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Scandalous
Till seeing him through stealthy looks,
I used to take my life from books.
A fairytale, fit like a glove
Was how I gauged the way of love.
But on the day I saw him where
He was a bouncer, dancing bear,
At that gay bar/ pool hall/ and club.
(I was a minor, was the rub)
I lusted for his rock & roll,
His heart I sought, my heart he stole.
Like Icarus, I felt the heat
Of melting wings each time we'd meet.
He was my biker on his hog,
To rev it through the highway's fog
And vibrate 'tween our thighs as one,
As he would take me for a run.
And when he wrapped me in his sin,
The smell of leather off his skin
Mixed with the pungent scent of sex.
My friends all said it's scandalous!
This is entered in the DUP competition
"C O N F E S S I O N S".
I used to take my life from books.
A fairytale, fit like a glove
Was how I gauged the way of love.
But on the day I saw him where
He was a bouncer, dancing bear,
At that gay bar/ pool hall/ and club.
(I was a minor, was the rub)
I lusted for his rock & roll,
His heart I sought, my heart he stole.
Like Icarus, I felt the heat
Of melting wings each time we'd meet.
He was my biker on his hog,
To rev it through the highway's fog
And vibrate 'tween our thighs as one,
As he would take me for a run.
And when he wrapped me in his sin,
The smell of leather off his skin
Mixed with the pungent scent of sex.
My friends all said it's scandalous!
This is entered in the DUP competition
"C O N F E S S I O N S".
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Re. Scandalous
Anonymous
15th Oct 2016 2:19pm
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15th Oct 2016 2:28pm
Re. Scandalous
15th Oct 2016 3:43pm
Bouncers and Bikers and Bears... Oh my!
😲.
I'm aghast!...
😆😆😆😆😆
Wonderful Jade!
😲.
I'm aghast!...
😆😆😆😆😆
Wonderful Jade!
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Anonymous
15th Oct 2016 5:30pm
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Anonymous
15th Oct 2016 4:24pm
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Wow... really?
As for what version this is, it's the one I wrote as the original just a few hours ago. So yes, it's brand new and complete for the competition I entered it in. I appreciate you stopping by and sharing your thoughts with me. --Jadey xo
As for what version this is, it's the one I wrote as the original just a few hours ago. So yes, it's brand new and complete for the competition I entered it in. I appreciate you stopping by and sharing your thoughts with me. --Jadey xo
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Anonymous
15th Oct 2016 5:31pm
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Anonymous
15th Oct 2016 5:55pm
I could visualize every line and smell it.. stimulating all my senses dear, Jade.
🎃Trish
🎃Trish
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15th Oct 2016 8:14pm
<puts on a🎃 mask and hugs Trish from behind>
Boooo! Guess whoooo?...
with another way to stimulate!
I'm so pleased how much my ink was able to embrace YOU sweetheart! And thank you so much for sharing with me, I'm thoroughly in the spirit!
Jade👻
Boooo! Guess whoooo?...
with another way to stimulate!
I'm so pleased how much my ink was able to embrace YOU sweetheart! And thank you so much for sharing with me, I'm thoroughly in the spirit!
Jade👻
Re. Scandalous
15th Oct 2016 8:09pm
Nothing wrong with being an easy rider, born to be wild. Loved this down and dirty write. I'd say more, but my reputation's at stake.
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Re. Scandalous
Woo! Oh how tempting that must be for you, but you show how stoic that reputation is, my crowfly friend. I just should be good-naturedly disappointed but I'm too impressed to be. Thank you for getting a little dirty anyway, and enjoying it... the poem!😉
Re. Scandalous
15th Oct 2016 10:08pm
"I was a minor, was the rub" is an awesome telling parenthetical. Jade, I enjoy this piece. The Icarus melting wing parallel is awesome. Brava!
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16th Oct 2016 5:35am
Dear GW, I could hug you for your lovely words of appreciation & exceptional embrace!
My grateful thanks,
always
Jadey
My grateful thanks,
always
Jadey
Re. Scandalous
16th Oct 2016 4:48am
Like Icarus, I felt the heat
Of melting wings each time we'd meet > Wow!
You put a huge smile on my face with this write!
The comments were very entertaining as well :-D
Of melting wings each time we'd meet > Wow!
You put a huge smile on my face with this write!
The comments were very entertaining as well :-D
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Re. Scandalous
16th Oct 2016 5:27am
(🙊stifling a chuckle...)
Oooo, thanks so much for enjoying my naughty little ink, darling Duende, and gifting me your gleaming grin!😃
Oooo, thanks so much for enjoying my naughty little ink, darling Duende, and gifting me your gleaming grin!😃
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16th Oct 2016 8:58am
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16th Oct 2016 5:47pm
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16th Oct 2016 12:53pm
I love the naughty parts:) Jade. Such a talented writer.
He was my biker on his hog,
To rev it through the highway's fog
And vibrate 'tween our thighs as one,
As he would take me for a run.
>>>Nice.
He was my biker on his hog,
To rev it through the highway's fog
And vibrate 'tween our thighs as one,
As he would take me for a run.
>>>Nice.
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Thank you, our dearest Grace! Your sweet comment that awaited me this morning gave me a special feeling...
most honored.
xo
most honored.
xo
Re. Scandalous
16th Oct 2016 7:24pm
And when he wrapped me in his sin,
The smell of leather off his skin
Mixed with the pungent scent of sex.
My friends all said it's scandalous!
loved it
The smell of leather off his skin
Mixed with the pungent scent of sex.
My friends all said it's scandalous!
loved it
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16th Oct 2016 8:16pm
Gracias, querida, agradezco su visita, y que me deja saber de su disfrute.💫
Re. Scandalous
17th Oct 2016 1:45pm
scandal for two. little Red ditched the wolf for the Bear.
hot spices in your poetic brew...
hot spices in your poetic brew...
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19th Dec 2016 12:15pm
An John, I missed your wonderful comment when it arrived. Two months later and here I am to "ketchup".., heheh, I couldn't resist with your mention of hot spices, thought I should've said Tabasco!