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habit
breaking the habit of the thrill
OH i love how it feel,
turning my eyes & moving my hips
i just love to kiss your lips..
you break the pain and bring the new
i love how you feel inside me too,
the heat between us makes me high,
i love the way we moun and sigh,
waiting for night to fall in hand,
so we can go to wounder land....
-Kumiko Yamamoto
OH i love how it feel,
turning my eyes & moving my hips
i just love to kiss your lips..
you break the pain and bring the new
i love how you feel inside me too,
the heat between us makes me high,
i love the way we moun and sigh,
waiting for night to fall in hand,
so we can go to wounder land....
-Kumiko Yamamoto
Published 17th Sep 2011
| Edited 30th Nov 2011
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7th Dec 2011 5:21am
you have lots of great work. my favorite line is the heat between us making me high. thankyou for the read
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9th Dec 2011 2:50am
I too have a couple short and sweet ones :) sometimes that's all it takes to get the job done. Good job
10th Dec 2011 5:15am
18th Jul 2012 11:55pm
You say in a few lines what it takes me paragraphs to convey.
Im gonna study your stuff Grrrrllll : > )
thank you for sharing
26th Jan 2013 7:10am
I like how descriptive your poem
My favorite line i love how you feel inside me too !!!!
My favorite line i love how you feel inside me too !!!!
26th Jan 2013 7:13am
How you going Alex, alright mate. This poem isn't too bad but you need to work on your grammar and punctuation especially, metaphor usuage and strong suggestive imagery laces with the the subtly of the punch in metaphors, don't forget to finish strong too mate, but well done! Interesting to say the least mate.
19th Aug 2013 2:30pm
I love your elegantly flowing rhymes, especially in the first two stanzas. Rock on!
16th May 2018 4:12am
since 2011 and now 2018 you must have experienced gained well done looks like ur first one
