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Give and take
He came in frustrated, stressed.
Barely giving me a nod.
But it did not hurt.
I fixed him a drink.
Walked over to him in his chair.
Removed from him the handfull of bills and worry.
Take it easy baby.
Look at me.
I raised my dress to my hips.
Spread my legs some.
He sighed, grabbed my waist and pulled me in and onto him.
Knees around him, i reached in unzipped and freed him.
Hard already, i slid down his cock.
He reached up behind shoulders,
held tight
pulled down
and buried himself, and the day in me.
I rocked him into easiness, and into the evening..
Barely giving me a nod.
But it did not hurt.
I fixed him a drink.
Walked over to him in his chair.
Removed from him the handfull of bills and worry.
Take it easy baby.
Look at me.
I raised my dress to my hips.
Spread my legs some.
He sighed, grabbed my waist and pulled me in and onto him.
Knees around him, i reached in unzipped and freed him.
Hard already, i slid down his cock.
He reached up behind shoulders,
held tight
pulled down
and buried himself, and the day in me.
I rocked him into easiness, and into the evening..
Written by
calamitygin
(Jennifer Michael McCurry)
Published 17th Aug 2015
| Edited 18th Aug 2015
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Re. Give and take
17th Aug 2015 6:27pm
such a beautiful, tender, sensual erotic lovely Jennifer..
I love this ink..
with love Brenda
I love this ink..
with love Brenda
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Re: Re. Give and take
17th Aug 2015 6:31pm
Thank you. I really like this myself. Was inspired by both fanstasy and reality. 💋
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17th Aug 2015 6:43pm
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17th Aug 2015 6:48pm
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Anonymous
17th Aug 2015 6:54pm
Thank you for this very tender moment you have given us. 'Nuff said . . .
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17th Aug 2015 7:10pm
Re. Give and take
17th Aug 2015 9:45pm
I almost wish you'd end it with
"and buried himself, and the day in me."
I get the rocking bit but it's really already implied and seems an anticlimax (no pun intended).
"and buried himself, and the day in me."
I get the rocking bit but it's really already implied and seems an anticlimax (no pun intended).
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I considered. It. But there is something i like better with it there. Thank you though! 💋
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18th Aug 2015 11:42am
Though always willing, and never offended to hear suggestions.That line...
. I rocked him into easiness and into the evening
Is meant strongly. Was felt. And i stand behind it completely. Not anticlimactic. Essence.
I do still thank you sincerely though ✌
. I rocked him into easiness and into the evening
Is meant strongly. Was felt. And i stand behind it completely. Not anticlimactic. Essence.
I do still thank you sincerely though ✌
Re: Re. Give and take
18th Aug 2015 5:07pm
Well, you asked for honest critique so I offered it. But what IS honest critique, honestly? Unless grammatical it's really just an opinion. And while it's nice that you defend your work (because you should), no defense is necessary as I'm not attacking it. Just offering my opinion per your request.
Keep writing, sister. It's our differences that make us all unique. xo
Keep writing, sister. It's our differences that make us all unique. xo
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Re: Re. Give and take
18th Aug 2015 6:36pm
No anger, as i said appreciated, welcomed the suggestion. And i really did make that clear doll. I did need to defend it because i had wavered, then deleted that comment. For more personal reasons. Felt it was owed to someone, not you.
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18th Aug 2015 6:37pm
Re. Give and take
17th Aug 2015 9:56pm
This is very sensual but also compassionate. A turn on that warms my heart in the process. That's rare! Fine erotic work from a kind soul.
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17th Aug 2015 11:23pm
Re. Give and take
17th Aug 2015 10:54pm
So wonderful how easy you write erotica...this poem paints the picture of two people so in love an so comfortable and easy with each other.
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17th Aug 2015 11:24pm
Re. Give and take
18th Aug 2015 2:42am
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An that is by far the best compliment i have recieved today.
Thanks. 💋
Nice to meet you
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Anonymous
18th Aug 2015 3:12am
I am rocked.
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Re. Give and take
18th Aug 2015 3:50am
Short, sweet, and so sensual>making it look easy Jen
Simple and stunning.
Keith
Simple and stunning.
Keith
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Thank you Keith Im not sure that it was easy, but it wasnt hard. Appreciated.
Re. Give and take
18th Aug 2015 11:08am
Oh sweet the gods, how fucking sensually serious.. we share much common entrances.. yet interests.
A wanton woman, yes now please you
have sculptured out of me. Beautiful
bella
A wanton woman, yes now please you
have sculptured out of me. Beautiful
bella
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18th Aug 2015 11:14am
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18th Aug 2015 12:33pm
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18th Aug 2015 12:40pm
Re. Give and take
18th Aug 2015 3:17pm
A welcome home stress reliever that any man would love to receive. Beautiful and sensual.
