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Half Begun Never Done
I have WAY too many saved poem drafts!
They’re all crap.
Well, parts of them are crap.
The other parts are drivel.
Can I create a clever poem from all the bits and pieces?
Maybe, but I won’t.
I can’t remember why I started half of them.
The other half I can’t think of a reason to finish.
The third half have no middle!
Blank spots waiting for words that never materialized.
They all have a common theme. Broken, sad, angry, mad.
Just substitute pronoun of choice.
Blah blah fuckety blah. Submit.
I’d like to try adding some pictures like a bunch of the other poets.
It’ll never happen.
I just spent 45 minutes trying to paste one in to no avail.
Comma’s, semicolon’s, dashes, dots.
I don’t know where these things actually go!
My twelfth grade English teacher said put comma’s where you’d take a breath when speaking.
Fat lot of good that did me!
I speak quickly and don’t breathe.
Could this be a full on writer’s block I’ve read so much about?
Is this poetry?
I don’t know.
I was a music major.
They’re all crap.
Well, parts of them are crap.
The other parts are drivel.
Can I create a clever poem from all the bits and pieces?
Maybe, but I won’t.
I can’t remember why I started half of them.
The other half I can’t think of a reason to finish.
The third half have no middle!
Blank spots waiting for words that never materialized.
They all have a common theme. Broken, sad, angry, mad.
Just substitute pronoun of choice.
Blah blah fuckety blah. Submit.
I’d like to try adding some pictures like a bunch of the other poets.
It’ll never happen.
I just spent 45 minutes trying to paste one in to no avail.
Comma’s, semicolon’s, dashes, dots.
I don’t know where these things actually go!
My twelfth grade English teacher said put comma’s where you’d take a breath when speaking.
Fat lot of good that did me!
I speak quickly and don’t breathe.
Could this be a full on writer’s block I’ve read so much about?
Is this poetry?
I don’t know.
I was a music major.
Published 10th Aug 2020
| Edited 28th Aug 2020
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10th Aug 2020 8:33am
I hate half of what I write and left unfinished ... why unfinished, I dunno, just lost interest or inspiration. But each effort is a learning experience in some way, so, press on... go for it!👍😘💕🥳
12th Aug 2020 4:13pm
Dear A,
You’ve nailed it! It’s the exact same feelings. And you’re right, see it through to the end. The ending can be a wonderful surprise. Thank you for this boost and encouraging response. Just what the poet doctor ordered. :-) H 🌷
You’ve nailed it! It’s the exact same feelings. And you’re right, see it through to the end. The ending can be a wonderful surprise. Thank you for this boost and encouraging response. Just what the poet doctor ordered. :-) H 🌷
10th Aug 2020 9:19am
12th Aug 2020 4:15pm
Dear P,
Love it! Thank you for the lift in spirits and the honor of the RL. I’ll keep plugging along with some of these half wit ideas. Maybe two half wit ideas will make a complete wit? ;-) H 🌷
Love it! Thank you for the lift in spirits and the honor of the RL. I’ll keep plugging along with some of these half wit ideas. Maybe two half wit ideas will make a complete wit? ;-) H 🌷
Ah the trove of unfinished work. There can be treasure there. Sometimes, when I have writers block I’ll look through unfinished pieces and one will stand out. I generally beat it into something that no longer resembles the original thought, but it works (sometimes). What you have here is poetry about poetry. And I wouldn’t worry so much about structure and semi-colons. Commas are great, unless they are the only thing keeping a piece together...
Great, introspective piece you have here.
P.s. your authors note cracks me up
Great, introspective piece you have here.
P.s. your authors note cracks me up
12th Aug 2020 4:19pm
Dear E,
I keep shoveling through this so called trove. I don’t know when exactly I’ll hit anything considered a gem, but I’ll keep digging. A poem about poetry. I do like that though. I hadn’t put that idea together so I’m really glad you thought so and let me know.
I know comma’s are your fave’s ;-) but I’m almost motivated enough to get a book about grammar and see where that leads me. Unless I get distracted by something glittery...
Thank you so much for the boost and the insight. I do sometimes need a swift kick in the backside. :-) H 🌷
I keep shoveling through this so called trove. I don’t know when exactly I’ll hit anything considered a gem, but I’ll keep digging. A poem about poetry. I do like that though. I hadn’t put that idea together so I’m really glad you thought so and let me know.
