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natural disaster
you’re like a tornado
thrashing about the earth
just like a deadly torpedo
boring deep into the dirt
you’re like a tsunami
crashing in unanticipated
and you aren’t even sorry
for all the waves that you instigated
you’re also like a cyclone
and giving me misdirections
you like leaving my lights on
an intended misconception
then you’re like the rain
cause you’re really killing my day
and if friendships what you feign
then it’s a game I don’t want to play
then whipping just like a hurricane
you’re so fucking narcissistic
change your mind and then your lane
god you’re always so damn cryptic
you’re a catastrophe
a whole perpetual mess
you came to conquer me
bro, I’m done with this stress
just keep it where you are
all the situations and wreckage
you know I don’t really care
but please receive this message
i’m a sunny day on the beach
a type of cocktail in each hand
i will no longer tolerate your vibe
so fuck around and get banned
thrashing about the earth
just like a deadly torpedo
boring deep into the dirt
you’re like a tsunami
crashing in unanticipated
and you aren’t even sorry
for all the waves that you instigated
you’re also like a cyclone
and giving me misdirections
you like leaving my lights on
an intended misconception
then you’re like the rain
cause you’re really killing my day
and if friendships what you feign
then it’s a game I don’t want to play
then whipping just like a hurricane
you’re so fucking narcissistic
change your mind and then your lane
god you’re always so damn cryptic
you’re a catastrophe
a whole perpetual mess
you came to conquer me
bro, I’m done with this stress
just keep it where you are
all the situations and wreckage
you know I don’t really care
but please receive this message
i’m a sunny day on the beach
a type of cocktail in each hand
i will no longer tolerate your vibe
so fuck around and get banned
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Re. natural disaster
17th Jul 2019 8:02am
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17th Jul 2019 12:15pm
Aww. Thanks, Alan, luv! I appreciate the support! Thanks so much for reading and commenting!
Re. natural disaster
17th Jul 2019 12:09pm
I like this Liv having dealt with those types, your use of metaphor describing gaslighting and scapegoating is spot on. Powerful spill my dear
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Re: Re. natural disaster
17th Jul 2019 12:16pm
Thank you, Carpe; I’m glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for stopping in to read and show your support❤️
Re. natural disaster
17th Jul 2019 12:32pm
Toxic people are the worst, I read this after a confrontation with someone very toxic in my life.
"you’re a catastrophe
a whole perpetual mess
you came to conquer me
bro, I’m done with this stress"
I enjoyed those lines a lot. Well penned piece.
"you’re a catastrophe
a whole perpetual mess
you came to conquer me
bro, I’m done with this stress"
I enjoyed those lines a lot. Well penned piece.
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Re: Re. natural disaster
17th Jul 2019 12:36pm
Thanks so much for the love, anonymouslyhere! I’m glad my writing touched you in a way; always the goal ;) thanks for stopping in to read and then comment the support❤️
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Anonymous
17th Jul 2019 3:08pm
I love how you used natural disasters & the unpredictability & danger of weather patterns to demonstrate certain human behaviors. Your metaphors are spot on here. Who needs that crap? That ending is superb & sends the message needed.
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Re: Re. natural disaster
17th Jul 2019 5:47pm
Thanks so much, dearest Willow! I appreciate the kind words. Thanks for stopping in to read and leave feedback❤️
Re. natural disaster
17th Jul 2019 3:10pm
Re: Re. natural disaster
17th Jul 2019 5:47pm
Thank you for saying that, luv. And thanks so much for the read, the comment and generous RL add! ❤️
Re. natural disaster
18th Jul 2019 1:32am
lol my first impression was
OH crap she is leaving!!! This is a disaster !!!
haha
OH crap she is leaving!!! This is a disaster !!!
haha
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Re: Re. natural disaster
18th Jul 2019 4:16am
Haha i liked this. Thanks for that, and for stopping in to read and comment your support❤️
Re. natural disaster
18th Jul 2019 1:44am
Fierce write, my dear...your words have power & meaning. The metaphors were on spot too!
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Re: Re. natural disaster
18th Jul 2019 4:21am
Aww thank you, Pandora! I really appreciate your kind words. Thanks so much for reading and commenting love.
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Anonymous
18th Jul 2019 4:42am
It is inevitable that we run into the type you'v described. Your torment and frustration are well enumerated....and so is your resolution to the problem. The cutting loose (with a vengeance) that you put into words so well is a declaration of independence. The indignation is well expressed!
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Re: Re. natural disaster
18th Jul 2019 5:14am
Thank you, b.e.! You’re a doll, thanks so much for dropping in to read and leave such great feedback! ❤️
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18th Jul 2019 5:39am
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Anonymous
18th Jul 2019 6:01am
Hey, I'm one of your biggest fans! :-)
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Re: Re. natural disaster
18th Jul 2019 6:04am
Aww, you’re the sweetest, b.e.! I don’t know that i deserve a fandom but yours is greatly appreciated! ❤️
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Anonymous
18th Jul 2019 7:27am
Of course it is deserved! I love watching you and your writing evolve!
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