All Expenses Paid

Ha wasn't expecting the ending guess my mind was elsewhere. Enjoyed this quite a bit. Please continue

I intended this to stand alone, but there might be a sequel.  The ending was intended as a surprise, and I'm glad it worked for you.  Thank you!

I also found this to be very entertaining.

Glad you enjoyed, Reggie.

Since you encourage honest feedback I'll stick my neck out and from mainly a scansion point of view, suggest some minor changes so it reads as follows:    
   
ORIGINAL                                                           SUGGESTION    
Hookers line up on the street                        Hookers line up on the street       
Johns beckoned with a grin                             Johns beckoned with a grin    
The whores all offering their pitch                 The whores all copy-cat their pitch       
A heady mix of sex and sin                              A heady mix of sex and sin     
     
He cruises by on Friday night                          He cruises by on Friday night      
Spots a lady wearing red                                 And spots a lady wearing red   
She takes him up into her rooms                   She takes him up into her rooms    
And leads him slowly to the bed                    And leads him slowly to the bed    
     
But before she lets him have his way             Before she lets him have his way    
She cleans his cock with loving hands            She cleans his cock with loving hands    
Washing it until it's hard                                   And washes it until it's hard    
Before he can make demands                         to smooth his nude demands    
      
Now that he's aroused they're talking price       so now aroused they're talking price    
And he will be fronting cash                                 And he'll be fronting cash      
She will be well and truly paid                              She will be well and truly paid   
Before she feels the lash.                                      Until she feels the lash.

Thanks Josh.  I took a couple of your suggestion and made some modifications of my own.  I really appreciate your effort here.  Thanks for caring!

I don't know man hey, given that I admit that your the best in this form of writing
you can take a man's mind to wet places he can find in his brain.....
but I feel like we've heard this before/ read this before...
I for one i'm not one to talk a lot here, just giving my honest critique

You might be right, but I don't recall anything I've written so much like this.  I go for story telling, a surprise ending.  If I've written something somewhat similar, so be it.  

now that I like
I thought I was going to find you sobbing and crying

you're still one of my best poets

Likewise, poetOftragedy.  If I happen to cry, I try to keep the screen - and the words - dry.  Thank you for the comments!

Good read,  Crowfly... I like what she did.  Clean is good. :)

Glad you enjoyed this Grace.  I agree that clean is good.

dearest Sir Crow love this sexy write
with an edgy flow...

love Brenda

Thank you Brenda!  You're always so good to me...