Poems About Relationships Seeking Honest Critique
#relationships
Poems about relationships seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Affection Makes You Weak
She snickered in my face
I told her all the things that I felt and she laughed me right out the door
I can still hear her laughing at me
Even when I'm alone, I can hear her cackling like a witch
I want to get out
Get in my car at night and drive an endless road to somewhere but nowhere
Affection is a disease
Don't succumb to it, it will wipe you out!
It's for weak fools
I've moved on
I told her all the things that I felt and she laughed me right out the door
I can still hear her laughing at me
Even when I'm alone, I can hear her cackling like a witch
I want to get out
Get in my car at night and drive an endless road to somewhere but nowhere
Affection is a disease
Don't succumb to it, it will wipe you out!
It's for weak fools
I've moved on
#rejection
#relationships
#shame #ShortStory
#shame #ShortStory
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Opposites
Love’s Hate's
gentle touch enraged strikes
embraces thrashes
the connection. the affection.
Love Hate
is wounded, is laughing,
scared, cruel,
and confused. and amused.
Opposites
stemming
from the same
place.
gentle touch enraged strikes
embraces thrashes
the connection. the affection.
Love Hate
is wounded, is laughing,
scared, cruel,
and confused. and amused.
Opposites
stemming
from the same
place.
#conflict
#relationships
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My Magic Bag
I cannot see you
Though I know you're there
I feel your words
You pen with flair
It makes it seem
As though you're here
All of your positive vibes
Are most welcome here
Let me make myself
Perfectly clear
I have a magic bag
That I keep near
Just look inside
You will find them there
Though I know you're there
I feel your words
You pen with flair
It makes it seem
As though you're here
All of your positive vibes
Are most welcome here
Let me make myself
Perfectly clear
I have a magic bag
That I keep near
Just look inside
You will find them there
#magic
#relationships
#uplifting
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Beware
Let me give it
To you straight
If you wish
to speak to me
As soon as I awake
You'll have to wait
For Heaven's sake
No one, not even
My precious pup
Will interact with me
Until I drink
My first cup of coffee
So, if you don't wish
To hear me moan
And let out a groan
You'd be wise
To hang up
That darn cell phone
And leave my
Cranky self alone
To you straight
If you wish
to speak to me
As soon as I awake
You'll have to wait
For Heaven's sake
No one, not even
My precious pup
Will interact with me
Until I drink
My first cup of coffee
So, if you don't wish
To hear me moan
And let out a groan
You'd be wise
To hang up
That darn cell phone
And leave my
Cranky self alone
#coffee
#curse
#morning #relationships
#morning #relationships
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Angry As SHIT!
#relationships
#breakup
#conflict
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1 Comment
Closeness
You’re somewhere close by
You’re watching
You’re waiting
It’s okay
I’m waiting too
I’m here only for you
We’ve met a thousand times before
We’ll meet a thousand times again
Yet I can’t remember what your face looks like
But I will know it when I do
You’re watching
You’re waiting
It’s okay
I’m waiting too
I’m here only for you
We’ve met a thousand times before
We’ll meet a thousand times again
Yet I can’t remember what your face looks like
But I will know it when I do
#relationships
#dreams
#spiritual
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Obstinate Patterns
Beware, his eyes
Dissociated, I can’t resist
Oh… the deep, spellbinding indigo
Those waters run deep, like my own scars that outline abused veins
No tears, only oceans
He summons waves that drag my ankles into another world
His world, familiar
I know the place as if it were my own
What a life to live
In shadowed swells
It’s not that I can’t tread water
There’s treasure in the trenches
I could never dive there again
So I wait on a sandy shore of uncertainty
I could dance with fate elsewhere
But destiny...
Dissociated, I can’t resist
Oh… the deep, spellbinding indigo
Those waters run deep, like my own scars that outline abused veins
No tears, only oceans
He summons waves that drag my ankles into another world
His world, familiar
I know the place as if it were my own
What a life to live
In shadowed swells
It’s not that I can’t tread water
There’s treasure in the trenches
I could never dive there again
So I wait on a sandy shore of uncertainty
I could dance with fate elsewhere
But destiny...
#love
#relationships
#abuse
#SelfWorth
#NaPoWriMo2024
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thorns and kisses
Oh lift me as a wave, a leaf, a cloud! I fall upon the thorns of life!
I bleed!”—Percy Bysshe Shelley
and when i saw your perfect teeth,
i thought, how awesome for the perfect bite!
may they not bruise the kiss beneath
the sheathing of their canine-sparkling white.
a honeybee upon the wing,
no less resplendent than the mouth of you;
so cock-sure with its venom sting,
while foolish men get stung for honey brew.
so, too, the dark-red dew-clad rose,
enticing fondling hands to blow her horn,
while, underneath her...
I bleed!”—Percy Bysshe Shelley
and when i saw your perfect teeth,
i thought, how awesome for the perfect bite!
may they not bruise the kiss beneath
the sheathing of their canine-sparkling white.
a honeybee upon the wing,
no less resplendent than the mouth of you;
so cock-sure with its venom sting,
while foolish men get stung for honey brew.
so, too, the dark-red dew-clad rose,
enticing fondling hands to blow her horn,
while, underneath her...
#relationships
#romantic
#LifeStruggles
#rose
#hurt
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She's the one
Times were slow,
they could be changing
My life could use some arranging
Now's the time to have some fun
Falling for that special someone
You could open a hidden world
To reveal that hidden pearl
Life it has it's unknown joys
Hidden deep by little girls and boys
Reaching deep into hazy minds
Amazing wonders you may find
Life is a one way street
If by chance, baby we should meet
If I needed a helping hand
To lie, to steal, to take the stand
I know it's you babe, I know it's you
Guide my ship through...
they could be changing
My life could use some arranging
Now's the time to have some fun
Falling for that special someone
You could open a hidden world
To reveal that hidden pearl
Life it has it's unknown joys
Hidden deep by little girls and boys
Reaching deep into hazy minds
Amazing wonders you may find
Life is a one way street
If by chance, baby we should meet
If I needed a helping hand
To lie, to steal, to take the stand
I know it's you babe, I know it's you
Guide my ship through...
#happiness
#love
#relationships
#motivational
#uplifting
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9 Comments
I Wish I Felt You Not
In our night lit with
torn, gin-stained stockings
bound by realized requests
diluting to the undesirable;
enmeshed within roles we
resisted, and yet yearning for
but where we began, in the
wholeness of hope-soaked,
faraway love; nothing less.
torn, gin-stained stockings
bound by realized requests
diluting to the undesirable;
enmeshed within roles we
resisted, and yet yearning for
but where we began, in the
wholeness of hope-soaked,
faraway love; nothing less.
#relationships
#heartbroken
#conflict
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At your local auto store
People are like oil filters,
after 5,000 miles or 6 months,
you should replace your lover.
Over time people build up,
harmful, abrasive, sludgy bits,
that will find their way into your heart.
If not replaced as instructed, those toxic pollutants may kill you.
So remember,
keep your organs and psyche clean.
That's my message to you...Guaranteed!
after 5,000 miles or 6 months,
you should replace your lover.
Over time people build up,
harmful, abrasive, sludgy bits,
that will find their way into your heart.
If not replaced as instructed, those toxic pollutants may kill you.
So remember,
keep your organs and psyche clean.
That's my message to you...Guaranteed!
#relationships
#motivational
#cars
#lover
#MentalHealth
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ghosted
..and all the pretty
things you gave me
suddenly
went
away
things you gave me
suddenly
went
away
#relationships
#honesty
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DU Poetry : Poems About Relationships Seeking Honest Critique