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(k)nights of honour
When the night sounds roar
That pulse of blood rushing in your ears
A thrushing hum, yeah you know the one
It's loudest, when pressure is strenuous
Like when the loneliness crushes and presses down
upon
you
Then the night speaks
That long aching moan bubbles up from a dark unknown
The words are there, just out of reach
It's a lonely night-time dedicated speech
Whose word's thrash and whip
soft
tender
skin
Only to begin again as the night settles in
consuming words flirt in the dark
tease with no signs of any reprieve
awash in the shroud, those fucking words screaming so damn loud.
A usual safe haven now hurtful and brazen
anointing
a gentle
soul
At last, just before the dawn rises,
There's still a few more relegated surprises
To twist and dig,
burrowing deep down
scarring
a fragile
heart
A forever reminder—
of all my self proclaimed
night-time badges of honour
Published 5th Dec 2020
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©Blu2020
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5th Dec 2020 2:03pm
5th Dec 2020 2:18pm
hug 🤗hug 🤗hug 🤗hug
(bullshit, btw)
Ty for your untrue comments... lol.
I 💜you and I'm grateful for all your generous help and support.
xoxo
(bullshit, btw)
Ty for your untrue comments... lol.
I 💜you and I'm grateful for all your generous help and support.
xoxo
5th Dec 2020 2:06pm
so very passionate beautiful Blue
I know what it is to be haunted by those words...
great write ❤
I know what it is to be haunted by those words...
great write ❤
5th Dec 2020 2:54pm
Thank you, B!
I adore seeing your avatar and I'm glad you enjoyed it.. yet saddened that we both relate to that haunting....
💜
Ty for the RL add and loads of hugs for night-time survival... lol
xo
B
I adore seeing your avatar and I'm glad you enjoyed it.. yet saddened that we both relate to that haunting....
💜
Ty for the RL add and loads of hugs for night-time survival... lol
xo
B
5th Dec 2020 2:15pm
5th Dec 2020 3:35pm
5th Dec 2020 3:53pm
An adventure in itself; prisms of the night extracted by creative words. Awesome.
5th Dec 2020 3:56pm
Anonymous
- Edited 24th Dec 2020 7:45am
5th Dec 2020 3:59pm
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5th Dec 2020 4:04pm
5th Dec 2020 6:20pm
Ahhh life... light... and those very dark nights... may the sun rise forever upon you miss blue ⚘
At times, the night is like a hammering in the darkness..
Thank you for the kind words and the RL add, Elias... I'm so very happy to see you.
💜 🌹💜
xoxo
Yours,
Blue
Thank you for the kind words and the RL add, Elias... I'm so very happy to see you.
💜 🌹💜
xoxo
Yours,
Blue
Anonymous
- Edited 25th Oct 2022 6:45pm
5th Dec 2020 6:48pm
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Tim!
Wow! It's mind blowing that you think that I am this worthy.... I'm utterly nonplussed and speechless, really...Ty for reading and these astounding kind words. I really really enjoy the fact you're the only one to point out the third hand... lmao. I am thinking it's another person within her fantasy of night time.... as I often lean towards the naughty...
💜
I'm grateful for you and your visit and all this loveliness
xoxo
S
Wow! It's mind blowing that you think that I am this worthy.... I'm utterly nonplussed and speechless, really...Ty for reading and these astounding kind words. I really really enjoy the fact you're the only one to point out the third hand... lmao. I am thinking it's another person within her fantasy of night time.... as I often lean towards the naughty...
💜
I'm grateful for you and your visit and all this loveliness
xoxo
S
Anonymous
- Edited 20th Sep 2021 1:45am
5th Dec 2020 8:58pm
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5th Dec 2020 9:36pm
Thank you so much for reading and your thoughtful insights! I'm so glad you stopped by.
