Im Sorry Seeking Honest Critique Poems
#ImSorry
im sorry seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
wallyroo92
Poem Published
7th Apr 2024 6:36pm
7th Apr 2024 6:36pm
Corporate Shenanigans
It’s an upsetting thing looking back it now
I thought I was just doing my job
But those of us who worked in subprime lending
We were part of that predatory mob
I had access to so many files
But I was just a paper pusher in those days
Get it from one reviewer and then out to another
I never really questioned every bonus or raise
It was a like a freight train on speed
Eventually the steam for the company ran out
And there I was, jobless for a while
Unsure of how all of that came about
Later on as the entire world went...
I thought I was just doing my job
But those of us who worked in subprime lending
We were part of that predatory mob
I had access to so many files
But I was just a paper pusher in those days
Get it from one reviewer and then out to another
I never really questioned every bonus or raise
It was a like a freight train on speed
Eventually the steam for the company ran out
And there I was, jobless for a while
Unsure of how all of that came about
Later on as the entire world went...
#regret
#ImSorry
#humankind #job
#humankind #job
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wallyroo92
Poem Published
6th Apr 2024 8:07pm
6th Apr 2024 8:07pm
Enamored by the Façade
Maybe it was the inexperience of youth
That sometimes clouded my judgement
When I was enamored by the façade of what’s on the outside
I seemed to lack prudence and discernment
Yes it was love without a solid foundation
Lust sometimes tends heighten emotions without perception
And as the years passed I felt a disconnection
Unable to see the truth I too fell into a deception
But I wouldn’t listen to my intuition
I didn’t see what others saw for the sake of my enormous pride
And by the time I saw it I was too far in
Then I had...
That sometimes clouded my judgement
When I was enamored by the façade of what’s on the outside
I seemed to lack prudence and discernment
Yes it was love without a solid foundation
Lust sometimes tends heighten emotions without perception
And as the years passed I felt a disconnection
Unable to see the truth I too fell into a deception
But I wouldn’t listen to my intuition
I didn’t see what others saw for the sake of my enormous pride
And by the time I saw it I was too far in
Then I had...
#ImSorry
#confessional
#SelfDiscovery #PersonalGrowth
#SelfDiscovery #PersonalGrowth
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TranquilChi
Poem Published
19th Feb 2024 6:14pm
19th Feb 2024 6:14pm
Fleeting Memories
Fleeting memories pass on by
Simple things like groceries
movies, classmates or songs
my life may be long
but my recollection is gone
a picture; a thousand words
different tunes different birds
always on the tip of my tongue
a note welling in my lungs
a radio hit I once sung
vanishing to my dismay
I'm drawing blanks everyday
My mind once a house of fond times
moments of play under the moon
laughter under the sunshine
moments I cherished
all treasures of mine
lost one at a time ...
Simple things like groceries
movies, classmates or songs
my life may be long
but my recollection is gone
a picture; a thousand words
different tunes different birds
always on the tip of my tongue
a note welling in my lungs
a radio hit I once sung
vanishing to my dismay
I'm drawing blanks everyday
My mind once a house of fond times
moments of play under the moon
laughter under the sunshine
moments I cherished
all treasures of mine
lost one at a time ...
#sadness
#love
#ImSorry #ILoveYou
#ImSorry #ILoveYou
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1 Comment
peninnah
Poem Published
26th Jan 2024 1:11pm
26th Jan 2024 1:11pm
Drinking On Wretched Memories...
Of times when my tongue was laser and blade
my ways, savage art.
I blackout on the day I broke you.
my ways, savage art.
I blackout on the day I broke you.
