Dark by Top Critiquers Poems
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dark by top critiquers poems. Poems written by members who have given lots of feedback to other poets this month.
A Lifetime in 12 Blinks
We blink once were in Pre-K
We blink twice 21st birthday
Third time marriage & career
Fourth time parents die, shed a tear
Fifth your at the age to retire
Sixth your ailing, always so tired
Seventh your spouse dies, sadness is deep
Eighth you live alone, hope to die in your sleep
Ninth you have visions of insanity
Tenth you curse your god with profanity
Eleventh remaining family surround your bed
Twelfth one last deep breath, now you are dead
When the Grim Reaper comes for all of us,
think of it as going to sleep...
We blink twice 21st birthday
Third time marriage & career
Fourth time parents die, shed a tear
Fifth your at the age to retire
Sixth your ailing, always so tired
Seventh your spouse dies, sadness is deep
Eighth you live alone, hope to die in your sleep
Ninth you have visions of insanity
Tenth you curse your god with profanity
Eleventh remaining family surround your bed
Twelfth one last deep breath, now you are dead
When the Grim Reaper comes for all of us,
think of it as going to sleep...
#dark
#death
#rhyming #TruthOfLife
#rhyming #TruthOfLife
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NLP
A long, long time ago
When I used to be in sales
I learned the phrase
“I say it they’ll doubt it, if they say it’s true”
I also heard
“Necessity is the mother of invention
And repetition is the mother of learning”
For years these three things stayed on my mind
And now they have fully come to light
Warping the very fabric of reality
Because the truth may be too much to accept
A liar will sell his fabrication
Repeating it over, and over again
To the point his customers will repeat it and buy it
Hook line and...
When I used to be in sales
I learned the phrase
“I say it they’ll doubt it, if they say it’s true”
I also heard
“Necessity is the mother of invention
And repetition is the mother of learning”
For years these three things stayed on my mind
And now they have fully come to light
Warping the very fabric of reality
Because the truth may be too much to accept
A liar will sell his fabrication
Repeating it over, and over again
To the point his customers will repeat it and buy it
Hook line and...
#dark
#LifeStruggles
#WritingPoetry
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4 Comments
Trophy
If I look the other way you're unhappy
my pain is your pleasure, to you
not seeing your nature, I touch the heavens
isn't your game fun enough for you, while I'm sleeping?
going through life with a grateful song...I am happy
you awarded me second place in your heart
so I chose substances
because it was a cruel bed you made for me
my affections went ignored year in and out
cruelly you always let me know
when someone else was amusing
it wasn't enough to cheat
your game wasn't fun enough if I wasn't in deep ...
my pain is your pleasure, to you
not seeing your nature, I touch the heavens
isn't your game fun enough for you, while I'm sleeping?
going through life with a grateful song...I am happy
you awarded me second place in your heart
so I chose substances
because it was a cruel bed you made for me
my affections went ignored year in and out
cruelly you always let me know
when someone else was amusing
it wasn't enough to cheat
your game wasn't fun enough if I wasn't in deep ...
#sadness
#dark
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The Dark
The thick dark atmosphere
is needless of a shred of sleep.
The dark was too deeply conscious
of me.
The dark's thoughts were becoming
mine.
I can feel the weakness of my mind.
In a bizarre solitude was the heavy pull
of the ancient trees.
Whatever is looking at me.
Intensely slicing through me.
A stare that pierces flesh, blood, organ & bone
I stand mortal and alone.
But deep within my soul's energy,
is a galaxy of iridescent scars
The gashes of my identity.
I'm safe.
The dark retreats. ...
is needless of a shred of sleep.
The dark was too deeply conscious
of me.
The dark's thoughts were becoming
mine.
I can feel the weakness of my mind.
In a bizarre solitude was the heavy pull
of the ancient trees.
Whatever is looking at me.
Intensely slicing through me.
A stare that pierces flesh, blood, organ & bone
I stand mortal and alone.
But deep within my soul's energy,
is a galaxy of iridescent scars
The gashes of my identity.
I'm safe.
The dark retreats. ...
#strength
#dark
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Brooding
First day of Spring
Cold
Windy
I’m brooding
Not because I love heat
It’s not that
It’s something else
I could tell you my feelings
Won’t burden you
Darkness consumes me
I welcome the brutal truth
Because truth is rare
I walk lonely, dog by my side
Time is an invoice
You pay or else face the consequences
Cold
Windy
I’m brooding
Not because I love heat
It’s not that
It’s something else
I could tell you my feelings
Won’t burden you
Darkness consumes me
I welcome the brutal truth
Because truth is rare
I walk lonely, dog by my side
Time is an invoice
You pay or else face the consequences
#dark
#confessional
#TruthOfLife #philosophical
#TruthOfLife #philosophical
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Releasing the Light
It is our light not our darkness
that most frightens us.'
