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Aphotic Infliction
Colder than the deepest sea
lays the memory of their treacherous infliction.
The looming of an aphotic malevolence
Has manifested into an aching desire.
Searching for their repugnant passage
The obsession of vindication
Lay wreckage on the mind with chaotic grace
Leaving all unnecessary emotions cast aside
There is only one devotion,
one lonely thought of rampant devastation
Devouring with impunity the ruins
of a once reasonable conscience
Retribution is the wayward calling
Complacent revelings of satisfaction.
The wait is not much longer
Till they are found in vulnerability
The anticipation of their mangled flesh
Blood chilling on conquering hands
Brings forth the only comfort
That can reach a dismal mind
They will scream for their trespass
Massacre feeding the desolation
Crumpled and insignificant on the floor
Making whole the mind that was reaped
lays the memory of their treacherous infliction.
The looming of an aphotic malevolence
Has manifested into an aching desire.
Searching for their repugnant passage
The obsession of vindication
Lay wreckage on the mind with chaotic grace
Leaving all unnecessary emotions cast aside
There is only one devotion,
one lonely thought of rampant devastation
Devouring with impunity the ruins
of a once reasonable conscience
Retribution is the wayward calling
Complacent revelings of satisfaction.
The wait is not much longer
Till they are found in vulnerability
The anticipation of their mangled flesh
Blood chilling on conquering hands
Brings forth the only comfort
That can reach a dismal mind
They will scream for their trespass
Massacre feeding the desolation
Crumpled and insignificant on the floor
Making whole the mind that was reaped
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Re: Aphotic Infliction
8th Jun 2012 2:29am
WOW! I love your flow and wordplay! Very deep, witty and powerful write! Awesome Read! :-)
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Anonymous
8th Jun 2012 9:12am
Very nicely done. I agree with the above comment, the flow and wordplay, your diction, really makes this piece. Keep them coming. I'll be waiting in anticipation for your next piece.
I'll be placing this in my reading list. Well done.
I'll be placing this in my reading list. Well done.
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re: Re: Aphotic Infliction
10th Jun 2012 6:50am
Such a gracious comment. Thank you for putting my poem in your reading list. I as well always anticipate your next poem.
AlwaysCaliban
AlwaysCaliban
Re: Aphotic Infliction
10th Jun 2012 9:15am
Re: Aphotic Infliction
10th Jun 2012 9:30pm
Vindication, what else is there. Revenge, some say fools errand, others[myself included] say rewarding in a way few things can replicate. It all ties in with drive and purpose. Builds up well, awesome poem. Never stop writing.
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re: Re: Aphotic Infliction
10th Jun 2012 9:39pm
Thank you. I'm glad you recieved the true meaning of my poem. And I don't intend to stop writing. :)
AlwaysCaliban
AlwaysCaliban
Re: Aphotic Infliction
11th Jun 2012 12:28pm
Re: Aphotic Infliction
12th Jun 2012 2:38am
the potential I see in your poems is bright. i enjoy reading your poems and it seems as if you enjoy writing them. :) keep them coming.
P.S. your wordplay is excellent.
P.S. your wordplay is excellent.
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Re: Aphotic Infliction
30th Aug 2012 8:05am
A powerful and relentless poem: about many themes, the most evident being the notion of a purpose that is all-consuming and driving. In this poem, the purpose in question can be said to be either vindication or vengeance (or even both)! Few things consume the soul, like such emotions can. Fantastic writing! You have a great way with words that is dark and yet also beautiful.
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Re: Aphotic Infliction
23rd Sep 2012 4:07am
The overly complex use of terminology! Had me a little put off. But that doesn't mean it's not good, it's just my opinion. I just like the meaningful power reads without the big words. Still good meaning though xoxox
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23rd Sep 2012 5:17am
Re: Aphotic Infliction
4th Oct 2012 4:07pm
I thought this was a very good effort. You use personal identifiers in the beginning. I think it would be stronger if they were removed. You metaphor is wonderful. Really sinister.
I think the line "The anticipation of their mangled flesh" might be better without a the, but I may just be acting finicky. Overall I really liked this one.
I think the line "The anticipation of their mangled flesh" might be better without a the, but I may just be acting finicky. Overall I really liked this one.
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re: Re: Aphotic Infliction
4th Oct 2012 7:41pm
Thanks you for your critique Junco, it's nice top see constructive criticism for a change.
Re: Aphotic Infliction
23rd Oct 2012 5:34pm
I love it when poems are deep and mysterious and takes me places, when goosebumps arise and I have to re-read...for the sheer enjoyment of the depth experienced. Great piece:)
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Re: Aphotic Infliction
Well thought and planned. You journey into the deepest forgotten lands to bring back the secrets of a forgetten regime.
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