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18th Aug 2015 3:50pm
Re. Give and take
18th Aug 2015 5:01pm
Despite the erotic content, this is actually a tender piece. A softness shows through here. Enjoyed this.
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18th Aug 2015 6:20pm
Re. Give and take
18th Aug 2015 5:20pm
" held tight
pulled down
and buried himself, and the day in me."
~most favored lines.. you raise the stifling Cali temp's w/this thought darlins, luvluv!
We, as the soft cradle of solace, shud all-ways give our man this beautiful surrender. ['specially on stressed days]
You have done so purrfectly here. call me *addicted to your pen.. cuz I am!
luvstufs lady Jen ;)
~d
pulled down
and buried himself, and the day in me."
~most favored lines.. you raise the stifling Cali temp's w/this thought darlins, luvluv!
We, as the soft cradle of solace, shud all-ways give our man this beautiful surrender. ['specially on stressed days]
You have done so purrfectly here. call me *addicted to your pen.. cuz I am!
luvstufs lady Jen ;)
~d
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18th Aug 2015 6:27pm
Ah! Thank you sweetly. Am always exited by even your comments, let alone your poetry! I have learned so much down here, especially from the great, ladies. 🌹So strong, and stirring with their sexuality.
Re. Give and take
19th Aug 2015 00:33am
Holy Jesus!!! Mmmm
U completely knocked my shorts loose with the last two stanzas!!! Wow... I'd loved to 'rocked into easiness' lol... A fav!
U completely knocked my shorts loose with the last two stanzas!!! Wow... I'd loved to 'rocked into easiness' lol... A fav!
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19th Aug 2015 1:30am
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20th Aug 2015 00:08am
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Anonymous
20th Aug 2015 6:41pm
"Hard already, i slid down his cock.
He reached up behind shoulders,
held tight
pulled down
and buried himself, and the day in me"
Luvin the level of intimacy and compassion expressed here...such a lovely thing to come home to...ah yes..
Short yet poignant...it's nice to see someone who innerstands that home should be a place of healing..the power of a woman used as intended..
So lovely this read is...
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20th Aug 2015 7:35pm
Im happy you liked it. And i love this. I write about sex in all kinds of ways, this still reflects the sub in me. But even when a bit wilder, always, i want with someone i trust and feel intamacy with before we get intimate biblically.
The feelings and ways in this, are ideal.
But my crazy fantacy pieces, lol not so
Much. And then, I always make clear, its just writing, not my way.
Glad you appreciate those sentiments.
The feelings and ways in this, are ideal.
But my crazy fantacy pieces, lol not so
Much. And then, I always make clear, its just writing, not my way.
Glad you appreciate those sentiments.
Re. Give and take
22nd Aug 2015 8:08am
and buried himself, and the day in me. "
Felt personally that it could have finished there but that's just me and how i read it
but let's not take anything away from what is quite an arousing piece and one to spark my imaginative mind into life
With the scenes you've described so well.
Rose.
Felt personally that it could have finished there but that's just me and how i read it
but let's not take anything away from what is quite an arousing piece and one to spark my imaginative mind into life
With the scenes you've described so well.
Rose.
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22nd Aug 2015 8:30am
You wernt the only one, and i considered it. In the end the last line was peronal between myself and the one this poem honors, so i kept it. Thsbks though! For reading and saying sweet things! 💋
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26th Aug 2015 10:49am
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26th Aug 2015 10:52am
Thank you, im happy you had an emotional reaction. Most poems should.
Happy to see a new name reading my pieces.
🚬💋J
Happy to see a new name reading my pieces.
🚬💋J
Re. Give and take
4th Oct 2015 3:00pm
The love you bestowed on him was inspiring to behold. To offer your man such comfort from his troubles is the ultimate kindness. You rocked him into your sex with the compassion of a woman on a mission to ease your lover into the night. Then ending was tender and had a bluesy feel. I can see this happening in an apartment somewhere in the city between two lovers with little money but lots of love. Beautiful my darling just like the soul who created it. ;-)
Love and kisses,
John
Love and kisses,
John
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4th Oct 2015 4:01pm
Thank you. Maybe my favorite piece. This is what i describe when saying i have a Sub nature even when my lover is not a Dom. I give myself and take pleasure and freedom in pleasing.
Love you John for your insight into my poetry and your deep look and soft touch of my soul.
Warm wet kisses, and would love to take a slow slide down uou.
Jennifer
Love you John for your insight into my poetry and your deep look and soft touch of my soul.
Warm wet kisses, and would love to take a slow slide down uou.
Jennifer