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Confined
In the corner you sit, under confinement.
With your wrists bleeding as your losing sight.
In this cellar, you've lost your mind.
But soon your world will be redefined.
Do not worry, do not cry..
Though the wait will take some time.
In the corner your defined.
Your wrists are only scarred,
but you are blind.[/font]
With your wrists bleeding as your losing sight.
In this cellar, you've lost your mind.
But soon your world will be redefined.
Do not worry, do not cry..
Though the wait will take some time.
In the corner your defined.
Your wrists are only scarred,
but you are blind.[/font]
Published 3rd Jan 2010
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Anonymous
9th Jan 2010 1:44am
One of my favourites by you. Good structure, nice scattered rhyme, clever sense of vagueness about the story. But, once again, the "your" instead of "you're" kinds irks me. Sorry, I'm just a bit of a grammar nerd:-)
31st Jan 2010 6:00am
It's an interesting piece. You paint a clear picture of your subjects suffering, so i think you did very well. i live the middle verse because in truth after a long time in captivity, one does lose his/ her mind and is forced to see a new reality.
