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Senryu Menu
(A)
Upon reflection
Sadly, it occurs to me
I am no one’s muse.
(B)
It didn’t hurt a bit.
A shot that made people nice.
The prick that cured mean.
(C)
What’s this all about?
I don’t know, can’t you tell me?
Oh god, we’re both lost.
(D)
I need someone who
Will see life as I see it.
Not through a bottle.
(E)
Don’t just read the first
thing you see. Please dig deeper.
I’M in there somewhere.
(F)
Insignificant.
Your comments did make me feel.
I'll never tell you.
(G)
There. You’re forgiven.
What crap will you conjure next?
Drink, lie, repeat, cry.
(H1)
The difference is
You desire to be on
Everyone’s radar.
+
(H2)
In contradiction
I prayerfully only want
Singular notice.
(G)
The sun always shines
After the worst of a storm.
Just hold on tightly.
(H)
You are beautiful
No matter how hard you try
Thinking otherwise.
(I)
Beware of wishes
Coming to fruition as
They can bite your arse
(J)
I’d love to write sweet
Nothings. But I know of none.
Alas, you get these.
Upon reflection
Sadly, it occurs to me
I am no one’s muse.
(B)
It didn’t hurt a bit.
A shot that made people nice.
The prick that cured mean.
(C)
What’s this all about?
I don’t know, can’t you tell me?
Oh god, we’re both lost.
(D)
I need someone who
Will see life as I see it.
Not through a bottle.
(E)
Don’t just read the first
thing you see. Please dig deeper.
I’M in there somewhere.
(F)
Insignificant.
Your comments did make me feel.
I'll never tell you.
(G)
There. You’re forgiven.
What crap will you conjure next?
Drink, lie, repeat, cry.
(H1)
The difference is
You desire to be on
Everyone’s radar.
+
(H2)
In contradiction
I prayerfully only want
Singular notice.
(G)
The sun always shines
After the worst of a storm.
Just hold on tightly.
(H)
You are beautiful
No matter how hard you try
Thinking otherwise.
(I)
Beware of wishes
Coming to fruition as
They can bite your arse
(J)
I’d love to write sweet
Nothings. But I know of none.
Alas, you get these.
Published 1st Oct 2020
Author's Note
I would be interested to know which, if any, had more appeal to you over another. 😊
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Anonymous
1st Oct 2020 6:07am
Dearest H,
These lovely and very astute senryú are so much fun and written beautifully with thought, humor and care.
I enjoyed H =
"You are beautiful
No matter how hard you try
Thinking otherwise."
as low self esteem is a horrible monkey on my back. You really made me smile with this whole write!
Very clever and introspective too
Thank you for sharing!,
🙏 🌹 💜
🌈
xoxo
B
These lovely and very astute senryú are so much fun and written beautifully with thought, humor and care.
I enjoyed H =
"You are beautiful
No matter how hard you try
Thinking otherwise."
as low self esteem is a horrible monkey on my back. You really made me smile with this whole write!
Very clever and introspective too
Thank you for sharing!,
🙏 🌹 💜
🌈
xoxo
B
2nd Oct 2020 4:36am
Dear BV,
Thank you very much for the honor of RL.
Yes, H is for all of us who just can’t seem to find comfort with our own beauty. You tell that monkey to hit the road! You’re a beautiful person inside and out make no mistake. Thank you for sharing the one that spoke the loudest. I really appreciate your lovely compliments. Thank you once again. H🌷
Thank you very much for the honor of RL.
Yes, H is for all of us who just can’t seem to find comfort with our own beauty. You tell that monkey to hit the road! You’re a beautiful person inside and out make no mistake. Thank you for sharing the one that spoke the loudest. I really appreciate your lovely compliments. Thank you once again. H🌷
1st Oct 2020 6:28am
Dear A,
Thank you for your kind comment and sharing the one that spoke to you. I like that it might be you are a glass of half full sort of person. 😊
Thank you very much once again.
H🌷
Thank you for your kind comment and sharing the one that spoke to you. I like that it might be you are a glass of half full sort of person. 😊
Thank you very much once again.
H🌷
1st Oct 2020 6:29am
2nd Oct 2020 4:23am
Dear FM,
Thank you for the honor of RL.