I know comma’s are your fave’s ;-) but I’m almost motivated enough to get a book about grammar and see where that leads me. Unless I get distracted by something glittery...
Thank you so much for the boost and the insight. I do sometimes need a swift kick in the backside. :-) H 🌷
Anonymous
10th Aug 2020 1:33pm
Hey H.......you can see by how I write.......I’m no English major that’s for sure........if there are poetry rules I use none of them.......I just write me.......I have a lot of bits of inks in my note section.......I read them now and then......eventually they come together if meant to be read.......some I’m so emotional about they’ve never been posted.......can’t face answering comments on them........so you’re not alone........thought provoking ink........purple luv & hugs xo :)
12th Aug 2020 4:21pm
Dear FG,
Thank you so much for your read and lovely comments. You’re right of course, write what I know. But then I go and muck it up by trying to be all fancy. I know! Don’t be fancy just be me. You’re right. I’m on it. Next piece, all me. No grammar :-)
Thank you again. H 🌷
Thank you so much for your read and lovely comments. You’re right of course, write what I know. But then I go and muck it up by trying to be all fancy. I know! Don’t be fancy just be me. You’re right. I’m on it. Next piece, all me. No grammar :-)
Thank you again. H 🌷
10th Aug 2020 3:16pm
Lol I can relate. I love to write but with zero grammar involved 😎🤣. It’s interesting to just spill it to page and run with it💓. I loved this.
12th Aug 2020 4:24pm
Dear T,
I think it was Hemmingway who wrote with no grammar or paragraphs even. Sounded like an absolute nightmare for his publisher. I guess that’s why he was famous and got the big bucks. Thank you so much for your sweet comment. I’m glad you could relate. I don’t feel so lost in this quagmire called GRAMMAR. ;-)
H 🌷
I think it was Hemmingway who wrote with no grammar or paragraphs even. Sounded like an absolute nightmare for his publisher. I guess that’s why he was famous and got the big bucks. Thank you so much for your sweet comment. I’m glad you could relate. I don’t feel so lost in this quagmire called GRAMMAR. ;-)
H 🌷
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12th Aug 2020 4:28pm
Dear S,
Thank you so much! Right back at ya! I so appreciate your time in reading this and your lovely comment. Brightens my day. H 🌷
Thank you so much! Right back at ya! I so appreciate your time in reading this and your lovely comment. Brightens my day. H 🌷
10th Aug 2020 4:57pm
Every crap poem brings you that little bit closer to writing one you feel good about. This is "normal" for a writer; believe me, I live with one :))
12th Aug 2020 4:30pm
Dear J,
Ah, you have the inside skinny on the this process. Excellent. Very good to know. I promise not to hit the delete button then and try to find the teensy weensy gem hidden somewhere in there. I so appreciate this insight. Thank you! H 🌷
Ah, you have the inside skinny on the this process. Excellent. Very good to know. I promise not to hit the delete button then and try to find the teensy weensy gem hidden somewhere in there. I so appreciate this insight. Thank you! H 🌷
11th Aug 2020 3:00am
YES! Vomit those words onto the page. At least your half-poems make it to draft form... mine mostly stay stuck in my head or get lost in some weird ether...
I love this. Isn't it infuriating? And yet here we are... blah blah fuckety blah...
I love this. Isn't it infuriating? And yet here we are... blah blah fuckety blah...
12th Aug 2020 4:33pm
Dear B,
Yes! Most of this stuff is equivalent to puke! (Hehe) I can so relate when you mentioned sometimes yours stay stuck in your head or some weird ether. I have that problem too, only by the third or fourth second I’ve already forgotten the absolute sparkler that will change the course of history. NOT!
Thank you so much for your share and sweet comment. I really appreciate it. H. 🌷
Yes! Most of this stuff is equivalent to puke! (Hehe) I can so relate when you mentioned sometimes yours stay stuck in your head or some weird ether. I have that problem too, only by the third or fourth second I’ve already forgotten the absolute sparkler that will change the course of history. NOT!
