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once upon a blistering truth.
looking for shells;
the beach was blistering cold
wind battered my resilience
I took that perfect picture;
we framed it
accenting our space-
our love, just right
one look,
and I was always
right back there
watching you ahead of me
thinking to myself
this moment defines
wishing I also had a picture
of the moment
right after,
as you turned,
smiled brilliant,
just before kissing me
so earnest...
it's there I felt
a hard gust blow,
scattering
our bits that remained
suddenly,
all I could feel
was truth.
Written by
Bluevelvete
Published 2nd Feb 2021
| Edited 10th Feb 2024
Author's Note
My own pic... of this true story.
This was my #Nopoo for today that I just tweaked a little bit....
©BLU2020
This was my #Nopoo for today that I just tweaked a little bit....
©BLU2020
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Re. once upon a blistering truth.
2nd Feb 2021 3:53am
Re: Re. once upon a blistering truth.
2nd Feb 2021 4:11am
Thank you, dearest FeNyX
I appreciate you taking the time to read and leave your thoughts.
🌹
xo
I appreciate you taking the time to read and leave your thoughts.
🌹
xo
Re. once upon a blistering truth.
2nd Feb 2021 3:56am
Wow what a view I mean the words strike imagery so clear. I wish for you whatever u need and want
You deserve it sweetheart ♥️♥️♥️
Stay strong what you seek is waiting for you,
you are just looking in the wrong places honey :)
Step outside your comfort zone, surround yourself around good people people that are into things u secretly are too, maybe dance, or a chess league. Sports fans are usually ding bats . Not all but most hahaha! Anyway I strongly believe you need to explore new ideas ..
hugs you
Jackie ♥️
You deserve it sweetheart ♥️♥️♥️
Stay strong what you seek is waiting for you,
you are just looking in the wrong places honey :)
Step outside your comfort zone, surround yourself around good people people that are into things u secretly are too, maybe dance, or a chess league. Sports fans are usually ding bats . Not all but most hahaha! Anyway I strongly believe you need to explore new ideas ..
hugs you
Jackie ♥️
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Re: Re. once upon a blistering truth.
Dearest Jackie,
Your concern for me and my continued search to find someone (as wonderful as you are, if that's possible?!?) is truly heartening and it also tickles me completely. I love you so much for those sentiments, just beyond words. I am never going to find it within cyber walls, my hopes are that 2021 shows us (me) a little bit more kindness and I can actually go on a real fucking date!..🤷🏻♀️ That's novel, right?.!... hahaha. This poem is a reminder of having something once and that it's not impossible to have it again... Possibly better, with life knowledge gained since. I'm grateful for you, the list add and all your loveliness in our new friendship. Your an exceptional stand in big sister! I'm lucky to have you as such!!
Much love,
Your BB
🌹-xoxo
💜
Your concern for me and my continued search to find someone (as wonderful as you are, if that's possible?!?) is truly heartening and it also tickles me completely. I love you so much for those sentiments, just beyond words. I am never going to find it within cyber walls, my hopes are that 2021 shows us (me) a little bit more kindness and I can actually go on a real fucking date!..🤷🏻♀️ That's novel, right?.!... hahaha. This poem is a reminder of having something once and that it's not impossible to have it again... Possibly better, with life knowledge gained since. I'm grateful for you, the list add and all your loveliness in our new friendship. Your an exceptional stand in big sister! I'm lucky to have you as such!!
Much love,
Your BB
🌹-xoxo
💜
Re. once upon a blistering truth.
2nd Feb 2021 4:40am
💖🔥🎶🙏 Beautifully proportionate, unity in the whole of this single scene and all the paths whose footfalls echo to and from it, in your voice. We are consummate time travelers into the past. Your rendering holds organic sensitivity and a sense of cathartic harmony that touches me on a deeper level than analysis can articulate.
As I age, I weary of people who talk to hear themselves speak. Our interconnectedness, oneness, we are arteries flowing into one another, not day traders shoving and shouting to be heard. I grow more quiet, and yet my love deepens and my faith in a purposeful existence strengthens with each magic I witness, love expressed, honoured. Thank you for the reminder.
In kindness,
O filo sou, o drakos
As I age, I weary of people who talk to hear themselves speak. Our interconnectedness, oneness, we are arteries flowing into one another, not day traders shoving and shouting to be heard. I grow more quiet, and yet my love deepens and my faith in a purposeful existence strengthens with each magic I witness, love expressed, honoured. Thank you for the reminder.
In kindness,
O filo sou, o drakos
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Re: Re. once upon a blistering truth.
The dragon is wise, learned and delivers sage prose...
