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Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
sleep quietly circles
clingy essences
penetrate
through 4am silence
I feel it
how it pulls
tugging me back
quietly calling
through a shiver'd
caliginous recess
intimate moments
trudge along
slinking their way
down a periphery
where night and day
delicately dance
of tango-transcendent
dreamt dreams
into a solidity of
steamy want
slowly
senses lazy-stir
synapses begin to fire
arousing wits
yet still,
partly waiting in the wings
half in half out
beckoning for betterment
piercing through the chill
highlights a thick atmosphere
with purpose driven start
Oh my darling,
disarm me
in rich steadfastness
echo in waves, your warm welcome
throughout house and heart
wood floors contract then
expand involuntarily
even the walls themselves
'come hither'
like an announcement
breathing life
into the lifeless
fanfare that eclipses
all
each lightning strike
brews electrical essences
glows from inside
flowing a sweet flow
directly into my small
cellular secrets
i hear them
i feel them
releasing me
to be me
Author's Note
A millionth ode to my lifelong delicious dark superhero.
☕ - ♡
©Blu2023
☕ - ♡
©Blu2023
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Re. Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
26th Aug 2023 12:04pm
Just rolled out of bed without alarms mind you, ready to begin my love affair for the day with my dark elixir. Sometimes I can think of nothing better than a cup
Of smooth rich silkiness.
I love this.
Of smooth rich silkiness.
I love this.
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Re: Re. Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
Good morning, lovely lady.
You and I seem to be cut from the same cloth... silken methinks... *wink
I too, think of coffee first thing, as my eyes are barely open. I usually hear the timer go off on the grinder of my coffeemaker and even though I probably could fall back asleep for a bit, I feel my excitement... tingling... to sip that first fresh ground cup... which far outweighs the extra shuteye... lol... Yeah, it definitely is that magic elixir!
Thanks for loving my ode, it's one of several that I've dedicated to my deep love affair with coffee.
Cheers! ☕
🌹B
You and I seem to be cut from the same cloth... silken methinks... *wink
I too, think of coffee first thing, as my eyes are barely open. I usually hear the timer go off on the grinder of my coffeemaker and even though I probably could fall back asleep for a bit, I feel my excitement... tingling... to sip that first fresh ground cup... which far outweighs the extra shuteye... lol... Yeah, it definitely is that magic elixir!
Thanks for loving my ode, it's one of several that I've dedicated to my deep love affair with coffee.
Cheers! ☕
🌹B
Re. Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
What!! Small cellular secrets - amazing.
Third stanza rendered me speechless.
This is you at your best. You make ✨ magic.
It is exciting when you write something, such a grand invitation for the imagination to partake in 💙
Third stanza rendered me speechless.
This is you at your best. You make ✨ magic.
It is exciting when you write something, such a grand invitation for the imagination to partake in 💙
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Re: Re. Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
26th Aug 2023 3:54pm
I adore you and your deeply thoughtful comments, Debbie. There's a bit of magic within each little cup of coffee, I feel, so I am happy that you could feel that reverence!
It does my heart wonders to know you've tapped into your imagination sparked a bit by my words... I'm sincerely humbled.
Thanks for being here with me.
🌹💙 - x
It does my heart wonders to know you've tapped into your imagination sparked a bit by my words... I'm sincerely humbled.
Thanks for being here with me.
🌹💙 - x
Re. Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
26th Aug 2023 12:34pm
getting jealous of coffee
if im re incarnated gonna come back as your startrek replicator
if im re incarnated gonna come back as your startrek replicator
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Re: Re. Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
26th Aug 2023 3:57pm
lol...
No need for jealousy, my friend.
Perhaps one day we can sit down and have a cuppa!
;)
Yessss!!! Instead of my, "tea Earl Gray, hot" It would be "Freshly ground coffee, strong and piping hot"!
If only.... sigh.
Lol
Thank you, Colin
xo
No need for jealousy, my friend.
Perhaps one day we can sit down and have a cuppa!
;)
Yessss!!! Instead of my, "tea Earl Gray, hot" It would be "Freshly ground coffee, strong and piping hot"!
If only.... sigh.
Lol
Thank you, Colin
xo
Re. Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
26th Aug 2023 1:30pm
Re: Re. Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
26th Aug 2023 3:59pm
Ahhh thank you, MS.
Teetering between those two realms is often my morning state of being until rescued by my dark superhero..