Thank you so much for your share and sweet comment. I really appreciate it. H. 🌷
11th Aug 2020 5:00am
12th Aug 2020 4:35pm
Dear D,
Thank you so much. This is such a kind thing to read today. I super appreciate it. And your right, truth does resonate no matter how ugly or funny. Great reminder. Thank you again! H 🌷
Thank you so much. This is such a kind thing to read today. I super appreciate it. And your right, truth does resonate no matter how ugly or funny. Great reminder. Thank you again! H 🌷
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12th Aug 2020 4:37pm
Dear R,
I love that visual of notes with doodled little ditties. I think I might have a poem in there, somewhere. That’s awesome. I promise to keep these half started semi precious gems. If nothing else, I might feel like I’m on the brink of something. Thank you so much for your read and share and kind comment. I really appreciate it. A lot. H 🌷
I love that visual of notes with doodled little ditties. I think I might have a poem in there, somewhere. That’s awesome. I promise to keep these half started semi precious gems. If nothing else, I might feel like I’m on the brink of something. Thank you so much for your read and share and kind comment. I really appreciate it. A lot. H 🌷
12th Aug 2020 4:15pm
Love the roller coaster rides of this ... its authenticity ... the emoting/evoking ... echoes what I think ... much of the time ...
12th Aug 2020 4:43pm
Dear L,
I am so appreciative of your sweet comment. Thank you for sharing that. Honestly, I was hoping to buy some ideas from you. Any for sale? ;-)
Thank you again H 🌷
I am so appreciative of your sweet comment. Thank you for sharing that. Honestly, I was hoping to buy some ideas from you. Any for sale? ;-)
Thank you again H 🌷
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16th Aug 2020 3:24am
Dear BP,
Sweet relief. A draft box chuck full of heaven knows what? Kind of wish there was a prize for this. Oh well, there’s a sparkler in there somewhere. Thank you. H🌷
Sweet relief. A draft box chuck full of heaven knows what? Kind of wish there was a prize for this. Oh well, there’s a sparkler in there somewhere. Thank you. H🌷
14th Aug 2020 4:46pm
Beware of negative self-talk. Every word is precious and how you chose to syntax them is an amazing talent, an original, no other like that, which makes you SPECIAL. Keep-on-keeping on.
Thanks. Peace. oral
Thanks. Peace. oral
16th Aug 2020 3:28am
Dear TO,
Thank you so much. You’re so right. Negative self talk is a downer for sure. And I promise to keep on. I’ll keep digging for that nugget that I can shine into a diamond. Thank you for your gracious and thoughtful comments. H🌷
Thank you so much. You’re so right. Negative self talk is a downer for sure. And I promise to keep on. I’ll keep digging for that nugget that I can shine into a diamond. Thank you for your gracious and thoughtful comments. H🌷
16th Aug 2020 10:05pm
You've spoken the universal dilemma of every writer and poet. How do you finish something when you're no longer in the mood? Can you get into that mindset again? Sometimes I've found notes or something I've scribbled and set them aside. It's difficult to go back and remember. This maybe a part of a series of unfinished poems that would leaves us readers wondering where you were at and what you were feeling. I'm guessing some poems were not meant to be finished.
Excellent stuff Honoria.
Excellent stuff Honoria.
18th Aug 2020 00:58am
Dear W,
I think you just gave me an idea...I’ll get back to you on that.
Right there with you about getting back into a mindset again. It’s almost 100% I don’t remember where I was headed with whatever scribble I had written. But there it is in all its unfinished glory. Thank you so much for your lovely comments. H🌷
I think you just gave me an idea...I’ll get back to you on that.
Right there with you about getting back into a mindset again. It’s almost 100% I don’t remember where I was headed with whatever scribble I had written. But there it is in all its unfinished glory. Thank you so much for your lovely comments. H🌷
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19th Aug 2020 7:44am
Dear E,
I’m relieved to not be alone in this game. These snippets of genius that will revolutionize poetry turning to dust or the delete button make me laugh if this is the process of it all.
I really appreciate reading your younger experience of tossing out your unfinished treasures. I’m choosing to believe these tosses thoughts are back in the universe and re-channeling us in a different way. Let’s go with that for now. Thank you so much for sharing and your sweet comment. I’m always so glad to see you. H🌷
I’m relieved to not be alone in this game. These snippets of genius that will revolutionize poetry turning to dust or the delete button make me laugh if this is the process of it all.