My mind is a flutter with your genuine heartfelt remarks and I'm swimming in a bit of blown away, in the moment. Your thoughts are so incredibly powerful, that I'm moved myself, Daniel... Are you sure that you actually meant to comment on my poem...?!. I tease, using levity to try and unseat my shock a little bit... haha.. (I'm also a bit ripped) ha!
;)
I'm extremely grateful for you and all your beautiful comments, your list add and the openness of this visits. My heart swells with admiration and deep gratitude.
Much love and respect,
🐉🐲🐉🐲🐉
X
My mind is a flutter with your genuine heartfelt remarks and I'm swimming in a bit of blown away, in the moment. Your thoughts are so incredibly powerful, that I'm moved myself, Daniel... Are you sure that you actually meant to comment on my poem...?!. I tease, using levity to try and unseat my shock a little bit... haha.. (I'm also a bit ripped) ha!
;)
I'm extremely grateful for you and all your beautiful comments, your list add and the openness of this visits. My heart swells with admiration and deep gratitude.
Much love and respect,
🐉🐲🐉🐲🐉
X
Re. once upon a blistering truth.
2nd Feb 2021 5:51am
Re: Re. once upon a blistering truth.
2nd Feb 2021 6:18am
Re. once upon a blistering truth.
2nd Feb 2021 6:19am
BV, you are a true romantic
and your tender, loving, and expressive poetry is very revealing,
giving us a perfect snapshot into your vulnerable and loving heart.
Your memorable photograph of past love holds still forever for you
creating the most captivating heartfelt poetry.
You transcend your descriptive words into an emotional journey with every verse for your readers.
Your truths create the most beautiful poetry and again I am left in awe by yet another one of your masterful spills.
Exquisite poetry Susan!
and your tender, loving, and expressive poetry is very revealing,
giving us a perfect snapshot into your vulnerable and loving heart.
Your memorable photograph of past love holds still forever for you
creating the most captivating heartfelt poetry.
You transcend your descriptive words into an emotional journey with every verse for your readers.
Your truths create the most beautiful poetry and again I am left in awe by yet another one of your masterful spills.
Exquisite poetry Susan!
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Re: Re. once upon a blistering truth.
2nd Feb 2021 7:49am
Ty, FF
I'm overwhelmed by you.
The word exquisite is like my Kryptonite - - weakening me completely...
I'm so so grateful.
.... for all you say....
and do.
💜 🐇💜🐇💜🐇💜
xoxo
-S
I'm overwhelmed by you.
The word exquisite is like my Kryptonite - - weakening me completely...
I'm so so grateful.
.... for all you say....
and do.
💜 🐇💜🐇💜🐇💜
xoxo
-S
Re. once upon a blistering truth.
2nd Feb 2021 7:19am
Re: Re. once upon a blistering truth.
2nd Feb 2021 7:50am
Ty very much for reading and your thoughtful comments.
It's nice to meet you.... your makeup is bad ass!
I love it
🌹
xo
It's nice to meet you.... your makeup is bad ass!
I love it
🌹
xo
Re: Re. once upon a blistering truth.
2nd Feb 2021 9:09am
Gosh I wish I could make up like this. It's a filter. It looked so cool I had to take a picture. Nice to meet you as well.
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Re. once upon a blistering truth.
2nd Feb 2021 8:08am
That was just beautiful, a picture paints a thousand words they say, your words paint a thousand vivid pictures in my minds eye
Great job lady, great job.
Love and light
Ron x
Great job lady, great job.
Love and light
Ron x
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Re: Re. once upon a blistering truth.
2nd Feb 2021 11:49am
Thank you my dear...
I'm all smiles at your comments and extremely glad that I was able to resonate within your mind's eye... what a compliment!.. My heartfelt appreciation for the list add and your visit in general... THAT'S the real pearl in the oyster..
💜
Much love,
🌹
xo
I'm all smiles at your comments and extremely glad that I was able to resonate within your mind's eye... what a compliment!.. My heartfelt appreciation for the list add and your visit in general... THAT'S the real pearl in the oyster..
💜
Much love,
🌹
xo
Re. once upon a blistering truth.
2nd Feb 2021 2:44pm
Re: Re. once upon a blistering truth.
2nd Feb 2021 2:50pm
Ty, Dear KP...
the remembrance is
my impetus
for future possibilities
.....
🌹
xo
the remembrance is
my impetus
for future possibilities
.....
🌹
xo
Re. once upon a blistering truth.
Anonymous
2nd Feb 2021 3:09pm
The most beautiful feeling you can feel, the truth of love.
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Re: Re. once upon a blistering truth.
