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Too-Soon
You may “stop all the clocks”
as many times as you wish
and Death will not be impressed.
With Time on his side
Death sneers at the turning of gears,
laughs at swinging pendulums,
yawns bored at chains with weights
and the tick … tock … tick … tock …
is no more than white noise
promising eternal continuance
of Death’s 100% success rate.
She died before her time,
sieved by helplessness.
The rational mind gives poor answers to this mystery
and a truer bigger picture
lies forever in the bottom drawer of consciousness.
Still, undaunted by recalcitrant attitudes
she connects dots of humanity between the lines,
one to one, one to many -
her own mechanism of universal life.
A future glory though, merely holds a space.
Here on Earth it still rankles
and we consider her too-soon death
an impudence, an unjust event,
an abandonment by angels and
even a rank disgrace.
#LouiseGlück
as many times as you wish
and Death will not be impressed.
With Time on his side
Death sneers at the turning of gears,
laughs at swinging pendulums,
yawns bored at chains with weights
and the tick … tock … tick … tock …
is no more than white noise
promising eternal continuance
of Death’s 100% success rate.
She died before her time,
sieved by helplessness.
The rational mind gives poor answers to this mystery
and a truer bigger picture
lies forever in the bottom drawer of consciousness.
Still, undaunted by recalcitrant attitudes
she connects dots of humanity between the lines,
one to one, one to many -
her own mechanism of universal life.
A future glory though, merely holds a space.
Here on Earth it still rankles
and we consider her too-soon death
an impudence, an unjust event,
an abandonment by angels and
even a rank disgrace.
#LouiseGlück
Written by
Josh
(Joshua Bond)
Published 17th Jan 2020
| Edited 10th Mar 2024
Author's Note
Comp entry for "Archaic Fragment", hosted by Ahavati.
Ref Louise Glück's poem "The Drowned Children" which can be found here: https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poems/49599/the-drowned-children
The words "Stop all the clocks" is the opening of W.H Auden's (1907-1973) famous 1938 poem "Funeral Blues", (made more widely known by the 1994 film 'Four Weddings & a Funeral'). It is referenced as Nr.IX in "Twelve Songs", in part:II of his posthumous 'Collected Poems' of 1976.
(photo credit: aron-visuals-BXOXnQ26B7o-unsplash)
Ref Louise Glück's poem "The Drowned Children" which can be found here: https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poems/49599/the-drowned-children
The words "Stop all the clocks" is the opening of W.H Auden's (1907-1973) famous 1938 poem "Funeral Blues", (made more widely known by the 1994 film 'Four Weddings & a Funeral'). It is referenced as Nr.IX in "Twelve Songs", in part:II of his posthumous 'Collected Poems' of 1976.
(photo credit: aron-visuals-BXOXnQ26B7o-unsplash)
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17th Jan 2020 11:10pm
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27th Jan 2020 10:00pm
Thank you sunsettown for your enthusiastic comment, and for the RL; glad you liked it - and the opening words 'got to me' (or is it 'got me') too : ))
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27th Jan 2020 10:03pm
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18th Jan 2020 2:11am
The metaphors are fluid and the essence of economy, touching into archetypes that resonate with recognition. There is a subtle syllabic harmony that is an earmark of your writing, it makes the reads rather mellifluous. Strong close as well. Proportion and depth throughout. It's always a pleasure Josh. Namaste.
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27th Jan 2020 10:06pm
Thank you Daniel. I always enjoy your comments and learn something. You have a great skill with these things. It was a high emotional entry into the subject for me, occurring the same time as the anniversary of a friend's death on my mind.
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29th Jan 2020 5:04pm
I've revisited the loss of my best friend many times in ink. I'm going to read it again with the insight you gave me. Thank you and the sincerest condolences always come from shared loss. 💖
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Anonymous
- Edited 18th Jan 2020 2:59pm
18th Jan 2020 2:51pm
As if we know any better, Josh. As if we know any better.
Your poem is unique in that it comes to us in three parts, all emphasizing futility which harkens back to the inspiration poem by Gluck. Drowning is an act of futility; we thrash about madly to no avail and must accept our fate without immediates answers as to why while time is not on our side.
Good luck in the challenge, Josh!
