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Baby all gone
She doesn't really like to talk
not when everyone is circled around
trying to put words onto her tongue
but she likes to say "all gone"
and she's a fair understanding
of when to say it
like when she comes to visit
and turns off the tv, or my laptop
or takes the last cookie
she'll look right at me and say it
with a mischievous twinkle in her eyes
she can sound a sigh of resignation
before sleep binds her eyes closed
or when she needs to stop running
'cos the wind's blown her hat off
or when there's no chocolate left
and she's no stranger to showing frustration
with two clenched fists and a firm foot stomp
she'll shout something, a single muffled word
!! ..and by-golly she'll mean it
she's not even two yet
but she can talk when she feels like it
just not when people want her to
Written by
lepperochan
(Craic-Dealer)
Published 29th Apr 2015
| Edited 16th May 2015
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Re: Baby all gone
30th Apr 2015 00:02am
Reminds me of the of a three year old that enjoys tormenting me.
"Cute write, beautiful child."
"Cute write, beautiful child."
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re: Re: Baby all gone
30th Apr 2015 1:39am
Heh, good stuff man, it'll keep you young
Cheers for dropping by, good fellow. Much appreciated
Cheers for dropping by, good fellow. Much appreciated
Re: Baby all gone
Anonymous
30th Apr 2015 00:47am
This is lovely! So endearing without being completely steeped in over the top cuteness. Well done!
Let's hope she holds onto this trait. Speaking when others want you to is sometimes a very bad thing.
Let's hope she holds onto this trait. Speaking when others want you to is sometimes a very bad thing.
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re: Re: Baby all gone
30th Apr 2015 2:11am
Thank you, Miss Minerva
I tried to keep the cute to a minimum, cut some more out in an edit post posting
I think you're right 'bout talkin on demand. I'm sure her parents cant wait for her to start rambling on. It's all good :)
Cheers most kindly for droppin' by , Miss. and for leaving your thoughts
I tried to keep the cute to a minimum, cut some more out in an edit post posting
I think you're right 'bout talkin on demand. I'm sure her parents cant wait for her to start rambling on. It's all good :)
Cheers most kindly for droppin' by , Miss. and for leaving your thoughts
Re: Baby all gone
Anonymous
30th Apr 2015 10:57pm
I hope she never loses those qualities. :D
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re: Re: Baby all gone
1st May 2015 00:01am
Cheers, Miss
I'm inclined to agree wholeheartedly
Thanks much for dropping in and leaving your footprint
I'm inclined to agree wholeheartedly
Thanks much for dropping in and leaving your footprint
Re: Baby all gone
1st May 2015 5:08am
Craic at his best, ink directed by love of the child.
That you can see her, under the layers of childhood, is what makes this a pleasure to read.
That you can see her, under the layers of childhood, is what makes this a pleasure to read.
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re: Re: Baby all gone
1st May 2015 5:13pm
Cheers Tankgirl
Very good of you to say, and thank you for dropping by to say it :),
Very good of you to say, and thank you for dropping by to say it :),
Re: Baby all gone
1st May 2015 10:18pm
So precious … certainly don't rush her, she will soon have very much to say about everything …
Beautiful ink Craic
Beautiful ink Craic
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re: Re: Baby all gone
2nd May 2015 10:56pm
cheers most kindly, dear lady. Ah yes, wise words from the knowing
Very kind, thanks for dropping by, Miss, and for leaving your foot print
Very kind, thanks for dropping by, Miss, and for leaving your foot print
Re: Baby all gone
4th May 2015 5:59pm
A delightful read...just wait until dating then asking for the car keys hits you!
As an educator now working with younger learners this reflects accounts by parents so well.
As an educator now working with younger learners this reflects accounts by parents so well.
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re: Re: Baby all gone
4th May 2015 6:29pm
Cheers, Jazzman
Sounds like a rewarding job, fair play,
Grandparent here, so there'll no car keys handed over :)
Thanks most kindly for stopping by and leaving your thoughts, good fellow
Sounds like a rewarding job, fair play,
Grandparent here, so there'll no car keys handed over :)
Thanks most kindly for stopping by and leaving your thoughts, good fellow
re: re: Re: Baby all gone
4th May 2015 6:37pm
oh cool then--- grandparents are usually in constant "nice" mode and then can turn the young ones back to the parents.
