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Afternoon tea gone wrong
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green and jasmine,
mild brew, refreshing;
great afternoon drink; a
touch of lemon, & some
ginger, so delicious! Ice
cubes melting to a perfect
temperature, paper straw,
red and white (you just like
straws) awaiting lip contact,
exactly the way you want it!
Friend pats you on the back,
nice gesture, tea goes flying
in the air! All gone! Spills
onto uncle, he jumps
up and a
branch
falls
where
uncle
was
sitting!
Sticky
uncle
hugs
you,
and puts you
into his will. He’s only 5 years
older than you, still a nice day
Author's Note
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Re. Afternoon tea gone wrong
18th Jul 2022 1:23am
Spilled, but nice poem and excellent construction. Refreshing. Regards, Robert.
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18th Jul 2022 12:36pm
Refreshing could be a pun 😁
I’m glad you liked the construction, that’s important to me! Thank you, Robert! I had fun with this one.
I’m glad you liked the construction, that’s important to me! Thank you, Robert! I had fun with this one.
Re. Afternoon tea gone wrong
18th Jul 2022 1:43am
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18th Jul 2022 12:54pm
Thank you, fellow artist!
I’m so glad you enjoyed this!
Again, thanks for the welcome back❣️
I’m so glad you enjoyed this!
Again, thanks for the welcome back❣️
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15th Nov 2022 8:24pm
Graduated to 20 pound weights finally.
Kids stuff for you but another little step for me.
Doing more plank too.
All good in my realm of aging....
Kids stuff for you but another little step for me.
Doing more plank too.
All good in my realm of aging....
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Re. Afternoon tea gone wrong
18th Jul 2022 3:13am
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Re. Afternoon tea gone wrong
18th Jul 2022 3:21am
Hey the lemons don't forget to blend the whole lemon, your the cherry on top which l would like to take 💛💙 Nyx hugs xxx YWKISA
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18th Jul 2022 12:58pm
Re. Afternoon tea gone wrong
18th Jul 2022 6:36am
5 minutes later and I'm still smiling about this OR I'm a little touched in the head... I'm going with 'fun and witty' poem. That's my story and I'm sticking too it.
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18th Jul 2022 1:00pm
Re. Afternoon tea gone wrong
Super fun, you cannot help but smile at the whimsical moment. Not sure how many ways I can tell you the artwork is incredible, but even more so when you put it together with your words, which are definitely art on their own. And then your formatting. You see things in a very holistic way that just works together perfectly. And the final result is amazing.
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Re: Re. Afternoon tea gone wrong
1st Aug 2022 4:58am
Thanks so much Kristina!
I love “Super Fun!”
I’m thrilled you’re digging’ the artwork!
Thank you for the great comment and RL
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I love “Super Fun!”
I’m thrilled you’re digging’ the artwork!
Thank you for the great comment and RL
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Re. Afternoon tea gone wrong
Dear NG,
Sheesh! What’s left to say? The formatting is out of this world clever. I really enjoyed the subject and humor of it. The artwork…would be redundant in my gushing over it but it’s really awesome! Wild applause and standing O. H🌷
Sheesh! What’s left to say? The formatting is out of this world clever. I really enjoyed the subject and humor of it. The artwork…would be redundant in my gushing over it but it’s really awesome! Wild applause and standing O. H🌷
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10th Aug 2022 1:08am
Re. Afternoon tea gone wrong
9th Aug 2022 10:45pm
dear Night Goddess
there is a fine subliminal "Say 'uncle'!" feel to this
,,, like when we give in and surrender to life's unexpected gifts
a warm smile
silent lotus
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there is a fine subliminal "Say 'uncle'!" feel to this
,,, like when we give in and surrender to life's unexpected gifts
a warm smile
silent lotus
`
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Re: Re. Afternoon tea gone wrong
10th Aug 2022 1:10am
Hello Silent Lotus,
I agree, it’s a just “go with it” kind of experience 😄
Thank you very much! 🌹
I agree, it’s a just “go with it” kind of experience 😄
Thank you very much! 🌹
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Re. Afternoon tea gone wrong
20th Aug 2022 5:48am
Hoi hoi
I joined some 5 monts ago, so you comings and going escaped me.
Light verse is my main thing. And as a result, I love it when good workmanship/workwomenship is combined with humor. We tend to take ourselves a little too seriously.
Yes, it’s just an opinion, but it’s mine.
Poem beautiful and a bit quirky, artwork fantastic, what more could I ask for?
Keep them coming please.
Kind regards, Gus
I joined some 5 monts ago, so you comings and going escaped me.
Light verse is my main thing. And as a result, I love it when good workmanship/workwomenship is combined with humor. We tend to take ourselves a little too seriously.
Yes, it’s just an opinion, but it’s mine.
Poem beautiful and a bit quirky, artwork fantastic, what more could I ask for?
Keep them coming please.
Kind regards, Gus
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Re: Re. Afternoon tea gone wrong
22nd Aug 2022 4:58am
Hello Gus,
I’m so happy beautiful and quirky work well together, an opinion I love, thank you. Yes, sometimes we just have to laugh and enjoy the ride! Welcome to the DUP! My thanks and regards to you as well 🌹
I’m so happy beautiful and quirky work well together, an opinion I love, thank you. Yes, sometimes we just have to laugh and enjoy the ride! Welcome to the DUP! My thanks and regards to you as well 🌹
Re. Afternoon tea gone wrong
22nd Aug 2022 5:23am
Some of this felt like a Robin Williams sketch. Then the end popped another dimension. Talk about unexpected turns!
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