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"Prefered Customer"
"This one's top o' the line!," she insists
Pressing the new "State of Dreams" mattress
The name tag of "Monique" perched proudly on her breast
"And it's worth every single fuck, er, buck!," she enthuses
Chuckling over the Freudian slip
"A demonstration being called for!"
She shoves her studly, gaping co-star backward
Deftly tugging down his jeans
Discovering the hard on of an "easy sale"
"Monique" mounts him, not bothering to talk price
Sliding away until a spectacular cum shot
And her bonus thus assured
Still content to be part of the bargain
For yet another "deeply satisfied customer."
Pressing the new "State of Dreams" mattress
The name tag of "Monique" perched proudly on her breast
"And it's worth every single fuck, er, buck!," she enthuses
Chuckling over the Freudian slip
"A demonstration being called for!"
She shoves her studly, gaping co-star backward
Deftly tugging down his jeans
Discovering the hard on of an "easy sale"
"Monique" mounts him, not bothering to talk price
Sliding away until a spectacular cum shot
And her bonus thus assured
Still content to be part of the bargain
For yet another "deeply satisfied customer."
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Re. "Prefered Customer"
30th Aug 2015 6:42pm
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30th Aug 2015 9:35pm
Thank you Crim! So glad you liked this. It'd be a trip to watch one of these being filmed. I've just been checking some of them out online now and then. Like most everyone else, I suspect.
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Re. "Prefered Customer"
30th Aug 2015 7:50pm
My fav maybe of yours, idk dug the Croatoan one so much.
Loved you put "monique" in quotations in ..."monique" mounts him...
"Discovering the hard on of an easy sale." giggles
Tickled my pussy hard!
Fun Crow. And you said you were anal, like to see you get! Lol
Love when wicked doesn't seem trashy.
You pulled it off "deftly"
🎸Strummin my taint with his fingers....hey. Gonna finda place to put that.
Teehee! J
Loved you put "monique" in quotations in ..."monique" mounts him...
"Discovering the hard on of an easy sale." giggles
Tickled my pussy hard!
Fun Crow. And you said you were anal, like to see you get! Lol
Love when wicked doesn't seem trashy.
You pulled it off "deftly"
🎸Strummin my taint with his fingers....hey. Gonna finda place to put that.
Teehee! J
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30th Aug 2015 9:41pm
"I heard (she) sang a good song." "Killing Me Softly"'s a cool tune, one of the better ones from the '70s. "Monique" probably has some drab name and had to come up with a catchy hardcore pseudonym. Glad you liked this Jennifer!
Re. "Prefered Customer"
30th Aug 2015 8:26pm
Really loved it so witty. Great tell.
I can barely find someone to help
Me find my size in a shoe.
Great fun Sir Crow
I can barely find someone to help
Me find my size in a shoe.
Great fun Sir Crow
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30th Aug 2015 9:44pm
Thanks knot2much! I can barely stand shopping, particularly for clothes. Just jeans and t-shirts for me these days. Mattress shopping does have some appeal....
Re. "Prefered Customer"
30th Aug 2015 8:42pm
Where is this mattress store?? I think I need a new bed. Great write very well written.
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30th Aug 2015 9:47pm
Only in my mind, I'm afraid. They would make a great front for some pros. All they'd have to do is pull the shades... Thanks DevilsPoet!
Re. "Prefered Customer"
30th Aug 2015 8:43pm
Where is this mattress store?? I think I need a new bed. Great write very well written.
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Re. "Prefered Customer"
LMFAO.....still can't seem to stop!!
Your piece creates a very vivid visual, for me...!
This reads like watching an ad for a an x-rated movie channel...couldn't help but imagine the "studly co-star" walking into that mattress store...being approached by the very 'cumly' beauty... hearing her sultry, taunting voice ....and picturing his surprised smile, when she offers that ' demonstration '.....
(And as the viewers enjoy his ' deeply satisfied ' expression at the climatic conclusion, the camera pans to a wide-angel of all those others vying to be the next one on her "Preferred Customer" list ....)
Mo Chara, this is one that m u s t be revisited--time and again....and i am adding it to my reading list so i am able to do just that!!
Simply a Superior Scribe--to be sure!!
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Re: Re. "Prefered Customer"
31st Aug 2015 7:40pm
You got it Enchantress! I intended this to be about a x-rated movie or porn shoot, although I could have gone into greater detail. There's the cum shot, and the bonus provided when one is achieved or caught. But I'm easy. I'm just glad it's fun to read. Thank you!
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31st Aug 2015 00:31am
SIr Fly. . .I'll never look at buying mattresses the same!. . .xoxo, Devlin;)
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31st Aug 2015 7:41pm
Re. "Prefered Customer"
31st Aug 2015 4:36am
Crowfly, I agree with Devlin. I will never look at a mattress the same way again. Or a Monique. Believe me or not, I have a friend by that name. Good read...funny actually.
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31st Aug 2015 7:43pm
Don't know any Monique's myself.. Has a nice ring to it, though. Thanks Grace!
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31st Aug 2015 7:44pm
Re. "Prefered Customer"
31st Aug 2015 12:39pm
i'm almighty pissed off that my local tempur store, doesn't sell add-ons ltm
this was fantastic crow, always so clever
much enjoyed
xoxox
this was fantastic crow, always so clever
much enjoyed
xoxox
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31st Aug 2015 7:46pm
I just drop by for "Monique," maybe on false pretenses but what the hell. Thanks Katja!
Re. "Prefered Customer"
31st Aug 2015 10:50pm
Did thid occur in the showroom window and did he have to buy the, gently soiled, floor-model afterwards? This is a fun fantasy piece, Crow. Bravo!
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Re. "Prefered Customer"
1st Sep 2015 2:28am
"And it's worth every single fuck, er, buck!," she enthuses"... chucklin wif you here mister.. sultry saleslady pegged!
never have known an un-sexy Monique.. then to spring your scripted star of the saleslady? great twist!
"Discovering the hard on of an "easy sale" ..absolutely priceless line! .. still a'smirk about it..
...and feeling cheated that my last mattress purchase was lacking camera, cum shot & *this heat.
well painted in my mind, sweet Crow.. shiny eve to you ;)
~d
never have known an un-sexy Monique.. then to spring your scripted star of the saleslady? great twist!
"Discovering the hard on of an "easy sale" ..absolutely priceless line! .. still a'smirk about it..
...and feeling cheated that my last mattress purchase was lacking camera, cum shot & *this heat.
well painted in my mind, sweet Crow.. shiny eve to you ;)
~d
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Re. "Prefered Customer"
3rd Sep 2015 00:28am
You gotta hand it to Monique. She knows how to squeeze it out of ya. Good story telling Crow!
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