Poems About Relationships Seeking Honest Critique
#relationships
Poems about relationships seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Melodies of an Intimate Love Song
Intimacy and the Melody - Part 1
Within each heart resides love’s melody
Embracing all emotions, their romance
Two heart rhythms beating one intimacy
The cadence swaying within a slow dance
Two different melodies come to blend
Ambiance found in the dim of the light
There where love notes musically transcend
On this moment in their still of the night
Harmonies resonate joined euphony
The soft melody seemingly so right
Romantic shadows casting ships to see
Together mooring each other so tight
Soothing...
Within each heart resides love’s melody
Embracing all emotions, their romance
Two heart rhythms beating one intimacy
The cadence swaying within a slow dance
Two different melodies come to blend
Ambiance found in the dim of the light
There where love notes musically transcend
On this moment in their still of the night
Harmonies resonate joined euphony
The soft melody seemingly so right
Romantic shadows casting ships to see
Together mooring each other so tight
Soothing...
#love
#relationships
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Get me a cold beer, or else!!
During the 1990's a severe winter storm kept temperatures in the 20's and thousands of homes in Amarillo Texas, without power for several days. It was perhaps a combination of cabin fever and alcohol that led one woman to shoot her 73 year old husband to death in the kitchen of their home. He gave her a can of warm beer. It had occurred to neither one of them to chill a six-pack on the back porch!
#alcohol
#death
#relationships
#ShortStory
#winter
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The Lady Blue ( The Big Break-up)
Gary had a big mad on and wouldn't listen when I told him nothing happened between me and Joe that afternoon. In the end he softened some but made me promise that I would tell him if Joe ever made a serious play for me.
So things went along the same as before for a while but my relationship with Gary was strained. I had grown fond of Joe but I still loved Gary.
And then things got really messy because Gary suspected that I was sleeping with Joe though it just wasn't true. I was not able to convince him otherwise and he eventually let me go once again.
Joe jumped...
So things went along the same as before for a while but my relationship with Gary was strained. I had grown fond of Joe but I still loved Gary.
And then things got really messy because Gary suspected that I was sleeping with Joe though it just wasn't true. I was not able to convince him otherwise and he eventually let me go once again.
Joe jumped...
#conflict
#love
#lover #relationships
#lover #relationships
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She will disappear
Why don't you disappear
Sick of your face each year
Listen to me my dear
The end is growing near
You have tried to threaten me
You have tried to kill me
I'm stronger then you thought I would be
Open your mouth, taste my sweet addiction
Come a little closer, endure my depraved affliction
Accuracy & outcome, guided this conviction
No time for remorse, another crucifixion
Eat the bite
Rinse it down
Run for cover
Stroke the ground
Within is the rival
Must annihilate, for survival
...
Sick of your face each year
Listen to me my dear
The end is growing near
You have tried to threaten me
You have tried to kill me
I'm stronger then you thought I would be
Open your mouth, taste my sweet addiction
Come a little closer, endure my depraved affliction
Accuracy & outcome, guided this conviction
No time for remorse, another crucifixion
Eat the bite
Rinse it down
Run for cover
Stroke the ground
Within is the rival
Must annihilate, for survival
...
#dark
#hate
#murder
#relationships
#rhyming
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Surprise guests
Are you coming to my party? It's going to be so great!
Just walk on in, or run, or catch a lift with someone's mate.
Two friends are at the station - bravo, let's go and pick them up;
we'll bring them to the party and then let them choose a cup.
There's a flag out in the garden so you know where it will be;
There'll be such fun that you won't want to stop, I guarantee!
I'll put on games and serve great food for sure, but first a guess:
who's here as guest of honour and is going to address
the reason for this gathering, so joyous...
Just walk on in, or run, or catch a lift with someone's mate.
Two friends are at the station - bravo, let's go and pick them up;
we'll bring them to the party and then let them choose a cup.
There's a flag out in the garden so you know where it will be;
There'll be such fun that you won't want to stop, I guarantee!
I'll put on games and serve great food for sure, but first a guess:
who's here as guest of honour and is going to address
the reason for this gathering, so joyous...
#animals
#family
#NaPoWriMo2024 #relationships
#NaPoWriMo2024 #relationships
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Pico de Gallo
Without hesitation, my hands furl
Sharpest blade, carbon steel
Satisfaction, skin splitting open
Guts, juices, spilling out, sweet
Tomato blood thick on these hands
How dare he bring her to my table
Screaming stocks leak chlorophyll
Cilantro, tearing, limb from limb
A hint of intrigue, a freshness
I hope it tastes like soap to you
Depedation and decapitation
Prying outer layers, for insides
Chopping, violent and precise
Onions, your tears, never enough
Tossed with serano and lime
With a smile, I deliver on time, ...