#regret
#ImSorry
#heartbroken #breakup
#heartbroken #breakup
161 reads
10 Comments
wallyroo92
Poem Published
10th Jan 2024 1:37am
10th Jan 2024 1:37am
Free Yourself
Forgiveness…forgiveness is about letting go
Letting go of the anger and resentment toward someone else
It’s about freeing yourself of the past that cast a heavy burden
And finally being able to breathe by coming up to the surface
Forgiveness is about getting rid of those emotional chains
Those that once bound you, those that wouldn’t let you move ahead
Is about being able to see the truth that beyond all façades
We’re flawed and thus we must find absolution and make amends
Forgiveness is about releasing the thorns embedded within
When...
Letting go of the anger and resentment toward someone else
It’s about freeing yourself of the past that cast a heavy burden
And finally being able to breathe by coming up to the surface
Forgiveness is about getting rid of those emotional chains
Those that once bound you, those that wouldn’t let you move ahead
Is about being able to see the truth that beyond all façades
We’re flawed and thus we must find absolution and make amends
Forgiveness is about releasing the thorns embedded within
When...
#ImSorry
#forgiveness
#MovingOn
156 reads
7 Comments
Orc_Pirate_68
Poem Published
10th Dec 2023 3:54am
10th Dec 2023 3:54am
Broken
The night is dark and long,
My body and brain are so wrong,
I'm a broken person,
Of that, I am certain.
I ruined my mom's only chance of fun,
Because my body wanted to run,
I had heart palpitations, I'm broken,
I can't seem to get myself to function,
My brain and my body are in a bad position,
I feel lesser than phlegm,
My health came between them,
Between my mother and a good time,
I kept her away from something sublime,
Between her and the first Christmas party ...
My body and brain are so wrong,
I'm a broken person,
Of that, I am certain.
I ruined my mom's only chance of fun,
Because my body wanted to run,
I had heart palpitations, I'm broken,
I can't seem to get myself to function,
My brain and my body are in a bad position,
I feel lesser than phlegm,
My health came between them,
Between my mother and a good time,
I kept her away from something sublime,
Between her and the first Christmas party ...
#depression
#regret
#ImSorry
#heartbroken
#confessional
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Notaprettypoet
Isaac
Isaac
Poem Published
24th Nov 2023 11:02pm
24th Nov 2023 11:02pm
For MJ, my Melody was once my Joy
I, am angry.
And you know,
not all of us have the iron skin of the three hundred spartans who stood against the persian hordes all alone all on their own.
While you laugh and smile alongside your comrades there are those of us who scream ourselves to sleep at night,
wondering when the next bottle of pills
The next dose of drugs,
The next hateful word
will be thrown at us with a veiled contempt only we seem to be condemned to see.
And the thoughts that follow make me angry,
angry with the world and it’s kaleidoscope of colours and...
And you know,
not all of us have the iron skin of the three hundred spartans who stood against the persian hordes all alone all on their own.
While you laugh and smile alongside your comrades there are those of us who scream ourselves to sleep at night,
wondering when the next bottle of pills
The next dose of drugs,
The next hateful word
will be thrown at us with a veiled contempt only we seem to be condemned to see.
And the thoughts that follow make me angry,
angry with the world and it’s kaleidoscope of colours and...
#regret
#ImSorry
#TimeHeals
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3rdEYErising
Poem Published
18th Nov 2023 5:08am
18th Nov 2023 5:08am
Guilted
his whole intention
all along was to always bully me
with proposition after
dirty proposition
until i was positioned
right where he wanted me
pinned with no place to go
hogging up my space
with his domineering presence
selfishly sucking up my air..my thoughts
my moods..my moisture
aggressive as fuck
possessive..proactive
he saw my responses in advance
then acted on each one of them accordingly
preyed on them like a hawk
perched over my entire being
...
all along was to always bully me
with proposition after
dirty proposition
until i was positioned
right where he wanted me
pinned with no place to go
hogging up my space
with his domineering presence
selfishly sucking up my air..my thoughts
my moods..my moisture
aggressive as fuck
possessive..proactive
he saw my responses in advance
then acted on each one of them accordingly
preyed on them like a hawk
perched over my entire being
...