Lol.
Thank you for feeling my ink and for the generous list add.
I love having you here -
☕-💙
Teetering between those two realms is often my morning state of being until rescued by my dark superhero..
Lol.
Thank you for feeling my ink and for the generous list add.
I love having you here -
☕-💙
Re. Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
26th Aug 2023 2:25pm
Many times, especially in this context of writers, we acknowledge body chemistry, desire, arousal, and romance as a nearly only sensual pleasure. Freud. Maybe.
I think, though, that these small deaths or unutterable utterances are merely signs and symbols of our inner world and the fruits of human consciousness raising.
This is where fact and fiction, or perhaps reality and fantasy interface.
Eve of St. Agnes by Keats....
At some point, the collision of truth and consciousness.
So, being able to talk about it in all terms is critical.
disarm me ....you said.
CNC on the psychic scale....permission....submission....the only way it works.. and waiting while living your life.
I think, though, that these small deaths or unutterable utterances are merely signs and symbols of our inner world and the fruits of human consciousness raising.
This is where fact and fiction, or perhaps reality and fantasy interface.
Eve of St. Agnes by Keats....
At some point, the collision of truth and consciousness.
So, being able to talk about it in all terms is critical.
disarm me ....you said.
CNC on the psychic scale....permission....submission....the only way it works.. and waiting while living your life.
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Re: Re. Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
RT,
Only you would've keyed in to that line of 'disarm me', which is one of the zillion reasons why I always hope you are out there reading, so I can drink up of all your valuable and insightfully profound comments.
From proclaiming the simple love of a delicious cuppa to thoughts of permission, submission and the value of sharing that which might haunt the little dark corners of our subconscious... there's much, within those two words.... disarm me, indeed.
I love how much you see.
Its thrilling
🌹B
Only you would've keyed in to that line of 'disarm me', which is one of the zillion reasons why I always hope you are out there reading, so I can drink up of all your valuable and insightfully profound comments.
From proclaiming the simple love of a delicious cuppa to thoughts of permission, submission and the value of sharing that which might haunt the little dark corners of our subconscious... there's much, within those two words.... disarm me, indeed.
I love how much you see.
Its thrilling
🌹B
Re: Re. Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
27th Aug 2023 2:16am
Vulnerability is a window....like blinds....lightscaping.
Moonlight....
Moonlight....
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Re: Re. Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
27th Aug 2023 12:34pm
That's a beautifully poetic way of seeing someone and encouraging them all in the same breath.
My vulnerability is the moonlight which highlights my pathways forward... Peer through my window as the soft ambient glow flickers, haloing in full surround the beauty of admission and shared truth... Holy, is this sacrament of connection.
-💙
My vulnerability is the moonlight which highlights my pathways forward... Peer through my window as the soft ambient glow flickers, haloing in full surround the beauty of admission and shared truth... Holy, is this sacrament of connection.
-💙
Re. Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
26th Aug 2023 2:46pm
Yeah, I've written a few myself! Delicious love, it is... this poem is delicious too.
❤️k
❤️k
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Re: Re. Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
Hey there, k.
I absolutely agree! Some loves are profoundly felt and definitely last through whatever life throws at you, such is my love of coffee.
I'm so thrilled that you found something within this piece that spoke to you. That totally makes me smile ☺
It's great to hear from you, thanks so much for stopping by.
🌹💙 - B
I absolutely agree! Some loves are profoundly felt and definitely last through whatever life throws at you, such is my love of coffee.
I'm so thrilled that you found something within this piece that spoke to you. That totally makes me smile ☺
It's great to hear from you, thanks so much for stopping by.
🌹💙 - B
Re. Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
Nothing like a hot cup of coffee with good conversations just passing the process of time, and rebuilding towards the betterment of calmness and reflecting on this life with a clarity of understanding.👁️🙏👊👍🤗
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Re: Re. Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
26th Aug 2023 4:24pm
You said it, Stoney!
Sometimes sharing a cuppa it's all that's needed to calm hearts and minds, while renewing the feeling that alls right in the world.... at least for those lovely warm moments.
Thank you for stopping by my dear shaman.
I really love having you visit and appreciate you sharing your thoughts.
🌹-☕
xo
Sometimes sharing a cuppa it's all that's needed to calm hearts and minds, while renewing the feeling that alls right in the world.... at least for those lovely warm moments.
Thank you for stopping by my dear shaman.