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4th May 2015 6:49pm
Yep :) it's a wonderful thing. Packing them off home to run off all the chocolate and sweets garnered at granddad's heh heh
Re: Baby all gone
7th May 2015 5:18pm
Very sweet write, Eamonn, really brought home by the wonderful descriptions of the little tyke's antics. A nice change of pace.
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re: Re: Baby all gone
7th May 2015 8:40pm
Cheers, Mr Pena
a change of pace is as good as a rest :)'
Took a lot to not over run this with bunnies and other cutesy language, I think it works ok so I'm happy enough
Thanks most lots for dropping by, for leaving your thoughts and for your continued support. much appreciated
a change of pace is as good as a rest :)'
Took a lot to not over run this with bunnies and other cutesy language, I think it works ok so I'm happy enough
Thanks most lots for dropping by, for leaving your thoughts and for your continued support. much appreciated
Re: Baby all gone
19th May 2015 1:17pm
Such a sweet post! My daughter did the same, would crook a finger and say gone-gone
Precious observations man!
~d
Precious observations man!
~d
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re: Re: Baby all gone
20th May 2015 4:10pm
ah, good stuff, baby talk must be a universal language
Welcome to the DU, lady and thanks for dropping by and leaving your thoughts
Welcome to the DU, lady and thanks for dropping by and leaving your thoughts
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27th May 2015 1:29am
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30th May 2015 5:22pm
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Re: Baby all gone
2nd Jun 2015 3:56pm
Hello CraigDealer. Well, this topic sits well on you, Sir. Watching her trip over the page is delightful, thank you. It seemed to me to somehow trailed off at the end (?) but didn't mind in the least, as it left her uncontained somehow, and left my thoughts to wander. An observant, generous and charming write, cheers.
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Re: Baby all gone
6th Sep 2015 10:56pm
Kaatho, dear lady. my apologies for missing this comment
I understand about the trailing off. if memories serve, the last couple of lines ...and I suppose on some level the while body of the poem came from a conversation with her parents about her being ...reserved with her communica
I think, the last couple of lines were thrown in as a kind of grandad muscle flex heh heh
much appreciate your support and thoughts,.Lady
thanks heaps and bunches
communica
I understand about the trailing off. if memories serve, the last couple of lines ...and I suppose on some level the while body of the poem came from a conversation with her parents about her being ...reserved with her communica
I think, the last couple of lines were thrown in as a kind of grandad muscle flex heh heh
much appreciate your support and thoughts,.Lady
thanks heaps and bunches
communica
Re. Baby all gone
5th Sep 2015 2:07pm
and she's no stranger to showing frustration
with two clenched fists and a firm foot stomp
she'll shout something, a single muffled word
!! ..and by-golly she'll mean it ""
I do that!!
Loved this write. Pure and sweet. Grown man adoring ornery behavior of 2year old.
Endearing doll.
🐰🐰
Jennifer
with two clenched fists and a firm foot stomp
she'll shout something, a single muffled word
!! ..and by-golly she'll mean it ""
I do that!!
Loved this write. Pure and sweet. Grown man adoring ornery behavior of 2year old.
Endearing doll.
🐰🐰
Jennifer
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Re: Re. Baby all gone
6th Sep 2015 11:05pm
Jenifer, thanks
no harm in the odd footstomp, and a single muffled word is so much better than a litany of screamed syllables
thanks kindly for stopping by and leaving your thoughts
no harm in the odd footstomp, and a single muffled word is so much better than a litany of screamed syllables
thanks kindly for stopping by and leaving your thoughts
Re. Baby all gone
Anonymous
15th Nov 2015 4:21am
Love the last verse there Lepp. Of course I had no idea she was two too. ;-)
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Re: Re. Baby all gone
15th Nov 2015 4:36am
cheers man
time flies at the best of times, but in the context of little ones time seems to take leaps and bounds. there's a fair few words in her arsenal now, it's wonderful to observe
cheers for dropping by and laying down your thoughts
time flies at the best of times, but in the context of little ones time seems to take leaps and bounds. there's a fair few words in her arsenal now, it's wonderful to observe
cheers for dropping by and laying down your thoughts
Re. Baby all gone
Anonymous
18th Mar 2016 00:43am
Awe Craic....how precious is this ink.....children are beautiful souls.....they grow up so fast......enjoy her while she's little.......enjoyed this......thank you for sharing her with us......purple luv & hugs xo :)
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Re: Re. Baby all gone
18th Mar 2016 1:05am
Hullow
thank you. it's truly amazing to observe. I love the look in her stay when she figured something out, like how to open the straps on her push-pram. I was watching her, really great stuff
thanks heaps for dropping by, Flower girl, and thanks for leaving your thoughts
thank you. it's truly amazing to observe. I love the look in her stay when she figured something out, like how to open the straps on her push-pram. I was watching her, really great stuff
thanks heaps for dropping by, Flower girl, and thanks for leaving your thoughts
Re. Baby all gone
20th Apr 2016 5:38pm
Lepp...
