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chasing the sun
he ran out of
land
chasing the sun
his shadow trailing him
till the last turn
the fall, he said
is but part of the way
he must meet the sun
'fore the end of day
shadow had no option
followed her master
from the light of his home
to the shade of disaster
followed his dream he did
kept chasing the sun
bare feet
full speed
as fast as he could run
till he ran out
of land
with sun
inches from his hand
.
Published 10th Nov 2019
Author's Note
Poem inspired by the title of Vandel Viaclosvsky's gem "On Seeking the Sun"
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/363868-on-seeking-the-sun/
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/363868-on-seeking-the-sun/
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10th Nov 2019 3:21pm
Indeed Van is a Good read, I enjoy his creations.
As I see here...inspiration made for another Great Write!!!
I Love that pic You used, comforting and disturbing at the same time.
Your Write came out Grand, the feeling of urgency present , it seems the accomplishment wasn't quite obtained, yet many dreams were.
The act of chasing, was it deemed worthless and he had spent away useless energy without reaching goal or was the obtainment of little goals near enough?
Wonderful Write CF-Great story!!!
As I see here...inspiration made for another Great Write!!!
I Love that pic You used, comforting and disturbing at the same time.
Your Write came out Grand, the feeling of urgency present , it seems the accomplishment wasn't quite obtained, yet many dreams were.
The act of chasing, was it deemed worthless and he had spent away useless energy without reaching goal or was the obtainment of little goals near enough?
Wonderful Write CF-Great story!!!
10th Nov 2019 9:27pm
Nice write CF; I liked this. If only we could 'get it' that means and ends are 'one thing'. As Gandhi noted "a violent war begets a violent peace".
10th Nov 2019 9:51pm
Like waiting for Godot CF...or the perfect everything...? Great ink my friend.
Cheers...Harry
Cheers...Harry
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11th Nov 2019 7:29am
This is such a wonderful expression, the rhymes images and metaphors are all top-notch.
17th Nov 2019 2:27pm
Sometimes we spend so much time and energy chasing what we want we forget to rest in the shade and appreciate what we really need and already have.
Wonderful piece, brother.
Wonderful piece, brother.
