Im Sorry Seeking Honest Critique Poems
#ImSorry
im sorry seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Koulouri
Poem Published
14th Nov 2024 2:41pm
14th Nov 2024 2:41pm
Overdue
Guilt enraptures skin
and flesh
till its bone
and blood.
Greedy fingers wanting
always wanting
never wrapping comfortably
around what they want.
Praise
a frivolous thing
handed to those
undeserving.
And I am one
who has not earned
what they desire
so deeply.
Claws rip deep
thoughts cut deeper
marrow mixing
yellow and red.
Snow and rain
sun changing them
yet do they
deserve to be changed?
and flesh
till its bone
and blood.
Greedy fingers wanting
always wanting
never wrapping comfortably
around what they want.
Praise
a frivolous thing
handed to those
undeserving.
And I am one
who has not earned
what they desire
so deeply.
Claws rip deep
thoughts cut deeper
marrow mixing
yellow and red.
Snow and rain
sun changing them
yet do they
deserve to be changed?
#forgiveness
#greed
#ImSorry #regret
#ImSorry #regret
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cabcool
Poem Published
25th Sep 2024 6:39am
25th Sep 2024 6:39am
remOrse
The skeletons of the past must not hold back the dream of a new life, even
though fear and regret, guilt and remorse may unsettle us during the effort to
give our future a new home.”—Erik Pevernagie
i have no time to stop and count
the number of the wrongs,
or measure the intensity
of all the harm i’ve caused;
to test how high i’ve placed myself
above the needs of throngs,
or fathom depths i’ve stooped to hurt
poor men whose...
though fear and regret, guilt and remorse may unsettle us during the effort to
give our future a new home.”—Erik Pevernagie
i have no time to stop and count
the number of the wrongs,
or measure the intensity
of all the harm i’ve caused;
to test how high i’ve placed myself
above the needs of throngs,
or fathom depths i’ve stooped to hurt
poor men whose...
#forgiveness
#ImSorry
#LifeChangingMoment
#rebirth
#regret
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copingwithwords__
Poem Published
29th Aug 2024 7:59pm
29th Aug 2024 7:59pm
99
the average words in my poems is 99
and honestly, that's just fine.
but I can't help but notice
that not being quite good enough is my internal motive.
there once was a girl
we had it all, then I lost her
i call her name, an "y" ends it
and I ask myself questions why I'd ended it
There must've been a reason -
"Didn't you trust your gut?"
The trust was carried away by some guy,
my own thoughts lit the way into treason,
my mind spirals at the thought of those eyes as...
and honestly, that's just fine.
but I can't help but notice
that not being quite good enough is my internal motive.
there once was a girl
we had it all, then I lost her
i call her name, an "y" ends it
and I ask myself questions why I'd ended it
There must've been a reason -
"Didn't you trust your gut?"
The trust was carried away by some guy,
my own thoughts lit the way into treason,
my mind spirals at the thought of those eyes as...
#breakup
#honesty
#ImSorry
#regret
#relationships
103 reads
1 Comment
Just-Rob
Poem Published
25th Jul 2024 2:20pm
25th Jul 2024 2:20pm
Distancing
Sometimes I distance myself
Because I'm hoping that people will back off
Because I need space
I wonder if people respect me enough to give me that
Sometimes I distance myself
Because Im hoping that people will come closer
Because I need reassurance
I wonder if people love me enough to give me that
Because I'm hoping that people will back off
Because I need space
I wonder if people respect me enough to give me that
Sometimes I distance myself
Because Im hoping that people will come closer
Because I need reassurance
I wonder if people love me enough to give me that
#honesty
#IMissYou
#ImSorry
#love
#respect
305 reads
4 Comments
IofferMe
Poem Published
22nd Jul 2024 2:27am
22nd Jul 2024 2:27am
What it Means to be a Fool
I am death
I am a murderer
I am evil
I am darkness
I have pushed your tears to fall to their death
I pushed your love over a cliff
I pummeled your home to rubble and burnt it all
I crushed your heart to a foolish song
You screamed in silence and took it all
I accepted what you gave with no thought to reward
My ears hollow caverns as your pleas rang through
Your hearts desire, my inconsiderate wish
Under pressure you stood strong
A home on your shoulders with no help at all
Your arms stretched...
I am a murderer
I am evil
I am darkness
I have pushed your tears to fall to their death
I pushed your love over a cliff
I pummeled your home to rubble and burnt it all
I crushed your heart to a foolish song
You screamed in silence and took it all
I accepted what you gave with no thought to reward
My ears hollow caverns as your pleas rang through
Your hearts desire, my inconsiderate wish
Under pressure you stood strong
A home on your shoulders with no help at all
Your arms stretched...
#breakup
#ILoveYou
#ImSorry #sadness
#ImSorry #sadness
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cabcool
Poem Published
31st May 2024 4:01am
31st May 2024 4:01am
guilty
“We must reject the idea that every time a law's broken, society is guilty
rather than the lawbreaker. It is time to restore the American precept that
each individual is accountable for his actions.”―Ronald Reagan
i.
guilty guilty guilty guilty
guilty guilty guilty guilty
guilty guilty guilty guilty
guilty guilty guilty guilty
ii.
guilty guilty guilty guilty
guilty guilty guilty guilty
guilty guilty guilty guilty
guilty guilty guilty guilty
iii.
guilty guilty ...
