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Story Poem, Nr.20 — Simulator Failure
Eventually when he thought the real-time was right
he scanned her heart into the computer
to manipulate through latest programmes
the bits he thought that didn’t suit her
trouble came when he vainly tried to scan it back
the rest of her baulked at the altered heart
and said “we want the original back complete
for we are one, despite our different parts”
“too late for that” he said “I did the job
original copy is long since gone
besides it’s now so much better
and better can’t ever be wrong”.
The rest of her body sighed in outraged dismay
“you idiot” she whispered “now what you’ve done!
you’ve destroyed an intricate in-the-image-of
with higher levels you can’t even dream on”
“aw ... c’mon” said he “this heart’s now state-of-the-art
it’ll respond (yeah … cool) only to me
your heart won’t wander towards other men, thereby
solving the problem of infidelity
and what’s more, I’ve maximised the pumping action
using the computer simulator!”
“Oh no” they said “he knows not even the basics
the heart’s no pump, but a regulator…”.
And so it is, all mixed-level conversations
fail to enlighten ‘till another time
and she died of a broken heart, as you’d expect
while he re-wrote the code of his feminine side.
he scanned her heart into the computer
to manipulate through latest programmes
the bits he thought that didn’t suit her
trouble came when he vainly tried to scan it back
the rest of her baulked at the altered heart
and said “we want the original back complete
for we are one, despite our different parts”
“too late for that” he said “I did the job
original copy is long since gone
besides it’s now so much better
and better can’t ever be wrong”.
The rest of her body sighed in outraged dismay
“you idiot” she whispered “now what you’ve done!
you’ve destroyed an intricate in-the-image-of
with higher levels you can’t even dream on”
“aw ... c’mon” said he “this heart’s now state-of-the-art
it’ll respond (yeah … cool) only to me
your heart won’t wander towards other men, thereby
solving the problem of infidelity
and what’s more, I’ve maximised the pumping action
using the computer simulator!”
“Oh no” they said “he knows not even the basics
the heart’s no pump, but a regulator…”.
And so it is, all mixed-level conversations
fail to enlighten ‘till another time
and she died of a broken heart, as you’d expect
while he re-wrote the code of his feminine side.
Written by
Josh
(Joshua Bond)
Published 30th Jan 2020
| Edited 10th Mar 2024
Author's Note
Non-Entry for comp "Technology and the Human Condition", hosted by me, Josh.
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Re. Simulator Failure
30th Jan 2020 4:44pm
By my heart and by my hands, why can't they understand my intentions...Weird science! Bits and pieces, bits and pieces. (name the song).
Good write Josh.
hugs,
buddhakitty
Good write Josh.
hugs,
buddhakitty
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31st Jan 2020 7:22pm
Thank you BK. Science has this thing of controlling Nature, and has forgotten (deliberately imho) that humans are part of Nature and therefore humans will end up (even by default) of being more and more controlled by the growth of our 'technological society'
Re. Simulator Failure
30th Jan 2020 5:17pm
I just read an article this morning about how many animals and plant species man has killed off for technological advances. Strangely, this reminded me of that. Not to mention the Stratford Wives. ;)
I have no doubt a majority of men would opt to control women in this manner. Very few are the ones who aren't threatened by them.
A solid write, Josh. The sci-fi persona in me will be by shortly to RL.
I have no doubt a majority of men would opt to control women in this manner. Very few are the ones who aren't threatened by them.
A solid write, Josh. The sci-fi persona in me will be by shortly to RL.
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1st Feb 2020 6:22pm
Thank you Ahavati, and to deus-ex-machina for the RL. 'Controlling men' are a scary business, recognised now in English law as "coercive control" as in this case:
https://feedimo.com/story/76495623/Coercive-Control-And-The-Case-Of-Sally-Challen/
https://feedimo.com/story/76495623/Coercive-Control-And-The-Case-Of-Sally-Challen/
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30th Jan 2020 7:28pm
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1st Feb 2020 6:24pm
Thank you SweetOblivion for reading. Yep, I'm not sure if it was any better in former times or whether nowadays it's just more publicly known. Either way, 'controlling psychology' whether in politics generally, or individually, is not O.K.