That’s really sweet- you wish it hadn’t ended. Very thoughtful of you to say and so very appreciated.
Thank you again. H🌷
Thank you for the honor of RL.
That’s really sweet- you wish it hadn’t ended. Very thoughtful of you to say and so very appreciated.
Thank you again. H🌷
1st Oct 2020 8:36am
D, E, & J my favorites, but it was hinestly difficult to pick, I could have read on and on.
Great job on this lil collection of syllables H, I loved reading the hurt with a lil humor
Hang in there
Great job on this lil collection of syllables H, I loved reading the hurt with a lil humor
Hang in there
2nd Oct 2020 4:21am
Dear WS,
Thank you for the honor of RL.
I’m so overwhelmed by your gracious compliments to this write.
Thank you for sharing the ones that spoke loudest. It’s been interesting to see who likes what. Thank you again for your lovely comments. H🌷
Thank you for the honor of RL.
I’m so overwhelmed by your gracious compliments to this write.
Thank you for sharing the ones that spoke loudest. It’s been interesting to see who likes what. Thank you again for your lovely comments. H🌷
1st Oct 2020 9:55am
E, H1, and H2 were my favorites... lots of emotion and hurt hidden in those lines. I am sure you are someone's muse though. You have certainly inspired me at times. *hug* keep up the writing, H, and feel better soon <3
2nd Oct 2020 4:18am
Dear NB,
Thank you for the honor of RL.
And thank you for all the lovely comments and sharing the ones that spoke loudest. Thank you so much for suggesting I might inspire you at times. That is really the cats whiskers right there! X H🌷
Thank you for the honor of RL.
And thank you for all the lovely comments and sharing the ones that spoke loudest. Thank you so much for suggesting I might inspire you at times. That is really the cats whiskers right there! X H🌷
1st Oct 2020 1:03pm
How about ALL of them! GOD! Great write Honoria. Real insightful and damm funny at times. This is your very best.
luvs,
buddhakitty.
luvs,
buddhakitty.
2nd Oct 2020 4:14am
Dear BK,
Oh, thank you very kindly for your sweet response. I’m so flattered by your kind comments. I’m glad you saw the humor behind some of them as I blush by your thoughtfulness. Thank you. H🌷
Oh, thank you very kindly for your sweet response. I’m so flattered by your kind comments. I’m glad you saw the humor behind some of them as I blush by your thoughtfulness. Thank you. H🌷
1st Oct 2020 2:12pm
This is really stellar work, H. I loved every single piece of this. So raw, so open and honest. This is hands down, one of your best. (F) hits home a little. Ok, a lot. It can be placed in so many situations with so many different people. Just really really good stuff here. So well done.
Dear E,
Thank you for the honor of RL.
I’ve been writing these for a while. There’s another bunch of them in the wings. This lot seemingly needed birthing at this time. Mmmm, F got tossed in after a “discussion” that left me feeling dismissed and extremely irritated but closed mouth and shut down. I can haggle a sale price like a champ but express my frustrations, it’s like I have no verbal skills🤬. Thank you sharing the one that spoke loudest. H🌷
Thank you for the honor of RL.
I’ve been writing these for a while. There’s another bunch of them in the wings. This lot seemingly needed birthing at this time. Mmmm, F got tossed in after a “discussion” that left me feeling dismissed and extremely irritated but closed mouth and shut down. I can haggle a sale price like a champ but express my frustrations, it’s like I have no verbal skills🤬. Thank you sharing the one that spoke loudest. H🌷
Anonymous
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1st Oct 2020 4:38pm
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2nd Oct 2020 3:56am
Dear BP,
Thank you very much for your read and kind comment. I really appreciate your input, creates a ray of sunshine. H🌷
Thank you very much for your read and kind comment. I really appreciate your input, creates a ray of sunshine. H🌷
1st Oct 2020 4:41pm
For me it's senryu (I) ... s o m e wishes coming to fruition soon disappoint, then become a burden, and then a curse. Fortunately not all. But there's universal truth in there.
