'm so thankful for you and I am glad you think that I can soar... his wonderful! I'm so appreciative of the list add and all your kindness 🙏
This was incredibly difficult for me and might be forced a bit but I'm glad you enjoyed it and derived something from it.
Much love from across the pond :)
💜 💜 💜
🌹
xo
Re. to thine own self (and you) be true.
23rd Feb 2021 3:32pm
Re: Re. to thine own self (and you) be true.
23rd Feb 2021 5:31pm
Good morning, my beautiful friend!
Thank you for such positive feedback, I'm deeply grateful and happy you enjoyed it. I appreciate you reading and your generous list add.. it's such a pleasure to get your visits!
Much love,
🌹 💜 🌹
xoxo
B
Thank you for such positive feedback, I'm deeply grateful and happy you enjoyed it. I appreciate you reading and your generous list add.. it's such a pleasure to get your visits!
Much love,
🌹 💜 🌹
xoxo
B
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Re: Re. to thine own self (and you) be true.
23rd Feb 2021 6:35pm
Your lovely comments are so very cherished and appreciated, RiAN!.. I'm glad you enjoyed reading and I'm a bit blown away that there's even an idea of rereading.. Yay. That notion was day making, for me... lol. I appreciate your generosity in the list add and taking the time to stop by, leaving those beautiful remarks. Ty, my lovely friend
Much love,
🌹
💜
Much love,
🌹
💜
Re. to thine own self (and you) be true.
23rd Feb 2021 5:03pm
Again, you have taken readers, especially myself, to a new place with your masterful use of metaphors and word weaving. I shall reflect on this amazing poem today; there are so many truths and messages. Hug and peace, oral
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Re: Re. to thine own self (and you) be true.
23rd Feb 2021 6:20pm
Thank you for such warm and amazing insights, Oral. I'm a little bit overwhelmed because this piece was challenging for me to write, so your comments really hit home for me.
I'm appreciative of your visit and grateful for the thoughtfulness
Much love,
🌹
xo
I'm appreciative of your visit and grateful for the thoughtfulness
Much love,
🌹
xo
Re: Re. to thine own self (and you) be true.
23rd Feb 2021 7:29pm
My Princess, you make it "easy" to comment on your excellent poems and writings. Face it: YOU ARE GIFTED!! Hugs and peace, oral
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Re. to thine own self (and you) be true.
23rd Feb 2021 7:11pm
I absolutely love this piece. There is something very deep and lovely about classically written poetry. You, dearest Lady Blue, have given me a master class on the style. This is so well written. I think I'll dust off my thee's, thou's, ye's, and yon's and give it a go. This is one of my fav passages,
"conjoined by sheer providence, now ours.
Keep chested locked in iron clasp "
It kinda reminds me of Polonius' advice in Hamlet Act 1, scene 3 where he says,
" Those friends thou hast, and their adoption tried,
Grapple them unto thy soul with hoops of steel"
Bravissima beautiful S❣️❣️
"conjoined by sheer providence, now ours.
Keep chested locked in iron clasp "
It kinda reminds me of Polonius' advice in Hamlet Act 1, scene 3 where he says,
" Those friends thou hast, and their adoption tried,
Grapple them unto thy soul with hoops of steel"
Bravissima beautiful S❣️❣️
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Re: Re. to thine own self (and you) be true.
You have me blushing deepest red, I thought I was having a hot 🔥 flash! hahaha 😂... Ty BB!!
Soooo very much. It's amazing to read that you enjoyed my poem, it's all together heart stopping to know that I've inspired you.... THAT'S the biggest and truly one of the best compliments I've gotten.
I humbly thank you for the list add, those utterly awesome and thoughtful comments and the emotional encouragement. I've been boosted by you BB and I am really grateful, from the bottom of my heart.
Much love and respect,
🌹 💜 🌹
🐻 💋 🐻 💋 🐻 💋 🐻
xoxo
Soooo very much. It's amazing to read that you enjoyed my poem, it's all together heart stopping to know that I've inspired you.... THAT'S the biggest and truly one of the best compliments I've gotten.
I humbly thank you for the list add, those utterly awesome and thoughtful comments and the emotional encouragement. I've been boosted by you BB and I am really grateful, from the bottom of my heart.
Much love and respect,
🌹 💜 🌹
🐻 💋 🐻 💋 🐻 💋 🐻
xoxo
Re: Re. to thine own self (and you) be true.