2nd Feb 2021 5:29pm
💯 Agree...
Until it's utterly destroyed... ... doh!!
damn that's a downer I know ... lol
Sorry to ruin your beautiful sentiment.
I'm listening to the Smiths ( even though Morrissey can suck it, in his radical right, older age) and my darkness flared!!! Once a goth girl, always a goth girl.... hahahaha..
Your comments and visit always make me smile!
Thank you so much, Rachel...
🌹
xo
Until it's utterly destroyed... ... doh!!
damn that's a downer I know ... lol
Sorry to ruin your beautiful sentiment.
I'm listening to the Smiths ( even though Morrissey can suck it, in his radical right, older age) and my darkness flared!!! Once a goth girl, always a goth girl.... hahahaha..
Your comments and visit always make me smile!
Thank you so much, Rachel...
🌹
xo
Re: Re. once upon a blistering truth.
Anonymous
2nd Feb 2021 5:35pm
yeah I was trying to avoid taking that on to
my original thought ending was " ....until it goes to shit" but I resisted! Thank you for reading my mind ;)
I totally know that goth girl feeling, I hear you loud and clear <3 :)
my original thought ending was " ....until it goes to shit" but I resisted! Thank you for reading my mind ;)
I totally know that goth girl feeling, I hear you loud and clear <3 :)
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Re. once upon a blistering truth.
2nd Feb 2021 3:56pm
I like how you used resilience in this piece.
Your wrote a whole love story in a few short paragraphs; the moment insulating you from all the outside environment.
Your wrote a whole love story in a few short paragraphs; the moment insulating you from all the outside environment.
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Re: Re. once upon a blistering truth.
2nd Feb 2021 5:42pm
Leo,
Your visits are so interesting and enjoyable. I love how your mind works and what you (and only you) see within my writing when you read it. I am so appreciative! Your comments are uplifting, encouraging and make me feel like I'm on the right track... Much thanks, my lovely friend.
🌹
xo
B
Your visits are so interesting and enjoyable. I love how your mind works and what you (and only you) see within my writing when you read it. I am so appreciative! Your comments are uplifting, encouraging and make me feel like I'm on the right track... Much thanks, my lovely friend.
🌹
xo
B
Re. once upon a blistering truth.
Dearest Blue, this is so romantic. Love in it's simplicity. This passage is wonderful how a physical element wears on ones psyche, "wind tore at my resilience." And how that elemental conflict is resolved by love in this passage, "resilience
was suddenly unaffected"
Bravissima ❣️❣️
was suddenly unaffected"
Bravissima ❣️❣️
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Re: Re. once upon a blistering truth.
3rd Feb 2021 1:58am
I've been wanting to get a read on your opinions! Thank you for your big hearted response, BB.. I'm all smiles that you enjoyed reading and love your thoughtful remarks... I'm grateful for the list add and the fact that you really leave me with the truth in your terrific POV. It allows me to take those
observations and learn and grow from each one .... What a gift! ;)
Much love, hugs and kisses
💋🐻💋🐻💋
observations and learn and grow from each one .... What a gift! ;)
Much love, hugs and kisses
💋🐻💋🐻💋
Re. once upon a blistering truth.
3rd Feb 2021 4:01am
Dear BV,
These picture perfect moments always make me wonder why they can’t last? They happened. Why can’t they be forever?? I’m whining. 😔
I admire your ability to write these feelings without an under current of bitterness. Just captured moments of love. This was a very good lesson for me not only in appreciating the feeling in the moment but your aptitude for formatting. The whole piece is a home run. H🌷
These picture perfect moments always make me wonder why they can’t last? They happened. Why can’t they be forever?? I’m whining. 😔
I admire your ability to write these feelings without an under current of bitterness. Just captured moments of love. This was a very good lesson for me not only in appreciating the feeling in the moment but your aptitude for formatting. The whole piece is a home run. H🌷
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Re: Re. once upon a blistering truth.
3rd Feb 2021 4:37am
Hi, Honoria!
I love seeing you, as always... I'll thank you in advance and I'll tell you that there certainly was bitterness, at one time... Now, it's just another (very) hard lesson learned. I did not have bitterness about THAT particular moment /vacation, it was just a last beautifully remembered moment... sometimes we don't really know that it's going to be the end, while we're in the moment and experiencing it .... right?...sadly.
Hindsight and all....
I'm so glad it resonated with you and you found something to take away.
I'm grateful for your own brand of reflections and your sage words of wisdom (yes, they are!)