Your poem is unique in that it comes to us in three parts, all emphasizing futility which harkens back to the inspiration poem by Gluck. Drowning is an act of futility; we thrash about madly to no avail and must accept our fate without immediates answers as to why while time is not on our side.
Good luck in the challenge, Josh!
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27th Jan 2020 10:09pm
Thank you for the comment. Drowning is my worst nightmare - I nearly did when I was about 10 years old in the sea, caught by an incoming tide. I kind of feel gifted with a 'second chance' when I think about it.
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Anonymous
27th Jan 2020 11:09pm
You and me both, Josh. I likewise almost drowned in the deep end of a public pool around that the same age.
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18th Jan 2020 8:42pm
We all are just one thing in a massive world. It is hard to fight what you know is going to come. I just try to live my life until it is my time.
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27th Jan 2020 10:11pm
Thank you for the comment and RL, CosiestPrism. I reckon the more fully we live, the more we are able to die without fear, as just another page in the journey of life in a bigger picture. But meanwhile, as you suggest, we have the here and now.
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19th Jan 2020 2:54am
I’ve noticed a common thread of personification in some of your poems. I particularly like Death in this one— so irreverent in his responsibilities, which cast shadows over our entire lives. It speaks to how small our perspectives really are on that matter, and to our incapability to step out of our own heads and recognize the bigger picture of it.
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27th Jan 2020 10:13pm
Thank you Harry for an interesting comment. I think you're right about putting death in the context of a bigger picture - that bigger picture being life itself to be lived as fully as we are able. best regards, Josh.
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19th Jan 2020 7:06pm
This is so beautifully articulated Josh .. both time and death so brutal in their honesty .. we cannot avoid either ..
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27th Jan 2020 10:15pm
Thank you Jemac - and for the RL too. Glad you liked it. I guess it's best to accept with the inevitable gracefully - and make friends with it :))
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27th Jan 2020 10:53pm
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20th Jan 2020 2:59am
This was amazing Josh. As usual, your delivery is so smooth, clear and eloquent.
Good luck in the comp.
Good luck in the comp.
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27th Jan 2020 10:21pm
Thank you Wally for passing this way again, and doing so consistently. RL much appreciated too. Glad you liked the audio. {I shall go to the dentist tomorrow morning with added confidence in life :)) }
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26th Jan 2020 9:36pm
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27th Jan 2020 10:23pm
LilDragonFly, thank you for reading - and the RL. Glad you felt 'stirred'. Really appreciate your comment. Best regards, Josh.
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27th Jan 2020 10:25pm
Thank you Skyblue too. Really nice of you to pass this way and comment. I've read somewhere that time is the biggest illusion but from experience what you say seems to be true - time rules our lives more than we would wish.
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27th Jan 2020 8:37pm
Death usually seem to arrive prematurely, and uninvited. And such arrogance! Fine writing Josh, and beautifully read.
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27th Jan 2020 10:30pm
Really nice to hear from you again, Crow. Glad you enjoyed the read, and listen. And thank you for the RL too. I guess ultimately one way is to see death as just another part of life - and common to all humanity - and perhaps accepting its inevitability allows us to live more fully day by day.
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1st May 2020 10:05pm
Beautiful... I wish I could write like you. You are inspiring in all I’ve read of your work :)
Joanna
Joanna
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1st May 2020 10:49pm
Thank you Joanna for reading and commenting again, and the RL. I'm glad you find inspiration in some of my poems. Remember that half of a poet's work is to read other poets. I can recommend some good anthologies if you want. I read them all the time, and slowly (like practicing a musical instrument I guess) it begins to sink into one's blood. Indeed, some say that learning poetry is like learning a musical instrument - meaning it takes lots of time and practice - but hey, that's what life is for. All the best, Josh.
(PS: not all my poems, especially the political ones, are that inspiring) :))
(PS: not all my poems, especially the political ones, are that inspiring) :))
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1st May 2020 11:20pm
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28th Jun 2020 5:53pm
Wow! All I can say is I felt every word and every line painted pictures in my mind. You're very talented!
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28th Jun 2020 6:09pm
Thank you Meganne for listening in and commenting. I hope the images the poem evoked were ultimately uplifting. Death is such a taboo subject, to the detriment of our own ability to live life more fully (imho). And thank you for the RL too. Best regards, Josh.