Dark Seeking Honest Critique Poems
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dark seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Pound Of Flesh
Off to a tropical paradise
For a long overdue vacation
When a malfunctioning device
Affected the planes aviation
The pilot losing all control
The plane started going down
Passengers searching for their soul
Exploding fire, burning the ground
The only survivors of the flight
A young mother and her teenage son
Rummaging wreckage, the midst of night
Their tribulations have just begun
Sorting through the cargos ash
Anything for their survival
Only a knife found...
For a long overdue vacation
When a malfunctioning device
Affected the planes aviation
The pilot losing all control
The plane started going down
Passengers searching for their soul
Exploding fire, burning the ground
The only survivors of the flight
A young mother and her teenage son
Rummaging wreckage, the midst of night
Their tribulations have just begun
Sorting through the cargos ash
Anything for their survival
Only a knife found...
#dark
#despair
#emptiness
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Paranoid ergonomics...
Sporadically succinct.
Incomparably subjunctive.
Unsettling minimalism.
Unnecessary hyperbolic!
Sitting on the couch watching the news.
Hunger for cornflakes and porn movies.
Do we have the 70's back?
With what magnitude do I measure absence?
In degrees of lack, perhaps.
Incomparably subjunctive.
Unsettling minimalism.
Unnecessary hyperbolic!
Sitting on the couch watching the news.
Hunger for cornflakes and porn movies.
Do we have the 70's back?
With what magnitude do I measure absence?
In degrees of lack, perhaps.
#anxiety
#apathy
#dark
#mirror
#patience
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The vacuous Richard Eden - and falsified vulturine stories in the Daily Mail again!
By Stanley Collymore
Whatever each of you brainwashed
and braindead morons really think,
Meghan will never, even obviously
wearing a shroud, return to Britain
under any circumstances, so truly
get over it, as well as evidently so
your Richard Eden evilly fancifully
made up stories. And that clearly
similarly includes unquestionably
requisite, and significantly feudal
so-called serfs really pathetically
very preposterously royal duties!
That rather pointedly also, refers
irrefutably, to Meghan's husband ...
Whatever each of you brainwashed
and braindead morons really think,
Meghan will never, even obviously
wearing a shroud, return to Britain
under any circumstances, so truly
get over it, as well as evidently so
your Richard Eden evilly fancifully
made up stories. And that clearly
similarly includes unquestionably
requisite, and significantly feudal
so-called serfs really pathetically
very preposterously royal duties!
That rather pointedly also, refers
irrefutably, to Meghan's husband ...
#dark
#denial
#emptiness
#greed
#hate
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The Past is a foreign Country!
By Stanley Collymore
Do get it right Peter Hitchens or
at least, seriously make an
effort to do so. If there
was one word to sum up the demise of Smithfield market it would certainly be
greed itself vastly compounded by the
proverbial "quick buck" as developers
earnestly look for prime sites, for yet
more flats. This despite the growing
number of empty new flats that very
ironically are evidently unaffordable
to most of those who are in need of
economic housing! All this actually
obviously crucially...
Do get it right Peter Hitchens or
at least, seriously make an
effort to do so. If there
was one word to sum up the demise of Smithfield market it would certainly be
greed itself vastly compounded by the
proverbial "quick buck" as developers
earnestly look for prime sites, for yet
more flats. This despite the growing
number of empty new flats that very
ironically are evidently unaffordable
to most of those who are in need of
economic housing! All this actually
obviously crucially...
#dark
#denial
#emptiness
#greed
#hate
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Sexual intercourse and buyer's remorse!
By Stanley Collymore
Alcohol is just a convenient excuse
to essentially overlook evidently
very irresponsible and really
thoughtless and spontaneous behaviour!
Thus, per se, alcohol is rather pertinently
not the genuine problem, but undeniably
a conduit to actually facilitating the real
one, that indubitably is literally basically
that of men and women, really casually
jumping into bed with clearly complete
strangers to themselves, and naturally
crucially essentially people they really
quite distinctly don't...
Alcohol is just a convenient excuse
to essentially overlook evidently
very irresponsible and really
thoughtless and spontaneous behaviour!
Thus, per se, alcohol is rather pertinently
not the genuine problem, but undeniably
a conduit to actually facilitating the real
one, that indubitably is literally basically
that of men and women, really casually
jumping into bed with clearly complete
strangers to themselves, and naturally
crucially essentially people they really
quite distinctly don't...
#bittersweet
#dark
#denial
#emptiness
#greed
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Always in a daze
Always in a daze
I live the same routine over & over again
Wear that empty gaze
The one that keeps me
Sane!