Ty for sharing it with me
🌹
xo
-Susan
I love seeing you, as always... I'll thank you in advance and I'll tell you that there certainly was bitterness, at one time... Now, it's just another (very) hard lesson learned. I did not have bitterness about THAT particular moment /vacation, it was just a last beautifully remembered moment... sometimes we don't really know that it's going to be the end, while we're in the moment and experiencing it .... right?...sadly.
Hindsight and all....
I'm so glad it resonated with you and you found something to take away.
I'm grateful for your own brand of reflections and your sage words of wisdom (yes, they are!)
Ty for sharing it with me
🌹
xo
-Susan
Re. once upon a blistering truth.
3rd Feb 2021 4:05am
Re: Re. once upon a blistering truth.
3rd Feb 2021 4:19am
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Re: Re. once upon a blistering truth.
3rd Feb 2021 6:47pm
You're a lovely sight, Wilbur
Ty for reading, the list add my bday wishes and your genuine heartfelt comments.. You're a treasure, you are!
🇺🇸 💙 🇬🇧
xoxo
B
Ty for reading, the list add my bday wishes and your genuine heartfelt comments.. You're a treasure, you are!
🇺🇸 💙 🇬🇧
xoxo
B
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Re: Re. once upon a blistering truth.
4th Feb 2021 1:17pm
R,
I adore that memory of yours to pieces! I used to have an enormous sea shell that I would hold up to my ear and do the very same thing, when I was really little, too. Then my family moved to Florida when I was around 10, where shell collecting was a given and the hunt to find the collectable worthy ones , never ceased. Even to this day... lol.
I am touched that you were able to find a hint of resonation.
Thank you so much for the visit. :)
🌹
B
I adore that memory of yours to pieces! I used to have an enormous sea shell that I would hold up to my ear and do the very same thing, when I was really little, too. Then my family moved to Florida when I was around 10, where shell collecting was a given and the hunt to find the collectable worthy ones , never ceased. Even to this day... lol.
I am touched that you were able to find a hint of resonation.
Thank you so much for the visit. :)
🌹
B
Re. once upon a blistering truth.
8th Feb 2021 7:37pm
Such a lull of sweet remembers, beautiful Blue.. Amazing what can be evoked by Love and the sea, yes? ;)
Adore this soft share and your pen, m'lady.
much lovins to your day!
~d
Adore this soft share and your pen, m'lady.
much lovins to your day!
~d
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Re: Re. once upon a blistering truth.
8th Feb 2021 9:07pm
Aww... what a lovely visit :)
Ty muchly, d
I'm so glad you found some resonance and I greatly appreciate your thoughtful comments
Much love,
🌹
xo
B
... always welcomed ;)
Ty muchly, d
I'm so glad you found some resonance and I greatly appreciate your thoughtful comments
Much love,
🌹
xo
B
... always welcomed ;)
Re. once upon a blistering truth.
14th Feb 2021 00:41am
Not only is this beautiful but also brilliant, filled with love and honesty at it's core.
You are truly a gifted poet dear Blue, capturing moments like this which will transcend time.
You are truly a gifted poet dear Blue, capturing moments like this which will transcend time.
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Re: Re. once upon a blistering truth.
14th Feb 2021 1:52am
Wow, Walter
Ty for this incredible feedback, I'm kinda speechless here, my friend. You know me, my inner nonsense, can hardly believe such beautiful sentiments... I'm so very thankful for you and your remarks, tonight. They are motivational and I am so very glad you enjoyed reading.
Ty Ty Ty!
Please take care of yourself and I look forward to seeing you again, soon (on your page!!)
🌹
💜 🌈 💜
xoxo
Ty for this incredible feedback, I'm kinda speechless here, my friend. You know me, my inner nonsense, can hardly believe such beautiful sentiments... I'm so very thankful for you and your remarks, tonight. They are motivational and I am so very glad you enjoyed reading.
Ty Ty Ty!
Please take care of yourself and I look forward to seeing you again, soon (on your page!!)
🌹
💜 🌈 💜
xoxo
Re. once upon a blistering truth.
23rd Jan 2022 2:12am
footfalls
of searing
memories
imprint
upon the
heart
a
smile of
brilliance
a twinkle
within
the eye
those
nuances
of a voice
and subtles
within
a kiss
hone
the
senaes
to what
love really
is
of searing
memories
imprint
upon the
heart
a
smile of
brilliance
a twinkle
within
the eye
those
nuances
of a voice
and subtles
within
a kiss
hone
the
senaes
to what
love really
is
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Re: Re. once upon a blistering truth.
23rd Jan 2022 2:37am
Wow.... You're hitting them out of the part, Colin!!
🌹 - 💙
Wonderfully poeted - ✨
x
🌹 - 💙
Wonderfully poeted - ✨
x