Dark Seeking Honest Critique Poems
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dark seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Trials and pain of love
Do you know what it's feel like to be with someone, who pretended to love you, but yet behind the smile and the distance between you both, says it all that the truth of the love was gone like a precious storm in passing through the sky. For sure it's necessary to understand, that how deep love goes deeper than deep, into the heart and soul. Leaving behind the essence of what use to be, a blessing in disguise only to be replaced with thoughts of betrayal and dishonest. For sure it's necessary to be able to share your thoughts, but yet how can you truly trust someone who stole your own sense of...
#anger
#dark
#heartbroken
#rejection
#sadness
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grieve
swirling eyes drink from me, watching me grieve
vampires of the horde channeling instinct
their spikes in tune with the weaker vessels
Their glow differs from the stronger ones
Prowling the night, the monsters entertain dopplegangers
They hunt not for blood but the soul
Animated Minions, they ride the night
Looking through a thousand eyes
manifesting more than one place at once
stealing glances from a gentle lass
They zero in on vulnerability
unattended and a young teen
out there running amok ...
vampires of the horde channeling instinct
their spikes in tune with the weaker vessels
Their glow differs from the stronger ones
Prowling the night, the monsters entertain dopplegangers
They hunt not for blood but the soul
Animated Minions, they ride the night
Looking through a thousand eyes
manifesting more than one place at once
stealing glances from a gentle lass
They zero in on vulnerability
unattended and a young teen
out there running amok ...
#dark
#vampires
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nth level of hell
freaking groovy trip intoxicating my mind
Psycho Cosminaught wielding his creations through the cosmos
Celestial beings light years away recognize him
His driving beats turn to lust
with sounds the likes I've never known
screaming desire passion cums
building the orgasmic pressure
penetrates my vulnerability
leaving seeds of destruction
conjuring my inner Mistress
rising from the nth level of hell
Hell approves of our connection
deep in the illumination, I come into an understanding
A Rock God tempts and persuades ...
Psycho Cosminaught wielding his creations through the cosmos
Celestial beings light years away recognize him
His driving beats turn to lust
with sounds the likes I've never known
screaming desire passion cums
building the orgasmic pressure
penetrates my vulnerability
leaving seeds of destruction
conjuring my inner Mistress
rising from the nth level of hell
Hell approves of our connection
deep in the illumination, I come into an understanding
A Rock God tempts and persuades ...
#dark
#music
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The Witch of Endor
Here we go casting on the winds
fits of ego dine
tiny understanding in the haze
a maze of words astound
falling on the mind heavy
Words of power persuade
expletives of faith
linger in my thoughts
pursuing me in my inner sanctum
conjuring truth, I ask
With halted need, I request
Reveal yourself in the abyss, we have met
Tinder for the fire
burning with greedy lust
pages turn while I gaze
In the book of Nod it is written
witches are coveted
Don't show yourself
cover your mind ...
fits of ego dine
tiny understanding in the haze
a maze of words astound
falling on the mind heavy
Words of power persuade
expletives of faith
linger in my thoughts
pursuing me in my inner sanctum
conjuring truth, I ask
With halted need, I request
Reveal yourself in the abyss, we have met
Tinder for the fire
burning with greedy lust
pages turn while I gaze
In the book of Nod it is written
witches are coveted
Don't show yourself
cover your mind ...
#dark
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Legion
mournful midnight moon glowing in my mind
nighttime's glory to see me flayed open
lewdly on display
The demons pick my thoughts
heckling my gentleness
until they summon the Mistress in me
the Vixen bitch who lays it out
These are my men, this is how they show love
They razz me about my pain
until I'm mad, then they wait for me to swing
Vicious when provoked, they are the horde
They covet my affection
My father says
Get my men at attention
It's time to inspect them
My dark Father wants me to...
nighttime's glory to see me flayed open
lewdly on display
The demons pick my thoughts
heckling my gentleness
until they summon the Mistress in me
the Vixen bitch who lays it out
These are my men, this is how they show love
They razz me about my pain
until I'm mad, then they wait for me to swing
Vicious when provoked, they are the horde
They covet my affection
My father says
Get my men at attention
It's time to inspect them
My dark Father wants me to...
#dark
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Channeling Rob Zombie
rising on the air a madman with visions
Don't cross him, he rides the ethereal waves
bending minds a psychedelic mind fuck
Hypnotic delivers straight to your dopamine a shot of delirium
The masses throng to his shows
Women vie for his attention
channeling Mr. Zombie
Who recognizes that we are horses to be ridden
manipulating time, he keeps a book of shadows
Don't look into his eyes, you might go insane
bedlam of sorts, like recognizes like
a private man with occult followers
Don't mess with him
His family is...