#forgiveness
#ImSorry
#LifeChangingMoment #regret
#LifeChangingMoment #regret
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2 Comments
wallyroo92
Poem Published
7th Apr 2024 6:36pm
7th Apr 2024 6:36pm
Corporate Shenanigans
It’s an upsetting thing looking back it now
I thought I was just doing my job
But those of us who worked in subprime lending
We were part of that predatory mob
I had access to so many files
But I was just a paper pusher in those days
Get it from one reviewer and then out to another
I never really questioned every bonus or raise
It was a like a freight train on speed
Eventually the steam for the company ran out
And there I was, jobless for a while
Unsure of how all of that came about
Later on as the entire world went...
I thought I was just doing my job
But those of us who worked in subprime lending
We were part of that predatory mob
I had access to so many files
But I was just a paper pusher in those days
Get it from one reviewer and then out to another
I never really questioned every bonus or raise
It was a like a freight train on speed
Eventually the steam for the company ran out
And there I was, jobless for a while
Unsure of how all of that came about
Later on as the entire world went...
#regret
#ImSorry
#humankind #job
#humankind #job
105 reads
2 Comments
wallyroo92
Poem Published
6th Apr 2024 8:07pm
6th Apr 2024 8:07pm
Enamored by the Façade
Maybe it was the inexperience of youth
That sometimes clouded my judgement
When I was enamored by the façade of what’s on the outside
I seemed to lack prudence and discernment
Yes it was love without a solid foundation
Lust sometimes tends heighten emotions without perception
And as the years passed I felt a disconnection
Unable to see the truth I too fell into a deception
But I wouldn’t listen to my intuition
I didn’t see what others saw for the sake of my enormous pride
And by the time I saw it I was too far in
Then I had...
That sometimes clouded my judgement
When I was enamored by the façade of what’s on the outside
I seemed to lack prudence and discernment
Yes it was love without a solid foundation
Lust sometimes tends heighten emotions without perception
And as the years passed I felt a disconnection
Unable to see the truth I too fell into a deception
But I wouldn’t listen to my intuition
I didn’t see what others saw for the sake of my enormous pride
And by the time I saw it I was too far in
Then I had...
#ImSorry
#confessional
#SelfDiscovery #PersonalGrowth
#SelfDiscovery #PersonalGrowth
120 reads
4 Comments
peninnah
Poem Published
26th Jan 2024 1:11pm
26th Jan 2024 1:11pm
Drinking On Wretched Memories...
Of times when my tongue was laser and blade
my ways, savage art.
I blackout on the day I broke you.
my ways, savage art.
I blackout on the day I broke you.
#regret
#ImSorry
#heartbroken #breakup
#heartbroken #breakup
253 reads
10 Comments
wallyroo92
Poem Published
10th Jan 2024 1:37am
10th Jan 2024 1:37am
Free Yourself
Forgiveness…forgiveness is about letting go
Letting go of the anger and resentment toward someone else
It’s about freeing yourself of the past that cast a heavy burden
And finally being able to breathe by coming up to the surface
Forgiveness is about getting rid of those emotional chains
Those that once bound you, those that wouldn’t let you move ahead
Is about being able to see the truth that beyond all façades
We’re flawed and thus we must find absolution and make amends
Forgiveness is about releasing the thorns embedded within
When...
Letting go of the anger and resentment toward someone else
It’s about freeing yourself of the past that cast a heavy burden
And finally being able to breathe by coming up to the surface
Forgiveness is about getting rid of those emotional chains
Those that once bound you, those that wouldn’t let you move ahead
Is about being able to see the truth that beyond all façades
We’re flawed and thus we must find absolution and make amends
Forgiveness is about releasing the thorns embedded within
When...
#ImSorry
#forgiveness
#MovingOn
244 reads
7 Comments
Orc_Pirate_68
Poem Published
10th Dec 2023 3:54am
10th Dec 2023 3:54am
Broken
The night is dark and long,
My body and brain are so wrong,
I'm a broken person,
Of that, I am certain.
I ruined my mom's only chance of fun,
Because my body wanted to run,
I had heart palpitations, I'm broken,
I can't seem to get myself to function,
My brain and my body are in a bad position,
I feel lesser than phlegm,
My health came between them,
Between my mother and a good time,
I kept her away from something sublime,
Between her and the first Christmas party ...
My body and brain are so wrong,
I'm a broken person,
Of that, I am certain.
I ruined my mom's only chance of fun,
Because my body wanted to run,
I had heart palpitations, I'm broken,
I can't seem to get myself to function,
My brain and my body are in a bad position,
I feel lesser than phlegm,
My health came between them,
Between my mother and a good time,
I kept her away from something sublime,
Between her and the first Christmas party ...
#depression
#regret
#ImSorry
#heartbroken
#confessional
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Notaprettypoet
Isaac
Isaac
Poem Published
24th Nov 2023 11:02pm
24th Nov 2023 11:02pm
For MJ, my Melody was once my Joy
I, am angry.
And you know,
not all of us have the iron skin of the three hundred spartans who stood against the persian hordes all alone all on their own.
While you laugh and smile alongside your comrades there are those of us who scream ourselves to sleep at night,
wondering when the next bottle of pills
The next dose of drugs,
The next hateful word
will be thrown at us with a veiled contempt only we seem to be condemned to see.
And the thoughts that follow make me angry,
angry with the world and it’s kaleidoscope of colours and...
And you know,
not all of us have the iron skin of the three hundred spartans who stood against the persian hordes all alone all on their own.
While you laugh and smile alongside your comrades there are those of us who scream ourselves to sleep at night,
wondering when the next bottle of pills
The next dose of drugs,
The next hateful word
will be thrown at us with a veiled contempt only we seem to be condemned to see.
And the thoughts that follow make me angry,
angry with the world and it’s kaleidoscope of colours and...
#regret
#ImSorry
#TimeHeals
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2 Comments
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