💜
xoxo
B
💜
xoxo
B
6th Dec 2020 2:03am
6th Dec 2020 2:41am
Biting Excellence!...this dark write is an Awesome portrayal of all of our own wistfully futile efforts to battle the unabashed echos of those damning words penetrating our minds in the dark of night when we are most vulnerable..." A forever reminder—
of all my self proclaimed
night-time badges of honour ".... a weighty and heroic clever finish to this resonating dark poem.
of all my self proclaimed
night-time badges of honour ".... a weighty and heroic clever finish to this resonating dark poem.
6th Dec 2020 4:52pm
🙇♀️
🌹
Thank you very much for that beautiful summation, FF. I'm so thankful and appreciative of all your enormous kindness.
Really, I am
Much love and respect
🌹
xo
B
🌹
Thank you very much for that beautiful summation, FF. I'm so thankful and appreciative of all your enormous kindness.
Really, I am
Much love and respect
🌹
xo
B
7th Dec 2020 3:42am
I know it's a dark piece but I also found a tinge of eroticism (maybe it's just me), like it's titillating and scary at the same time.
Great verse Blue.
Great verse Blue.
7th Dec 2020 3:51am
Yep! Thrash and whip soft tender skin?... yeah... it's a tiny sprinkle of my erotic sensibility haha. Thank you for reading, Wally. I have been meaning to get your poem, just haven't had time yet! I'm so appreciative
💜
xoxo
B
💜
xoxo
B
Anonymous
7th Dec 2020 6:09pm
I am so glad we have discovered each other. You are intense.
"Like when the loneliness crushes and presses down
upon
you"
Like a fucking 20 ton weight. Silent killer.
"That long aching moan bubbles up from a dark unknown" - I am squirming here.
"anointing
a gentle
soul"
"scarring
a fragile
heart"
Sorry for all the annoying quotes but I cannot improve upon your own words.
This poem is intense and powerful.
"Like when the loneliness crushes and presses down
upon
you"
Like a fucking 20 ton weight. Silent killer.
"That long aching moan bubbles up from a dark unknown" - I am squirming here.
"anointing
a gentle
soul"
"scarring
a fragile
heart"
Sorry for all the annoying quotes but I cannot improve upon your own words.
This poem is intense and powerful.
7th Dec 2020 6:17pm
your poems are what mine aspire to be one day when they grow up, fuck more, become bruised and battered and more bloody... standing stark naked, in fucking stunning poetic beauty
Anonymous
7th Dec 2020 9:13pm
You are too much
7th Dec 2020 9:30pm
30th Jan 2024 5:07pm
Hello Bluevelvete. I went back in time to some of your older poems. This one is great. So vivid with detail and hot!! Love your writing and if you haven't you should publish all of your material.
30th Jan 2024 5:16pm
Hey there, Keith :)
I have a lot of poems that I have deleted off of DUP since I first arrived but those were mostly rubbish... That drips one which I think is listed as what would look like my first poem isn't really my first poem here and this particular one isn't a great poem, more of a learning curve, methinks.
However, I do appreciate your very kind and considerate feedback. I thank you for going back through my ink. That's very cool.
I'm slacking with posting poems recently but I used to post almost every day here on DUP so there's a pretty decent sized catalog ... You have commented on one's that I haven't read in a while and I almost cringe at, hahaha ... Hopefully you'll take a look at some of my later work, too... be it erotic or not, because I definitely think I've improved by leaps and bounds since I first joined here back in July of 2020... Lol...
Again, much obliged.
🌹💙 - B
I have a lot of poems that I have deleted off of DUP since I first arrived but those were mostly rubbish... That drips one which I think is listed as what would look like my first poem isn't really my first poem here and this particular one isn't a great poem, more of a learning curve, methinks.
However, I do appreciate your very kind and considerate feedback. I thank you for going back through my ink. That's very cool.
I'm slacking with posting poems recently but I used to post almost every day here on DUP so there's a pretty decent sized catalog ... You have commented on one's that I haven't read in a while and I almost cringe at, hahaha ... Hopefully you'll take a look at some of my later work, too... be it erotic or not, because I definitely think I've improved by leaps and bounds since I first joined here back in July of 2020... Lol...
Again, much obliged.
🌹💙 - B