What a sweet,sweet write Grampy!!!
I have goosies...I.loved this!!!
Cheers Old Man "D
Jackie xoxox
What a sweet,sweet write Grampy!!!
I have goosies...I.loved this!!!
Cheers Old Man "D
Jackie xoxox
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Re: Re. Baby all gone
23rd Apr 2016 3:40am
Hullo
ahh yes, sweet and old ..like an old sweet wine, bottled and corked ...with poems on the lable
cheers, Lady
ahh yes, sweet and old ..like an old sweet wine, bottled and corked ...with poems on the lable
cheers, Lady
Re. Baby all gone
23rd Apr 2016 4:59am
This made me lol, I love a wee person that knows their own mind. My younger is 7 and won't be told what to think feel or say though she's already correcting my speech (I love it) yesterday I told her that the cat would continue to be insistent until she fed him his treat. She replied, don't you mean persistent? I explained what insistent meant and she determined that persistent was still the better word.
Lovely write that pulled me right into the little slices of life with a wee person.
Lovely write that pulled me right into the little slices of life with a wee person.
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Re: Re. Baby all gone
23rd Apr 2016 5:08am
Hullo
just had a look at the date I published this and it's almost a year ago. time goes so fast but the joy and laughs are on-going
it's great your youngest questions words and has words to ..substitute your had grammar heh heh :) ..my youngest is thirteen and he has a whole new set of words I find really hard to understand
I thank you for dropping in and leaving your thoughts, a smile was formed
just had a look at the date I published this and it's almost a year ago. time goes so fast but the joy and laughs are on-going
it's great your youngest questions words and has words to ..substitute your had grammar heh heh :) ..my youngest is thirteen and he has a whole new set of words I find really hard to understand
I thank you for dropping in and leaving your thoughts, a smile was formed
Re. Baby all gone
1st May 2016 00:45am
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1st May 2016 1:13am
ahh, a woman of few words. a rare and remarkable trait outside places like Saudi Arabia.
welcome to DU and thanks for dropping by
welcome to DU and thanks for dropping by
Re. Baby all gone
24th May 2016 4:46am
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24th May 2016 5:09am
Hullo
cheers May, youre very kind. and very thanked for stopping by and leaving your thoughts
cheers May, youre very kind. and very thanked for stopping by and leaving your thoughts
Re. Baby all gone
24th May 2016 5:07am
strong personality just like you Craic :)
love this peek into your dear ones life and yours..
love Crim
love this peek into your dear ones life and yours..
love Crim
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Re: Re. Baby all gone
24th May 2016 5:12am
I think you may be right there, Crims. and you're very welcome
and thanked considerably for your presence and words
and thanked considerably for your presence and words
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Anonymous
30th Aug 2016 00:27am
This poem was featured today .. You are a Master of this craft. Honored to have read something so personal.
🙏 Trish
🙏 Trish
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Anonymous
30th Aug 2016 00:37am
Agree with momma there. ;-)
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Re: Re. Baby all gone
30th Aug 2016 1:31am
Hullo
little mite was three about ten days ago, it all goes by very quick, too quick even
many thanks for your presence and thoughts, lady
little mite was three about ten days ago, it all goes by very quick, too quick even
many thanks for your presence and thoughts, lady
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Hullo
very kind of you to say, good fellow. and thanks for dropping by to say it
very kind of you to say, good fellow. and thanks for dropping by to say it