Im Sorry Seeking Honest Critique Poems
#ImSorry
im sorry seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
3rdEYErising
Poem Published
18th Nov 2023 5:08am
18th Nov 2023 5:08am
Guilted
his whole intention
all along was to always bully me
with proposition after
dirty proposition
until i was positioned
right where he wanted me
pinned with no place to go
hogging up my space
with his domineering presence
selfishly sucking up my air..my thoughts
my moods..my moisture
aggressive as fuck
possessive..proactive
he saw my responses in advance
then acted on each one of them accordingly
preyed on them like a hawk
perched over my entire being
...
all along was to always bully me
with proposition after
dirty proposition
until i was positioned
right where he wanted me
pinned with no place to go
hogging up my space
with his domineering presence
selfishly sucking up my air..my thoughts
my moods..my moisture
aggressive as fuck
possessive..proactive
he saw my responses in advance
then acted on each one of them accordingly
preyed on them like a hawk
perched over my entire being
...
#ImSorry
#BDSM
#lover #dirty
#lover #dirty
529 reads
14 Comments
Officialkn9ne
Poem Published
27th Sep 2023 5:40pm
27th Sep 2023 5:40pm
How Do I love Again
Love is a drug and I just need my fix
Tired of pouring all this love into the wrong bitch
Tired of the different mood swings
I hit the wrong switch
Love ain’t did nothing
Not even made me rich
Who knew Love would feel like this?
Love chose a man over her kids
Love had me locked up facing a bid
Love had me wishing I didn’t exist
Love had me taking risks
Now I know what love feels like at the end
I might have said some things I never meant
You really going to throw away all the time that we spent?
I can’t even sleep...
Tired of pouring all this love into the wrong bitch
Tired of the different mood swings
I hit the wrong switch
Love ain’t did nothing
Not even made me rich
Who knew Love would feel like this?
Love chose a man over her kids
Love had me locked up facing a bid
Love had me wishing I didn’t exist
Love had me taking risks
Now I know what love feels like at the end
I might have said some things I never meant
You really going to throw away all the time that we spent?
I can’t even sleep...
#ImSorry
#breakup
#Christian
#LongDistanceRelationship
#dating
479 reads
1 Comment
Koulouri
Poem Published
6th Sep 2023 7:14pm
6th Sep 2023 7:14pm
Forgive Me for Living
I sometimes forget to swallow my words,
to stomp on my foot,
and to croak like a bird.
Apologies tumble off my tongue,
begging for forgiveness,
though I deserve none.
My silly mind had forgotten its tune,
the melodic melancholy,
a violent croon.
Stagnant steps falter and break,
as my tongue becomes tied,
my throat beginning to ache.
Over eager tears race,
My face overshadowed,
With a horrid disgrace.
Ringing resonates in my head,
The air light,
My eyes puffy and red. ...
to stomp on my foot,
and to croak like a bird.
Apologies tumble off my tongue,
begging for forgiveness,
though I deserve none.
My silly mind had forgotten its tune,
the melodic melancholy,
a violent croon.
Stagnant steps falter and break,
as my tongue becomes tied,
my throat beginning to ache.
Over eager tears race,
My face overshadowed,
With a horrid disgrace.
Ringing resonates in my head,
The air light,
My eyes puffy and red. ...
#anxiety
#loneliness
#ImSorry
#forgiveness
#LifeStruggles
241 reads
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mysfit_androm
Poem Published
22nd Aug 2023 2:39am
22nd Aug 2023 2:39am
absolute ZEr0
Wholeness parts from real
Eyes in pairs;
Ends heard all
The same
Eyes in pairs;
Ends heard all
The same
#grief
#ImSorry
#heartbroken
145 reads
0 Comments
Orc_Pirate_68
Poem Published
21st Aug 2023 7:28pm
21st Aug 2023 7:28pm
A Poet Without Words
It's been months since I last saw you,
I've stopped counting, it's true,
My life I did skew,
This is my cue
To tell all,
How hard I did fall,
And then fell again,
Leaving many a bleeding ink stain,
Fit for the entrainment of vaudevilles,
I was so head over heels,
That I tripped,
My pen blood dipped,
Trying to with words, prop myself up,
And when I stood up,
My head did spin,
I was holding my spilled guts in,
Though you never did see,
For I wouldn't dare let you see,
My heart hanging by just a thread, ...
I've stopped counting, it's true,
My life I did skew,
This is my cue
To tell all,
How hard I did fall,
And then fell again,
Leaving many a bleeding ink stain,
Fit for the entrainment of vaudevilles,
I was so head over heels,
That I tripped,
My pen blood dipped,
Trying to with words, prop myself up,
And when I stood up,
My head did spin,
I was holding my spilled guts in,
Though you never did see,
For I wouldn't dare let you see,
My heart hanging by just a thread, ...
#sadness
#love
#ImSorry
#heartbroken
#StreamOfConsciousness
399 reads
3 Comments
Wordvomit2001
Poem Published
9th Aug 2023 2:54am
9th Aug 2023 2:54am
So long dear freind
Though you still breathe air into your lungs , you no longer live . bleak , void of life pools of obsidian , now rest upon your sunken face,where your once ocean blue eyes lived summers past .Gone is the girl who used to answer to your name . goodbye dear friend for this is where we part ways . i will not watch as you slip from my grip . my love i lended to you alas you didn't want help you wanted suffering something of which i cannot offer farewell dear love may me meet again , i pray it to be in this realm yet sorrowfully I know it to be but a cruel dream . may you find peace one day that...