I really appreciate reading your younger experience of tossing out your unfinished treasures. I’m choosing to believe these tosses thoughts are back in the universe and re-channeling us in a different way. Let’s go with that for now. Thank you so much for sharing and your sweet comment. I’m always so glad to see you. H🌷
19th Aug 2020 1:43pm
This is writing.
It's called: adding precious ingredients to the compost pile of your work.
What if there's no need to push and shove. No need to finish or re-write. No pressure or sifting required?
Which is, of course, exactly what we do, in our pre-conditioned drive to wrestle the beast onto the page and 'get the poem (or story) done.'
The challenge – (in my humble experience) – is to let all this 'crap, drivel and junk' percolate, through the writer's vision and dreams; to let them find their own way back onto the page, in their own time, in new form, ideas, beauty; to ripen in that smelly heap of garbage drafts. To let them breathe.
Not writer's block, or poet's bane.
Call it Compost Mentis.
Forget about it and keep writing.
And look how many responses this poem of yours has sparked off!
Precious!!
x VB
It's called: adding precious ingredients to the compost pile of your work.
What if there's no need to push and shove. No need to finish or re-write. No pressure or sifting required?
Which is, of course, exactly what we do, in our pre-conditioned drive to wrestle the beast onto the page and 'get the poem (or story) done.'
The challenge – (in my humble experience) – is to let all this 'crap, drivel and junk' percolate, through the writer's vision and dreams; to let them find their own way back onto the page, in their own time, in new form, ideas, beauty; to ripen in that smelly heap of garbage drafts. To let them breathe.
Not writer's block, or poet's bane.
Call it Compost Mentis.
Forget about it and keep writing.
And look how many responses this poem of yours has sparked off!
Precious!!
x VB
Dear VB,
Compost Mentis. Fantastic! Love the thinking and suggestion you have provided me and I will remove said finger from said delete button and be on my merry way letting all that crap ferment. Now I look forward to seeing what gets created. Thank you very much for your read and kind comments. They are truly appreciated. H 🌷
Compost Mentis. Fantastic! Love the thinking and suggestion you have provided me and I will remove said finger from said delete button and be on my merry way letting all that crap ferment. Now I look forward to seeing what gets created. Thank you very much for your read and kind comments. They are truly appreciated. H 🌷
19th Aug 2020 8:38pm
Compost Mentis – Yes! – the word came to me while writing my response to your poem. That's the magic of writing. Isn't it fun?
20th Aug 2020 2:40am
It is fun! Thank you for the honor of RL. I’m extremely flattered and very grateful. H🌷
22nd Aug 2020 10:32pm
23rd Aug 2020 11:57am
Dear L,
Thank you, I’ll keep it in there until it morphs into something else. Hands off the delete. X H🌷
Thank you, I’ll keep it in there until it morphs into something else. Hands off the delete. X H🌷
25th Aug 2020 3:24pm
I so get the fumbling of writing although I tend to write all my stuff right away like in the first 1/2 hour at least lol. So you are a music major well music is just poetry and I tend to write like in that form as music is my main gig, I just don't write in the lyric kind of way, no worrying about chord progressions and such lol. Keep it up and you will find your cadence, your meter.
Cheers;
Cheers;
25th Aug 2020 6:27pm
Dear S,
Thank you for your read, kind and insightful comments. Yes, thankfully no keeping track of chord progressions but meter is essential. Thank you again for your encouragement. H🌷
Thank you for your read, kind and insightful comments. Yes, thankfully no keeping track of chord progressions but meter is essential. Thank you again for your encouragement. H🌷
22nd Sep 2020 00:17am
This is great, I can definitely relate. I have to many drafts and I don't think anything I write is ever good enough to post anyway. Really love this! 💖
22nd Sep 2020 1:45am
Dear K,
Well, first of all thank you for your kind comment. Second of all, your poems are stellar. You can think of them what you must but... you’re wrong 😉. You have such a warmth throughout your work it’s quite enviable. Thank you again for your kindness. It’s a bright light to my day. H🌷
Well, first of all thank you for your kind comment. Second of all, your poems are stellar. You can think of them what you must but... you’re wrong 😉. You have such a warmth throughout your work it’s quite enviable. Thank you again for your kindness. It’s a bright light to my day. H🌷
22nd Sep 2020 9:11pm
