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Quiet Haiku🌿
( renga with linked haiku )
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a tapir stays low
holds its breath in the stillness
—motionless tiger
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a crocodile slips
soundless into the river
—startled cranes flying
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from steamy night’s heat
a full moon shimmers brightly
—the sleeping village
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a tapir stays low
holds its breath in the stillness
—motionless tiger
🐊
a crocodile slips
soundless into the river
—startled cranes flying
🌌
from steamy night’s heat
a full moon shimmers brightly
—the sleeping village
Written by
Jade-Pandora
(jade tiger)
Published 26th Mar 2019
| Edited 9th Oct 2019
Author's Note
Renga also consists of linked Tanka, with as few as two, or hundreds.
•The tapir is a large, herbivorous mammal, similar in shape to a pig, with a short, prehensile nose trunk.
•The tapir is a large, herbivorous mammal, similar in shape to a pig, with a short, prehensile nose trunk.
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Re. Quiet Haiku
26th Mar 2019 8:56pm
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26th Mar 2019 9:02pm
I’m most honored, thank you, Hunter dear.🙏🏻
( whispers - no “s” needed for plural )☺️
Jadey 🐾
( whispers - no “s” needed for plural )☺️
Jadey 🐾
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26th Mar 2019 9:02pm
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26th Mar 2019 9:08pm
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27th Mar 2019 1:17am
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28th Mar 2019 6:41pm
Quiet Haiku
26th Mar 2019 10:32pm
This trilogy is furnished with great thought, which, in turn, furnishes the soul with splendor.
The wonderful explosion of a quiet theme!
The wonderful explosion of a quiet theme!
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Re: Quiet Haiku
26th Mar 2019 10:47pm
Your eloquent express and honor of place of my ‘ku on your RL ...has practically rendered me speechless...
gracious thanks, dear Poet.
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gracious thanks, dear Poet.
🙏🏻
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26th Mar 2019 10:45pm
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26th Mar 2019 11:18pm
*with bowed head*
Humble thanks, dear Sky, for such a pairing of inspiration. Haiku has been my rock since I became a haijin (poet of Japanese short form poetry) at the start of 2008. I studied & wrote it straight through that year, then later I taught it and became a mentor.
As for it’s like you watching Steve Vai on guitar, that’s another honor. I got to watch him play “For The Love Of God” once. And I’m one of over 378,000 subscribers of his own personal YouTube account.
So bless you, sister.
*bows deeply *
Humble thanks, dear Sky, for such a pairing of inspiration. Haiku has been my rock since I became a haijin (poet of Japanese short form poetry) at the start of 2008. I studied & wrote it straight through that year, then later I taught it and became a mentor.
As for it’s like you watching Steve Vai on guitar, that’s another honor. I got to watch him play “For The Love Of God” once. And I’m one of over 378,000 subscribers of his own personal YouTube account.
So bless you, sister.
*bows deeply *
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26th Mar 2019 11:21pm
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26th Mar 2019 11:26pm
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27th Mar 2019 1:02am
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Why thank you, Kimmy, I’m so glad you enjoy my work, and I’ve always felt close to nature.
Jadey🙏🏻
Jadey🙏🏻
Re. Quiet Haiku
27th Mar 2019 1:18am
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27th Mar 2019 5:42am
Thank you, my friend, I’m so pleased by your response, and I appreciate you stopping by with your thoughts.
Oh yes that doesn’t surprise me, brother, I just thought I would provide a little blurb to give others a chance to learn about the animal who don’t know. From many comments I have seen you post, you are a font of information I enjoy reading.
Oh yes that doesn’t surprise me, brother, I just thought I would provide a little blurb to give others a chance to learn about the animal who don’t know. From many comments I have seen you post, you are a font of information I enjoy reading.
Re. Quiet Haiku
27th Mar 2019 2:16am
This is so beautiful honey, i love how it depicts even the most
inner turmoil can be subdued, as nature craves peace...
inner turmoil can be subdued, as nature craves peace...
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27th Mar 2019 5:48am
Ooh thank you, dear sister, for your wonderful & insightful presentation of my humble renga... I’m so very touched.
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27th Mar 2019 10:29pm
Haiku can be a difficult format. I feel often we tend to get lost between the lines, which are intended traditionally to carry a message to fruition. Sometimes too physical, sometimes too ephemeral, but I feel you have balanced the elements well in these lines. There is the spiritual quality beyond the natural elements, each message carried through subtly and fully. An enjoyable experience.
Daniel
Daniel
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28th Mar 2019 6:58pm
I thank you most gracious bringer of such harmonious observations for this haijin’s simple offering of brushstrokes.
Jade🙏🏻
Jade🙏🏻
Re. Quiet Haiku
28th Mar 2019 5:57pm
I'm picturing the opening scene of a film/book and am wondering what happens next ... beautifully evocative.
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28th Mar 2019 6:47pm
Thank you so much, Josh, with your response that almost has me hold my own breath all over again.
🙏🏻
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Re. Quiet Haiku
29th Mar 2019 4:23pm
There is so much beauty in nature, I know you agree. Your haiku fit in peacefully beside that beauty in a wonderful way, Jade. Thanks.
John
John
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29th Mar 2019 7:03pm
My humble thanks, dear John, for your words of support that always honor my work.
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30th Mar 2019 11:21pm
The haiku may be quiet but it resonates with me. Well done! I think Ninja would agree.
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30th Mar 2019 11:33pm
Heheh, aw my crowfly friend, you’re so dear with such words of honor... and I agree with you about Ninja agreeing! x
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A gracious thanks to the sister Cat who has honored her
Tigress, partially seen
as she emerges slowly
from the forest growth
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Tigress, partially seen
as she emerges slowly
from the forest growth
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1st Apr 2019 1:57pm
moon in silent room
breath barely stirring silver air
face like jungle cat
How I adore this renga... my tiger
tomcat
breath barely stirring silver air
face like jungle cat
How I adore this renga... my tiger
tomcat
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5th Apr 2019 8:59pm
Dear tomcat...
her prowl light as air
the undergrowth has no voice
his tiger pounces
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her prowl light as air
the undergrowth has no voice
his tiger pounces
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