Sharpest blade, carbon steel
Satisfaction, skin splitting open
Guts, juices, spilling out, sweet
Tomato blood thick on these hands
How dare he bring her to my table
Screaming stocks leak chlorophyll
Cilantro, tearing, limb from limb
A hint of intrigue, a freshness
I hope it tastes like soap to you
Depedation and decapitation
Prying outer layers, for insides
Chopping, violent and precise
Onions, your tears, never enough
Tossed with serano and lime
With a smile, I deliver on time, ...
#anger
#betrayal
#food
#NaPoWriMo2024
#relationships
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recovery runs through our morgue
KT tape and sheer ugly will
hold me together
after five hard miles,
and I’m low on both
as my thigh quivers to
keep my knee under me
I stop to water
a tree with
forehead sweat and
angst-filled
swear words
reveling in
my weakness.
A dead person’s
sinew is screwed
into my new knee,
and, fuck if some days
I can't feel the
cadaver’s ghost
asking for it back
My lips stick to my teeth
as my leg shakes.
I didn’t bring...
hold me together
after five hard miles,
and I’m low on both
as my thigh quivers to
keep my knee under me
I stop to water
a tree with
forehead sweat and
angst-filled
swear words
reveling in
my weakness.
A dead person’s
sinew is screwed
into my new knee,
and, fuck if some days
I can't feel the
cadaver’s ghost
asking for it back
My lips stick to my teeth
as my leg shakes.
I didn’t bring...
#conflict
#hurt
#love
#obsession
#relationships
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Affection Makes You Weak
She snickered in my face
I told her all the things that I felt and she laughed me right out the door
I can still hear her laughing at me
Even when I'm alone, I can hear her cackling like a witch
I want to get out
Get in my car at night and drive an endless road to somewhere but nowhere
Affection is a disease
Don't succumb to it, it will wipe you out!
It's for weak fools
I've moved on
I told her all the things that I felt and she laughed me right out the door
I can still hear her laughing at me
Even when I'm alone, I can hear her cackling like a witch
I want to get out
Get in my car at night and drive an endless road to somewhere but nowhere
Affection is a disease
Don't succumb to it, it will wipe you out!
It's for weak fools
I've moved on
#rejection
#relationships
#shame #ShortStory
#shame #ShortStory
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Opposites
Love’s Hate's
gentle touch enraged strikes
embraces thrashes
the connection. the affection.
Love Hate
is wounded, is laughing,
scared, cruel,
and confused. and amused.
Opposites
stemming
from the same
place.
gentle touch enraged strikes
embraces thrashes
the connection. the affection.
Love Hate
is wounded, is laughing,
scared, cruel,
and confused. and amused.
Opposites
stemming
from the same
place.
#conflict
#relationships
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8 Comments
My Magic Bag
I cannot see you
Though I know you're there
I feel your words
You pen with flair
It makes it seem
As though you're here
All of your positive vibes
Are most welcome here
Let me make myself
Perfectly clear
I have a magic bag
That I keep near
Just look inside
You will find them there
Though I know you're there
I feel your words
You pen with flair
It makes it seem
As though you're here
All of your positive vibes
Are most welcome here
Let me make myself
Perfectly clear
I have a magic bag
That I keep near
Just look inside
You will find them there
#magic
#relationships
#uplifting
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10 Comments
Beware
Let me give it
To you straight
If you wish
to speak to me
As soon as I awake
You'll have to wait
For Heaven's sake
No one, not even
My precious pup
Will interact with me
Until I drink
My first cup of coffee
So, if you don't wish
To hear me moan
And let out a groan
You'd be wise
To hang up
That darn cell phone
And leave my
Cranky self alone
To you straight
If you wish
to speak to me
As soon as I awake
You'll have to wait
For Heaven's sake
No one, not even
My precious pup
Will interact with me
Until I drink
My first cup of coffee
So, if you don't wish
To hear me moan
And let out a groan
You'd be wise
To hang up
That darn cell phone
And leave my
Cranky self alone
#coffee
#curse
#morning #relationships
#morning #relationships
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Angry As SHIT!
#relationships
#breakup
#conflict
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DU Poetry : Poems About Relationships Seeking Honest Critique