Miscellaneous Poems by Top Critiquers
Random, diverse and unusual poetry written by the DU Poetry top critiquers
(members who have given lots of useful comments to other poets this month)
Jade-Pandora
jade tiger
jade tiger
Poem Published
Today 11:05am
Today 11:05am
He Never Saw Me (at the Club)
He never saw me come to him
With music smoke rings in my hair.
Where others mingled on the rim,
While sitting at a table there.
So unaware how women stalk,
To cross the room where he was at.
With tabby stripes of stealthy walk,
As if to slink more like a cat.
But here I was beside his chair,
A color strobe lit up my face
Just as he turn’d look’d up to stare,
And so did others in the place.
I moved & leaned to let him guess.
His eyelids lower’d from the scent,
The sparkl’d mesh of cocktail dress
And hemline raised...
With music smoke rings in my hair.
Where others mingled on the rim,
While sitting at a table there.
So unaware how women stalk,
To cross the room where he was at.
With tabby stripes of stealthy walk,
As if to slink more like a cat.
But here I was beside his chair,
A color strobe lit up my face
Just as he turn’d look’d up to stare,
And so did others in the place.
I moved & leaned to let him guess.
His eyelids lower’d from the scent,
The sparkl’d mesh of cocktail dress
And hemline raised...
#lust
#night
#alcohol #NaPoWriMo2018
#alcohol #NaPoWriMo2018
19 reads
1 Comment
headtrip9780
Poem Published
Yesterday 3:04pm
Yesterday 3:04pm
Little Boyfriend
Hey little boyfriend,
I could call you by your name, but that’s irrelevant.
I’m not in your way, the girl is yours already.
Why don’t you just thank me, instead of messing with me?
Take this as a warning;
cut the crap before you get to really know me.
However, let me just remind you, ‘cause you seem to forget
that I was part of her life before she even knew you existed
and if now you're with her,
it’s because I didn’t care to fight for her.
Hey little boyfriend,
beat it before I lose it.
Frankly, the things you say are...
I could call you by your name, but that’s irrelevant.
I’m not in your way, the girl is yours already.
Why don’t you just thank me, instead of messing with me?
Take this as a warning;
cut the crap before you get to really know me.
However, let me just remind you, ‘cause you seem to forget
that I was part of her life before she even knew you existed
and if now you're with her,
it’s because I didn’t care to fight for her.
Hey little boyfriend,
beat it before I lose it.
Frankly, the things you say are...
#anger
#jealousy
#boyfriend
#girlfriend
#frustration
18 reads
3 Comments
IcarusVStheSun
Gypsy Witch
Gypsy Witch
Poem Published
Today 1:40am
Today 1:40am
Dream Angel Dream
I closed my eyes unaware I am escaping reality. I am not ready to open them but when I do, I find myself elsewhere and not in the place of where I once stood moments ago. The world here feels different - cold an mysterious - like the dark angelic wings on my back.
My mind tells me I am no Goddess nor Nymph, not an witch or mystical being. I am just a strange human with a heart filled with fantasies and dreams. So, this must be a dream - a figment of my imagination, right? I look up towards the eternal twilight sky yet, time ceases to exist but everything still moves.
I feel the kiss...
My mind tells me I am no Goddess nor Nymph, not an witch or mystical being. I am just a strange human with a heart filled with fantasies and dreams. So, this must be a dream - a figment of my imagination, right? I look up towards the eternal twilight sky yet, time ceases to exist but everything still moves.
I feel the kiss...
#fiction
20 reads
3 Comments
SourMelon0313
H
H
Poem Published
7th Apr 2018 11:08pm
7th Apr 2018 11:08pm
Inception & Culmination (Collab with ElrondSirfalas)
As silence leaks from these ceilings
And pools right by my ear
I hear my voiceless reason
Converse with itself
Conflicting stances of passion and
Interesting takes on morality
Voiceless voices inside mind
they question & answer
debate & suggest
What shall this seed grow to be...
a solid Tree of Wisdom
or simple grass-field of ideas?