We lit the candles of our Spirit—
not under a bushel of ancient secrets
digging as moles in sunken basements;
but, a cavernous gateway to acceptance
Trimmed the wicks of our heart
to observe Love blaze brighter
from this darkest eve of Winter
Allowed flames to alight memory—
fill our dark soul of night
with fresh perspectives in truth
Felt bygone...
that most frightens us.'
We lit the candles of our Spirit—
not under a bushel of ancient secrets
digging as moles in sunken basements;
but, a cavernous gateway to acceptance
Trimmed the wicks of our heart
to observe Love blaze brighter
from this darkest eve of Winter
Allowed flames to alight memory—
fill our dark soul of night
with fresh perspectives in truth
Felt bygone...
#dark
#sun
#winter
#nature
#humankind
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Fifty Shades
#dark
#BDSM
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20 Comments
INSPIRED BY 'PRIMAL NEEDS'
I drive you hard against the wall,
my tool nails you, I give you all
the naked lust, that's been pent up
In clothed chaste daytime, like a tup.
We're both in unshamed nakedness,
you smell of your wet readiness.
Like a dog with an on-heat bitch,
my lust is roused to fever pitch.
You confided your inner need
and your yearning to do the deed,
Taking a submissive part
as I drive your long legs apart.
A deed where there's no lying back,
No leisured fumbling in the sack.
Like steel when it is...
my tool nails you, I give you all
the naked lust, that's been pent up
In clothed chaste daytime, like a tup.
We're both in unshamed nakedness,
you smell of your wet readiness.
Like a dog with an on-heat bitch,
my lust is roused to fever pitch.
You confided your inner need
and your yearning to do the deed,
Taking a submissive part
as I drive your long legs apart.
A deed where there's no lying back,
No leisured fumbling in the sack.
Like steel when it is...
#lust
#dark
#erotic #rhyming
#erotic #rhyming
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extrasensory necessity
I don't know this forest
with its steel & concrete spines
where winds whistle a lonely call
a haunting so chilling
despite the crowd around me
...I always walk alone
oppressive shadows press me down
stretching across littered tracks
glowing eyes directing patterns
the constant stop & go of it all
and the wails...the screams
of injured & dying things
as predator meets unwary prey
I am but one of many
where absolute darkness whispers death
...or worse
be suspicious of beckoning branches
stay the...
with its steel & concrete spines
where winds whistle a lonely call
a haunting so chilling
despite the crowd around me
...I always walk alone
oppressive shadows press me down
stretching across littered tracks
glowing eyes directing patterns
the constant stop & go of it all
and the wails...the screams
of injured & dying things
as predator meets unwary prey
I am but one of many
where absolute darkness whispers death
...or worse
be suspicious of beckoning branches
stay the...
#anxiety
#dark
#city #confessional
#city #confessional
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Choda in Wet Toyoda-with Adagio
stagnant scream of death's blush
clutches of infinity in gasps of terrified breath
peeling the flesh of the twilight's loaf
with a strength of claws remorse deprived
burying choda in wet toyoda
removed from thoughts the lust foremost
with the straw tentacles of the anemone
wrapping minds of floating amoebas
dissolving winds cutting teeth on the dead
dirges unheard as they gnawed on rattling bones
shadows dripping dark souls from the womb
enters light from darkness in surreal transition ...
clutches of infinity in gasps of terrified breath
peeling the flesh of the twilight's loaf
with a strength of claws remorse deprived
burying choda in wet toyoda
removed from thoughts the lust foremost
with the straw tentacles of the anemone
wrapping minds of floating amoebas
dissolving winds cutting teeth on the dead
dirges unheard as they gnawed on rattling bones
shadows dripping dark souls from the womb
enters light from darkness in surreal transition ...
#dark
#erotic
#WritingPoetry
114 reads
4 Comments
Ryan's confirmation
#lust
#dark
#BDSM #vampires
#BDSM #vampires
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3 Comments
Dark Angels
Darks Angels are coming
to help us
fight the devil's forces
because we have
been treating the
Earth as our toilet
Now we fight to
clean up the Earth
to destroy the
Devil's Forces but it's
very difficult cause
they are very hot
women that are
trying to lead us
into their sin
to help us
fight the devil's forces
because we have
been treating the
Earth as our toilet
Now we fight to
clean up the Earth
to destroy the
Devil's Forces but it's
very difficult cause
they are very hot
women that are
trying to lead us
into their sin
#dark
#women
#men
#angels
#temptation
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