23rd Feb 2021 7:56pm
*blush* *redder blush* *beet red blush* *I swoon* *briefly passed out* must be the tight corset 🤠🙃❣️❣️
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Re: Re. to thine own self (and you) be true.
Hee hee hee...
I'm still giggling 🤭
bahaha
the tight corset he says ... ;
Lol
I guarantee it's not as tight as mine!😏
doh!!
🌹 🔗
I'm still giggling 🤭
bahaha
the tight corset he says ... ;
Lol
I guarantee it's not as tight as mine!😏
doh!!
🌹 🔗
Re: Re. to thine own self (and you) be true.
23rd Feb 2021 8:27pm
Re. to thine own self (and you) be true.
23rd Feb 2021 7:54pm
Love Love Love , this!!
an English Literature Teacher in High School turned me on to Olde English (She gifted me Her Portable Chaucer - Yes, i still have it!)
Much more wonderful to listen to than the King Jame's English, IMHO
You did an outstanding spill within this genre - aaaaaaaaaaah and mmmmmm :)
an English Literature Teacher in High School turned me on to Olde English (She gifted me Her Portable Chaucer - Yes, i still have it!)
Much more wonderful to listen to than the King Jame's English, IMHO
You did an outstanding spill within this genre - aaaaaaaaaaah and mmmmmm :)
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Re: Re. to thine own self (and you) be true.
Tallen!!
Your lovely light preceeded you as I was just thinking of you and *poof* there was your comment........ it's not
c r a z y!!!???!... I'm so serious!
hahaha ☺
I thank you so much for those gorgeous sentiments. What a great surprise and lovely backstory of your English Lit love.... I'm thrilled you enjoyed my poem, it was a challenge for me so you really have me smiling from ear to ear. I'm extremely grateful for the RL add and you taking the time you do. It means a lot to me.
I reiterate the Mmmmmm!
hahahaha
Much love and respect,
🌹 💜 🌹
xoxo
Susan
Your lovely light preceeded you as I was just thinking of you and *poof* there was your comment........ it's not
c r a z y!!!???!... I'm so serious!
hahaha ☺
I thank you so much for those gorgeous sentiments. What a great surprise and lovely backstory of your English Lit love.... I'm thrilled you enjoyed my poem, it was a challenge for me so you really have me smiling from ear to ear. I'm extremely grateful for the RL add and you taking the time you do. It means a lot to me.
I reiterate the Mmmmmm!
hahahaha
Much love and respect,
🌹 💜 🌹
xoxo
Susan
Re. to thine own self (and you) be true.
24th Feb 2021 00:09am
Re: Re. to thine own self (and you) be true.
24th Feb 2021 00:10am
Re. to thine own self (and you) be true.
24th Feb 2021 1:41am
A woman's love should be worth more than gold. Your love is worth more than gold, remember that. Keep on writing.
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Re: Re. to thine own self (and you) be true.
24th Feb 2021 1:50am
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Re: Re. to thine own self (and you) be true.
25th Feb 2021 2:44am
lol.... adoring fans....
You're far, far, far too kind, rew and made me chuckle. I very much appreciate your lovely kindness and taking the time to leave your thoughts. It's always so valuable to me, truly. I take a little piece all the feedback I receive, internalize it and try to apply, going forward.. so I thank you muchly. I 100% need and enjoy your pennyworth... is my point... I'm so glad you enjoyed reading as well... over the moon, there.
Don't be a stranger ;)
Much love,
🌹 💜 🌹
xoxo
B
You're far, far, far too kind, rew and made me chuckle. I very much appreciate your lovely kindness and taking the time to leave your thoughts. It's always so valuable to me, truly. I take a little piece all the feedback I receive, internalize it and try to apply, going forward.. so I thank you muchly. I 100% need and enjoy your pennyworth... is my point... I'm so glad you enjoyed reading as well... over the moon, there.
Don't be a stranger ;)
Much love,
🌹 💜 🌹
xoxo
B
Re. to thine own self (and you) be true.
24th Feb 2021 10:15pm
You always cross that barrier between words and painting that most us mere mortals rarely do...such true beauty, Blue...true beauty.
🙏 Harry
🙏 Harry
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Re: Re. to thine own self (and you) be true.
25th Feb 2021 2:49am
Ty so much for everything, Harry. 🙏 ... You already know how much your opinion and visits mean to me but I really wanted to stress the point and let you know that you've been such a positive, guiding force on me here and I'm truly appreciative, from the bottom of my heart.
