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Ghosted
Lover turned to air
Slowly receding...
silence
Please,
give me bruises,
burns,
slice my empty chest,
Anything to show for the ache
Slowly receding...
silence
Please,
give me bruises,
burns,
slice my empty chest,
Anything to show for the ache
Written by
brokentitanium
(k.)
Published 17th Sep 2020
Author's Note
For DaisyGrace's "Goodbyes like..." comp
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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reading list entries 9
comments 13
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Re. Ghosted
17th Sep 2020 3:41am
Re: Re. Ghosted
18th Sep 2020 2:42am
Re. Ghosted
17th Sep 2020 4:19am
This packs a punch. Beautifully focused for maximum effect. Very well done 💜.
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Re: Re. Ghosted
18th Sep 2020 2:43am
Re. Ghosted
17th Sep 2020 5:12am
Dear B,
Gasping for breath. This feels like one of those sucker punch good byes you never see coming because the lover is a crumb who hasn’t got the decency to end it like a human. Dizzying effective and great write. All the best in the comp. H🌷
Gasping for breath. This feels like one of those sucker punch good byes you never see coming because the lover is a crumb who hasn’t got the decency to end it like a human. Dizzying effective and great write. All the best in the comp. H🌷
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Re: Re. Ghosted
18th Sep 2020 2:46am
Thank you! Fortunately it's not a current situation... but like most of us I have a deep well of goodbyes to mine & combine for this comp!
Re. Ghosted
17th Sep 2020 3:44pm
Re. Ghosted
17th Sep 2020 5:36pm
The worst thing you can do to a lover ( or ex ) is to ignore them.
When I left my husband, I let him have everything that our marriage accumulated. All I took was what was personally mine, my mother's, and my grandmother's. I refused to fight and chose to ignore him. I thought I was taking the high road. It wasn't until years later I realize, that was probably the worst thing I could've done.
This is a powerful punch in so few words, BT.
When I left my husband, I let him have everything that our marriage accumulated. All I took was what was personally mine, my mother's, and my grandmother's. I refused to fight and chose to ignore him. I thought I was taking the high road. It wasn't until years later I realize, that was probably the worst thing I could've done.
This is a powerful punch in so few words, BT.
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Re: Re. Ghosted
18th Sep 2020 2:51am
Hard to say.... yes, it can be hurtful, but maybe there are situations where protecting oneself is more important? I don't know. Anyway, there are always 2 sides, but in 31 syllables you can really only address one! 😉
Thank you, A.
Thank you, A.
Re: Re. Ghosted
18th Sep 2020 5:23pm
Re. Ghosted
21st Sep 2020 9:46pm
Oh, how I know that feeling, that desire for some sort of physical, tangible injury to show for how much it freaking hurts inside. Well done getting that across in only 31 syllables.
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Re: Re. Ghosted
3rd Oct 2020 2:21am
Oops, how did I miss this? Thanks so much for your comment and for understanding. 😊