Dark Seeking Honest Critique Poems
#dark
dark seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
filler up
my loneliness echoes inside me
cruelly deceptive within my hollows I fill the empty space with you
but you are not mine to have
and I wonder, would you fill these places if things were different
seeking ever seeking for a way to cope
Holding my breath underwater is my life
I know I can't hold it long
I'm on razor blade tight rope walking
Anxiety is getting worse by the day
my hold is tenuous at best
The worst has me wondering how long I can do this
Will every day be torture
hold my breath sobriety
take a...
cruelly deceptive within my hollows I fill the empty space with you
but you are not mine to have
and I wonder, would you fill these places if things were different
seeking ever seeking for a way to cope
Holding my breath underwater is my life
I know I can't hold it long
I'm on razor blade tight rope walking
Anxiety is getting worse by the day
my hold is tenuous at best
The worst has me wondering how long I can do this
Will every day be torture
hold my breath sobriety
take a...
#anxiety
#dark
#LifeStruggles
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Lost At Sea
My arms grew tired, I couldn't swim anymore
No one around to help me
A sharp pain within my core
I was drifting further & further out
The more I fought the current
I began to panic, I began to shout
The distant coastline was my last vision
Rip currents tired me out
I made my final decision
I stayed afloat until I had nothing else left
Neptune dragged me down
Drowning was the cause of death
No one around to help me
A sharp pain within my core
I was drifting further & further out
The more I fought the current
I began to panic, I began to shout
The distant coastline was my last vision
Rip currents tired me out
I made my final decision
I stayed afloat until I had nothing else left
Neptune dragged me down
Drowning was the cause of death
#dark
#rhyming
#sea #water
#sea #water
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The Dark
my thoughts wander to my darkness as they often do
Where it comes from, I know not
never to see the light of day
the things that creep inside my psyche
to harm another not in keeping with my gentle nature
My soul blanches at the thought of another's downfall
still, to keep it all in my anxiety grows
and the words tumble out of my mouth
Where they go later, I don't know
It troubles me even still
celebrated darkness from the pit
My mind wasn't always so inclined
with studious study of the bible I did toil
Then...
Where it comes from, I know not
never to see the light of day
the things that creep inside my psyche
to harm another not in keeping with my gentle nature
My soul blanches at the thought of another's downfall
still, to keep it all in my anxiety grows
and the words tumble out of my mouth
Where they go later, I don't know
It troubles me even still
celebrated darkness from the pit
My mind wasn't always so inclined
with studious study of the bible I did toil
Then...
#dark
#spiritual
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Venomous Lies
Crooked spine
And hobbled feet
Corrupted mind
Thoughts incomplete
Blood red eyes
And a forked tongue
Venomous lies
Told to the young
Evil hatred spread
Wicked and twisted
Army of the dead
In shadows existed
Coming for our souls
Coming for our lives
Absolute control
Hate sharpened knives
With hearts unopened
And minds closed down
Consumed by smoke and
Mirrors we drown
Promised a future
Promised a life
Instead we're sutured
Concealing our strife
No chance to heal
We're...
And hobbled feet
Corrupted mind
Thoughts incomplete
Blood red eyes
And a forked tongue
Venomous lies
Told to the young
Evil hatred spread
Wicked and twisted
Army of the dead
In shadows existed
Coming for our souls
Coming for our lives
Absolute control
Hate sharpened knives
With hearts unopened
And minds closed down
Consumed by smoke and
Mirrors we drown
Promised a future
Promised a life
Instead we're sutured
Concealing our strife
No chance to heal
We're...
#dark
#emptiness
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Stop Smiling
I
Am
A
Wreck
Bruised and discarded like those old ships
You found me and now what?
Why do you smile?
Everyone passes me by and not give a damn
Not …A…Damn!
You smiled at me
You reached for me and…and
What am I supposed to do?
You don’t understand
I’m a wreck
Your light hurts me
Stop! Smiling!
“Beautiful”
Me?
Beautiful?
Does he not see the bruises I carry?
This eye is black and blue
I did not fall
STOP..SMILING!
It’s starting to rain now
I can feel it...
Am
A
Wreck
Bruised and discarded like those old ships
You found me and now what?
Why do you smile?
Everyone passes me by and not give a damn
Not …A…Damn!
You smiled at me
You reached for me and…and
What am I supposed to do?
You don’t understand
I’m a wreck
Your light hurts me
Stop! Smiling!
“Beautiful”
Me?
Beautiful?
Does he not see the bruises I carry?
This eye is black and blue
I did not fall
STOP..SMILING!
It’s starting to rain now
I can feel it...
#anxiety
#dark
#fear #sadness
#fear #sadness
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Power Of Hate
Hate is certainly a strong emotion.
It doesn't take much effort,but devotion.
It's like you are going through the motions.
And a black mist blinds you.
It doesn't let you think straight.
And it's easy for it to find you.
Maybe it's like a dark cloud in the sky.
That can spread,no matter how or why.
Maybe a black mask,facade.
To something so much deeper.
Maybe it's our demons.
Dark instead of covered in glitter.
The taste of hate is strong and bitter.
It can be hard to shake it off.
It feels like...
It doesn't take much effort,but devotion.
It's like you are going through the motions.
And a black mist blinds you.
It doesn't let you think straight.
And it's easy for it to find you.
Maybe it's like a dark cloud in the sky.
That can spread,no matter how or why.
Maybe a black mask,facade.
To something so much deeper.
Maybe it's our demons.
Dark instead of covered in glitter.
