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moonshine
i fell into the day
& your sun
smiled on me
with a backwards moon
grimace
i release my shadows
to taste your shine
while drunk off the rays
spilled from a sideways grin
they catch my scent
sex on the wind
with a heady mixture
of desire & lust
they bow before the dark
i lewdly display
my pink blushes
at her harlotry
shone in your light's eyes
the shadows drunken
& mischievous
return to me
& uncover my truth
allowing you to feast
from virginal blasphemies
my cherry is popped
by your sharp intellect
& i recoil from the pain
i weep that my dark art
has been known by mortal man
the sun raped the moon
a virgin who played whore
while the shadows
silently looked on
drunk off your light
they conceal me no more
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Re. moonshine
11th Dec 2017 1:24am
Whoah...
" while drunk off the rays
spilled from a sideways grin
they catch my scent
sex on the wind
with a heady mixture
of desire & lust ...
& uncover my truth
allowing you to feast
from virginal blasphemies
my cherry is popped
by your sharp intellect
& i recoil from the pain "
Will you teach me to come up with these wonderfully dark and amazing lines??
Such breathtaking piece with your mystically dark sensual words!
My...I have so much to learn
Love
H
" while drunk off the rays
spilled from a sideways grin
they catch my scent
sex on the wind
with a heady mixture
of desire & lust ...
& uncover my truth
allowing you to feast
from virginal blasphemies
my cherry is popped
by your sharp intellect
& i recoil from the pain "
Will you teach me to come up with these wonderfully dark and amazing lines??
Such breathtaking piece with your mystically dark sensual words!
My...I have so much to learn
Love
H
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Re: Re. moonshine
11th Dec 2017 1:29am
thank you most graciously beautiful one.. I think your voice is uniquely fantastic already.. I am deeply humbled & honored by your comment.. you gifted me with smiles :)
love Crim
love Crim
Re. moonshine
11th Dec 2017 1:47am
the shadows drunken
& mischevious
return to me
& uncover my truth
allowing you to feast
from virginal blasphemies
i weep that my dark art
has been known by mortal man
the sun raped the moon
a vigin who played whore
while the shadows
silently looked on
drunk off your light
they conceal me no more
Sweet Jesus! What a brilliant piece of seduction and surrender .... so very well penned.
In short and in sum .... your ink bleeds all the colors of a rainbow
With deep admiration
~Wicked
& mischevious
return to me
& uncover my truth
allowing you to feast
from virginal blasphemies
i weep that my dark art
has been known by mortal man
the sun raped the moon
a vigin who played whore
while the shadows
silently looked on
drunk off your light
they conceal me no more
Sweet Jesus! What a brilliant piece of seduction and surrender .... so very well penned.
In short and in sum .... your ink bleeds all the colors of a rainbow
With deep admiration
~Wicked
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Re: Re. moonshine
11th Dec 2017 1:51am
thank you graciously Wicked One i'm blushing like a school girl.. so happy to have gotten this response from you :)
love Crim
love Crim
Re. moonshine
11th Dec 2017 1:57am
Sexy and dark. Yummy!
You have me imagining sex drunk on moonshine.
I love this. I want to keep it but I have to go through my reading list again.
You have me imagining sex drunk on moonshine.
I love this. I want to keep it but I have to go through my reading list again.
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Re: Re. moonshine
11th Dec 2017 1:59am
thank you beautiful Jade i'm so happy you like it.. just knowing you wanted to add makes me beam with joy :)
love Crim
love Crim
Re: Re. moonshine
11th Dec 2017 2:10am
Re. moonshine
Anonymous
11th Dec 2017 2:29am
🔥.... - .. ~💘

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Re. moonshine
11th Dec 2017 2:31am
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11th Dec 2017 2:43am
Re. moonshine
Anonymous
11th Dec 2017 4:22am
My love there are so many lines within this ink I could highlight which just capture me...I over these in particular
“while drunk off the rays
spilled from a sideways grin
they catch my scent
sex on the wind
with a heady mixture
of desire & lust”
~ it goes without saying your “pink blushes” also made me wiggle quite a bit 😈
I love you passionately
yours always & forever
xoxoxox Love Taryn
“while drunk off the rays
spilled from a sideways grin
they catch my scent
sex on the wind
with a heady mixture
of desire & lust”
~ it goes without saying your “pink blushes” also made me wiggle quite a bit 😈
I love you passionately
yours always & forever
xoxoxox Love Taryn