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Re: Re. Simulator Failure
1st Feb 2020 6:31pm
Hello Ben and welcome to DUP. Thank you for reading and commenting - and the RL.
And yes, it's scary; in Sweden being "chipped" (albeit for financial transactions) is all the rage - it's another step along the road to being 'controlled' and giving up freedoms that we take for granted. technology won't stop until people start saying 'No" to it.
I read recently that 'SMART' (as in smart-phones, smart-meters, etc) stands for Secret Militarised Armaments in Residential Technologies. Well that makes a lot of sense re certain technologies being pushed without any real debate. Best regards, Josh.
And yes, it's scary; in Sweden being "chipped" (albeit for financial transactions) is all the rage - it's another step along the road to being 'controlled' and giving up freedoms that we take for granted. technology won't stop until people start saying 'No" to it.
I read recently that 'SMART' (as in smart-phones, smart-meters, etc) stands for Secret Militarised Armaments in Residential Technologies. Well that makes a lot of sense re certain technologies being pushed without any real debate. Best regards, Josh.
Re. Simulator Failure
30th Jan 2020 8:52pm
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1st Feb 2020 6:33pm
Lovely to hear from you Crow; thank you for your reading and commenting on my work - and the RL. Am always glad to see you avatar on my page. Glad you liked it. All the best, Josh.
Re. Simulator Failure
31st Jan 2020 4:59am
Dear J,
Wow! What an interesting and frightening story all rolled into one fabulous write. Scary to me because I think this could be part of the future if it isn’t already.
I really like the ending. I like that you killed off the heroine because in the end one’s heart is ones own. You can’t write code for that. Well done. H🌷
Wow! What an interesting and frightening story all rolled into one fabulous write. Scary to me because I think this could be part of the future if it isn’t already.
I really like the ending. I like that you killed off the heroine because in the end one’s heart is ones own. You can’t write code for that. Well done. H🌷
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1st Feb 2020 6:38pm
Thank you Honoria for your interesting comment. I like the way you read it. I agree with you; somethings are sacred and there's no compromise - even unto death.
Until (via the technological project) we stop trying to control Nature, technologies will continue to have a controlling impact on humans - because we are part of Nature. It's inevitable - and that's scary indeed. It's one reason I live 'away from it all' in the campo of central Portugal - and yet I also believe we have to find a way of engaging with the world on our own terms - and that's the tricky bit I'm still working on :)) Best regards, Josh.
Until (via the technological project) we stop trying to control Nature, technologies will continue to have a controlling impact on humans - because we are part of Nature. It's inevitable - and that's scary indeed. It's one reason I live 'away from it all' in the campo of central Portugal - and yet I also believe we have to find a way of engaging with the world on our own terms - and that's the tricky bit I'm still working on :)) Best regards, Josh.
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Anonymous
31st Jan 2020 7:52am
While a light hearted write, it is a soon to be reality with virtual headgear - the partner of your design that can't behave outside of programmed parameters.
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1st Feb 2020 6:43pm
Thank you for the comment, Johnny. Yeah, a sort of techno-Stepford-wives situation. And yet it already happens with 'controlling men' in certain religious settings - and elsewhere - as the link in my reply to Ahavati shows. Like i said to Honoria above, unless we stop trying to 'control Nature' via various technologies, controlling people will continue to be a characteristic of (new) technologies, whatever their promises of 'freeing us' to have more leisure time, etc.
Re. Simulator Failure
1st Feb 2020 3:27pm
Reading carefully, this says a lot to me about taking people as they are, which is truly loving and respecting them. Also makes me think of what love really is.
I read this poem earlier, defining love like a computer algorithm, pulling sentiments oft repeated. It was bloodless, impersonal pontificating. Artificial sweetener. Love is an action. It's an ocean. Before it calms and cradles, it's raw and dirty and squalls rips you to ragged tatters and orgasmic deaths where agony amplifies the pleasure.
I always learn from you Josh. Thank you.
I read this poem earlier, defining love like a computer algorithm, pulling sentiments oft repeated. It was bloodless, impersonal pontificating. Artificial sweetener. Love is an action. It's an ocean. Before it calms and cradles, it's raw and dirty and squalls rips you to ragged tatters and orgasmic deaths where agony amplifies the pleasure.
