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Blackbird
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you are my blackbird
i am your dove
we cannot allow ourselves
to fall in love
i am locked in your eyes
as the moon to the sky
every star that shines bright
a softly placed sigh
when slowly the darkness
falls away like a feather
my breeze, let me fly
we cannot be
together
you are my blackbird
i am your dove
we cannot allow ourselves
to fall in love
i am locked in your eyes
as the moon to the sky
every star that shines bright
a softly placed sigh
when slowly the darkness
falls away like a feather
my breeze, let me fly
we cannot be
together
Published 19th May 2020
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19th May 2020 5:44am
Love doesn't necessarily means together,day and night are married but how often are they seen together. tight
19th May 2020 10:57am
19th May 2020 2:53pm
Damn. This was tragic. I want to know why they can't be together, but then that would ultimately ruin this poem.
It's powerful in its simplicity, similar to "He loves me, He loves me not ..." and the pulling of flower petals. Or plucking of feathers inthis case.
You could replace that second "like" with "as". Poets get to comfortable with the word like when they really don't need it 99 out of 100 times.
It's powerful in its simplicity, similar to "He loves me, He loves me not ..." and the pulling of flower petals. Or plucking of feathers inthis case.
You could replace that second "like" with "as". Poets get to comfortable with the word like when they really don't need it 99 out of 100 times.
19th May 2020 4:59pm
thank you for the suggestion, i appreciate it.
there's no reason they cannot be together
i just felt in writing the poem it sounded better as a tragedy
it's that simple : )
there's no reason they cannot be together
i just felt in writing the poem it sounded better as a tragedy
it's that simple : )
20th May 2020 2:36am
20th May 2020 3:40am