#ImSorry
#BDSM
#lover #dirty
#lover #dirty
380 reads
14 Comments
Officialkn9ne
Poem Published
27th Sep 2023 5:40pm
27th Sep 2023 5:40pm
How Do I love Again
Love is a drug and I just need my fix
Tired of pouring all this love into the wrong bitch
Tired of the different mood swings
I hit the wrong switch
Love ain’t did nothing
Not even made me rich
Who knew Love would feel like this?
Love chose a man over her kids
Love had me locked up facing a bid
Love had me wishing I didn’t exist
Love had me taking risks
Now I know what love feels like at the end
I might have said some things I never meant
You really going to throw away all the time that we spent?
I can’t even sleep...
Tired of pouring all this love into the wrong bitch
Tired of the different mood swings
I hit the wrong switch
Love ain’t did nothing
Not even made me rich
Who knew Love would feel like this?
Love chose a man over her kids
Love had me locked up facing a bid
Love had me wishing I didn’t exist
Love had me taking risks
Now I know what love feels like at the end
I might have said some things I never meant
You really going to throw away all the time that we spent?
I can’t even sleep...
#ImSorry
#breakup
#Christian
#LongDistanceRelationship
#dating
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Koulouri
Poem Published
6th Sep 2023 7:14pm
6th Sep 2023 7:14pm
Forgive Me for Living
I sometimes forget to swallow my words,
to stomp on my foot,
and to croak like a bird.
Apologies tumble off my tongue,
begging for forgiveness,
though I deserve none.
My silly mind had forgotten its tune,
the melodic melancholy,
a violent croon.
Stagnant steps falter and break,
as my tongue becomes tied,
my throat beginning to ache.
Over eager tears race,
My face overshadowed,
With a horrid disgrace.
Ringing resonates in my head,
The air light,
My eyes puffy and red. ...
to stomp on my foot,
and to croak like a bird.
Apologies tumble off my tongue,
begging for forgiveness,
though I deserve none.
My silly mind had forgotten its tune,
the melodic melancholy,
a violent croon.
Stagnant steps falter and break,
as my tongue becomes tied,
my throat beginning to ache.
Over eager tears race,
My face overshadowed,
With a horrid disgrace.
Ringing resonates in my head,
The air light,
My eyes puffy and red. ...
#anxiety
#loneliness
#ImSorry
#forgiveness
#LifeStruggles
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mysfit_androm
Poem Published
22nd Aug 2023 2:39am
22nd Aug 2023 2:39am
absolute ZEr0
Wholeness parts from real
Eyes in pairs;
Ends heard all
The same
Eyes in pairs;
Ends heard all
The same
#grief
#ImSorry
#heartbroken
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Orc_Pirate_68
Poem Published
21st Aug 2023 7:28pm
21st Aug 2023 7:28pm
A Poet Without Words
It's been months since I last saw you,
I've stopped counting, it's true,
My life I did skew,
This is my cue
To tell all,
How hard I did fall,
And then fell again,
Leaving many a bleeding ink stain,
Fit for the entrainment of vaudevilles,
I was so head over heels,
That I tripped,
My pen blood dipped,
Trying to with words, prop myself up,
And when I stood up,
My head did spin,
I was holding my spilled guts in,
Though you never did see,
For I wouldn't dare let you see,
My heart hanging by just a thread, ...
I've stopped counting, it's true,
My life I did skew,
This is my cue
To tell all,
How hard I did fall,
And then fell again,
Leaving many a bleeding ink stain,
Fit for the entrainment of vaudevilles,
I was so head over heels,
That I tripped,
My pen blood dipped,
Trying to with words, prop myself up,
And when I stood up,
My head did spin,
I was holding my spilled guts in,
Though you never did see,
For I wouldn't dare let you see,
My heart hanging by just a thread, ...
#sadness
#love
#ImSorry
#heartbroken
#StreamOfConsciousness
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