I always learn from you Josh. Thank you.
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3rd Feb 2020 8:48pm
Thank you Daniel for another interesting comment on my work.
Technologies (which include organisational structures) are already much used to 'make people behave in a certain way' (like turning up for work at set times - in the 1800s as the factory system was being instigated, people had to be thrown off the "commons land" to force them to work in the factories.
There were riots at this imposition, at this taking away of their natural freedoms to organise their days how they wished. But it was go in the mills, or starve. This produced a recalcitrant workforce, not good for quality control and production.
So guess what, they invented 'universal education' as a means of 'preparing' young people for 'the world of work', so, mind-numbed from their free-spirits, they fell in line without asking too many questions, subservient to 'authority' and gradually becoming less aware of the psychological freedoms they once had. But then it's back to your poem I commented on recently - and accepting we grow through adversity (if we choose to, that is - it's not automatic).
Hmmm, a subject with much to be said :))
Technologies (which include organisational structures) are already much used to 'make people behave in a certain way' (like turning up for work at set times - in the 1800s as the factory system was being instigated, people had to be thrown off the "commons land" to force them to work in the factories.
There were riots at this imposition, at this taking away of their natural freedoms to organise their days how they wished. But it was go in the mills, or starve. This produced a recalcitrant workforce, not good for quality control and production.
So guess what, they invented 'universal education' as a means of 'preparing' young people for 'the world of work', so, mind-numbed from their free-spirits, they fell in line without asking too many questions, subservient to 'authority' and gradually becoming less aware of the psychological freedoms they once had. But then it's back to your poem I commented on recently - and accepting we grow through adversity (if we choose to, that is - it's not automatic).
Hmmm, a subject with much to be said :))
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5th Feb 2020 2:54pm
That is fascinating and a subject my personal learning had not delved into very much. Industrialization as a dehumanizing element. This reminds me of the book 1984 which I finally just read. It's one of those they continually mention on the quiz show Jeopardy, so I finally knuckled down and read it. The author is a brilliant madman, to my estimate. It's a hyperbolic projection of a systematic institution of all the worst elements of society, but considering the cultural climate of the time it was written, it is an understandable extrapolation.
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5th Feb 2020 9:25pm
Hi Daniel, Thank you for commenting again. You mean Orwell's 1984, I assume. Yes, he actually worked in radio & media in the 1940s (as did Aldous Huxley of "Brave New World" fame).
Most 'intellectuals' could see how the new technology was being deliberately used to influence/control the way people thought - and left to concentrate on furthering his writing career. 1984 had a certain amount of 'insiders' knowing what the agenda was.
Most 'intellectuals' could see how the new technology was being deliberately used to influence/control the way people thought - and left to concentrate on furthering his writing career. 1984 had a certain amount of 'insiders' knowing what the agenda was.
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Re: Re. Simulator Failure
3rd Feb 2020 8:58pm
Thank you for the comment Sunset - and the RL. Glad you like it.
The "Technological Program" ( = to control Nature, eliminating all risk and all pain) is going to fail because we humans are part of Nature - and therefore end up being part of the control program.
Gradually the whole world (geographically) and our 'psychological space' is coming under the legal-monitoring process - and that's maybe why your comment "take me to a time when freedom last existed" is so heartfelt, and by many others. We are becoming aware of how much we have lost to system-based living.
Regarding algorithms I have a more lightweight comment on this technology with a previous poem from 2018, which you can find here:
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/317090-job-application-filtered-by-an-algorithm/
Best regards, Josh.
The "Technological Program" ( = to control Nature, eliminating all risk and all pain) is going to fail because we humans are part of Nature - and therefore end up being part of the control program.
Gradually the whole world (geographically) and our 'psychological space' is coming under the legal-monitoring process - and that's maybe why your comment "take me to a time when freedom last existed" is so heartfelt, and by many others. We are becoming aware of how much we have lost to system-based living.
Regarding algorithms I have a more lightweight comment on this technology with a previous poem from 2018, which you can find here:
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/317090-job-application-filtered-by-an-algorithm/
Best regards, Josh.
