Dark Seeking Honest Critique Poems
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dark seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Blossoming Sin Putrescent
Ravaging the soul
Temptation ascended
Between the pestle and bowl
Heaven now rended
The skeletons now dance
A chalice now sanguine
Devil eyes in a trance
Sacred shapes withered thin
Radiance of infernal shine
Sevenfold immolation rite
Usurped and inverse divine
Brilliance of perdition in the night
Temptation ascended
Between the pestle and bowl
Heaven now rended
The skeletons now dance
A chalice now sanguine
Devil eyes in a trance
Sacred shapes withered thin
Radiance of infernal shine
Sevenfold immolation rite
Usurped and inverse divine
Brilliance of perdition in the night
#curse
#dark
#evil
#night
#religion
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quill
dip the quill and make it bleed
darkness speaks and I must heed
little infection and gossip spread
torrid thought, the toxin leaks
festering wound for all to see
I am not immune
to being hurt my sutures real
a needy wench I may appear
seeking redemtion, within my song
the dark rises and I am awash with anger
it hurts to feel so powerfully
taken under by ennuendos and treachery
an abundance of judgement sounds
critisized and put down
my genuine feelings implore
explore yourself and do no harm ...
darkness speaks and I must heed
little infection and gossip spread
torrid thought, the toxin leaks
festering wound for all to see
I am not immune
to being hurt my sutures real
a needy wench I may appear
seeking redemtion, within my song
the dark rises and I am awash with anger
it hurts to feel so powerfully
taken under by ennuendos and treachery
an abundance of judgement sounds
critisized and put down
my genuine feelings implore
explore yourself and do no harm ...
#dark
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experiment 612
Every… nothing…
see… nothing… feel, nothing.
Think na… why? What?
I feel… I need to feel…
I, try, why can’t I see?
I, try, why cant I smell?
I try, why… what is that distant feeling?
Closer, bring it closer.
My eyes feel open. But are they?
I taste something… metal?
The pounding draws closer… or not?
where… who am I?
The pounding gets stronger,
it can’t get closer… why?
Inside, inside the cold.
Dull and blurry, I fee… no see.
Bright, so bright. ...
see… nothing… feel, nothing.
Think na… why? What?
I feel… I need to feel…
I, try, why can’t I see?
I, try, why cant I smell?
I try, why… what is that distant feeling?
Closer, bring it closer.
My eyes feel open. But are they?
I taste something… metal?
The pounding draws closer… or not?
where… who am I?
The pounding gets stronger,
it can’t get closer… why?
Inside, inside the cold.
Dull and blurry, I fee… no see.
Bright, so bright. ...
#confusion
#dark
#nightmares #scifi
#nightmares #scifi
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Grant a Wish
"Grant a Wish"
This life plowed me like a mack truck
But frankly my dear I don't give a fukk
I'm no survivor I'm a goddamn warrior
To brutality & misery I'm no foreigner
Bring it on BIG brother of despair
I can take what you give in pairs
I have no fear of fire & brimstone
Look inside a soul brightly shone
You think you can plague me like Job?
Your sorry ass will swing by the rope
Think my knees have fell down to pray?
Mark it on your calendar that'll be the day
Confession...
This life plowed me like a mack truck
But frankly my dear I don't give a fukk
I'm no survivor I'm a goddamn warrior
To brutality & misery I'm no foreigner
Bring it on BIG brother of despair
I can take what you give in pairs
I have no fear of fire & brimstone
Look inside a soul brightly shone
You think you can plague me like Job?
Your sorry ass will swing by the rope
Think my knees have fell down to pray?
Mark it on your calendar that'll be the day
Confession...
#dark
#death
#despair
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The Joker's Rulebook
"Joker's Rulebook"
I'm the Joker who laughs hysterically
Footsteps of a murderer incessantly
I make you all the jokes of the day
Yes that's right fall down as my prey
My voice echoes your ears until deft
A slicing tongue leaves your mind cleft
Glistening bullets charge from my gun
My wikked ways are webs I have spun
Roars into a hypnotic trance of silence
I have a dream,it's filled with violence
No living soul safe from deadly wrath
No stones unturned it's simple math
Make up on my face...
I'm the Joker who laughs hysterically
Footsteps of a murderer incessantly
I make you all the jokes of the day
Yes that's right fall down as my prey
My voice echoes your ears until deft
A slicing tongue leaves your mind cleft
Glistening bullets charge from my gun
My wikked ways are webs I have spun
Roars into a hypnotic trance of silence
I have a dream,it's filled with violence
No living soul safe from deadly wrath
No stones unturned it's simple math
Make up on my face...
