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Autumnal rains (LLUVIA OTOŅAL)
On this leaden autumnal morning
copiously the heaven complains
the water rushes headlong towards
the bridge, swift, agile, impatient.
En esta otoņal maņana plomiza
Se lamenta el cielo copiosamente
El agua calle abajo se desliza
Hacia el puente, rauda, ágil, impaciente.
The sidewalks slippery leaves
makes walking safe, apparent.
The battering treacherous wind
propels, the way currents moves water.
La acera con hojas, resbaladiza
Y caminar seguro es aparente
Golpea el viento, traicionero atiza
Te lleva como al agua la corriente.
The sky is sooty, ash colored,
as rain falls, cadencingly.
In these lands this is not foreign,
It is habitual, it sins with arrogance.
El cielo tiznado, color ceniza
Y cae lluvia, cadenciosamente
En esta tierra no es advenediza
Es habitual, peca de prepotente.
Even if melancholy bedevils
it invades you not with homesick torrents,
because this autumnal scene represents
a revulsive, propitious brilliance.
Aun cuando la melancolía hechiza
No te invade la saudade en torrente
Porque presenta esta escena otoņiza
Un revulsivo propicio y fulgente.
*Original spanish versiķn written by D. Meijoeiro Abilleira
*English translation by Gypsy Red in collaboration with Ms. D. Meijoeiro Abilleira
Published 2nd Oct 2012
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2nd Oct 2012 2:48pm
It is habitual, it sins with arrogance.
It is habitual, it sins in condescension.
That is, it's being condescending is the root-base of it's sin, following "cadencingly."
IMHO
It is habitual, it sins in condescension.
That is, it's being condescending is the root-base of it's sin, following "cadencingly."
IMHO
Well sir first observe this is not my piece, second "arrogance" not "condescension" is the correct translation, not all translators are good, most actually suck big time and should never be used.
I cross referenced the word with the "DICCIONARIO DE LA LENGUA ESPAŅOLA" From "La Real Academia Espaņol" RAE and VOX English Spanish dictionary to make sure it was the correct word.
The word "prepotente" means dominance/arrogance not condescension: n, the act or an instance of behaving in a "patronizing" way(in spanish is to sponsor)so it does not mean the same nor does it translate the same.
As for cadencingly:
http://en.bab.la/conjugation/english/cadence
http://www.websters-dictionary-online.org/definitions/Cadencingly
I cross referenced the word with the "DICCIONARIO DE LA LENGUA ESPAŅOLA" From "La Real Academia Espaņol" RAE and VOX English Spanish dictionary to make sure it was the correct word.
The word "prepotente" means dominance/arrogance not condescension: n, the act or an instance of behaving in a "patronizing" way(in spanish is to sponsor)so it does not mean the same nor does it translate the same.
As for cadencingly:
http://en.bab.la/conjugation/english/cadence
http://www.websters-dictionary-online.org/definitions/Cadencingly
2nd Oct 2012 3:50pm
now you are describing me not the piece lolol
Cadencingly as in rhythmically(.)
arrogance: as in is rains with authority as always.
Cadencingly as in rhythmically(.)
arrogance: as in is rains with authority as always.
Anonymous
2nd Oct 2012 3:15pm
Well done translation, Red!
Strider
Strider
Thank you she Ms. D.M.A is another poetic sister and lives in Spain, her piece was beautiful and thought you guys would enjoy it.Thank you very much for the compliment, I (with her approval)tried very hard to stay true to the original.
Red
Red
2nd Oct 2012 4:44pm
A wonderful piece with great imagery. Well done both of you.
And yes I would love to learn Spanish Gypsy, if you have the time and patience for me my beautiful friend. :)
And yes I would love to learn Spanish Gypsy, if you have the time and patience for me my beautiful friend. :)
Anytime, just say when. ;D Thanks for stopping by to comment On this piece, she will be by later after work to read the comments.
Red
Red
2nd Oct 2012 7:56pm
It's marvelous how you can stick to the rain, never vary, although have multiple meanings regarding the rain. A great read. I love the picture, which really represents the poem.
marcella1
marcella1
2nd Oct 2012 8:00pm
Thank you very much Marcella, yes the author chose her words carefully as did I when I translated it, and when I saw this painting I knew it was perfection!
Red
Red
2nd Oct 2012 9:15pm
2nd Oct 2012 9:49pm
3rd Oct 2012 12:52pm
3rd Oct 2012 3:07pm
Isn't though, my friend is a good poetess but she doesn't believe me so I wanted to show her that she was.Her only disadvantage is, she does not dominate English, so there you have it. Thanks Grace
Red
Red