I really love having you visit and appreciate you sharing your thoughts.
🌹-☕
xo
Re: Re. Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
26th Aug 2023 6:35pm
As always Dear friend and Poetess and 👑 this is so uplifting and inspiring and touching the process of thoughts of betterment that can be gain in life 🙏👊🤗👍💪💯
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Re: Re. Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
27th Aug 2023 12:45pm
Thank you again for feeling my expression, dear shaman. There's nothing better than a little bit of cheer to warm and motivation to invite... Your comments do that for me and I'm thrilled you found something within my words to lift you... That's beautiful high praise, imo.
Be well and be safe out there, dear Stoney.
🌹💙💪🏻👍🏻🤗
Be well and be safe out there, dear Stoney.
🌹💙💪🏻👍🏻🤗
Re: Re. Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
27th Aug 2023 1:26pm
I have always enjoyed reading your words as each time I leave feeling reborn I always have something to think about in my heart and spiritual soul 🙏💯😘👑👍🪷
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Re: Re. Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
I too, love tea! Green tea is my go to iced favorite. I'm ALWAYS drinking water, and mostly, it's just that, only water. Coffee, for me is an intimate and viscerally connected experience. It's an addiction, I know. Yet, I do a good job of controlling my caffeine intake and alls well, there! Morning coffee is a ritual of meaning as well as this deep ingrained delicious addiction... lol..
Thank you for loving that line, T ... I wasn't sure about it at first but I too, enjoyed it's little bit of character... haha.
I enjoy your thoughts and appreciate you spending time with me, leaving your thoughts.
It means a lot.
🌹B
Thank you for loving that line, T ... I wasn't sure about it at first but I too, enjoyed it's little bit of character... haha.
I enjoy your thoughts and appreciate you spending time with me, leaving your thoughts.
It means a lot.
🌹B
Re. Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
26th Aug 2023 8:39pm
I'm a Tea drinker but for you I'd be a cup of Joe lol
Love and light
Ron x
Love and light
Ron x
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Re: Re. Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
27th Aug 2023 12:52pm
I would love to have a hot cuppa tea with milk, sweet, like me... lol..For me tea is a special occasion morning treat but I love tea, as well. Many various teas, in fact!
It's a date!
One morning, it'll be two cuppas of my favorite fresh ground coffee and some deeply stimulating conversation of poetry... sounds truly lovely!
Thanks for the lovely sentiments, my dear.
You're a gentleman (shhh, I won't tell anyone!) and a truly kind soul. ✨
🌹-☕
xo
It's a date!
One morning, it'll be two cuppas of my favorite fresh ground coffee and some deeply stimulating conversation of poetry... sounds truly lovely!
Thanks for the lovely sentiments, my dear.
You're a gentleman (shhh, I won't tell anyone!) and a truly kind soul. ✨
🌹-☕
xo
Re. Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
26th Aug 2023 11:39pm
Re: Re. Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
27th Aug 2023 12:54pm
Awww... what an awesome comment! That made me smile from ear to ear!
Huge thanks, Grace.
(humbled)
I love that... soooo much.
🌹💙 - x
Huge thanks, Grace.
(humbled)
I love that... soooo much.
🌹💙 - x
Re. Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
My beautiful strong smart sexy woman we are going to dance the might away with Juan Valdez. The sweet love of dancing is so hot and going to give both us orgasmic bliss. Keep on writing Bluevelvete.
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Re: Re. Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
27th Aug 2023 12:58pm
I do love Juan's coffee!! Hopefully you are light on your toes, dear Francisco! Dancing the decadent dance of awakening, is a bold and soul stirring!! 🕺🏻 💃🏻
Thank you for warming yourself by my steamy poetic offering.... I appreciate it muchly.
🌹💙
Thank you for warming yourself by my steamy poetic offering.... I appreciate it muchly.
🌹💙
Re: Re. Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
28th Aug 2023 00:49am
Yes my strong beautiful smart sexy woman I'm light on my toes. The love dance is waiting for you me.
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Re. Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
27th Aug 2023 1:49am
caliginous...a new word...as always a language feast,,,thanks for a new word....Lawrence
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Re: Re. Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
Ahhh, how lovely it is, knowing that I was able to satisfy a hunger within, dear Lawrence!!
I'm delighted that you found a new word to add to your already impressive vocabulary...that really makes me smile ☺
Thank you for stopping by and for sharing your thoughts with me.