This ensemble of cognition
From my past to another tomorrow
Quarreling amongst themselves
Forming various levels of persuasion
Bribing my innocent naivety ...
And pools right by my ear
I hear my voiceless reason
Converse with itself
Conflicting stances of passion and
Interesting takes on morality
Voiceless voices inside mind
they question & answer
debate & suggest
What shall this seed grow to be...
a solid Tree of Wisdom
or simple grass-field of ideas?
This ensemble of cognition
From my past to another tomorrow
Quarreling amongst themselves
Forming various levels of persuasion
Bribing my innocent naivety ...
#MyInspiration
92 reads
13 Comments
Periwinkleblue
Nengelia
Nengelia
Poem Published
Yesterday 10:48pm
Yesterday 10:48pm
Informant on Time
With a thought we go to the dream
As all it takes to get there is what you think
In minds eye it's just an eye blink,
There isn't any end nor beginning stream
But a river of time flowing to the brink
Of the next new idea
Where ideas become the arena
That have no conscience of times link,
A link to the future or past eureka,
The hours are unimportant,
Days amounting to portent
In another dimension, athena,
Whose names are many, if dormant,
For the one who sees remains an informant.
As all it takes to get there is what you think
In minds eye it's just an eye blink,
There isn't any end nor beginning stream
But a river of time flowing to the brink
Of the next new idea
Where ideas become the arena
That have no conscience of times link,
A link to the future or past eureka,
The hours are unimportant,
Days amounting to portent
In another dimension, athena,
Whose names are many, if dormant,
For the one who sees remains an informant.
#dreams
#science
#historical
13 reads
1 Comment
mysteriouslady
Poem Published
21st Apr 2018 1:56am
21st Apr 2018 1:56am
Sunlight
Sparkling
Slithering
Glittering
Cursing
through veils
that cover
even the darkest
of souls
especially mine
Slithering
Glittering
Cursing
through veils
that cover
even the darkest
of souls
especially mine
#happiness
28 reads
7 Comments
Joseph-Zenieh
Poem Published
Today 9:25am
Today 9:25am
MAN AND LIFE
MAN AND LIFE
Nothing can make me hate
Human beings in this world.
Lots of mess, small and great,
On their heads is seen hurled.
Man is poor in his life;
Greatest care spoils his joy.
For his luck, he should strife;
Some cruel men it destroy.
He fears germs; he fears death
For himself and those dear.
He fears luck and its wrath
That disturb who are near.
He wants those whom he loves
To live joy and true smile.
He neglects self and craves
To bring them best lifestyle.
BY JOSEPH ZENIEH ...
Nothing can make me hate
Human beings in this world.
Lots of mess, small and great,
On their heads is seen hurled.
Man is poor in his life;
Greatest care spoils his joy.
For his luck, he should strife;
Some cruel men it destroy.
He fears germs; he fears death
For himself and those dear.
He fears luck and its wrath
That disturb who are near.
He wants those whom he loves
To live joy and true smile.
He neglects self and craves
To bring them best lifestyle.
BY JOSEPH ZENIEH ...
#sadness
6 reads
0 Comments
summultima
uma
uma
Poem Published
23rd Apr 2018 8:38pm
23rd Apr 2018 8:38pm
bloodred
bloodreds, screaming haem
your fragmented petals
in much unelaborated
causal detachments
clotted brittle murky margins
you see
all what I see
is your oozing core
from leathery
remnantals
your frozen rosaceous memories
explode [hardened boundaries
of death’s inching in bitter teeth]
in a thawing resurface towards
the boldening dreamt realms
a bloody bleeding revolution
aggregates your pain-scatter
in an inner-calling coherence
on the ruined pavement
floored golden under the fivish ...
your fragmented petals
in much unelaborated
causal detachments
clotted brittle murky margins
you see
all what I see
is your oozing core
from leathery
remnantals
your frozen rosaceous memories
explode [hardened boundaries
of death’s inching in bitter teeth]
in a thawing resurface towards
the boldening dreamt realms
a bloody bleeding revolution
aggregates your pain-scatter
in an inner-calling coherence
on the ruined pavement
floored golden under the fivish ...