2nd Oct 2020 3:53am
Dear J,
The last time I got what I wished for I nearly gauged my eyes out just so I could entertain myself from the boredom. I constantly wonder why that happens? Why can’t we get what want and not have consequences? Thank you very much for your lovely comments and share. I really appreciate them. H🌷
The last time I got what I wished for I nearly gauged my eyes out just so I could entertain myself from the boredom. I constantly wonder why that happens? Why can’t we get what want and not have consequences? Thank you very much for your lovely comments and share. I really appreciate them. H🌷
2nd Oct 2020 4:06pm
Your question: "Why can’t we get what want and not have consequences?" -- (I'm assuming you mean '... and not have negative-experience consequences') is truly a crux question, an existential question facing the human race. Why do we cultivate circumstances that bring a subjective experience of disappointment? I have no simple answer.
One line of thought is to live life on our own terms, no matter what the external circumstances (as suggested in Viktor Frankl's classic book "Man's Search for Meaning"). Another is that all negative experiences, if fully understood (the Buddhist way) relieve the suffering and bring with them a hidden gift.
I guess if life is seen as a heroic journey where we each have to find our unique path in our own way, then it brings a sense of fulfillment whatever the external constellation of our lives looks like, (I'm just rambling).
One line of thought is to live life on our own terms, no matter what the external circumstances (as suggested in Viktor Frankl's classic book "Man's Search for Meaning"). Another is that all negative experiences, if fully understood (the Buddhist way) relieve the suffering and bring with them a hidden gift.
I guess if life is seen as a heroic journey where we each have to find our unique path in our own way, then it brings a sense of fulfillment whatever the external constellation of our lives looks like, (I'm just rambling).
2nd Oct 2020 7:11pm
No, I don’t think you’re rambling at all. You put into perspective why there must/should be a negative/positive action reaction theory. Without negative we might not appreciate the positive to its fullest. It makes sense. I just want to be a petulant child about it. I am glad we took this thought and conversation to the next level of the bigger picture. It helps to keep things grounded. Thank you!
3rd Oct 2020 8:11pm
The physicist David Bohm proved that when things in science are taken to their fullest extent, they flip into their opposites. This suggests a dualist mindset (dividing up the way we see the world into good/evil, negative/positive, male/female, etc) is probably not 'scientific'. Rather like yin & yang - they are two aspects of 'the same thing' -- and yet without the tension between two ends of a spectrum, nothing creative and new could emerge.
Taking it a little further, means & ends are also 'one thing' -- and therefore statements like "The ends justifies the means" are (to my mind) incoherent. The energy with which any 'means' are carried out, will undoubtedly inhabit the 'ends'. As Gandhi said: a violent war begets a violent peace.
Taking it a little further, means & ends are also 'one thing' -- and therefore statements like "The ends justifies the means" are (to my mind) incoherent. The energy with which any 'means' are carried out, will undoubtedly inhabit the 'ends'. As Gandhi said: a violent war begets a violent peace.
4th Oct 2020 6:27am
Dear J,
This is wildly interesting. I’ve never been introduced to David Bohm and would never have thought this theory to such an extent. Thank you because now I will look into this a bit further. As for the ends justifying the means, I’ve never understood that expression and consequently never use it. Made my head spin. But, what really sparks my interest is if Gandhi said “ a violent war begets a violent peace.” where do we go from here?
Thank you so much for this wonderful info!
This is wildly interesting. I’ve never been introduced to David Bohm and would never have thought this theory to such an extent. Thank you because now I will look into this a bit further. As for the ends justifying the means, I’ve never understood that expression and consequently never use it. Made my head spin. But, what really sparks my interest is if Gandhi said “ a violent war begets a violent peace.” where do we go from here?
Thank you so much for this wonderful info!
4th Oct 2020 4:38pm
Bohm was a protegé of Einstein, and a friend of Krishnamurti - so a cross-over between science and mysticism (actually like all great scientists, and original thinkers). There's quite a lot on youtube.
Bravissima, Dear Honoria❣❣ Would that (B) were possible. We get a double whammy injection COVID-19 vaccination and kindness stimulator 😉 (D) is poignant. (E) is such a touching plea to not be judged by the superficial. (F) if you never tell they'll never know. (H1) OUCH! (H) is a message that so many need to write on their souls. I identify with (I) as one with an arse replete with teeth-marks, and not received in any sort of intimate, kinky/sexy ritual 😀
2nd Oct 2020 3:49am
Dear GW,
LOL! “ . I identify with (I) as one with an arse replete with teeth-marks, and not received in any sort of intimate, kinky/sexy ritual” I know this experience well. Someday we might compare bite marks from all this fearful wishful thinking.