Don't cross him, he rides the ethereal waves
bending minds a psychedelic mind fuck
Hypnotic delivers straight to your dopamine a shot of delirium
The masses throng to his shows
Women vie for his attention
channeling Mr. Zombie
Who recognizes that we are horses to be ridden
manipulating time, he keeps a book of shadows
Don't look into his eyes, you might go insane
bedlam of sorts, like recognizes like
a private man with occult followers
Don't mess with him
His family is...
#dark
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Slitten

#dark
#dirty
#erotic
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penetrate
tasting freedom in the altered states
With little memory of what I am supposed to be
Instead, fully aware of what I am
caressing the fullness of the moment
my vulnerability open
My thoughts penetrate
people look away, knowing I see
deep into the pit where they reside
puppeting their costumes
a masquerade of otherworldly beings
With little memory of what I am supposed to be
Instead, fully aware of what I am
caressing the fullness of the moment
my vulnerability open
My thoughts penetrate
people look away, knowing I see
deep into the pit where they reside
puppeting their costumes
a masquerade of otherworldly beings
#dark
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craven
under the ground deep
despair gasps her last breath
descending, she weeps for what is no longer there
A union of souls disbanded has left her shattered
The company of ghouls, her only companions now
needful glory, the days in these sacred halls
a close-knit family inside the bellows
With ears open, I hear the night cry
forsaken in vision
now despised
Whispering secrets that shouldn't be told
I'm set aside, should I become so bold
enchantments set a ward about me
Trespassers of the horde warn me
...
despair gasps her last breath
descending, she weeps for what is no longer there
A union of souls disbanded has left her shattered
The company of ghouls, her only companions now
needful glory, the days in these sacred halls
a close-knit family inside the bellows
With ears open, I hear the night cry
forsaken in vision
now despised
Whispering secrets that shouldn't be told
I'm set aside, should I become so bold
enchantments set a ward about me
Trespassers of the horde warn me
...
#dark
#DeepUndergroundPoetry
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strangle the need
Down in the hollers, darkness abides
quicken the screams, let them bleed with need
Their moans hold secrets, groaning in protest
Then the body betrays with pulsing energy
discern the moment
Religious baptism of horror
holds a rite thinks it knows my name
bloodletting epiphany rapes the mind
Chaos ensues, and the ritual begins
Say the words
My essence spells on the air
chanting my incantations
throw the bones I'm commanded
Sinsiter's need is waiting
a magic man, a metal man
an artist of the obscene ...
quicken the screams, let them bleed with need
Their moans hold secrets, groaning in protest
Then the body betrays with pulsing energy
discern the moment
Religious baptism of horror
holds a rite thinks it knows my name
bloodletting epiphany rapes the mind
Chaos ensues, and the ritual begins
Say the words
My essence spells on the air
chanting my incantations
throw the bones I'm commanded
Sinsiter's need is waiting
a magic man, a metal man
an artist of the obscene ...
#dark
#witches
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cratered
regress the history
Look back, the memories are coming for you
Hateful honesty, little has changed from life to life
Past sins haunt
It is regrettable
Fortunately, I need you
In the eternal storm, a fiend for you
escalate the internal violence
until fire comes from your eyes
sinsister little darling daring to come closer
fanged, understanding my claws are out
With a trajectory of madness
aimed at your understanding
Sick slick ache is to be known
heard inside the noise
Belittling none, only want to...
Look back, the memories are coming for you
Hateful honesty, little has changed from life to life
Past sins haunt
It is regrettable
Fortunately, I need you
In the eternal storm, a fiend for you
escalate the internal violence
until fire comes from your eyes
sinsister little darling daring to come closer
fanged, understanding my claws are out
With a trajectory of madness
aimed at your understanding
Sick slick ache is to be known
heard inside the noise
Belittling none, only want to...
#dark
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dwindle
disasterous fiction I am enough
When I know I'm not
so very imperfect
Impulsive, my body betrays
leaves me dwindling in the wind of disappointment
hanging from despair
My weak soul chooses what is unwise
oscillating between one feeling and another
dying a moment at a time
Failure, I can't count on myself
Beholden to mercy, I cringe
darkest desires realized
They come at a price
With not enough penance to cleanse
Bloody redemption isn't for me
Bitterly, I realize my soul wasn't included ...
When I know I'm not
so very imperfect
Impulsive, my body betrays
leaves me dwindling in the wind of disappointment
hanging from despair
My weak soul chooses what is unwise
oscillating between one feeling and another
dying a moment at a time
Failure, I can't count on myself
Beholden to mercy, I cringe
darkest desires realized
They come at a price
With not enough penance to cleanse
Bloody redemption isn't for me
Bitterly, I realize my soul wasn't included ...
#dark
#sadness
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