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Yesterday, Today, Tomorrow
Yesterday
I breathed your intoxicating desire
caressed your inflaming intensity
tasted your awakened demand
absorbed your passionate yearn
witnessed your stimulating euphoria
Yesterday
We were one soul
in two bodies.
Today
I breathe your piercing anguish
caress your persecuting turmoil
taste your suffocating heartache
absorb your punishing nightmare
witness your agonizing plague
Today
We are one soul
on two realms.
Tomorrow
I will breathe my unforgiving devotion
caress my grasping grief
taste my starving tears
absorb my sorrowful shock
witness my violent daze
Tomorrow
I will join you, and
we will be whole again.
I breathed your intoxicating desire
caressed your inflaming intensity
tasted your awakened demand
absorbed your passionate yearn
witnessed your stimulating euphoria
Yesterday
We were one soul
in two bodies.
Today
I breathe your piercing anguish
caress your persecuting turmoil
taste your suffocating heartache
absorb your punishing nightmare
witness your agonizing plague
Today
We are one soul
on two realms.
Tomorrow
I will breathe my unforgiving devotion
caress my grasping grief
taste my starving tears
absorb my sorrowful shock
witness my violent daze
Tomorrow
I will join you, and
we will be whole again.
Published 25th Jan 2012
| Edited 27th Jan 2012
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25th Jan 2012 7:48pm
25th Jan 2012 7:51pm
Anonymous
25th Jan 2012 8:24pm
what I love here is the subtle undertone. However I think the raw honest truth in the emotions sold it to me. Oh how we loose so much of ourselves during a relationship. But your description of the stages of the relationship is poignant. sad and very real. Well done. This is my favourite 'Ratchel' poem.
25th Jan 2012 8:38pm
What an honor to make your list!
What a great feeling to have someone with your talent like something I write.
Thank you for stopping by and commenting. Truly means a lot to me. :)
What a great feeling to have someone with your talent like something I write.
Thank you for stopping by and commenting. Truly means a lot to me. :)
Anonymous
25th Jan 2012 9:19pm
for my list :) this was beautiful Rachel, A wonderful write of loves truth from start to finish. Amazing work
25th Jan 2012 9:25pm
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26th Jan 2012 00:09am
Now what I want to know is, what happens the day after tomorrow? It's either gonna be great make-up sex or going your seperate ways. Excellent write of the phases of a relationship. I like the way you breathe, caress, taste, absorb, and witness poetry. jj
26th Jan 2012 1:07am
Next week...repeat :P
I love how you witness MY poetry
Thanks for stopping by and commenting. :)
I love how you witness MY poetry
Thanks for stopping by and commenting. :)
Religion has been for thousands of years, and yet most follows still have question about the three days you state. It is not one ounce of me being sacrilegist. Just stating that you had your three days that no questions had to be asked. You already had the answers. Three days yesterday, today , and tomorrow. Kudos Rachel
26th Jan 2012 4:16am
Thanks A!!!
As always, I love when you stop by and comment! Such a pleasure! :)
As always, I love when you stop by and comment! Such a pleasure! :)
26th Jan 2012 6:40am
I would certainly echo what Alip has said. It's good to see you trying new things.
This write has good character in it and a deep insight into the narrators persona.
There is a small issue with the "today" stanza in that. Since it's present tense I am thinking breathed should be breath.the same goes for caress,absorb,taste. And witness though just looking back over it now I really can't be sure because of the tomorrow stanza.
I guess it can work either way .
Anyhoo good stuff Rachel , shine on
This write has good character in it and a deep insight into the narrators persona.
There is a small issue with the "today" stanza in that. Since it's present tense I am thinking breathed should be breath.the same goes for caress,absorb,taste. And witness though just looking back over it now I really can't be sure because of the tomorrow stanza.
I guess it can work either way .
Anyhoo good stuff Rachel , shine on
Thank you Eamon!
I went back and forth on the past and present tense of today. I thought, I would say, "I 'went' to the store today". However, when I read this out loud just now, I read it both ways. I seem to have felt it more with the present tense. So, I am going to change it.
Thanks a bunch for your always wonderful insight. You all might make a good poet out of me yet. :)
I went back and forth on the past and present tense of today. I thought, I would say, "I 'went' to the store today". However, when I read this out loud just now, I read it both ways. I seem to have felt it more with the present tense. So, I am going to change it.
Thanks a bunch for your always wonderful insight. You all might make a good poet out of me yet. :)
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10th Feb 2012 2:10pm
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10th Feb 2012 8:49pm
29th Feb 2012 7:40am
This was beautiful. A powerful story encompassing past, present, and future :) Good job.
29th Feb 2012 10:29pm
Anonymous
3rd Mar 2012 4:19am
what an amazing write Rachel,enjoyed!!
3rd Mar 2012 4:30am
30th Aug 2012 2:27am
Touched my soul!!! You do it over and over again.. Thanks for a great read Rachel
30th Aug 2012 5:35am
19th Oct 2012 5:47am
Such beauty and sadness you lasso. It is your strength in writing... capturing the root of emotions (whatever they be) and deconstructing to give an intimate view.
24th Oct 2012 1:06am