Thank you so much for your kind and lovely comments. I dearly appreciate them. H🌷
LOL! “ . I identify with (I) as one with an arse replete with teeth-marks, and not received in any sort of intimate, kinky/sexy ritual” I know this experience well. Someday we might compare bite marks from all this fearful wishful thinking.
Thank you so much for your kind and lovely comments. I dearly appreciate them. H🌷
2nd Oct 2020 11:35pm
Your writing is magnificent and each one deserves it's own comment, however if I were to choose one I think it would be C, the underlying question of What is this all about? is something that always persists and only seems elude more with time. When we find someone, who seems to provide at least a partial answer only to find out that actually we are both lost. Still, it is very difficult to pick just one... Next for me would be E then H, but it is really hard to pick. ❤️
3rd Oct 2020 3:39am
Dear K,
Right?! What is the meaning of all this falderal? Someone please get me the manager so we can get some answers. I thought at least one of us had an oar as we paddled up stream. Turns out neither of us had one. No wonder we were always going backwards! 🙄
I am honored by your RL and flattered beyond measure by your lovely compliments. You are a treasure and I thank you. X H🌷
Right?! What is the meaning of all this falderal? Someone please get me the manager so we can get some answers. I thought at least one of us had an oar as we paddled up stream. Turns out neither of us had one. No wonder we were always going backwards! 🙄
I am honored by your RL and flattered beyond measure by your lovely compliments. You are a treasure and I thank you. X H🌷
5th Oct 2020 00:13am
C, E -
C - Sometimes things get lost in translation and people will miss the point. Perhaps some folks have a deeper connection with others so as to really understand one another which leads me to
E - Too many times will people just skim through the surface without really diving further. Behind these words is another being conveying their ideas and expressions.
I've had to read pieces several times in order to savor the words and understand their meaning. You've constructed something here that really is an awakening.
Bravo.
C - Sometimes things get lost in translation and people will miss the point. Perhaps some folks have a deeper connection with others so as to really understand one another which leads me to
E - Too many times will people just skim through the surface without really diving further. Behind these words is another being conveying their ideas and expressions.
I've had to read pieces several times in order to savor the words and understand their meaning. You've constructed something here that really is an awakening.
Bravo.
5th Oct 2020 3:18am
Dear W,
I understand when you say you’ve had to read pieces several times to get to the true meaning. When that happens for me I’m amazed by the revelation of true comprehension.
I love your take about being lost in translation for C. Thank you very much for sharing your thoughts on this write and the very kind compliment. I so appreciate them.
H🌷
I understand when you say you’ve had to read pieces several times to get to the true meaning. When that happens for me I’m amazed by the revelation of true comprehension.
I love your take about being lost in translation for C. Thank you very much for sharing your thoughts on this write and the very kind compliment. I so appreciate them.
H🌷
11th Oct 2020 1:39pm
I love E because I believe you are the one who deserves a deeper discovery. Your kindness is very special to me. I feel that you are one of the kindest people on this site.
Jasmine
Jasmine
11th Oct 2020 7:12pm
Dear RJ,
Thank you very much for the honor of RL.
Moreover, thank you very very much for such a sweet and lovely comment. I am so touched and I honestly don’t even have words for the beautiful compliment you’ve given me. It has made my day immensely and I was so happy to see you. I’ve missed your writings!
Thank you again. Xo H🌷
Thank you very much for the honor of RL.
Moreover, thank you very very much for such a sweet and lovely comment. I am so touched and I honestly don’t even have words for the beautiful compliment you’ve given me. It has made my day immensely and I was so happy to see you. I’ve missed your writings!
Thank you again. Xo H🌷
17th Oct 2020 10:22pm
Good piece.
(I) re: wishes coming true - spoke most to me, as people often regret getting what they wished for.
(I) re: wishes coming true - spoke most to me, as people often regret getting what they wished for.