#dark
#evil
#funny #horror
#funny #horror
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Game Over
Well as luck would have it I got the short end of the stick It could be raining titties.and I'd get hit with a dic
I just broke my last cigarette and see someone done stole my red bic
Ain't it sick how quick things slip
Into the shadows of the abyss from this eclipse
From a dub to G then a ball now a zip
Never should've taken that last hit
or that first sip
or chopped and crossed
That final little fine flat-line
That intertwined into a bind ...
I just broke my last cigarette and see someone done stole my red bic
Ain't it sick how quick things slip
Into the shadows of the abyss from this eclipse
From a dub to G then a ball now a zip
Never should've taken that last hit
or that first sip
or chopped and crossed
That final little fine flat-line
That intertwined into a bind ...
#dark
#despair
#drugs
#fate
#luck
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It Whispers
You want the truth? Ha. Let me carve it in,
Like a twisted fucking blade through your skin.
You hide from the dark, but I am the night,
The devil’s got a grin, and it’s razor-tight.
You think you’re clean, you think you’re pure?
Lies, every fucking breath, you’re a walking blur.
Fools in the light, pretending you shine,
But you’re as dead as a god with a broken spine.
I’ll tear through the surface, expose the rot,
You don’t even know what you've already forgot.
Your prayers are nothing, your halos are fake,
A smothered scream...
Like a twisted fucking blade through your skin.
You hide from the dark, but I am the night,
The devil’s got a grin, and it’s razor-tight.
You think you’re clean, you think you’re pure?
Lies, every fucking breath, you’re a walking blur.
Fools in the light, pretending you shine,
But you’re as dead as a god with a broken spine.
I’ll tear through the surface, expose the rot,
You don’t even know what you've already forgot.
Your prayers are nothing, your halos are fake,
A smothered scream...
#dark
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The Black Psalms
Kneel, wretched soul, and open your throat,
Let the dark flood in—let the hymns be choked.
No gods are listening. No saints remain.
Only the watchers with hollow names.
Their whispers coil in the dust-stained air,
A voice in your bones whispering, Sin.
I was there when the world learned Sin,
When the first child wept, clutching his throat.
The sky turned black, thickened the air,
And the voice of man in terror choked.
I lingered deep in the hollowed names,
Where the temples cracked, yet priests remained.
They...
Let the dark flood in—let the hymns be choked.
No gods are listening. No saints remain.
Only the watchers with hollow names.
Their whispers coil in the dust-stained air,
A voice in your bones whispering, Sin.
I was there when the world learned Sin,
When the first child wept, clutching his throat.
The sky turned black, thickened the air,
And the voice of man in terror choked.
I lingered deep in the hollowed names,
Where the temples cracked, yet priests remained.
They...
#dark
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Joining A Glam Metal Band Is Not Good
Racquel joined Nemesis on tour.
Everything was going okay before the drugs.
She's found dead in Miami.
Everything was going okay before the drugs.
She's found dead in Miami.
#art
#dark
#death
#drugs
#fiction
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I f**k the Girl
When in doubt, I fucked the girl
It always felt so right
Short or tall, they were sure to fall
I fucked one every night
It might not be the ideal time
There might be complications
But when you feel those pussy lips
You lose all reservations
It always felt so right
Short or tall, they were sure to fall
I fucked one every night
It might not be the ideal time
There might be complications
But when you feel those pussy lips
You lose all reservations
#dark
#lust
#sex
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Obscene Vision
Live is spelled wrong, we all know that, right?
It just doesn't sound right
It just doesn't look right
Can't hear any screams
Can't smell fear or decaying bodies
Can't see any pain or frustration
What's happening?
I don't know
All I know is, it's just not right
Do you know what the right path should be?
It just doesn't sound right
It just doesn't look right
Can't hear any screams
Can't smell fear or decaying bodies
Can't see any pain or frustration
What's happening?
I don't know
All I know is, it's just not right
Do you know what the right path should be?
#dark
#evil
#LifeStruggles
#suffering
#TruthOfLife
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Fountain Eyes - with Adagio
intoxicated green fountain eyes
flowing ecstasy of love's passion
untouched in the hollow chambers
of grave beyond infinity in rituals
resting your soul in death's cradle
the author's heart, once fervent and keen
now silent and still, prayers unanswered
all succumb to the endless sleep
the quill falls from lifeless fingers
words once dancing now lie silent
but in the inkwell, dry and spent, there is a rising
hardened pens still trace green fountain eyes
but the silence is deep as memories sleep ...
flowing ecstasy of love's passion
untouched in the hollow chambers
of grave beyond infinity in rituals
resting your soul in death's cradle
the author's heart, once fervent and keen
now silent and still, prayers unanswered
all succumb to the endless sleep
the quill falls from lifeless fingers
words once dancing now lie silent
but in the inkwell, dry and spent, there is a rising
hardened pens still trace green fountain eyes
but the silence is deep as memories sleep ...
#collaboration
#dark
#erotic
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