Be well, my friend
🌹 💜 🌹
xoxo
Susan
Be well, my friend
🌹 💜 🌹
xoxo
Susan
Re. to thine own self (and you) be true.
27th Feb 2021 2:54am
Susan thy brilliance doth take on new heights
with ev'ry passage of poetry ink'd from thy magical pen.
Thy poetic excellence is boundless.
I am yet again mesm'riz'd by thy quite quaint v'rse.
Friendship, strength, supp'rt, and loveth penn'd with the lady'r excellence.
I standeth and applaudeth thy mast'rful writing and boweth in hon'r of yet anoth'r bluevelvete mast'rpiece.
Bravo!
...haha, I am such an idiot, lol.
*** I do truly mean every single awkward word that I genuinely tried to express here dear poetess!***
with ev'ry passage of poetry ink'd from thy magical pen.
Thy poetic excellence is boundless.
I am yet again mesm'riz'd by thy quite quaint v'rse.
Friendship, strength, supp'rt, and loveth penn'd with the lady'r excellence.
I standeth and applaudeth thy mast'rful writing and boweth in hon'r of yet anoth'r bluevelvete mast'rpiece.
Bravo!
...haha, I am such an idiot, lol.
*** I do truly mean every single awkward word that I genuinely tried to express here dear poetess!***
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Re: Re. to thine own self (and you) be true.
27th Feb 2021 4:30am
haha 😂... hahaha.
You're soooo very far from being an idiot.. lol. Your Old English was extremely cute and a funny attempt!!.. Ty for your expressions and I am so glad you enjoyed reading. This was a challenge for me to write, so just the simple fact that I could come up with SOMETHING left me feeling like a winner and like I'm more than just one note. I get concerned that I can get stuck in a rut with my phrasing and formatting, so I thought I'd challenge myself a bit, regardless of the consequences. I can't learn without trying... right?!? Needless to say, I'm extremely appreciative of your kind words and they mean a lot to me.
Yes, they're so very valuable!!!I
Thank you again and
Much love,
🌹 💜 🌹
xoxo
Susan
You're soooo very far from being an idiot.. lol. Your Old English was extremely cute and a funny attempt!!.. Ty for your expressions and I am so glad you enjoyed reading. This was a challenge for me to write, so just the simple fact that I could come up with SOMETHING left me feeling like a winner and like I'm more than just one note. I get concerned that I can get stuck in a rut with my phrasing and formatting, so I thought I'd challenge myself a bit, regardless of the consequences. I can't learn without trying... right?!? Needless to say, I'm extremely appreciative of your kind words and they mean a lot to me.
Yes, they're so very valuable!!!I
Thank you again and
Much love,
🌹 💜 🌹
xoxo
Susan
Re. to thine own self (and you) be true.
1st Mar 2021 4:15am
Such friends make life bearable. Your use of language here is amazing. This range of poetry gives me pause to bow in honor of your gift. Loved all this and especially that ending. There is gold in this vein of poetry that I am fortunate to have held.
John
John
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Re: Re. to thine own self (and you) be true.
I am floored by your thoughts... thank you again, John. I really appreciate it. This was another poem for a competition but I took it too literal... lol. Once I wrote this though, I had to use it, as I ended up actually liking it.... very much... an anomaly for me.
It was difficult to get in that mindset of Olde English language but once I started it actually was one of the most fun poems I have written.
Thank you for listening and for being so supportive.
💜
xoxo
It was difficult to get in that mindset of Olde English language but once I started it actually was one of the most fun poems I have written.
Thank you for listening and for being so supportive.
💜
xoxo
Re. to thine own self (and you) be true.
2nd Mar 2021 3:39am
Wow Blue, truly a classic piece, it feels as it was written so long ago and yet so true to modern time.
You really are gifted at weaving beautiful words and well structured pieces to emotionally draw us in.
Great work.
You really are gifted at weaving beautiful words and well structured pieces to emotionally draw us in.
Great work.
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Re: Re. to thine own self (and you) be true.
2nd Mar 2021 1:28pm
I love the 'wow' Walter... that's better than any trophy, imo. I worked hard on this one, so your comments soothe like a salve. This isn't a natural flow for me, but I love the idea of this form of language and I tried my best... lol. I appreciate you reading and as always, you've improved my thinking about my result, here.
Thank you, my dear
🌹 💜 🌹
xoxo
Thank you, my dear
🌹 💜 🌹
xoxo