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Dissociating
~Unbalanced ~
one foot
tethered to certainty,
one firmly planted
in the impossible;
the truth now reflecting,
silvery and bold
in her wary,
star-struck eyes
and it’s far more dazzling
than she ever dared
imagine;
she beats back the urge
to take off in any direction,
in every direction;
fight-or-flight
never had anything
on her
~Untethered~
her shoelaces come
undone
and they dance
wildly
in chaotic arcs
as she runs
headlong
into the bright sun,
cool winds from every direction
rushing
over clammy, wet skin
sensitive follicles
gasping for air
as the exertion of her exodus
glistens on her brow
~Undressed~.
her heavy coat,
discarded;
heaped in a pile
by the side of the road,
it’s itchy, angry fibers
stitched together
in neatly mitered squares,
insulated
by the guilt
of her impulsive chaos
stuffed to bursting seams
with gift-wrapped beliefs;
they enveloped her,
but could never seem
to keep her warm;
she left them
on the ground,
to be worn away
by time and elements
the way all old,
unneeded things
should be
one foot
tethered to certainty,
one firmly planted
in the impossible;
the truth now reflecting,
silvery and bold
in her wary,
star-struck eyes
and it’s far more dazzling
than she ever dared
imagine;
she beats back the urge
to take off in any direction,
in every direction;
fight-or-flight
never had anything
on her
~Untethered~
her shoelaces come
undone
and they dance
wildly
in chaotic arcs
as she runs
headlong
into the bright sun,
cool winds from every direction
rushing
over clammy, wet skin
sensitive follicles
gasping for air
as the exertion of her exodus
glistens on her brow
~Undressed~.
her heavy coat,
discarded;
heaped in a pile
by the side of the road,
it’s itchy, angry fibers
stitched together
in neatly mitered squares,
insulated
by the guilt
of her impulsive chaos
stuffed to bursting seams
with gift-wrapped beliefs;
they enveloped her,
but could never seem
to keep her warm;
she left them
on the ground,
to be worn away
by time and elements
the way all old,
unneeded things
should be
Published 27th Oct 2019
| Edited 28th Oct 2019
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27th Oct 2019 9:34pm
This makes me smile so big. Especially the envision of you undressing your insulated guilt.
It's just a wonderful and perfect sight to see.
It's just a wonderful and perfect sight to see.
27th Oct 2019 9:49pm
27th Oct 2019 10:00pm
The actions really carry the piece for me in your terrific metaphors. Intangibles vividly and clearly elucidated is no small feat. Terrific work.
27th Oct 2019 10:01pm
27th Oct 2019 10:22pm
Dear L,
Sweet relief! For me this work spoke volumes to letting go of all the junk keeping us tethered to old habits, toxic or otherwise, and just being free. Sometimes being unbalanced is the best way to find the balance necessary to move forward.
I also admired the font and set up of this piece. Leant itself to a really flowing read. Wonderfully crafted, as usual! H🌷
Sweet relief! For me this work spoke volumes to letting go of all the junk keeping us tethered to old habits, toxic or otherwise, and just being free. Sometimes being unbalanced is the best way to find the balance necessary to move forward.
I also admired the font and set up of this piece. Leant itself to a really flowing read. Wonderfully crafted, as usual! H🌷
27th Oct 2019 10:33pm
Honoria, you make my day with your comments, always. Thank you for seeing the journey as it is. Your kind words are appreciated 💜
27th Oct 2019 10:34pm
27th Oct 2019 11:54pm
28th Oct 2019 00:59am
28th Oct 2019 00:49am
This is wonderfully metaphoric in human nature, Luna. Loved the quilted coat theme!
The only suggestion I have is the following:
ain’t never had nothing
I strongly suggest editing to say
never had anything
The way it's posted now reads a bit awkward compared to the rest of the lines.
Well done!
The only suggestion I have is the following:
ain’t never had nothing
I strongly suggest editing to say
never had anything
The way it's posted now reads a bit awkward compared to the rest of the lines.
Well done!
28th Oct 2019 1:00am
Ooh, caught my southern coming out, did ya? Lol, I get caught up in deep thought when it’s flowing and old habits die hard. Good catch and I like your arrangement much better. Fixed 💜