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Re: Re. moonshine
11th Dec 2017 4:26am
giggles thank you my love.. you always make my days & nights brighter with your presence :)
I love you madly..
love Brenda
I love you madly..
love Brenda
Re. moonshine
Anonymous
11th Dec 2017 6:06am
"the sun raped the moon
a virgin who played whore
while the shadows
silently looked on
drunk off your light
they conceal me no more''
My dear lady
This reminded me of EOP
The boundaries which divide Life from Death
Are at its best Shadowy and Vague.
Who shall say where the one ends, and the other begins?''
Your writing reminds of modern day Poe. Mwah 💋
Beth
a virgin who played whore
while the shadows
silently looked on
drunk off your light
they conceal me no more''
My dear lady
This reminded me of EOP
The boundaries which divide Life from Death
Are at its best Shadowy and Vague.
Who shall say where the one ends, and the other begins?''
Your writing reminds of modern day Poe. Mwah 💋
Beth

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Re: Re. moonshine
11th Dec 2017 11:30pm
thank you beautiful Beth
a better compliment I couldn't receive
I'm blushing & smiling wide here :)
love Brenda
a better compliment I couldn't receive
I'm blushing & smiling wide here :)
love Brenda
Re. moonshine
Anonymous
11th Dec 2017 7:44am
What a beautiful poem Crim, I enjoyed this immensely, especially lines like “sex on the wind, with a heady mixture of lust and desire”
Made my morning to read! Xo
Made my morning to read! Xo

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Re: Re. moonshine
11th Dec 2017 11:31pm
Re. moonshine
"my cherry is popped
by your sharp intellect
& i recoil from the pain
i weep that my dark art
has been known by mortal man"
love this my crimsin star....celestial copulation makes the clouds light up...and my mind point high...metaphoric sensation of outer body relation
my eyes to your skies
Jeff
by your sharp intellect
& i recoil from the pain
i weep that my dark art
has been known by mortal man"
love this my crimsin star....celestial copulation makes the clouds light up...and my mind point high...metaphoric sensation of outer body relation
my eyes to your skies
Jeff
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Re: Re. moonshine
11th Dec 2017 11:32pm
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Anonymous
11th Dec 2017 10:05am
"sun raped the moon..etc." awesome writing again Crim. Can only bow in silence.

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11th Dec 2017 11:33pm
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11th Dec 2017 11:33pm
Re. moonshine
11th Dec 2017 7:38pm
This is magic, Lady Crim. Such powerful fantasy:
the sun raped the moon
a virgin who played whore
while the shadows
silently looked on
drunk off your light
they conceal me no more
A worthy addition to your dark art. It shines, no doubt about it.
the sun raped the moon
a virgin who played whore
while the shadows
silently looked on
drunk off your light
they conceal me no more
A worthy addition to your dark art. It shines, no doubt about it.
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Re: Re. moonshine
11th Dec 2017 11:36pm
thank you graciousl dearest Sir Crow
you made my night shine with your comment :)
love Crim
you made my night shine with your comment :)
love Crim
Re. moonshine
11th Dec 2017 11:42pm
Re: Re. moonshine
11th Dec 2017 11:45pm
thank you most graciously dearest poet
& welcome to DU I look foward to reading you..
love Crim
& welcome to DU I look foward to reading you..
love Crim
Re. moonshine
12th Dec 2017 1:55am
Brilliant and clever! Love the metaphor throughout. Excellent writing Crim!
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12th Dec 2017 1:58am
Re. moonshine
12th Dec 2017 2:58am
I can only give this poem my ultimate compliment...I wish that I had penned it. Bravo crimsin.
Cheers...Harry
Cheers...Harry
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Re: Re. moonshine
thank you dearest Harry most graciously
that is a beautiful compliment
it touches my soul..
causing me to glow
in its warmth..
you are deeply appreciated..
love Crim
that is a beautiful compliment
it touches my soul..
causing me to glow
in its warmth..
you are deeply appreciated..
love Crim
Re. moonshine
Anonymous
14th Dec 2017 3:09pm
There is so much sensual vulnerability in this write, my beautiful Dark Angel. Such beauty could never remain hidden for long. The glow will burn through the deepest cover of darkness. I do so love you, gorgeous. So very much
...ever your Willow
...ever your Willow

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Re: Re. moonshine
15th Dec 2017 00:48am
thank you beautiful Willow
for such a lovely comment
gifting me smiles :)
I love you..
Brenda
for such a lovely comment
gifting me smiles :)
I love you..
Brenda
Re. moonshine
18th Dec 2017 10:15am
Hi, my first comment on a poem...
I feel like I've been throttled.
I seldom read other poets,
I just vomit my own for the most part.
It's a strange feeling being thrown about in someone else's language constructs.
I feel like I've been throttled.
I seldom read other poets,
I just vomit my own for the most part.
It's a strange feeling being thrown about in someone else's language constructs.
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Re: Re. moonshine
18th Dec 2017 10:18am
hello beautiful Monalisa
& welcome to DU..
I think you will come to enjoy
reading other poets
while perfecting your own art..
thank you for the visit..
love Crim
& welcome to DU..
I think you will come to enjoy
reading other poets
while perfecting your own art..
thank you for the visit..
love Crim