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Glass Pipe Blues
The vehicle parked with tires frayed
And voices mumbled from within
Few words are heard, and one's "revenge"
The target hunkered right next door
She just can't hear approaching doom
While firing up the propane torch
Applied slowly to the Pyrex pipe
The wisps of smoke, dilated eyes
She just can't seem to comprehend
The shadow men now by her side
She takes more from her precious pipe
Before they take her for a spin
They drive her to the local pier
Dump her corpse in the churning sea
They snicker as they watch her float
Far from clean, but finally free.
And voices mumbled from within
Few words are heard, and one's "revenge"
The target hunkered right next door
She just can't hear approaching doom
While firing up the propane torch
Applied slowly to the Pyrex pipe
The wisps of smoke, dilated eyes
She just can't seem to comprehend
The shadow men now by her side
She takes more from her precious pipe
Before they take her for a spin
They drive her to the local pier
Dump her corpse in the churning sea
They snicker as they watch her float
Far from clean, but finally free.
Author's Note
A fantasy from a former meth head.
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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Re. Glass Pipe Blues
16th Sep 2018 5:11pm
Yikes!!! Not sure what else to say accept maybe i feel ya ? We have a corner store across from us... ( a neighbors house) we see all kinds of characters emerging at all hours of the day ..
I was there a few times! When I drink to much
I end up there lmao! They sell everything!!
Loves you !
Jackie xxx
I was there a few times! When I drink to much
I end up there lmao! They sell everything!!
Loves you !
Jackie xxx
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Re: Re. Glass Pipe Blues
16th Sep 2018 5:18pm
I live right next door to folks who favor crack and meth. Buyers, some belligerent, arrive with alarming frequency. Me, I stick to pot and play it safe. Throw in just a little booze and I'm a happy man. Thanks so much for the comment and RL entry Jackie!
Re: Re. Glass Pipe Blues
16th Sep 2018 5:21pm
Yeah that’s gotta suck living next to that everyday. 🤬 lossers!
Love your mind ❤️
Love your mind ❤️
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Re. Glass Pipe Blues
16th Sep 2018 5:23pm
dearest Sir Crow intensely scary
a thrilling ride for sure...
love Brenda
a thrilling ride for sure...
love Brenda
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Re: Re. Glass Pipe Blues
I think what makes this really scary is how oblivious she is to approaching doom. She's more concerned with the pipe than the danger. Thank you Brenda!
Re. Glass Pipe Blues
16th Sep 2018 6:23pm
Vivid, dark, write. A piece to really make you think about the lives and trials of others.
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Re: Re. Glass Pipe Blues
16th Sep 2018 6:38pm
Then I feel I've done my job. The trials continue in various ways, with temptation striking at every turn. Living right next door to a dealer doesn't help. Thank you Rjm!
Re. Glass Pipe Blues
16th Sep 2018 6:40pm
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16th Sep 2018 7:20pm
Re. Glass Pipe Blues
16th Sep 2018 7:39pm
This is indeed a tight piece We can see this unfolding as we read. We have experienced similar actions doing our lives. Again nice piece
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Re: Re. Glass Pipe Blues
17th Sep 2018 10:02pm
I try to tell a story. Sometimes it works, sometimes it doesn't. Thank you I-IS-ME!
Re. Glass Pipe Blues
16th Sep 2018 9:42pm
Re. Glass Pipe Blues
3rd Jan 2019 10:29pm
The ending took a far different turn than what I was expecting, but at the same time, it doesn't deny that what I was expecting actually happened. I like that.
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