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Re. Simulator Failure
It is a real fear that human workers could be replaced by robots, since they are more obedient and easy to program than real people and selfless. It makes me wonder if it will become fashionable to act robotic, or has it already in the form of 'groupthink'. It seem that people are more easily 'programmed' to accept technology than ever before, everything is a 'trend' these days, hm. Doesn't anyone have original thoughts anymore? It all leads to me loving creativity more as an escape..
I like the comp idea, its very interesting :)
I like the comp idea, its very interesting :)
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7th Feb 2020 6:40pm
Hi PR, thanks for your comment.
The main trouble with technology is the mindset behind it - which is to 'control Nature' on the grounds of generating a sense of security and predictability - a controllable Techno-Natural environment rather than learning to understand Nature Herself with her own agenda of evolution, and true bounteousness.
This techno-project is bound to fail because life in every field of science (re quantum theory) has been shown for the last 90 years to not only be inherently unpredictable (Mandelbröt, etc) but also in a state of 'potentiality', which can be influenced by human consciousness.
The implications for economics, politics, etc is huge but everyone seems stuck in a simplistic Newtonian Billiard-ball image of how the world-as-just-a-thing works - and hence believe it can be controlled. What happens is that people, as part of Nature, get 'controlled' - hence your comment about acting robotic, and also groupthink.
The main trouble with technology is the mindset behind it - which is to 'control Nature' on the grounds of generating a sense of security and predictability - a controllable Techno-Natural environment rather than learning to understand Nature Herself with her own agenda of evolution, and true bounteousness.
This techno-project is bound to fail because life in every field of science (re quantum theory) has been shown for the last 90 years to not only be inherently unpredictable (Mandelbröt, etc) but also in a state of 'potentiality', which can be influenced by human consciousness.
The implications for economics, politics, etc is huge but everyone seems stuck in a simplistic Newtonian Billiard-ball image of how the world-as-just-a-thing works - and hence believe it can be controlled. What happens is that people, as part of Nature, get 'controlled' - hence your comment about acting robotic, and also groupthink.
Re: Re. Simulator Failure
13th Feb 2020 5:05am
So people develop, naturally, inferiority complexes which weakens their will and allows rulers ie 'tech giants' and governments to rule even more creating a vicious circle that 'exponentially increases man's intelligence over time' (this was a theory mentioned in Prometheus Rising) .
Sometimes I think that the respect that native cultures had for the land was really fear and immense prayer in the midst of natures chaos. Because our modern culture has not respected nature, we have replaced fear with a coping mechanism of the illusion of control.
I think you are right that it might be a house of cards.
Sometimes I think that the respect that native cultures had for the land was really fear and immense prayer in the midst of natures chaos. Because our modern culture has not respected nature, we have replaced fear with a coping mechanism of the illusion of control.
I think you are right that it might be a house of cards.
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13th Feb 2020 3:22pm
You're right; basically, fear of the vauguaries of Nature has been replaced by fear of the vaguaries of the techno-replacement-nature with the growing transparency that the ability to 'control Nature' is actually a delusion, never mind an illusion.
Charles Eisenstein's "The Ascent of Humanity" is an interesting (if very long) book I am currently reading which addresses these things.
Charles Eisenstein's "The Ascent of Humanity" is an interesting (if very long) book I am currently reading which addresses these things.
Re. Simulator Failure
8th Feb 2020 8:33pm
Wonderful Josh, it has the feel of a book, the way you read this. I thought of AI and how our current technology is tapping into that, between robotics and the internet science fiction is becoming reality. And yet that last stanza leaves us wondering what the next level might be.
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13th Feb 2020 3:05pm
Thank you Wally, and RL much appreciated too. Until Science lets go of the idea that the 'Technological Project' is to control Nature (which many scientists via quantum physics, Mandelbröt iterations, the 'new biology', etc have already proven is impossible) we will continue to be on the receiving end of ever more desperate and 'anti-human' technological fixes - each attempting to correct the mess made by the previous generation of technological fixes.
(currently reading Charles Eisebstein's "The Ascent of Humanity" - very long but very interesting on these matters)
(currently reading Charles Eisebstein's "The Ascent of Humanity" - very long but very interesting on these matters)