#ImSorry
#MovingOn
#bittersweet
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dartford
Paul S...
Paul S...
Poem Published
5th Jun 2023 00:24am
5th Jun 2023 00:24am
Rochester
trying to climb the winding, uneven, positively medieval stone steps that led up through the dark interior of the castle, with two (too)
unreliable legs and a walking stick,
plus my wife and a pregnant daughter in law in tow, probably wasn’t my best idea, he says ..
unreliable legs and a walking stick,
plus my wife and a pregnant daughter in law in tow, probably wasn’t my best idea, he says ..
#ImSorry
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Ljdynamic
Poem Published
20th Mar 2023 3:44pm
20th Mar 2023 3:44pm
Rae of Sunshine
The universe tilts on its axis,
access to your heart is a privilege.
Edge of the eclipse
glimpses into your soul.
Control your wild emotions.
Oceans I would drown in.
Sin of me, sad of you.
Through better or the worst of it
fit yourself into the nook of my heart.
Start to see your value.
access to your heart is a privilege.
Edge of the eclipse
glimpses into your soul.
Control your wild emotions.
Oceans I would drown in.
Sin of me, sad of you.
Through better or the worst of it
fit yourself into the nook of my heart.
Start to see your value.
#love
#BestFriend
#ImSorry
25 reads
16 Comments
DreamIllusions
Poem Published
12th Mar 2023 9:22pm
12th Mar 2023 9:22pm
OH What Have I Done
Sipping on my own madness
Tasting my own medicine
As it cuts straight to the bone
Then takes it time there
Spiraling and gliding through the blood
Fracturing instead of clean breaks
I wonder what next
What will it take
For me to stop all of this
For me to feel again, love instead of hate
It’s not you I hate
It’s only me
The me that won’t let the rest of me be
The one that deviates
Dissociates
Takes the reins
Tally ho
Away we go
So I nibble on my own sadness
Savoring my own sanity in small bites ...
Tasting my own medicine
As it cuts straight to the bone
Then takes it time there
Spiraling and gliding through the blood
Fracturing instead of clean breaks
I wonder what next
What will it take
For me to stop all of this
For me to feel again, love instead of hate
It’s not you I hate
It’s only me
The me that won’t let the rest of me be
The one that deviates
Dissociates
Takes the reins
Tally ho
Away we go
So I nibble on my own sadness
Savoring my own sanity in small bites ...
#sadness
#ImSorry
#heartbroken
#secrets
#disappointment
405 reads
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DreamIllusions
Poem Published
11th Mar 2023 4:43am
11th Mar 2023 4:43am
I'm Just A Ghost
Sitting in the corner
Watching you with her
Tears welling up
Never falling out
Floating in the air instead
Around my see thru head
I should have treated you better
Should have had love life a feather
Should have felt every emotion
Instead of going thru the motions
Should have given myself pain
To just feel anything
Instead I numbed my body
Calcified my brain
Until it felt nothing
Not even in the rain
So I sit in the corner
Watching you and her
Longing to feel numb again
Instead feeling...
Watching you with her
Tears welling up
Never falling out
Floating in the air instead
Around my see thru head
I should have treated you better
Should have had love life a feather
Should have felt every emotion
Instead of going thru the motions
Should have given myself pain
To just feel anything
Instead I numbed my body
Calcified my brain
Until it felt nothing
Not even in the rain
So I sit in the corner
Watching you and her
Longing to feel numb again
Instead feeling...
#sadness
#ImSorry
#heartbroken
#secrets
#disappointment
268 reads
1 Comment
copingwithwords__
Poem Published
9th Mar 2023 8:16pm
9th Mar 2023 8:16pm
btcywtsitw
she has the power over me
she ignites flames
and erases it
just as easily
with her words
wordsmith
and i’m the imitator
copycat
she taught me so much
love and pain
showed me so much
music and resilience
i love her
i miss her
it’s a dangerous game
she ignites flames
and erases it
just as easily
with her words
wordsmith
and i’m the imitator
copycat
she taught me so much
love and pain
showed me so much
music and resilience
i love her
i miss her
it’s a dangerous game
#ImSorry
#TimeHeals
#admiration
#IMissYou
#apathy
315 reads
1 Comment
copingwithwords__
Poem Published
9th Mar 2023 6:23pm
9th Mar 2023 6:23pm
bittersweet
i told you everything
you knew about every detail
laid myself in your hands
like it was my undoubted fait
in the end, it hurt me so much
and i hurt you, too
now were not talking anymore
and i try to heal
from comparing us
except i’m 20 years younger
thought i needed to be perfect
in order to be liked
to be good
misinterpreted your words
day by day
almost a year passed since that day in may
passed by
almost a year passed
since you completely altered my life
i would do it all again ...
you knew about every detail
laid myself in your hands
like it was my undoubted fait
in the end, it hurt me so much
and i hurt you, too
now were not talking anymore
and i try to heal
from comparing us
except i’m 20 years younger
thought i needed to be perfect
in order to be liked
to be good
misinterpreted your words
day by day
almost a year passed since that day in may
passed by
almost a year passed
since you completely altered my life
i would do it all again ...
#ImSorry
#friendship
#MovingOn #bittersweet
#MovingOn #bittersweet
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