#hope
#death
#flowers
#spring
#mystery
27 reads
2 Comments
John_Galt
Poem Published
22nd Apr 2018 7:38pm
22nd Apr 2018 7:38pm
Take Action
Anxious and angry again. Another attempt at affirmation affronted awfully. Always awry after all.
Ball busting bureaucrats, bruised by battle, bemoan belligerence. Because brothers, bound by blood boast bravely: "Be Bold"
Caution cannot conquer complacency. Cold carelessness causes cancerous callousness. Continue calling celestial consciousness, carrying caring carefully.
Dutifully disperse dignity, downsize doubt, deliver dialogue deeply. Depart depression, destroy Dystopia.
Escape fear.
Give hope.
Idolize joy.
Keep loving.
Moreover, master moving...
Ball busting bureaucrats, bruised by battle, bemoan belligerence. Because brothers, bound by blood boast bravely: "Be Bold"
Caution cannot conquer complacency. Cold carelessness causes cancerous callousness. Continue calling celestial consciousness, carrying caring carefully.
Dutifully disperse dignity, downsize doubt, deliver dialogue deeply. Depart depression, destroy Dystopia.
Escape fear.
Give hope.
Idolize joy.
Keep loving.
Moreover, master moving...
#courage
#motivational
#inspirational
30 reads
7 Comments
audioharleea
U. G. Rose
U. G. Rose
Poem Published
15th Apr 2018 9:38pm
15th Apr 2018 9:38pm
Party of 3
I saw the way he stared in her eyes
Breathed her deep
His sweetest taboo
I listened to the sounds they made
And he passionately consumed her
Gladly ate her fruit
Ripe and dripping down her legs
Lavished her with praise, ravaged her
Over and over again
Addicted to her dominance
How he let her rule because she
Came
Bare brested, with an aching
Desire to be his captive, partner in crime
His slave
Made her name sound like poetry
His heart perched serenely
On her sleeve
Whispering her name...
Breathed her deep
His sweetest taboo
I listened to the sounds they made
And he passionately consumed her
Gladly ate her fruit
Ripe and dripping down her legs
Lavished her with praise, ravaged her
Over and over again
Addicted to her dominance
How he let her rule because she
Came
Bare brested, with an aching
Desire to be his captive, partner in crime
His slave
Made her name sound like poetry
His heart perched serenely
On her sleeve
Whispering her name...
#lover
#freedom
76 reads
12 Comments
dartford
Paul S...
Paul S...
Poem Published
Yesterday 00:58am
Yesterday 00:58am
the story so far ..
we had arranged to arrive at the theatre
in plenty of time to have a drink at the bar
before the play, although she hasn't, so far,
okay ..
#love
16 reads
2 Comments
PoetsRevenge
Poem Published
4th Apr 2018 2:40am
4th Apr 2018 2:40am
At Land's End
The future is a grey seagull
tattling in its cat-voice of departure.'
- Sylvia Plath
......
The grey-green abyss looks placid
In its stark rendition of loneliness.
It harbors creatures below the dim surface
With its pale streams of white light.
Are you down there, precious All-knowing?
The smell is heavy salt and brackish awareness;
It truly drowns the olfactory avoidance of it.
And it is in my mouth, too,
I can taste its chemical-laced brine, its metallics ...
tattling in its cat-voice of departure.'
- Sylvia Plath
......
The grey-green abyss looks placid
In its stark rendition of loneliness.
It harbors creatures below the dim surface
With its pale streams of white light.
Are you down there, precious All-knowing?
The smell is heavy salt and brackish awareness;
It truly drowns the olfactory avoidance of it.
And it is in my mouth, too,
I can taste its chemical-laced brine, its metallics ...
#sea
#beach
45 reads
6 Comments
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