18th Oct 2020 3:11am
Dear L,
Thank you. I am really grateful for your comment. It sometimes cracks me up when people complain about what they don’t have then they get it and complain how it wasn’t exactly what they wanted. Oy vey. Thank you again. H🌷
Thank you. I am really grateful for your comment. It sometimes cracks me up when people complain about what they don’t have then they get it and complain how it wasn’t exactly what they wanted. Oy vey. Thank you again. H🌷
21st Oct 2020 10:50am
21st Oct 2020 10:13pm
Dear B,
Thank you very much for your read and gracious compliments. I am very grateful. H🌷
Thank you very much for your read and gracious compliments. I am very grateful. H🌷
21st Oct 2020 10:14pm
21st Oct 2020 10:22pm
Dear L,
Thank you very much for the honor of RL. Thank you very much for such a gracious compliment! Coming from you and your powerhouse retinue of gorgeous verse I’m sitting pretty ;-). Thank you again. H🌷
Thank you very much for the honor of RL. Thank you very much for such a gracious compliment! Coming from you and your powerhouse retinue of gorgeous verse I’m sitting pretty ;-). Thank you again. H🌷
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29th Oct 2020 4:44am
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29th Oct 2020 5:44am
Dear GP,
Thank you very much for the honor of RL.
I’m rather giddy at the moment from your very kind and super gracious comments. I appreciate very greatly what you, and everyone, have given over to read and share your thoughts. I’m flattered beyond measure that you feel “schooled”. So sweet, thank you. I admit and can assure you I have no clue what I’m doing. This adventure has been an incredible learning process.
As for this site, like a book store, if you aren’t mindful you can lose days roaming about and reading. It’s a lot of fun and I’m very glad you stopped by. Thank you once again. H🌷
Thank you very much for the honor of RL.
I’m rather giddy at the moment from your very kind and super gracious comments. I appreciate very greatly what you, and everyone, have given over to read and share your thoughts. I’m flattered beyond measure that you feel “schooled”. So sweet, thank you. I admit and can assure you I have no clue what I’m doing. This adventure has been an incredible learning process.
As for this site, like a book store, if you aren’t mindful you can lose days roaming about and reading. It’s a lot of fun and I’m very glad you stopped by. Thank you once again. H🌷
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31st Oct 2020 8:58am
31st Oct 2020 8:05pm
Dear I,
Ah! The most for me too. Thank you very much for taking the time to stop in and have a glance around. I really appreciate it greatly! It’s always such a pleasure to have your company. H🌷
Ah! The most for me too. Thank you very much for taking the time to stop in and have a glance around. I really appreciate it greatly! It’s always such a pleasure to have your company. H🌷
Anonymous
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2nd Dec 2020 5:43am
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4th Dec 2020 6:06am
Dear MLC,
Thank you very much for taking the time to read and comment so thoughtfully. I’m so glad you did.
In answer to your question for A, I guess it’s more a gut feeling and typically my gut is correct. But- it’s okay. Less pressure 😉.
Thank you again for your kindness.
H🌷
Thank you very much for taking the time to read and comment so thoughtfully. I’m so glad you did.
In answer to your question for A, I guess it’s more a gut feeling and typically my gut is correct. But- it’s okay. Less pressure 😉.
Thank you again for your kindness.
H🌷
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21st Dec 2020 10:25am
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21st Dec 2020 10:45pm
Dear WF,
Oh how sweet! I’m very touched. And what a great senyru writer are you!
Thank you for the honor of RL and this lovely “muse” inspired compliment. You’re very kind and I’m over the moon by it. Thank you. H🌷
Oh how sweet! I’m very touched. And what a great senyru writer are you!
Thank you for the honor of RL and this lovely “muse” inspired compliment. You’re very kind and I’m over the moon by it. Thank you. H🌷
Anonymous
- Edited 17th Jun 2021 4:36pm
17th Jun 2021 4:35pm
All of them
It reads
I'm whole
It reads
I'm whole
18th Jun 2021 5:14am
Dear MM,
Thank you very much for the RL add and for such a cool comment. I admit I hadn’t considered this line of thinking at all. Most days I feel so un-whole this was a refreshing take. I am greatly for this outlook. Thank you again. H🌷
Thank you very much for the RL add and for such a cool comment. I admit I hadn’t considered this line of thinking at all. Most days I feel so un-whole this was a refreshing take. I am greatly for this outlook. Thank you again. H🌷