The taste of hate is strong and bitter.
It can be hard to shake it off.
It feels like...
#anger
#dark
#frustration #hate
#frustration #hate
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sync
sweet surrender racing in my thoughts a place to hide
Succumb to the darkness with me
you'll find a welcoming place to reside
secrecy of feeling, of course
your body and mine
touching at depths not understood by mortals
we will worship each other
tasting the soul within the sacred understanding
luscious focus spitting on your flame to watch it grow
spinning out of control, you might just lose your mind
with an injection of satirical chaos
We will laugh at the sarcastic die
controlling the masses
we...
Succumb to the darkness with me
you'll find a welcoming place to reside
secrecy of feeling, of course
your body and mine
touching at depths not understood by mortals
we will worship each other
tasting the soul within the sacred understanding
luscious focus spitting on your flame to watch it grow
spinning out of control, you might just lose your mind
with an injection of satirical chaos
We will laugh at the sarcastic die
controlling the masses
we...
#dark
#lust
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Simulation
The layers of programming,
Are what I'm seeing.
These pixilated monsters i see,
Crystal clear, are just scheming.
There is nothing to fear,
They're just demons.
Entities that can't understand,
Why my skin is gleaming.
Just people lost,
In the medium.
They're just spiritual leeches,
Always demeaning.
But I'll fight against treason.
Bake a cake and feed them.
Are what I'm seeing.
These pixilated monsters i see,
Crystal clear, are just scheming.
There is nothing to fear,
They're just demons.
Entities that can't understand,
Why my skin is gleaming.
Just people lost,
In the medium.
They're just spiritual leeches,
Always demeaning.
But I'll fight against treason.
Bake a cake and feed them.
#dark
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Needful
within my need is a greediness to be filled
a hunger so great it howls late at night to no one listening
I'm unsure of its depths
but it consumes rapidly, and where the succor goes I don't know
energizing more need
It's feral and unending
It tears at me by day
with thoughts of give me more
My solemn can't take it
my mind will not hunt
It will not encourage
it is chaste of vision
so I starve with this consuming desire
to the point my soul calls out to my God
He is the only one who can touch me there ...
a hunger so great it howls late at night to no one listening
I'm unsure of its depths
but it consumes rapidly, and where the succor goes I don't know
energizing more need
It's feral and unending
It tears at me by day
with thoughts of give me more
My solemn can't take it
my mind will not hunt
It will not encourage
it is chaste of vision
so I starve with this consuming desire
to the point my soul calls out to my God
He is the only one who can touch me there ...
#dark
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4 Comments
Virgins to the Whores
I can see you lurking in the shadows
How my scent is intoxicating you
Drawing you into my dark world
An Angel is just a Demon in disguise
And reality is the flames pulling you
My fantasies consuming your attention
Making you surrender to the damage
This cycle of the Fallen, forever longing
I want to eat your presence, to steal it
You lick my lips and I suck your tongue
As you gaze into my eyes seeing a universe
This cycle of the Fallen, forever dying
I want to consume every feeling, each drop
As you dominate me...
How my scent is intoxicating you
Drawing you into my dark world
An Angel is just a Demon in disguise
And reality is the flames pulling you
My fantasies consuming your attention
Making you surrender to the damage
This cycle of the Fallen, forever longing
I want to eat your presence, to steal it
You lick my lips and I suck your tongue
As you gaze into my eyes seeing a universe
This cycle of the Fallen, forever dying
I want to consume every feeling, each drop
As you dominate me...
#dark
#erotic
#lust
#sensual
#sex
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concrete
Vilifying my shadow, I blame her
it is her fault my sinister side came forth
bending corrupt feelings
leaving people dumbstruck with my perpensity for evil
Slinking through the mists is a phantom
slithering through your cerebellum
causing disturbing thoughts
dry concussion swollen nightmares
insidious desire wants you to blanch
pale rejects of the horde
whore out your visions
taking them as they were their own
misfits of days past
when you shine, and yes, they know you
your memory faded glory...
it is her fault my sinister side came forth
bending corrupt feelings
leaving people dumbstruck with my perpensity for evil
Slinking through the mists is a phantom
slithering through your cerebellum
causing disturbing thoughts
dry concussion swollen nightmares
insidious desire wants you to blanch
pale rejects of the horde
whore out your visions
taking them as they were their own
misfits of days past
when you shine, and yes, they know you
your memory faded glory...
#dark
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Freedom from Abuse
He was my demon,
My savior,
My darkness,
My love,
My Evil.
He was my smile
My heart,
My tears,
My laughter,
My pain.
He was the one who,
Broke me,
Inspired me,
Beat me,
Destroyed me.
He gave me,
Life,
Lessons,
Love,
Duties.
He lied to me,
Cheated me,
Hit me,
Hugged me,
Despised me.
He was full of,
Broken promises,
Darkness,
Booz,
Suffering.
He was my,
Lover,
Friend, ...
My savior,
My darkness,
My love,
My Evil.
He was my smile
My heart,
My tears,
My laughter,
My pain.
He was the one who,
Broke me,
Inspired me,
Beat me,
Destroyed me.
He gave me,
Life,
Lessons,
Love,
Duties.
He lied to me,
Cheated me,
Hit me,
Hugged me,
Despised me.
He was full of,
Broken promises,
Darkness,
Booz,
Suffering.
He was my,
Lover,
Friend, ...
#abuse
#dark
#freedom
#hate
#love
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DU Poetry : Dark Seeking Honest Critique Poems