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Desperate(ly) seeking [humility's fickle death rattle]
A humble rose
of sheer desperation
in a vapid
r a g e
of sunlit clamor
fickle to grow
in that
imperfect soil
or even
such a prideful request
to bloom;
Beautiful,
unto thine own hubris
and only then,
in stark
thorny
spiked-fullness
of forceful cruelty
twice multiplied
Once,
so sweetly scented~
now,
best left to wild abandon
Free and heady
in such alloyed air,
bellowing justly acid rains,
from strangest
unattended creationists
which wetted
those ugly used up petals,
with lessons ought
of previous learned—
Ohh that spiked thornful pride!
How it's the purity of
compassion taught
nay to spiteful blinded
youthful cruelty,
an integral discovered key
to tend a beautiful garden
of truest real beauty
in all that's healthy grown
Author's Note
©Blu2020
pic: Vanity by Frank Cadogan via Pinterest
pic: Vanity by Frank Cadogan via Pinterest
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Re. Desperate(ly) seeking [humility's fickle death rattle]
5th Jan 2021 4:31am
Different. Great write, Again showing the range of your creativity. Hugs and kisses, Peace. oral
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5th Jan 2021 4:38am
just letting it take over....
I'm not really even sure what it's actually about, either..Lol 😂 I. never just let it actually SPILL out until now. Not the biggest fan of this poem but it's a learning process, I believe..... 🤷🏻♀️.. Thank you for reading, Oral.. that's very sweet
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xoxo
I'm not really even sure what it's actually about, either..Lol 😂 I. never just let it actually SPILL out until now. Not the biggest fan of this poem but it's a learning process, I believe..... 🤷🏻♀️.. Thank you for reading, Oral.. that's very sweet
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Re. Desperate(ly) seeking [humility's fickle death rattle]
5th Jan 2021 6:09am
....to me this metaphoric bouquet of poetry speaks to me that the truest beauty is more then meets the eye. Believing that we can grow to our fullest potential and beauty in any environment is arrogant and misguided. With age comes wisdom and redemption can come from life's hard lessons. We grow from our mistakes and become better and more beautiful people in a healthy environment.....if my interpretations are misguided by your use of the rose in this deep beautiful poetry, then all I can say is, ''Oopsie Daisy''! lol.
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Re: Re. Desperate(ly) seeking [humility's fickle death rattle]
5th Jan 2021 1:46pm
Damn, FF you see a lot when you read me.
My eloquence has left me this morning, so I will leave my deep thanks and appreciation for all your kindness..
🙏 🌹 💜
You are lovely.
xo
B
My eloquence has left me this morning, so I will leave my deep thanks and appreciation for all your kindness..
🙏 🌹 💜
You are lovely.
xo
B
Re. Desperate(ly) seeking [humility's fickle death rattle]
5th Jan 2021 12:50pm
I enjoyed how you spilled this piece it's something different as it expresses the true depth of your subconsciousness to think subconsciously outside of the box respect dear poetess 😇😁
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Re: Re. Desperate(ly) seeking [humility's fickle death rattle]
5th Jan 2021 1:44pm
You're a true gentleman, my Dear Stoney...
Thank you for reading and leaving me your beautiful poetic comments. I'm appreciative of every word! Ty for taking the time and I always always enjoy your bits of wisdom along with your visit.
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Much love and respect,
xoxo
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Thank you for reading and leaving me your beautiful poetic comments. I'm appreciative of every word! Ty for taking the time and I always always enjoy your bits of wisdom along with your visit.
🌹
Much love and respect,
xoxo
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5th Jan 2021 4:52pm
Re. Desperate(ly) seeking [humility's fickle death rattle]
5th Jan 2021 5:11pm
Beautiful blue...⚘🦋🔥☀️ a poetic placing of words into the fruitful soils of what could be... anything and everything blooms beneath these warm words of deep rooted insight and understandings... ☀️💙🌹💧
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Re: Re. Desperate(ly) seeking [humility's fickle death rattle]
5th Jan 2021 6:08pm
I do love reading your mind's eye, Eli.. I have missed your voice and I'm smiling so fucking big right now, reading your thoughts.... What a terrific and lovely gift to read upon signing into DU this afternoon. I am not thrilled with this poem, yet I'm still continuing with my promise to myself to publish even the (in my mind) yucky poems that I might normally have just sitting forevermore, lost in drafts... probably to be erased in the end...so you, writing what you have.... means a lot to me.
Ty for being so kind.
I hope the new year is treating you well and I'm excited to read some of YOUR inspiring poems, ahead... hint hint... lol... 😉
Much love and loads of hugs,
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xoxo
B
Ty for being so kind.
I hope the new year is treating you well and I'm excited to read some of YOUR inspiring poems, ahead... hint hint... lol... 😉
Much love and loads of hugs,
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🌠 🌠 🌠 🌠 🌠
xoxo
B
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5th Jan 2021 7:21pm
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Re. Desperate(ly) seeking [humility's fickle death rattle]
7th Jan 2021 7:50pm
Fully engaged in my read here which is really the most rewarding place for me to leave off my visit to the site today. Thank you sugah. 😘💖🙏 I'm really tickled by the use and mellifluous flow of language here, which both carries and counterpoints the serious mien of it's message. Fantastically struck.
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Re: Re. Desperate(ly) seeking [humility's fickle death rattle]
7th Jan 2021 7:53pm
Your kindness today.....
I'm a lucky Blue..
Ty for everything, Daniel
Enjoy your day
xoxo
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I'm a lucky Blue..
Ty for everything, Daniel
Enjoy your day
xoxo
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Re. Desperate(ly) seeking [humility's fickle death rattle]
8th Jan 2021 1:13am
Blue, you always bring something new and different to the table. Those last few lines not only have a profound philosophical feel that delve into the human psyche but it also raises awareness in the spirit of human kindness.
Well done.
Well done.
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Re: Re. Desperate(ly) seeking [humility's fickle death rattle]
8th Jan 2021 2:23am
Wally,
You really know how to bring a gal outta her funky bad mood. Thank you for reading, my friend.
Your insightful comments and attention to my little poems details, is just a true kindness. I look love seeing your presence and learn something with each point of contact
Much love and respect,
🌹
xo
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You really know how to bring a gal outta her funky bad mood. Thank you for reading, my friend.
Your insightful comments and attention to my little poems details, is just a true kindness. I look love seeing your presence and learn something with each point of contact
Much love and respect,
🌹
xo
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Re. Desperate(ly) seeking [humility's fickle death rattle]
Much aluv and respect, to this quality of write u share. There may be some others, but I'd rather have crossed again thine time ah share. Like a professor of one year with to theirself to prove their thing, listening to u is what the profesoric of the day of mine bring.
Also........it also sounds like your on stage performing an ah theatre play before an ah live audience.
Also........it also sounds like your on stage performing an ah theatre play before an ah live audience.
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