A pleasure ✨
🌹B
I'm delighted that you found a new word to add to your already impressive vocabulary...that really makes me smile ☺
Thank you for stopping by and for sharing your thoughts with me.
A pleasure ✨
🌹B
Re. Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
27th Aug 2023 3:14am
Dear BV,
Although the bean is not my tonic heaven help anyone who gets in the way of my tea leaves first thing in the morning! 😠
There is nothing more civilized than that first quiet cup to get things in order and just breathe in the aroma. I loved this poem because it set such a superb scene and tone for _______ centering of self. I wrote something else before centering but auto correct wrote some gibberish and I’m damned if I can remember the word 😏
Anyway, as per, love the write! 😊
Now I need a cuppa. Gotta go…
H🌷
Although the bean is not my tonic heaven help anyone who gets in the way of my tea leaves first thing in the morning! 😠
There is nothing more civilized than that first quiet cup to get things in order and just breathe in the aroma. I loved this poem because it set such a superb scene and tone for _______ centering of self. I wrote something else before centering but auto correct wrote some gibberish and I’m damned if I can remember the word 😏
Anyway, as per, love the write! 😊
Now I need a cuppa. Gotta go…
H🌷
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Re: Re. Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
27th Aug 2023 1:27pm
That damn autocorrect! *wink... heh heh heh.. 😏
Loved that despite personal preferences, we both know the deep value of starting the day off from a place of warm, quiet, soul infusing sustenance. I couldn't agree more, that setting that stage of self centering, makes a huge impact on the way any given day plays out. For me, morning coffee is a ritualized connection and a meaningful sacrament...One steeped in sentimental memory as much as it is my well realized ridiculous addiction to caffeine. It's admitting you have a problem, that's the first step.... hahaha.. I control that craving and allow it to only guide my mornings... for the most part!!
Thanks so much for being here and making me giggle. I adore you, dear lady...
🍵☕
Cheers!!
xoxo
Loved that despite personal preferences, we both know the deep value of starting the day off from a place of warm, quiet, soul infusing sustenance. I couldn't agree more, that setting that stage of self centering, makes a huge impact on the way any given day plays out. For me, morning coffee is a ritualized connection and a meaningful sacrament...One steeped in sentimental memory as much as it is my well realized ridiculous addiction to caffeine. It's admitting you have a problem, that's the first step.... hahaha.. I control that craving and allow it to only guide my mornings... for the most part!!
Thanks so much for being here and making me giggle. I adore you, dear lady...
🍵☕
Cheers!!
xoxo
Re. Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
27th Aug 2023 6:06pm
A doctor recently told me that coffee drinkers live about 25% longer.
I haven’t read the source research yet but it’s believable to me.
If that’s dose related or cumulative I’ll be drinking my first cuppa on a morning in 2121.
Great ode to that hot dark lover.
❣️❣️❣️
🙏
I haven’t read the source research yet but it’s believable to me.
If that’s dose related or cumulative I’ll be drinking my first cuppa on a morning in 2121.
Great ode to that hot dark lover.
❣️❣️❣️
🙏
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Re. Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
28th Aug 2023 2:33pm
Re: Re. Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
28th Aug 2023 2:51pm
What a delicious comment. I'm all smiles you danced along with me!
Thanks so much for sharing your thoughts and taking the time...
🌹💙
Thanks so much for sharing your thoughts and taking the time...
🌹💙
Re. Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
4th Sep 2023 6:03pm
Hoi hoi
Hope this finds you well.
My battery is below 5%! But I hope to tell you how much I love this one!!!
Travelling again see?
Thank you so much for this one!
Relaoaded, I’ll be back tomorrow to fully trying to grasp what you are offering us.
I love it to pieces…..
Blessed week (I wish for you) ahead!
Kind regards, Gus
Hope this finds you well.
My battery is below 5%! But I hope to tell you how much I love this one!!!
Travelling again see?
Thank you so much for this one!
Relaoaded, I’ll be back tomorrow to fully trying to grasp what you are offering us.
I love it to pieces…..
Blessed week (I wish for you) ahead!
Kind regards, Gus
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Re. Dancing upon the brim of betterment (an ode)
15th Sep 2023 10:10pm
What I always enjoy in your style is that you deliver each line like a cliffhanger, hearts palpitating as the words feel delectably torturous.
Now to buy more skittles...
Now to buy more skittles...
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