Don't crucify me
You'll see
Inside I'm fragile....I'm weak
So much more to lose
if I don't try
But I cannot change
I'll just burn the ambition inside
Stared into a void
Of emptiness and a bitter feeling
Too much time alone
Leads me into darkness, dreaming
This road will take me nowhere
Suffocates my will
Today though, I will try again to be something I am not
I live the same routine over & over again
Wear that empty gaze
The one that keeps me
Sane!
Don't crucify me
You'll see
Inside I'm fragile....I'm weak
So much more to lose
if I don't try
But I cannot change
I'll just burn the ambition inside
Stared into a void
Of emptiness and a bitter feeling
Too much time alone
Leads me into darkness, dreaming
This road will take me nowhere
Suffocates my will
Today though, I will try again to be something I am not
#boredom
#dark
#LifeGoals
#loneliness
#vulnerability
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Whispers in the Dark
Buzzing
Darkness whispers
Flies circle, secrets hide
Silent steps, shadows entangle
Fear reigns
Darkness whispers
Flies circle, secrets hide
Silent steps, shadows entangle
Fear reigns
#anxiety
#dark
#mystery
#secrets
#shadows
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He had the last laugh
Bradley lived more life
In a swift twenty-seven years
Than we could ever dream
In our mortified tears
We got nothing
By comparison
Just another simplified simpleton
Fuck-stain rebellion
Bradley lived more life
In that rough quarter-century
Than we could ever have
As a fucked up vile visionary
We got nothing
We got nothing
Just another simpleton
Fuck-stain rebellion
He flipped us the finger
while he said Good-bye
In a swift twenty-seven years
Than we could ever dream
In our mortified tears
We got nothing
By comparison
Just another simplified simpleton
Fuck-stain rebellion
Bradley lived more life
In that rough quarter-century
Than we could ever have
As a fucked up vile visionary
We got nothing
We got nothing
Just another simpleton
Fuck-stain rebellion
He flipped us the finger
while he said Good-bye
#addiction
#dark
#despair
#loneliness
#rejection
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Wicked Justice of the Innocent
#dark
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Last Writes
Last writes etched in shadows deep
Whispers the past, a secret to keep
Ink of sorrow on parchment of night
A tale of despair hidden from sight
In a room where dreams once flourished
A writers soul now deeply nourished
By darkness that consumed his mind
His written words all that's left behind
His last writes, a final plan for peace
In the quiet his struggles cease
A pen laid down, a life untold
The cold embrace of winters hold
Beneath the stars a story fades
In shadows cast the past persuedes ...
Whispers the past, a secret to keep
Ink of sorrow on parchment of night
A tale of despair hidden from sight
In a room where dreams once flourished
A writers soul now deeply nourished
By darkness that consumed his mind
His written words all that's left behind
His last writes, a final plan for peace
In the quiet his struggles cease
A pen laid down, a life untold
The cold embrace of winters hold
Beneath the stars a story fades
In shadows cast the past persuedes ...
#dark
#emptiness
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Even Sweet Girls can be Bitter Princesses
The crown is mine, said the princess
in a voice as sweet as snow.
None can play in this kingdom now.
Not a step, not a sound, not a show...
Until she says so, until she lets it go.
With a smile she took her throne
beneath the sky’s golden glow.
Her decree echoed through the land
and all the games ceased to flow.
Until she says so, until she lets it go.
The court stood silent, eyes wide,
as the princess ruled the floor.
Her presence strong, undeniable.
Her will, they would not ignore.
Until she says...
in a voice as sweet as snow.
None can play in this kingdom now.
Not a step, not a sound, not a show...
Until she says so, until she lets it go.
With a smile she took her throne
beneath the sky’s golden glow.
Her decree echoed through the land
and all the games ceased to flow.
Until she says so, until she lets it go.
The court stood silent, eyes wide,
as the princess ruled the floor.
Her presence strong, undeniable.
Her will, they would not ignore.
Until she says...
#dark
#depression
#evil
#fairies
#oppression
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Cursed
I don't know where I am
I don't know where I've been
What is this that surrounds me?
I see darkness
I see my fate
I start to panic
Is it all too late?
I cannot breathe
I cannot see
I cannot break this curse
There is no way out
There is little light
This curse takes me tonight
I will never lie
I know I will die
Give me one more chance
Oh mighty Lucifer, praise my last words
I don't know where I've been
What is this that surrounds me?
I see darkness
I see my fate
I start to panic
Is it all too late?
I cannot breathe
I cannot see
I cannot break this curse
There is no way out
There is little light
This curse takes me tonight
I will never lie
I know I will die
Give me one more chance
Oh mighty Lucifer, praise my last words
#curse
#dark
#evil #fate
#evil #fate
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